Adveture in the Sinnoh region! (fanfic)

[Fairy Type Arceus]

Intro/back story

back in second grade you would get stickers for writing books and stuff which if you got five you got a prize so being into pokemon i choose to write up a pokemon story with myself and my friend as the main characters, this story didn't take place in any particular region but after i got pearl it became sinnoh,normally i would have used cards for movesets of the pokemon we had but when i lost my cards i didn't have any way of knowing their moves so i stopped writing them. Unfortunately it was that same friend who made me give up pokemon for some number of years but i want to remake the stories i used to write and even include him like always, the names have been changed as they used to be the original names. I will be using some anime characters like i used to. I started to write this on seribi but i'm bringing it here.

also i swear this won't be a run of the mill adventure i intend to make twists and turns

Edit- A great thanks to shaymin ( user from seribi) for the help making this look more detailed and awesome

Prologue: The Journey Begins


One morning, early in the summer, a young boy named Fred woke up. He rubbed his eyes and looked out the window, peering at Professor Rowan's lab. Sleepily, he flopped out of bed and looked at the calender.Finally, it was the day he had been waiting for for years. His birthday. And now he was finally old enough to own a Pokemon! He quickly got dressed and headed downstairs.

His friend, Jacob was already down there waiting. His hair was sliding sideways, and he was hunched against the wall, impatiently tapping his foot against the ground.

"Would you hurry up? I want to get my Pokemon, already." he said with an air of frustration.

Jacob had been waiting for Fred for awhile, so he had a bit of a temper. The only reason he had waited to go on an adventure was because Fred was his friend, and he wanted to go with him.

"Sorry I'm late, let's go!" Fred said.

Fred's mom intercepted him on the way to the door, gave him a bag lunch and hugged him. Tears dripped from her eyes.

"I can't believe my little boy's about to go." she said, sniffling.

She emphathetically said this with great sorrow. Like all mothers, she didn't want her child to go out into the world all by himself– she didn't want to lose him.

"Come on, mom, you're embarrassing me." Fred said, disengaging from her swiftly.

"Be safe on your travels, son."

Fred's mom kissed him on the cheek and gave him another hug.

"I'm sure he'll be fine, dear. He's a responsible young man, after all." said Fred's father.

His mother sighed.

"I'm sure you're right, dear." she said sadly. "Goodbye, Fred. Goodbye, Jacob."

"Bye!" chimed the two friends simultaneously.

She watched them go, sniffling, and her husband patted her on the shoulder.

"Don't worry, he'll be back some day. He has Jacob, he'll be fine."

She found comfort in his words and decided to believe that he was right.

As the boys were walking down the route which led to Rowan's lab, Jacob asked Fred a question.

"Do you know which Pokemon you're gonna get?" asked Jacob quizzically.

Fred started to answer, but then stopped, puzzled. He hadn't put much thought into it– he didn't know what Pokemon he wanted! He looked straight ahead at Rowan's lab.

"I'm not sure yet." he replied tensely.

They reached the lab and knocked on the door. There was silence for a few minutes, so Jacob knocked on the door one more time, but no answer once again..

"Is he not here?" queried Fred anxiously.

Jacob felt that something was wrong. Rowan's lab was always open at this time of day! So why was the lab empty today? Curiosity took him over. He wanted to know what was going on.

"Let's check out back." suggested Jacob.

They walked around the to the back and found nothing. They preceded to check the windows the entire lab was dark. Fred, still worried, started thinking that he might be dreaming since all the lights were out.

"Is he not awake yet?" asked Fred worriedly.

Jacob felt the tension. He knew something was wrong. But then again, maybe Fred was right, and he was asleep, or away, or something. But he wanted his Pokemon NOW. He couldn't wait any longer.

"Let's just sneak in and grab a pokemon." said Jacob.

Jacob slowly opened the window, being careful not to make any noise. He checked the surrounding area to make sure no one was watching. The window came up slowly until it was fully open. He crawled in, then helped Fred get in as he was to short to reach the window.
As they walked through the lab, they checked each hallway for lights, in case he was in a room. Near the very back of the lab, a single door had light seeping though the slight opening in the door. They tiptoed slightly closer. Fred thought he might be studying.


"Maybe he's in there researching something." said Fred.

"Shhh, I hear voices." replied Jacob in a whisper.

They crept towards the door and opened it slightly enough to see what was inside. A Team Galactic member had Rowan in a head lock. Rowan's only Pokemon lay on a desk too far away for him to reach. He was flustered from being grabbed, but remained mostly calm. The grunt spoke:

"Give me your research papers– or else..." snarled the grunt.

"I do not answer to men so rude as you, and your fashion sense is as just as good as your haircut– in other worlds, awful." replied Rowan with indignation.

"You wanna get it, old man?" growled the blue-haired man.

Fred became furious seeing Rowan being held up. He didn't want that man to get away with this. He turned to Jacob.

"He's in trouble, we should help him." said Fred firmly.

Jacob looked at him like he was insane.

"With what Pokemon, genius?" he mumbled back.

Rowan and the grunt still stood there, the grunt continuing to threaten him.

"I won't give you those papers." said Rowan.

The grunt then threw Rowan into a desk. Three Pokeballs that were on it rolled over towards the ground by the door where Fred and Jacob were. The grunt, then taking a Pokeball from his belt, threw it at the ground. A Glameow popped out of the ball. Fred grabbed the closest Pokeball without thinking.

"Let's see how you'll answer to me after I rough you up. Glameow, use Scratch!"

Fred threw the Pokeball, not even knowing what pokemon was inside and gave a single command:

"Please save Professor Rowan!"

A Turtwig burst out in a flash, tackling the Glameow before it could touch Rowan, knockin it into the desk across the room.

"Get away from the professor." shouted Fred.

"A kid? You should go back to the playground, adults are doing business here "

Jacob saw what Fred had done and scanned the remaining two Pokeballs. Wanting to help as well, he picked up a ball and summoned the Pokemon out of the ball to find it was a Chimchar. He became excited seeing that his Pokemon had a type advantage to Fred's Pokemon. He gave Chimchar a command: "Use Ember on his stupid bowl haircut!"

Chimchar used Ember, setting the grunt's hair on fire. The grunt panicked and started flailing his arms about, hitting his hair repeatedly. He ran out of the lab, towards the ocean, to put it out.

"Thank you, boys! Thanks to you, I'm unharmed." congratulated Rowan earnestly.

Jacob was confused at this statement.

"He threw you against a desk and messed up your office. You call that unharmed?" replied Jacob.

"It's nothing, compared to what could have happened." stated Rowan grimly. The Professor looked at the Turwig and Chimchar next to the boys. Surprisingly, the seemed to have taken a liking to the boys.

"Well, you two seem to have bonded with these Pokèmon already. Why don't you take them, as a gift of thanks?

Fred grinned and said "Thanks!"

Jacob, already intending to take the Pokemon, pretended to be surprised and grinned. He didn't bother to mention the fact that he intended to steal it in the first place.

With that they visited the Pokecenter in Sandgem Town to heal up their Pokemon. The two boys were excited ready to start their adventures. They wondered eagerly what was to come.

The two began their journey, walking towards the next town together.


Chapter 1
The new team member



The two boys walked on leaving Sandgem town with their Pokemon in hand. A sign was ahead of them that read: 'Route 202'

Jacob grinned, feeling confident that he would become a Pokemon Master, and this was just his first step. Fred, however, was nervous, since he had rarely left town before. Turtwig picked up on his nervousness and pushed its head against Fred’s leg. Turtwig looked determinedly at Fred. Fred relaxed, knowing he had his new partner at his side.

“Thanks, Turtwig.” Fred said, starting to calm down.

Jacob had got ahead while Fred was talking to Turtwig, so Fred ran to catch up to him. He noticed Chimchar was in its Pokeball and not walking beside him as Turtwig was with him.

“Why do you have Chimchar inside its Pokeball? You should walk with him.” Fred said, wondering why Jacob didn’t have Chimchar out.

“I don’t need him right now. If a wild Pokemon attacks us, I’ll use him.” Jacob replied, almost devoid of emotion.

“But walking with them will make the bond with your Pokemon stronger.” Fred said, confused.

“We’ll bond through battle as well.” Jacob stated, gripping the Pokeball on his belt tightly.

They had reached the first patches of tall grass. Jacob knew wild Pokemon were lingering and waiting to attack. He took the ball off his belt and summoned Chimchar out of it.

“Now, let’s catch some Pokemon.” said Jacob, dashing into the grass with Chimchar's ball in hand. Fred tried to intercept him, but Jacob moved swiftly around him.

“We don’t have any Pokeballs to catch them with!” Fred shouted to his friend.

Jacob stopped in his tracks. In his rush to get started, he had forgotten to buy Pokeballs. He took out Chimchar's Ball and returned him to it. He walked out of the grass and started walking towards Sandgem town. Fred started to follow, but Jacob stopped him.

“I’ll get the Pokeballs for both of us. Just wait there.” Immediately after he said this, he turned and began walking into town. Fred sat down and played with Turtwig to pass the time. Jacob returned a few minutes later, 12 Pokeballs in his cradling arms.

“Here, six for each of us.” he said, handing the balls to his friend. He then took Chimchar out again and charged into the grass.

“Let’s try to catch some Pokemon! We’ll meet up in Jubilife when we’re done.” shouted Jacob to Fred as he ran into the grass, and eventually out of sight.

Fred walked into the tall grass and wandered around for a while. Strangely, no Pokemon seemed to be appearing. He was only a short distance away from Jubilife and still hadn’t seen Jacob. He assumed Jacob was done catching his Pokemon, and had gone ahead into town.

Not wanting to meet up with Jacob empty handed, Fred wandered around a little longer. The sun was setting now– but still there were no Pokemon to be found. Fred was tired and Turtwig had taken a seat on his head. Up ahead he saw a cage full of Pokemon. Next to the cage he saw a man in a black uniform, a woman in a blue uniform and a man in a red uniform. The man in black had a large red R on his chest, the woman had an A that looked like a skull-and-crossbones, and the final man had a M that was remniscient of a volcano. Fred spotted many more cages, all of them filled with Pokemon, except for one with a single Pokèmon– a Luxray.

The man in the black uniform began conversing with the other two.

“After so many failures, this time we’ll succeed.” The man in black said.

“I can’t believe we all choose to team up. It's just so weird!” The woman said.

“It’s even weirder for me to team up with you.” The man in red said to the woman.

Fred was confused. Who were these people, and why did they cage all these Pokemon? Suddenly a Shinx which seemed to be injured came out of the bushes, giving the man in black an angered look. It began charging towards the man.

“It’s the baby Pokemon! It must have gotten away when the mother shielded it!” The man in black said.

He waited until the Shinx was in his reach and kicked it. The Luxray let out a roar and bit the cage in an attempt to slice through it– but the bars were too strong for the Luxray to break. Turtwig could feel the Pokemon's anger and, likewise, became angry. Fred was furious.

“Turtwig, use Razor Leaf on the cage where Luxray bit it!” Fred commanded Turtwig.

Turtwig obeyed and sent out several sharp leaves at the cage where it had been chewed. The cage bars snapped and Luxray came out. The women in blue and the man in red quickly grabbed Luxray, holding it down. The man in black turned around, confused, then saw Fred.

“Kid, you just made a big mistake.” The man said, reaching for a pokeball.

“How dare you hurt that Shinx and steal these Pokemon!” Fred shouted angrily.

The man threw his pokemon into the air and a Zubat popped out. The man gave his Pokemon a command:

“Use Wing Attack!”

Turtwig was hit by the Zubat's wing and fell backwards, closing its eyes in pain. Fred became distressed upon seeing Turtwig hurt. He gave a command to Turtwig:

“Stand up and hit Zubat with a Tackle attack!”

Turtwig opened its eyes at once standing back up. It charged the Zubat but it flew into the air.

"Use Razor Leaf to hit it while it's in midair!" shouted Fred urgently to Turtwig.

Turtwig threw several sharp leaves at Zubat, but it flapped its wings, sending them back down. Turtwig was sliced all over it's body.

“Use leech life!” commanded the man wearing black.

Turtwig tried to dodge, but Zubat outsped him and got hit with Zubat's attack. Shinx stood up and angrily sent out a bolt of lightning which hit Zubat. The man turned around and picked up the Shinx by the throat.

“Why, you little...” growled the man angrily.

Fred had tears in his eyes from seeing the man’s brutality. Turtwig was too injured to stand. The Luxray became even more angered and shocked the man and woman holding it down, knocking them out. It then rushed at the man in black and bit his butt. The man let go of Shinx immediately and was thrown into the air by Luxray. Luxray was about to electrocute him, but Shinx stopped Luxray, tugging at its tail. Shinx let out a cry and Luxray calmed down. Luxray helped free the other Pokemon while the man in black fled.

“You’re a brave little Shinx. Thanks for saving my Turtwig.” Fred said with gratitude.

The Shinx licked Fred's face and he laughed. Luxray walked up to Fred, giving him a look as to say, “Thanks for saving my child.” Fred picked up on it and nodded. Shinx then pawed at Turtwig's Pokeball and looked up to Fred.

“Do you want to join my team, little guy?” Fred said quizzically.

Shinx let out a cry. Luxray looked at Fred and nodded, giving him approval to take the Shinx with him. Luxray then walked back to its other children and watched Fred and Shinx walk off. Halfway down the road he remembered he didn’t get to use a Pokeball. But before he could, Shinx had picked a ball off his belt and got into it. The ball then emitted a ding, and Shinx was officially Freds. Turtwig grinned at Fred and they walked into Jubilife. Jacob was by the trainer school, angry that he had to wait so long.

“What took you so long? There’s only three kinds of Pokemon on that route.” he said impatiently.

“Sorry, it’s a long story.” Fred said tiredly.

“Well, what did you catch?” Jacob asked.

“My new team member is Shinx.” Fred said happily, heading towards the Pokecenter. Jacob followed.

“Darn it, you got one with a type advantage to my pokemon, Starly.” He said with disappointment.

Fred grinned and went into the Pokecenter. Meanwhile, the man in red and the woman woke up. The Galactic grunt from earlier was there. The top of his hair was now completely gone.

“I thought your hair was crap before, but now...” The man said while trying to hold back his laughter.

“That doesn’t matter, what does is those kids.” replied the grunt ominously.

chapter 2: http://bmgf.bulbagarden.net/f227/adveture-sinnoh-region-fanfic-163973/#post5181075

 

[Beth Pavell]

Since it's hard to get the ball rolling as a new author I thought I'd sling you a review

Technical Accuracy/Style
Apart from the spelling mistake in the title (Adventure), your technical accuracy is good. Style leaves something to be desired, though. You use a lot of statements, especially for emotions, that give information but don't do a lot else. Related to that, the description of the world is a rather flat. We know that we're in Sandgem Town because you tell us that Rowan's lab is in the same town, but if you didn't know anything about the Sinnoh region, that wouldn't be immediately apparent.

Usually I advise the opposite to this, but it might be useful for you to write on the assumption that your reader knows nothing about Sinnoh. Look at what you've written and see exactly what information about the setting that you give. Little details build a more vivid world.

Story
Kind of conventional as far as journeyfics go, but that shouldn't necessarily be a criticism. I am a little concerned about the idea of the Team-team up. The villainous teams aren't just labels, in the case of all except Team Rocket they have their own ideology. Team Magma and Team Aqua have directly conflicting goals, Team Galactic conflict with them because they want to destroy the whole world and start again, Team Plasma wouldn't take too kindly to the idea of controlling legendary pokémon ... now I suppose it is possible that factions of the Teams may want to work together, but how do you resolve the conflict?

Characters
Not a lot I can really say at the moment about the characters, because as a reader I don't know much about them. So far they seem to be much like any other game protagonists, but as far as their personalities are concerned there really isn't a lot there

Final Thoughts
Don't get discouraged. Seriously, your writing is well formatted and spelled, and I can tell what's going on - that's the first hurdle cleared. The best advice I can give is to read, read, read. It actually doesn't matter whether you read pokémon fanfic or published fiction. The point is, the more you read, the better your writing will become. Try and study what you read as you read it. How does the writer build the world? How do they handle dialogue? How does the action differ from the downtime?

Another idea might be to have a go with the Weekly Prompts that turn up in The Written Word. Writing short little scenes of 500 words or so to a theme is good practice - I do it myself. The scenes don't really go anywhere and they're not going to be great material, but it's good for working on the nuts and bolts of writing

 

[Fairy Type Arceus]

Since it's hard to get the ball rolling as a new author I thought I'd sling you a review

Technical Accuracy/Style
Apart from the spelling mistake in the title (Adventure), your technical accuracy is good. Style leaves something to be desired, though. You use a lot of statements, especially for emotions, that give information but don't do a lot else. Related to that, the description of the world is a rather flat. We know that we're in Sandgem Town because you tell us that Rowan's lab is in the same town, but if you didn't know anything about the Sinnoh region, that wouldn't be immediately apparent.

Usually I advise the opposite to this, but it might be useful for you to write on the assumption that your reader knows nothing about Sinnoh. Look at what you've written and see exactly what information about the setting that you give. Little details build a more vivid world.

Story
Kind of conventional as far as journeyfics go, but that shouldn't necessarily be a criticism. I am a little concerned about the idea of the Team-team up. The villainous teams aren't just labels, in the case of all except Team Rocket they have their own ideology. Team Magma and Team Aqua have directly conflicting goals, Team Galactic conflict with them because they want to destroy the whole world and start again, Team Plasma wouldn't take too kindly to the idea of controlling legendary pokémon ... now I suppose it is possible that factions of the Teams may want to work together, but how do you resolve the conflict?

Characters
Not a lot I can really say at the moment about the characters, because as a reader I don't know much about them. So far they seem to be much like any other game protagonists, but as far as their personalities are concerned there really isn't a lot there

Final Thoughts
Don't get discouraged. Seriously, your writing is well formatted and spelled, and I can tell what's going on - that's the first hurdle cleared. The best advice I can give is to read, read, read. It actually doesn't matter whether you read pokémon fanfic or published fiction. The point is, the more you read, the better your writing will become. Try and study what you read as you read it. How does the writer build the world? How do they handle dialogue? How does the action differ from the downtime?

Another idea might be to have a go with the Weekly Prompts that turn up in The Written Word. Writing short little scenes of 500 words or so to a theme is good practice - I do it myself. The scenes don't really go anywhere and they're not going to be great material, but it's good for working on the nuts and bolts of writing

Thank you for the feed back! I just felt it didn't need description as it takes place in a world we know fully about, but i see your point i'll try and describe the cities more.

About the evil teams joining up and their differing ideals that will add onto the plot as it goes on they won't exactly get along, but i do get that so i guess i'll make the next chapter focus more on them then on my main characters.

 

[Beth Pavell]

The way I see it when it comes down to world building is like this - if you're reading a book set in New York, chances are you know fairly well what New York is supposed to look like, but you'd still find the story flat if there was no description of the setting. Similarly you won't want the story to stop to describe a dog that looks much like any other. Maybe world building is the wrong word for it - this is the setting, I suppose. And it should be fun! The world of the games in particular is often rather stripped down. Route 1 is just ledges and grass. Fanfic where you can expand on this. What does "long grass" mean? Leg height? Knee height? How tall are those ledges? What's the weather like? How long is the route, a mile, a league? Is it there a road, a path, is it purely pedestrian or is there any traffic?

You get the idea. Once you start to think about this kind of thing it becomes easy, and fun! Writing about Route 32 for The Long Walk was great fun, and I ended up creating a new location based on one Pokémon Centre from the game

 

[Fairy Type Arceus]

Chapter 2 enter team alpha

Over many years many organizations attempted to take over the pokemon world. Team rocket, team aqua, team magma, team galactic, and team plasma. Each for their own reasons. In the end each defeated and humiliated by children. While the groups did split up initially they found themselves not willing to give up on their ideals that they joined their respective groups for. This formed team alpha. A strange group recently founded by one unknown man. Their goals still remain unclear…

The four grunts from team rocket magma aqua and galactic began walking back to the hideout, feeling defeated. But more than that they were terrified because they knew the consequence of failure.

“We have no luck with kids do we?” the magma grunt said with an air of disappointment.

“you’re right we don’t seem to, we’re in for it when the boss hears of this” The galatic grunt said with great fear in his eyes.

The rocket grunt remained silent the whole time just watching them walk on when a sudden thought came to his head. At first hesitated to say it at first but felt as if it was important to know.

“You know out of all the teams we have, each one has had different goals, why are we working together, especially you two.” He said pointing at the magma and aqua grunts.

He continued
“I mean you two are at complete odds one wants land, one wants water. Team galatic you wanted to remake the world. Team plasma and team rocket should be at odds to since we capture and sell them for profit and they want freedom for pokemon.” The grunt said with a confused sound about his voice.

The magma grunt turned to the aqua grunt spitting on the ground before promptly stomping on said spit.

“Don’t get me wrong I don’t enjoy working with the likes of team aqua, infact I say I don’t really like any of you, but this is a second chance. If it’s possible still I’m not giving up on my dream of having more land. “The magma grunt said with determination.

In response the aqua grunt turned to him taking some dirt on the ground crushing it.

“Same goes for me, in fact I’d say when we finally do succeed, each fraction of the remaining teams will call a free for all they’ll all go in at once for the prize it’ll be mass chaos. In the end we’re not much of a group. This is more of a temporary alliance.” The team aqua grunt said defiance in her voice.

The night sky began turning dark rain clouds were forming in the skies. The galatic grunt remained silent for awhile but he forced himself to speak.

“ I probably shouldn't say this but there’s no way the boss will let us live after this anyway, that rebellion from each faction you think will happen won’t happen. Team alpha exists because of the boss and his plan. He says with this pokemon he can create a world we all want for each one of us. But I know it’s a lie. He reminds me of my old boss but much colder he’s more upfront about his cruel nature. He’s probably going to leave us all for dead while he claims the prize.” The galactic grunt confessed as if expecting that at any moment he’d be killed just for saying such a thing.

The other grunts turned toward him shocked.

“Theres no way he’d do such a thing he’s the one who got s this far, we’re closer than ever before! The boss will give us what he’s promised!” the magma grunt said as if he couldn't believe the words of the other members.

“Team alpha is a dark organization. You may think he asked you to join but no he forced us to join. There was one group that refused to join team flare I hear the boss killed them all just for knowing we existed” The galactic grunt said.

“so if we hadn't said yes he would have just killed us all?” The rocket grunt said feeling scared of the boss now. Just then he remembered his meeting with the boss.

“Team rocket is it? I am the leader of the top secret organization team alpha. Join us and I promise you a world in which you envisioned…” said the boss of team alpha.

“what if we decline?” said the grunt

“Let’s just say you’ll have a personal relationship with ghost type pokemon.”

Present

The rocket grunt gulped finally understanding his words. The rain began pouring down as they entered a broken down building which was secretly the hideout of team alpha.

The rocket grunt began thinking to himself as he passed every team on his way to see the boss.

“ So this world he promises for each of us, is a lie? He’s just using us. But if we do turn our backs on him do we stand a chance? Frankly if THAT pokemon is awakened and controlled there’s no stopping him. No matter what. Theres no hope of getting every group to team up against him we’re still at odds with each other. Basically this is slavery.” The rocket grunt thought to himself.

in the background a mega alakazam can be seen having read his thoughts the scene cuts to his shadow on a wall the head of said shadow explodes but is cut off and alakazam is zoomed in upon. The alakazam then returns to its master the boss of team alpha. Who is shadowed out. The other members don’t even take notice. They finally reach the room with the boss inside.

“ SO you lost to two little boys?” He said this with an over whelming feeling of anger.

“But boss….”

“No buts! I’ll give you three one more chance, we’re not playing mr nice guy on this anymore!” the man screamed this at them making them bow down on their knees hoping for mercy.

“I expect no less than this, their demise, the next time I hear from you it better be mission successful or it will be your heads!” He threw his glass at the wall behind them after finishing this demanding sentence.

“Never will I be made a fool of by mere children as your bosses had…”

The scene cuts to the pokecenter in jublife city the lights are all completely out. Jacob awoke with a thunder bolt roaring loud outside enough for him to feel vibrations Shivers went down his spine.

“What’s this feeling…”

Jacob was feeling uneasy he looked to fred who was sleeping peacefully almost unaware of the thunder storm outside.

end of chapter 2

Alittle hint as to who it is we know him but he's not a boss from any of the evil teams tell me what you think

 

[The_Pikachu]

You need an editor who will read and edit your story before you post it as you have a bunch of punctuation errors.

 

[Me Gusta]

this isn't bad, but needs some editing. It's almost crucial. It looks very interesting, and I would mind seeing more in the future.

 

[Fairy Type Arceus]

Chapter 3 Rival battle

Day finally broke, the sun had risen over sinnoh once again and our heros Fred and Jacob had awoken. They had spent the night in Jubilifes Pokecenter. Fred walked out first taking in the city scenery. He had never been in a big city before, he spent his whole life up to that point in Sandgem, very small compared to Jubilife.

“Good morning world!!” Fred proclaimed at the top of his voice.

“Keep it down would you!” Jacob said still tried and quite annoyed.

The two continued to walk turtwig and shinx walked beside Fred. Jacob walked while tossing his pokeball in the air.

“Why aren’t you walking with chimchar?” Fred asked quizzically.

“Why should I?” Jacob said clearly not caring about his pokemon.

“Because I’m sure they want to spend time with you.” Fred said almost in a begrudging tone.

“What and you think walking with them and having “friendship” will make them better fighters?” Jacob said with attitude.

“Yeah I do!” Fred said this almost implying challenge.

“Fine then let’s see Who the better trainer is I was waiting for later for this but…” Jacob cut himself off throwing the ball into the air as chimchar popped out.

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“If that’s how you want it, Go turtwig!” Fred commanded.

Turtwig jumped into action a determined look on his face.

“You see you’re at a disadvantage here fire is super effective against grass!” Jacob said already assuming victory.

“Then all we need to do is dodge your fire type attacks, turtwig use tackle!” fred commanded

“Dodge using dig!” Jacob commanded.
As turtwig got close chimchar dug into the ground

“ Jump and use razor leaf aim for the hole!” Fred commanded

“Jump out of the hole and use ember!” Jacob commanded

Chimchar jumped out of the hole followed by razor leafs chimchar used ember on them. Turtwig is then seen above chimchar.

“Use tackle!” Fred shouted.

Turtwig tackled chimchar into the ground turtwig landed a small distance away from chimchar.

“Get up and use fury swipes!” Jacob commanded

Turtwig is slowly worn down getting fury swipe after fury swipe.

“Now finish him off with ember!” Jacob commanded

“Jump into chimchars hole!” Fred commanded

As chimchar used ember turtwig jumped backwards into chimchars hole dodging the attack. Chimchar Then moved infront of the hole.

“Use ember again!” Jacob commanded.

“Crap um what now…?”

Turtwig gives a look of confusion as Fred becomes confused himself and ultimately is hit by the ember fainting turtwig.

“Ready to give up?” Jacob said assuming victory.

“I’m sorry turtwig it was my fault you did your best, Shinx It’s your turn use spark!” Fred commanded

“Chimchar dig!”
“Crap dodge it!”

Shinx looks around confused about where chimchar will come from and is hit from under shinx lands a few feet from Fred.

“Now are you done your pokemon are too weak to beat me.” Jacob said pulling out his pokeball.

Freds face became an angered one shinx looked up to see Freds angered face shinx stood back up with everything it had.

“Still hanging on?”

“No shinx you don’t need to…”

Shinx glared Jacob down chimchar gave a look of fright.

“Intimidate huh?” Jacob said.

“Alright shinx if you want to keep going then Charge him with another spark!”
“Chimchar use dig again!”

Chimchar dug into the ground dodging shinxs attack.

“ Use charge and dodge he’s going to come up from under you again!” Fred commanded

Shinx Started charging itself with electricity and felt for vibrations, as chimchar came up from underground shinx jumped dodging the attack .

“Now use spark!”

“As it hits you with spark, use ember!”

Shinx used spark as it pushed chimchar into the ground at the same time chimchar used ember. Dust rose everywhere. When it cleared it revealed chimchar to be fainted shinx was still standing breathing heavily.

“Charge raised it Sp.def just enough to take the hit.” Jacob said trying to make sense of the situation.

“Well are you going to send out starly?”

“No It has a type disadvantage to shinx not to mention its low level it won’t outspeed shinx.” Jacob said

Suddenly there was clapping a whole crowd had gathered to watch The two were to into the battle to notice. As the crowd dispersed a women wearing all black with beautiful blond hair walked up to them.

“You two are good trainers but you’re still lacking in a lot of places.” She said

“Like what?” Fred asked

“Your commands were off if you get confused your pokemon will get confused lead them with more confidence and you, you need more compassion for your pokemon they are much more then partners for battle.” As she said this she started walking away.

“We’ll meet again and I promise you’ll be much stronger if you take my advice to heart.” She said this and left

“Who was she?” Fred asked

“Don’t know but I have a feeling she knew what she was talking about.” Jacob said

End of chapter 3