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Always Looking Forward

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So, a few months back, I got it in my head to write a Pokemon fanfiction. I wrote one chapter, and posted it, and it was TERRIBLE. I mean, just absolutely awful. So, I picked up a reviewer (Many thanks to you, Zekurom), and I rewrote it. Now...well, it's not too awful I'm about six chapters in right now, and I'm in a place where I'm comfortable enough to post the first couple of chapters.

Without further ado, here's my fic. A fair warning, I fully intend to mix the mythos of the anime, the game, and the manga, so if you get frustrated at any point, just bare with me. I'm even going to give you guys the first two chapters at once, because I'm just that nice, and I feel like they're some of the shorter chapters, along with Chapter 3, and I don't want there to not be enough substance to start off.

Always Looking Forward


INDEX
Chapter 1: This Post
Chapter 2: This Post
Chapter 3: Post 5
Chapter 4: Post 9
Chapter 5: Post 13
Chapter 6: Post 15
Chapter 7: Post 17

Chapter 1:


My name is Jordan Cooper, and I am a Pokemon trainer.

See, I figured I should start out simple, or the rest of you would never be able to follow along. Keeping up? Good. Then it’s time to drop another bomb on you.

I didn’t want to be one. At least, not at first. See, unlike the rest of the children in Kanto, who dream at night about going off to live in the woods, crawl around in the mud and play with wild animals, I was only to content to continue my lifestyle. My parents were shipping magnates, rich as anything, who spent most of their time hopping around the world, keeping their business affairs in order. This left me all the time in the world to do what I wanted, which was mainly to play around in the mansion my parent had built in the hills above Viridian City. In between private tutoring sessions, which were my parent’s desperate attempt to groom me to take over the family business, I played video games, went swimming in our basement pool, read books and generally goofed off all day.

Good times never last, do they? I still have nightmares about the night that everything changed. My parents had gone down to Viridian City, leaving me in the care of one of our various nannies, but even in Viridian we were getting the rain and the wind. A hurricane had come into the south of Kanto, and it was tearing up the docks. I can still feel the fear grip me inside, and the tears rolling down my face. My nanny tried to comfort me, but I mean, really, could she expect to do anything?

We got the news the next morning. Turns out, mommy and daddy didn’t bother leaving me any actual money, just a trust fund that I couldn’t claim until I was eighteen. I was six. Thanks, guys. Wonderful job with the post-mortem parenting. So, at the age of six, I was carted off to the Oak Ridge Orphanage, in the town of Oak Ridge, just a little ways out of Viridian City.

Right off the bat, none of the kids liked me. Maybe it was the antique car I was dropped off in, maybe it was the fact that I didn’t want to play with any of them, or maybe it was the fact that I was always silent. It could have been that I just hated them, but whatever. The only person I liked at the orphanage was the owner/operator, Mr. Nicholson. He was a good man, upstanding and kind, and he ran the library in town, so I got all the books I could read. Having no friends to play with, I read a lot.

One day, two years and change after I had come to the orphanage, while lost on the couch in a boring book, I had fallen asleep. I was roused, very rudely, from my sleep from the weight of a small child sitting on my chest. Pushing him off, I saw that during my doze, the room had filled up. There was no way of leaving now; I just had to sit it out.


Chapter 2:


That day changed my life. Mr. Nicholson dimmed the lights, some of the children passed around popcorn, and I sat there wondering what the big deal was. Suddenly, the old big screen crackled to life, and it was hard to tell what was louder, the cheering in the room or the cheering from the speakers. The camera panned over a large stadium, the crowd was on their feet.

“Welcome,” boomed the announcer, “To the 96th Annual Indigo Cup Championships!” Some of the younger ones in front stood up to cheer, but the older boys behind them quickly pulled them back down into place. I recalled reading somewhere that the previous champion had forfeited his place, so this must be the championship round.

I don’t even recall who the other challenger was. It was just him. From his black hair, almost blue in the light to his golden eyes, I couldn’t pin what it was about him that exuded this unbelievable charisma. The way his Pokemon danced across the field, it was almost magical. He didn’t just own the crowd, he commanded them. I was mesmerized.

It wasn’t anything close to a competition. Bryce only lost two of his Pokemon, while his opponent had lost all of their six. The announcer’s voice boomed around the stadium. It was slightly crackly through the speakers, but that didn’t matter. Watching him win was all I needed. I had to do what he did, command the audience like that, and most of all, I had to beat him.

My next month’s trust fund allowance went toward a state-of-the-art laptop. I spent my days at the library, my laptop to one side, a stack of reference books to the other. By the end of the month, I knew everything there was to know about Bryce Cobalt, and had a solid basis of knowledge in Pokemon training. It was just a matter of passing the test when my time came and actually doing it.

That chance, of course, became secondary. Mr. Nicholson informed me that Bryce Cobalt was doing a victory tour of Kanto, and that growing up, he had made friends at school with some of the kids at our orphanage, and he would be meeting them here! It was an outrageous coincidence, but I just had to plan it out perfectly. I couldn’t talk to him, couldn’t fanboy out. It wouldn’t be proper.

The fated day came, and, true to form, while the other kids crowded around, scrabbling for an autograph, I sat under the big pine tree with my laptop. I scrolled through my collection of Bryce videos, choosing which one to look at today. I watched a few, all ones I’d seen before, and was settling into a groove for one of his early matches from this year’s Indigo Cup. He was struggling in this three-on-three match, but would eventually pull out a miraculous come-from-behind win.

I was absorbed in the action, and didn’t hear the footfalls on pine needles until it was too late. I didn’t even bother turning my head to acknowledge the stupid kid next to me as he sat down in the needles, crunching under the sudden weight. A shadow was cast over the screen as he peeked over my shoulder.

“Man, you couldn’t pick a battle I did better in?”

That voice…it…oh, god. I couldn’t start hyperventilating, but my knuckles were turning white. Stay calm, I thought to myself, stay calm. I turned my head to look him in the eye, my dark brown latching onto his gold.
“Now, why ever would I do that?”

“Well, Mr. Nicholson tells me you’re my biggest fan. I just thought that you’d be more interested in my good victories.” I scoffed, turning my head back to the screen.

“This is a good victory. The strategy and tactics you used were top-notch, and you got into the rhythm that you had for the rest of the tournament here. Plus,” I added, almost as an afterthought, “If I watch a video where you struggle, it’ll be all the easier to figure out how to beat you.” At this he smiled, and I growled under my breath. Was he laughing at me? How dare he! I turned the screen to face him, opening up various spreadsheets, all full of data about him and him alone.

“These are your battle records,” I stated as I scrolled through the spreadsheets with a flick of my wrist, “All the different Pokemon you’ve used in battle, their typing, stats, movesets, and personal records. Lists of every battle you had in the last championship tournament, and how you did compared to each different trainer,” I droned on and on until he reached over and ruffled my hair.

“Well,” he said, his voice almost a whisper, “What about your Pokemon?” Noting my quizzical expression, he continued: “You need Pokemon, right?” I started to bring up another spreadsheet, this one filled with the perfect typing and movesets to demolish whatever team he could hope to assemble, but he shut my laptop screen before I had a chance to show him. “No, not spreadsheets. Pokemon. Partners. Friends. How do they feature into this?”

Partners? Friends? What did that have to do with anything? “Wha…I don’t understand…,” I stammered, trying desperately to make sense of what he was telling me. “The data’s good,” I finally managed to spit out, looking up at Bryce only to see him shake his head.

“Pokemon are your friends, or they’re supposed to be. Didn’t anyone ever teach you this?” When I shook my head, he reached to his belt and pulled off a pokeball, enlarging the red-and-white sphere to full size. He stared right at me, his golden eyes burning holes right through me.

“Well, I’d say it’s time for a lesson, isn’t it?”

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Questions? Comments? Criticisms? Concerns?
 
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I'd say it's quite a nice start to a story. There are a few grammatical errors, but nothing major.
One concern I'm having is that putting a story in first person, rather than third-person omniscient, can sometimes make everything seem a whole lot calmer than it is. That's my experience, anyhow. For example, when I read the part with Bryce looking over Jordan's shoulder, I was expecting Jordan to be a bit more nervous somehow.

Either way, it's a good story which I'll definitely keep an eye on!
 
So, a few months back, I got it in my head to write a Pokemon fanfiction. I wrote one chapter, and posted it, and it was TERRIBLE.

Did you delete the thread? I'd like to see your first attempt.

*edit* No, I found it. Ehh, you didn't change that much... it would have been okay.

I mean, just absolutely awful. So, I picked up a reviewer (Many thanks to you, Zekurom), and I rewrote it. Now...well, it's not too awful,

*coughunderstatementcough*

I'm about six chapters in right now, and I'm in a place where I'm comfortable enough to post the first couple of chapters.

Well now, don't get ahead of yourself! You've posted the first two chapters, meaning that you've cut a full week off the buffer. Let's hope that this buffer is enough to keep it uninterrupted.
 
Comically enough, I only wanted a buffer so I wouldn't feel pressured to write a new chapter if I didn't feel like it. Every time I write a new chapter, I'll post the next chapter in the story.
 
Chapter 3 is up! As always, feedback is appreciated.

Chapter 3

He pressed the release button on the pokeball, and it released a dazzling light, which slowly grew together, forming a tall Pokemon, a dress flowing around its ankles as the sparkles danced and faded around its green helmet-style hair.

I was in awe. This was Bryce’s Gardevoir, his signature Pokemon, the most recognizable on his team. I stood there in awe for almost a minute, and I knew I had to hurry before any of the other kids saw her. “Venus,” I whispered, looking toward Bryce for confirmation. He nodded. “Can I touch her?” Another nod. I reached out, my hand trembling, and brushed it against her. Her skin felt like silk underneath my fingers, warm and supple. As I pulled my hand back, hers reached out and grabbed it.

She smiled at me as she turned my palm over, but I quickly pulled my palm away. What was she trying to do? She frowned, and an image appeared in my head, my palm in her hand. I shook my head at the pokemon. What was she, stupid? She glared at me and another image flashed in my head. I gasped. A Gardevoir, obviously Venus, stopping Bryce during a free-fall off a cliff with her psychic powers. I think she was trying to tell me that I could trust her, so I held my hand out, palm up. She traced her slender fingers across the lines in my palm, and her eyes glowed blue.

I felt this overwhelming sense of calm. I still don’t know to this day what she was doing, but apparently she found what she was looking for. She released my hand and looked at Bryce, who nodded.

“Well, it appears that Venus thinks you’re the real deal, and even if I don’t believe her, I trust her judgment.” He took off his backpack and placed it gently on the ground. Opening it, he pulled out a large object wrapped in a towel and motioned for me to come closer. “This is Venus’ to give away, after all, but I’ll only agree to give it to you on two conditions. One: That you’ll promise to treat the Pokemon you eventually train as friends, just as I treat Venus.”

I had seen enough of her memories to understand that she put the utmost trust in Bryce. Was that the secret to how she battled so well? I’d have to research it later, I decided, and nodded, agreeing to Bryce’s first condition. “The second condition: Open it when there’s nobody else around, alright? I don’t want anyone else getting jealous.” I nodded again, and he handed me the package. I took it, feeling its surprising weight in my hands. “Now, go hide that somewhere safe, alright?” As I got up to leave, I felt a hand on each of my shoulders. I turned to my right and saw Venus standing there. She smiled, flashing me a quick thumbs-up. On my left was Bryce.

“What’s your name, kid?”

“J…J…Jordan Cooper,” I managed to stammer out.

“Well, Jordan, I’ll see you at the Indigo Plateau, yeah? After all, you’ll be the first one to beat me, right?” I nodded, slack-jawed, as he got up, returning Venus to her pokeball, and brushed the pine needles and dirt off of his pants. He reached out to ruffle my hair, but I pulled my head back, staring right into his eyes.

“I’m not a little kid,” I stated, my already high voice breaking, “I’m your rival, and I’ll be the one to beat you! You can count on it!” He laughed, staring right back at me.

“You remind me of someone, someone I knew a long time ago.” A tear formed at the corner of his eye, and he brushed it away. That was the last I saw of him that day, as he was too busy playing with the other children and talking with Mr. Nicholson to hang out with me, but I didn’t matter. He’d pay more attention to me when I blew him out of the water at the Indigo Conference.



Later that night, I lay underneath the covers of my cot, muscles tense from having maintained the same position for so long. I listened one last time, hearing no footsteps in the hall, only the rhythmic breathing of my sleeping roommates. I pulled the package out from underneath my bed, and with the greatest care, I unwrapped it.

The towel wound around and around, slowly revealing the treasure that lay inside. Tan fabric gave way to a smooth, oval shape. I ran my hands over it, reveling in the feeling of it, almost like small electric shocks to my skin. It was astounding, it was amazing, it was…

“A Pokemon egg,” I whispered, silently reveling in my new gift.
 
Excellent chapter! You really went into great detail in this story, and made the plot really get started. I can't wait to see what hatches from the egg!
 
Not discontinued, just...sporadic. I post a new chapter when I write a new chapter.
 
Chapter 4:


Every night for the next few months, I cared for that egg. As summer waned, I began to bundle it up, and during the winter, I went and bought hand warmers to put near it. Eventually, it grew to be a large nest taking up every inch of space under my cot with blankets, fans, hand warmers and cardboard shields to block it from the view of anyone walking by. I even bathed it, late at night, with a tub of water warmed over the radiator in the corner of the room. I kept waiting for it to hatch, but day after day went by, and the egg remained an egg.

I started to worry. Was something wrong with it? Had I done something wrong? Had I killed it? So, late at night, I grabbed the egg, bundled it up in a heavy down coat I had stolen from the coat closet, and snuck out the front door. I walked for what seemed like ages, clutching the egg to my chest, until I reached the Oak Ridge Pokemon Center. The lights were still on, but the doors were locked, so I knocked until a very sleepy-looking Nurse Joy opened them for me. “Can I help you, young man?”

I put on my best pity face, the look that had gotten thousands of cookies from dozens of nannies who were just too stubborn to reach the top shelf, and started to whimper, “My egg…hasn’t hatched…did I break it?” I could see the light flash in the back of Nurse Joy’s eyes, and knew I had her. Time to reel her in. I really turned on the charm, feeling the tears well up in the corners of my eyes. “Can you fix it?” She sighed, knowing that it would be some time before she managed to get back to sleep, and ushered me inside.

Trainers were draped over couches and curled up on the floor. I stepped gingerly through the minefield of sleeping bodies to the counter, where Nurse Joy took my hand and led me into the back room. She sat the egg down in the center of a large machine, attached electrodes to the surface of it, and walked out of the room. Her fingers danced over an elaborate touch screen display, flicking through pages and pages of data.

“I can’t see anything wrong here. Have you been walking with it?” Oh, stupid, stupid, stupid! How could I forget that! The look on my face must have told Nurse Joy all she needed to know, because she smiled and ruffled my hair. “Then there’s your problem!”

I hated her for treating me like such a child, but I hated myself more. How could I forget to walk with it? The nurse unplugged the electrodes, handed me my egg, and smiled. I yanked the egg out of her hands, murmured a thank you, and ran. I realize now it was stupid and childish of me, but I was ashamed! I ran for as long as I could, passing far beyond the boundaries of the town of Oak Ridge, into the woods. As I slowed, chest heaving, lungs burning, sweat matting my hair, I realized that I was completely and totally lost.

I wandered for hours before I saw something that I recalled. An old fallen tree I used to sit on during lunches at the Orphanage. I was close, really close. As I left the dense canopy of the trees, I could see the sunlight peeking over the roof of the Orphanage. I raced across the lawn, gripping the egg close to my chest, and tried the front door. I jiggled the handle, but nothing happened. It was locked. Crap. I darted around to the other side of the building and tried the back door to no avail. Frantic now, I dashed to the window of my room I pushed hard on the window frame, and it slid open.

Breathing a sigh of relief, I slid inside. Glancing at the clock hanging on the wall, I realized it was almost time for everyone to start getting up. I nearly ripped the clothes I was wearing off me, throwing them under my bed, but I didn’t have time to stash the egg. I crawled underneath my covers, pulling the egg in with me. I laid there for a few minutes, my breathing steadying, as I heard alarm clocks blaring and children waking. Someone was shaking me, trying to wake me up…no, wait, that wasn’t shaking.
I threw the blanket off myself, revealing the egg to the room, but it didn’t matter. The egg was wiggling! The kids that had woken up already gasped and shook their friends, pointing to it. The egg shook violently for several seconds, and then stopped, standing straight up. The room lit up in a blinding flash, and all the boys covered their eyes.

The flash cleared slowly, dissipating to reveal the green-helmeted figure on my bed. It had a tiny white body, with no feet to speak of, and two red horns popping out of its head along the crest of its head. “Ralts!” it cried, looking up expectantly at me. I picked it up in my arms, and that seemed to satisfy it, because it went right to sleep.

“Dude,” said one of my roommates as he clapped a hand on my shoulder, “Where did you get that Ralts?”

“I got it from Bryce Cobalt,” I answered, “And his name isn’t Ralts.” I had looked up the source of the names of Bryce’s Pokemon, and I had found that they were a set of ancient gods, Pokemon long since extinct and worshipped by an old civilization. I had found that the gods were almost directly ripped off of another ancient society.

“His name…is Ares.”
 
I have to say, you're off to a good start! I'm interested as to what happens next. I'm just wondering, but, how does Jordan know that his newly hatched Ralts is a boy? As far as I know, Ralts don't have any distinguishable gender differences. Anyways, keep up the good work.
 
Nice start! I love how he bathes in every night, but forgets to walk with it. You've really put a lot of character depth into this story, and done a very good job!
 
I have to say, you're off to a good start! I'm interested as to what happens next. I'm just wondering, but, how does Jordan know that his newly hatched Ralts is a boy? As far as I know, Ralts don't have any distinguishable gender differences. Anyways, keep up the good work.

You could chalk it up to intuition, maybe Ralts beamed it directly into his head psychically, or maybe he just has noticeable male features that they can't show in games and TV shows made for children. It's not something that you have to worry about, but maybe I'll come up with a reasonable explanation and talk about it in a later chapter. I didn't even notice that problem when I wrote it. Good eye.
 
Chapter 5

You want to know the worst way to keep a secret? Tell it to a bunch of eight-year-old boys. By the next day, everyone at the orphanage knew that the egg had come from Bryce Cooper, and by the end of the month, when I brought Ares in for his first check-up at the Pokemon Center, everyone in town knew. The same Nurse Joy answered the door for me, and she took Ares behind the counter and into a back room. A Chansey ushered me in after her.
Nurse Joy ran a battery of tests on Ares, everything from reflex tests to stress tests, before turning to me and asking me a battery of questions. Stuff I could remember from my own checkups, any trouble breathing, any dizziness. “Does he know any attacks yet?”

“Well, not quite,” I answered, “He sometimes does this thing with these little balls of fire, though. They dance around him, and then disappear.”
“Oh, he knows Will-O-Wisp! That’s rare in a Ralts.” I beamed proudly, like this had something to do with me. “Well, he’s got a clean bill of health. You’ve got a bouncing baby Ralts.” I swept him up off the counter, planting him on top of my shoulder. I wasn’t cleared to have a Pokeball yet, not being a trainer, so I mainly carried Ares everywhere. I thanked her, more appreciatively than the last time, and left the Pokemon center.

Winter had already given way to spring, but night still fell earlier than in the summer. I walked home, Ares riding along on my shoulder, when a kid came running out of the alley, knocking me to the ground. The kid, a big, ugly one, grabbed me under my armpits and held me up. Ares stared on, in shock, as another two boys walked out of the alley.

I only recognized the middle one. Andre Winters. He was the biggest bully at school, and he always got away with it because he came from old money. His daddy bribed off the principal, so his little boy got away with whatever he wanted. The Winters family was some of the oldest money in Kanto, with fingers in everything from travel to restaurants. This, of course, gave Andre the right to do whatever the hell he wanted. For his tenth birthday, his dad had bought him the answers to the trainer’s exam and a set of Luxury Balls to compliment his new trainer’s license. He had even provided his son with a starter pokemon, a male Nidoran, to help him along.

His two big friends were probably being paid off to be with him. Everyone in town found him insufferable. He looked at me, sneered, and then looked down at Ares. “Is this the Ralts from Bryce Cobalt?” When I didn’t answer, his big friend punched me in the gut. He looked at me as though this was supposed to get the message across and repeated himself, “Is this the Ralts from Bryce Cobalt?”

I could feel a little blood bubble up in my mouth, so I spat it on his foot. He sighed, and pulled out a luxury ball. “Doesn’t matter what you tell me, I know it is. And I’m going to catch it, because I need the best pokemon!” He pressed the button on his Luxury Ball, releasing a male Nidoran, the little purple beast’s horn looking particularly large and nasty, even in comparison to his oversized ears. The fur on its back bristled, the other male pokemon clearly challenging its territorial rights. “Nidoran, use Peck attack on that Ralts!”

The little purple beast bared its fangs, tensing its hind legs for a lunge. Ares tried to move, but his little waddle couldn’t get him out of the way fast enough. The purple horn buried itself in his chest, and the small psychic-type was thrown backward, landing on its backside. Nidoran attacked again and again, not leaving a second for Ares to recover.
I’m not sure at what point this became unbearable for me to watch, but it did. I couldn’t bear to see Ares get beat like that. Nobody deserved it, except for these idiots. I reared my head back, slamming the guy behind me in his mouth. I felt some of his teeth loosen, but I didn’t care. Anyone working with Andre was scum. I put myself between the two pokemon just in time for the next Peck attack.

The horn hurt. A lot. I saw stars and bright lights dance before my eyes, and the blow knocked me flat on my back. I struggled to my feet, still standing in between my Pokemon and my opponent’s. Andre sneered, and his cronies giggled. “Nidoran, another Peck attack!” Another searing pain, this time in my shoulder. I could hear Ares gasp in the background, and then I saw Nidoran stop. He closed his eyes, wincing, then shook his head, apparently clearing up whatever problem he had. The third Peck attack drilled right into my solar plexus, and I hit the ground. My lungs burned, my throat spasming, and I gasped for breath, finding none.

From my vantage point on the ground, I saw Andre pull one of his Luxury Balls from his belt, the gold glinting in the light of the street lamps. “That’s Bryce’s Ralts, definitely. Why else would he work so hard to defend it. And now it’s mine!” With a flick of the wrist, the ball enlarged to its full size, and then flicked it at Ares. I watched as the ball spiraled toward him, turning over and over and…stopping?

I looked down, and I saw Ares, his arms raised, his eyes glowing a misty blue. The Luxury Ball, now surrounded by that same blue light that filled Ares’ eyes, started spinning, faster and faster, and abruptly changed direction, flying straight into Andre’s face. It cracked against his forehead, knocking Andre off of his feet. Nidoran was next. I watched his knees buckle, the pain he had felt before apparently double, no, triple what it was before.

“Confusion,” I gasped as I watched Nidoran lay down on the ground. The little purple rodent curled up into the fetal position, obviously done, and Ares lowered his arms, his eyes disappearing back underneath his giant green hat. Andre sat up, rubbing his forehead, and returned his Nidoran to its ball.

“You’ll pay for this, you little shit,” he muttered, as he turned to run. Suddenly, Ares used another Confusion attack, and Andre’s pants fell straight down around his ankles. His two cronies fell all over themselves laughing while Andre just fumed, gathering his pants at the waist and waddling down the street.

Ares, however, was done for the day. The stress of the new attacks, combined with the previous attacks, had tuckered him out, and he had fallen asleep standing up. I scooped the small white Pokemon up in my arms while one of Andre’s goons picked up the dropped Luxury Ball.

“It’ll sell real good,” he murmured, moving to pocket it, but I grabbed his wrist with my free hand. I gave him my best cold stare, my eyes shooting daggers.

“I believe that’s mine,” I said, and he dropped it. It shrank down to pocket size when it hit the ground, and I let go of his wrist.

“Sure, man, whatever. It’s yours,” he muttered, and he motioned for his friend to leave with him. I pocketed the Luxury Ball, and cradled Ares in my arms. Despite all that had happened, I smiled. This was going to be a lot of fun.



See what I meant by sporadic? Sorry this took so long, I started college and it's been a little hectic.
 
Awesome! I can tell that Jordan loves his pokemon. You've done a very nice job of conveying his anxiety for Ralts' as well as Ralts's weakness Nice job!
 
It has been a while, hasn't it? Well, without further ado for all six of you who care, here's Chapter 6.

Chapter 6


That fight had a profound effect on me. I started reading different texts, adding military history and strategy in with my research texts. I also started working out, spending quite a lot of time hiking in the dense woods around town. I’d grab my laptop, a bite or two of food from the kitchen, and hike up to my favorite spot to do another once-over of Bryce’s battles. Oftentimes, Ares would accompany me, juggling rocks and branches with his newly-found psychic powers.

Without batting an eyelash, two years had passed. My doughy eight-year-old nerdy body had grown into the lithe body of a ten-year-old fit for traveling. The day of my tenth birthday, I rolled out of bed. Every birthday before this, I had been tremendously sad. It was just another reminder of a year without my parents. This year, though, I was excited, and Ares could sense it. He hopped right up on my shoulder, telekinetically keeping himself light enough that it wouldn’t bother me to carry him. I grabbed my backpack, packed the night before with my laptop, my Luxury Ball, a few sets of clean clothes and a few bits and pieces of food, and headed outside.

There, on the lawn outside the front door, was Mr. Nicholson, and in his arms was one of the most beautiful bikes I’d ever seen. Midnight blue, with deep red accents, completely collapsible to a size so small that it could fit right in my backpack. A bike that I’d obsessed over for the last few months, but couldn’t budget into the money I was saving for my journey. I nearly fainted when he presented it to me.

“A Moonrunner X-86? This couldn’t be for me,” I asked, but he nodded. I shoved it back into his hands. “I can’t. This is worth a fortune,” but he shoved it right back at me.

“You’ll need it for your trip, won’t you? Besides,” said the older man, looking sadly down at me, “I feel like you’ll need it. It’s a long walk to take all around Kanto.” I looked back up at the older man, saw the tears forming in his eyes, and smiled. He was sad to see me go and, incredulously, I found myself sad to leave him as well. I watched as a tear rolled down his face, dropping off of his chin and onto the seat of the bike. “Good luck…son,” he murmured.

I was flummoxed, but he quickly covered up his mistake with a cough. He handed me two pieces of paper along with the bike. “What exactly are these?” I asked, and he smiled at me.

“The first is a card number. With it, you can access the Kanto Grand Library through your Pokedex. You can read any book they have on file right on the screen.” I smiled wide, knowing how much this would help me, and I suppose Mr. Nicholson took it as gratitude.

“The second is my personal phone number here at the orphanage. I want to hear how you’re doing on your journey!” At this, I was perplexed, but the smile on his face told me I should be happy, so I smiled back. He seemed to accept this, and I received a hearty clap on the back. “Good luck, Jordan. May the wind always be at your back.” I smiled back at him, mounted the Moonrunner, and took off.

You could always count on Mr. Nicholson to dispatch cryptic advice. May the wind always be at my back? What a crock. The Moonrunner, however, was a fine piece of machinery. I made fine time to Viridian, and from there to Pallet Town, to visit Professor Oak and finally receive my trainer’s license.
 
Yes! I;m happy you didn;t go into too much detail about the 2 year development. That might have been dull. He;s getting his journey started! Woot!
Can't wait!
 
Another long-not-really-cared-about update!

Chapter 7:

I parked my bike outside the large barn-like structure, chaining it to the base of a large tree, and instructed Ares to stay up in the tree and watch it. He floated himself up to a high branch, to assure that no one would see him, and waited there. I tried the door, finding it open. People were a lot more trusting in these small towns than they were in Viridian. I walked a ways into the lab, pausing at the bookshelves to read the titles. I considered pocketing a few, but they were all huge, and there was no way I could carry it out without getting noticed. I called out, but, when no one answered, I plucked a large tome from the shelves and began to read.

“I remember sitting here and reading that exact same book when I was younger.” I spun my head around to look at a pair of legs, one wearing brown boots and blue jeans, the other wearing slacks and dress shoes, using a cane. Looking upwards, I realized that it was the person I’d been looking for, the famous Professor Oak and his grandson, Blue. Professor took his wizened hand out of his lab coat pocket and ruffled Blue’s pointy brown hair.

“This one reminds me a lot of you at that age,” he chuckled, “But how’d he get in here?”

“The..the door was open,” I mumbled, and Oak frowned. Blue looked sheepishly away, but Oak just bowed his head and sighed.

“Jeez, Blue, it doesn’t matter how talented you are, a sloppy mistake means you won’t get rid of me for another month!” He turned to me, his smile wide with pride. “Blue here is taking over the lab. It’s finally time for me to hang up my coat.” His wrinkles curved, and it was only then I realized how old he was. I’d read all of his books, but had never realized that this person, the one who had discovered almost every important piece of information about Pokemon, was nearing 90 years of age. Blue started walking, and I quickly got up and walked behind him. Professor Oak stayed behind to shelve the books I had been reading.

“But Blue,” I wondered aloud, “You’re not a researcher.”

“Well, yeah, for that you’d want my little brother, Gary, but being a former league champion has its advantages. This is mostly a formality, anyway. Kanto needs someone to keep giving out starters and taking care of Pokemon, and I can do both of those. Grandpa doesn’t seem to think so, though, and he sticks around to check up on me.”

“Who’s running the Viridian City Gym?”

“Nobody, at the moment, but I called in someone who I know can handle it. It’ll have a gym leader as soon as I can get one in there.” He seemed a little upset, so I dropped the subject as we arrived at a pedestal, containing three Pokeballs. “These Pokeballs contain a Bulbasaur, a Charmander, and a Squirtle. Choose wisely, because your starter Pokemon often becomes your best friend.” He plucked a Pokeball from his belt and opened it, releasing a mighty Charizard. “Isn’t that right, old friend?”

The Charizard roared, then bent its head down to allow Blue to tickle it under the chin. “So, which one will you choose?” I ran my hands over the metallic finish of the Pokeballs, knowing that I wasn’t going to choose a single one of them. I sent out a thought, a picture of the room, and within a few seconds Ares teleported in. “Ahhhh, I see. You already have one in mind.” He grabbed an empty ball off the desk and tried to hand it to me, but I refused it.

From my pocket I withdrew the Luxury Ball I had claimed from my fight with Andre two years earlier. “Ares,” I asked, “Will you be my partner? Will you journey with me?” I placed the ball on the ground and stepped back, and the white pokemon walked right up to it and pressed the button, allowing a red aura to envelop him and suck him into the ball. It wobbled a little bit, and then the ball jingled, signaling a catch.

“Congratulations,” said Blue, “You’re now officially a Pokemon trainer.”


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