EVERYONE: - Complete A little fanrant I made (little swear)

[Bluesy]

I was up last night so I made a little fanrant (more rant than fiction). I based it off a Dilbert short and it stars me and Bucky Katt from Get Fuzzy comic strip.

Spoiler: CWs

• Political Topics - Discussion

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"Go! Go! Go!" Bluesy yelled.
"Kick his ass!" Bucky chimed in.
Bluesy and Bucky Katt sit down and watch pokemon. It has been a long time coming since they've seen pokemon, probably over a year or two.
"You sound like you're watching wrestling," Bluesy said to Bucky.
"Oh yeah!" Bucky replied. "You sound like you just finished th-"
"You can stop right there, Bucky."
"I can't believe how much this thing has changed."
"Yeah, I can't believe I stopped watching it either. What happened?"
"Well there's maturing, college, and the major one: work on Satuday mornings."
"Yeah, thank God I was fired."
"Fired? I thought you quit!"
"oops"
They were silent for a second while they watch pokemon.
"I can't believe the ditched Kasumi for this May chick." Bucky said.
"Huh?" Bluesy asked.
"You know, Misty," said Bucky. "Kasumi is Misty in Japanese. That's why Pikachu says Pikachu-pi."
"He does? But Satoshi is Ash in Japanese and that's why Pikachu says Pika-pi. How can Pikachu say that if Kasumi's only three syllables?"
"Heck if I know. But why did they have to throw away a good character for this brod?"
"Tell me about it. Kasu- I mean Misty is much more better. With all the hints and everything..."
"Plus she's hot!"
It became silent for a few moments. The commercial break began.
"Wismur,"Bluesy chimed before they could give a clue about the pokemon. "Definitely Wismur."
"I wish I could catch a Pikachu someday," Bucky dreamed. "Or carry a Feebas in my paws all day..."
"Well, I hate to burst your bubble, but you can't," Bluesy replied. "They're not real."
"Not true! Pokemon are as real as dinosaurs!"
"No they're not, they're made up by some old guys in Japan."
"Not all Japanimation guys are old! You take that back!"
"The old guys or the pokemon?"
"The pokemon!"
"I can't! God didn't create pokemon."
"Not this creationism again."
"God created the land, the seas, the animals, the plants, me, you, sadly, but not pokemon."
"What about dinosaurs?"
"What?"
"There's scientific fact that dinosaurs were around. Where were they in the seven days."
"I don't know! Maybe they were washed away by the flood in Noah."
"Not true! There's fact that a comet wiped out the dinosaurs."
"Oh, how could they figure that out."
"It's fact!"
"Oh? So what's your take on pokemon?"
"They evolved."
"No that's how they grow."
"No! Evolved just the way we evolve from monkeys!"
"So paramecium brains evolved into Charmaders and Pikachus."
"No! From higher creatures."
"Higher creatures?"
"You know the dinosaurs. Aerodactyl came from Pterodactyl..."
"They're the same bird if you think of it, Bucky!"
"Charmader came from Tyrannosaurus Rex, and Larvitar came from that Spinosaurus thing in Jurrasic Park 3."
"This is total bull."
"It's like how we got those super creatures like the flying squirrel and the electric eel."
"You don't even know what you're talking about, do you?!?"
"Yes I do too, creation dude!!"
"Then prove it, evolution boy! Where are the pokemon now?!? I don't see any!"
"They're just like the dinosaurs and the dodos."
"And that is?"
"They are around, just hiding."
"I cannot believe such nonsense! Let's forget the topic ever came up and get back to the dang show! We're gonna miss how the hell this thing ends!"
"I hope Team Rocket blasts off again."
A few seconds into the second half of the show, a Raichu crawls out from behind the couch. "Hey guys."
"Hey Zeke."

Just in case Copyright 2003 by Amanda W.

 

[Blackjack Gabbiani]

LOL! It made little to no sense, but it was hilarious.

I got a Cait Sith plushie *FFVII* that looks a lot like Bucky...

 

[achooxp]

haha I love this.

 

[Cavespider_17]

Review: Little Swear

This piece does 100% give comic strip vibes, or almost one of those comedy sketch vibes; judging by the note at the top, I think that was probably what you were going for. You do a good job of it. I can imagine these two people spouting things at each other like this. Meanwhile, their original conversation is lost in translation.

Half the time, what is being said makes absolutely no sense, and it is excellent. There is such a high level of back and forth between the two characters, Bluesy and Bucky, to get their points across and try to one-up each other. It does feel pretty realistic.

Grammatically and format-wise, this fiction has some flaws. For example, the lack of spaces between each line can make it hard to read and tell when the new speaker takes the show. Furthermore, because dialogue tags are very few and far between, it is very easy to forget which character is advocating for what. That being said, these things aren’t complicated fixes, and the non-space between lines is definitely something which seems to be of the times. Other than these minor points, there wasn’t really anything out of place grammatically.

I found the religious comments and the dinosaur remarks to be the best parts of this, to be honest, as they give us a good impression of who thinks what between these two individuals. The line, ‘They are just around, hiding,’ made me laugh so much. This is a great fic.