Hi am in the process of writing a fan fic, and would like to show you chapter one, to see what you think of it so far and if i should advance it more.
On their way to Snowpoint city Ash and friends stop to have something to eat, overlooking a beautiful valley
“What a view” said a young blue haired co-ordinator
“Yeah it’s great” said a young but experienced trainer, with his best friend a yellow mouse pokemon on his shoulder
“Pika” it agreed
“Isn’t it romantic Ash?”
Ash looked at Dawn a bit bemused and said “Sure”
Dawn looked at the sunset and started to daydream thinking Oh Ash Ketchum, how I would like you to hold me in your arms so I could feel safe and secure and rest my head on your chest and…
Her thoughts were all of sudden broken by another person travelling with them
“Ok everyone let’s eat” said a slightly older boy who wants to become a top breeder and is also Pewter city gym leader
“Great I’m starving” said Ash as he ran towards the food
“Pikachu” sighing, and then he ran off after Ash
“You ok Dawn your face is red” Brock said
“Oh it’s nothing I’m just a bit hot, I’m looking forward to some food and drink” Brock turns away and walks towards the table
Dawn then looks at Ash, smiles and says “some things never change” as Ash was stuffing his face, she let out a little giggle and joined the group to eat
Meanwhile Cyrus is watching the group with Team Galactic
“We need to capture one of them, before they see the third lake guardian, those two could ruin our plans” he turns towards Saturn
“Sir, shall we proceed with the plan” Saturn said with a grin on his face
“Yes, take the girl”
“Sir”
“Hey guys what’s that?” Dawn says and they all look at the sky and see Saturn riding Dialga
“No way!” Ash shouted “How has Team Galactic got control of Dialga” Dawn says
Dialga swoops down, and Saturn orders it to grab Dawn. “Dawn look out!” Ash shouts as he runs towards her, Ash runs and pushes Dawn out of the way but Dialga picks him up instead
“ASH NO!” Dawn screamed her face torn with worry and concern
Pikachu runs after Dialga crying “Pika Pi!” But Dialga stopped Pikachu in its tracks by using its power over time
“Pik…Pik...Pika Pi” Tears begin running down his face knowing he can’t do anything to stop Dialga “Never mind, he’ll do” says Saturn
Dialga flies off, Ash saved me without any hesitation he must care about me as much as I care about him, oh Ash I hope you will be ok. She thinks to herself as she clutches her hands to her chest “Oh what are we going to do” she says softly as tears begin to fill her eyes
“Dawn?”
“Huh…I’m ok Brock” She says wiping her eyes quickly
On their way to Snowpoint city Ash and friends stop to have something to eat, overlooking a beautiful valley
“What a view” said a young blue haired co-ordinator
“Yeah it’s great” said a young but experienced trainer, with his best friend a yellow mouse pokemon on his shoulder
“Pika” it agreed
“Isn’t it romantic Ash?”
Ash looked at Dawn a bit bemused and said “Sure”
Dawn looked at the sunset and started to daydream thinking Oh Ash Ketchum, how I would like you to hold me in your arms so I could feel safe and secure and rest my head on your chest and…
Her thoughts were all of sudden broken by another person travelling with them
“Ok everyone let’s eat” said a slightly older boy who wants to become a top breeder and is also Pewter city gym leader
“Great I’m starving” said Ash as he ran towards the food
“Pikachu” sighing, and then he ran off after Ash
“You ok Dawn your face is red” Brock said
“Oh it’s nothing I’m just a bit hot, I’m looking forward to some food and drink” Brock turns away and walks towards the table
Dawn then looks at Ash, smiles and says “some things never change” as Ash was stuffing his face, she let out a little giggle and joined the group to eat
Meanwhile Cyrus is watching the group with Team Galactic
“We need to capture one of them, before they see the third lake guardian, those two could ruin our plans” he turns towards Saturn
“Sir, shall we proceed with the plan” Saturn said with a grin on his face
“Yes, take the girl”
“Sir”
“Hey guys what’s that?” Dawn says and they all look at the sky and see Saturn riding Dialga
“No way!” Ash shouted “How has Team Galactic got control of Dialga” Dawn says
Dialga swoops down, and Saturn orders it to grab Dawn. “Dawn look out!” Ash shouts as he runs towards her, Ash runs and pushes Dawn out of the way but Dialga picks him up instead
“ASH NO!” Dawn screamed her face torn with worry and concern
Pikachu runs after Dialga crying “Pika Pi!” But Dialga stopped Pikachu in its tracks by using its power over time
“Pik…Pik...Pika Pi” Tears begin running down his face knowing he can’t do anything to stop Dialga “Never mind, he’ll do” says Saturn
Dialga flies off, Ash saved me without any hesitation he must care about me as much as I care about him, oh Ash I hope you will be ok. She thinks to herself as she clutches her hands to her chest “Oh what are we going to do” she says softly as tears begin to fill her eyes
“Dawn?”
“Huh…I’m ok Brock” She says wiping her eyes quickly
