-Barry's Story-(Chapter 4 is up)

[Yumega]

-RATED 13-

^Credit for awesome Banner goes to Blazaking EX, thanks mate ^​

I searched up the name Barry for the forums and couldn't see a fiction telling Barry's story for Pokémon platinum (or any other game) so I decided I would write this rival story. But if there is then I apollogise because I'm not trying to top anyone's fic,
I want to get this straight here. I have no idea what starter pokémon Barry is supposed to choose but I have a good idea of the ones he will catch so I'm just going to make it up.
I will take just about anything you toss at me criticism wise so don't hold back on that! But I'm still a noob and really I would like to know how to make links to your chapters like I see on most fics around here. It's like a table of contents but with links instead.
This fic is based on Barry's side of events in Pokémon Platinum but some things will be edited by me.
But enough of talking and here is my Fic!

Barry’s Story-

-Contents-

Chapter One-Morning
Chapter Two-The first battle
Chapter Three- An early lead?
Chapter Four- Party


Chapter one-Morning​

The winter had barely begun in Twinleaf Town but like most of Sinnoh the cold still had a bitter bite to it. Snow had already fallen and large patches could be found around the small town and frost dusted the air.

Twinleaf town was one of the smallest in Sinnoh but being labelled ‘the town where adventures start’ made it the place where some fairytales were based on, most of them telling the stories of young people starting their lives as Pokémon trainers and doing great things in their adventures. However, Barry Legg had grown out of those stories a long time ago and being only a few weeks shy of his thirteenth birthday meant that his interests were turned towards other things.

In this morning Barry sat, hunched on his bedroom floor with his eyes glued to the TV in front of him.

‘We humans live alongside Pokémon as friends. At times we play together, and at other times we work together,’ said an old man, speaking in front of a large building. The man was either in his late fifties or early sixties with snowy white hair and moustache. The building behind him must be his lab, decided Barry as he had learnt that this man was some sort of scientist and that his name was Rowan. It was a TV show called Sinnoh celebrities! Barry was particularly fond of this show because every week he would watch to see if his father, Palmer Legg would be on. With every word the man said, Barry found himself leaning closer to the TV and his eyes widened. Every time the man uttered the word Pokémon his heart missed a beat. Pokémon!

‘Some people use their Pokémon to battle and develop closer bonds with them,’ continued the man, preaching to the camera.

‘And what exactly do you do, Professor Rowan,’ asked the host of the show, Terry Andrews.

‘What do I do? I conduct research so that we may learn more about Pokémon! Pokémon are by our sides, Always! I hope you will understand the meaning of those words.’

The camera zoomed in on Terry again. Personally Barry hated Terry, he was always too happy and the camera seemed more fond him than the celebrities that would be on every week.

‘And that concludes our interview with professor Rowan, who has just returned from the Kanto region,’ Terry said in his strange, chipper voice. ‘See you next week, same time...’

Barry stared at the TV as the show ended. So his father wasn’t on it this week, there was always the next. Anyway this week proved to be great anyway. Any Professor talking about Pokémon was usually a good thing. Earlier in the show Barry had found out that this professor gave out Pokémon to new trainers. Barry wanted to be a new trainer, and would have if it wasn’t for his mother. She said that going to Sandgem town was too dangerous but what did she know?! Barry needed to be a Pokémon trainer, no questions asked! All he needed was this Rowan dude!

Barry stood up. If he was going to become a Pokémon trainer before sundown he needed to meet up with the professor now! But first there was someone else Barry had in mind. Lucas! Being best friends since babies meant that Barry and Lucas did most things with each other and they both shared the same dream; to become Pokémon masters. If Barry was going to Sandgem town then it would be better if Lucas came too and there was no doubt that he would agree. There was no time to lose because by this time tomorrow Barry could be a Pokémon trainer.

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‘Where are you going,’ asked Barry’s mother as he headed for the backdoor.

Oh sugar! Barry was hoping that he could escape without his
mother noticing him.
‘Nowhere mom,’ he replied as he grabbed his orange and white jacket and green scarf. ‘I’m just going out for a while with Lucas!’

‘Oh, okay,’ smiled his mother, bent over the sink, cleaning dishes. ‘Say high to Johanna for me. But make sure your back for lun-’ She didn’t get to finish her sentence as Barry had
already slammed the door.

‘That boy,’ she sighed as she looked at a photograph of Palmer holding Barry as a baby. ‘He is getting more like his father every day.’

Barry zipped up his jacket and wrapped his scarf around his neck as he stepped outside. It was cold. He jogged the length of his lane, his shoes making a crunching noise as he did so. He kicked up as much snow as possible as his mind focused on thoughts of he and his father. Dad and son fighting side by side! They would be unstoppable! His dream came to an end as he stopped outside a house. Lucas’s house.

Barry knocked once before walking in. Johanna turned her head from the TV to great him.

‘Hello Barry! How are you today,’ she asked brightly before standing up and heading over to the fridge. ‘Can I get you anything? A drink, perhaps?’

‘Na I’m good,’ Barry said. ‘Mom says hey.’

Johanna giggled. ‘Oh I’ll have to call in on her some day! Lucas is upstairs by the way.’

‘Thanks Mrs. Rose,’ Barry mumbled as he climbed the staircase, leading to Lucas’s room.

Lucas grinned as he seen his best friend entering the room.

‘Hey mate,’ greeted Lucas as the two friends high fived each other. ‘What’s up?’

‘Hey, Lucas! Did you just see the TV show about that professor?!’

‘Umm, yeah. I missed the start of it though. What’s so special about that Rowan dude, anyway,’ asked Lucas.

‘Professor Rowan is that really important guy who studies Pokémon! That means he must have lots and lots of Pokémon. So if we ask him I bet he’ll give us some and let us become
Pokémon trainers!’

Lucas raised an eyebrow. Barry obviously hadn’t thought this through much. But Lucas knew better than to knock him down. He tried to get more information out of him.

‘Are you still trying to be like your old man then,’ he asked.
‘Yeah, but dude this is more than that! We both could be Pokémon trainers today! Think about it! We would be the best Pokém-’ Barry gasped as he spotted something on the other side of the room. ‘Hey! Is this a new PC?!’ Barry ran over to the PC and began to hit buttons. ‘Awesome,’ he muttered as he admired the sleek blue machine.

Lucas couldn’t help laughing. Barry was easily side tracked and his excitement was contagious. ‘Okay, Pokémon trainers. What if
he says no?’

Barry didn’t respond quickly. He was too busy typing a name into a search engine. Lucas didn’t have to check to know that he was looking up his Dad.
‘Wow! Look at this! The Battle fron-’

‘Barry!’

‘Uh...where was I? Oh right, right! We’re going to see Rowan and get a Pokémon! I’ll be waiting outside, but if you’re late I’m fining you, man,’ exclaimed Barry as he headed for the stairs.

‘Barry, wait a second! We can-’

’10 million dollars Lucas! You better hurry up dude because I’m not waiting around!’

‘Barr-’

‘Common,’ Barry cried as he left the room.
Johanna opened her mouth to say goodbye to Barry as he left the house but didn’t get the chance. He had already left.

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Outside again Barry ran a hand through his hair and began to jump from foot to foot. He was feeling a burst of adrenalin and wanted to get moving to Sandgem town as quickly as possible. The sooner the better. He looked up to the sky and noticed a flock of starly flying through the air. This got Barry thinking. Maybe the tales of great trainers starting from Twinleaf Town were true. The town of adventure. His dad was born here and he is a great trainer. Suddenly Barry jumped. The door to Lucas’s house had opened and Lucas walked out, zipped up in a blue jacket.

‘You’re too slow, Lucas! Common! Let’s get going to Rowan’s
lab!’

‘Barry you know, this professor might not give us a Pokémon. I’m just saying don’t get your hopes up,’ Lucas said, trying to prepare Barry for disappointment. Getting a Pokémon would be awesome but it didn’t seem like it was happening.

The two friends began making their way towards route 201, their breath rising up in white smoke.

‘I’m telling you, Lucas. This time it’s different! I know this is it,’ continued Barry. Lucas sighed. When Barry started he couldn’t be stopped.

They stopped at the route crossroads. To the left was lake Verity, ‘the lake of emotion’, but to the right was the way to Sandgem town. It was dotted with patches of tall grass and Lucas spotted a wild bidoof jumping around, nibbling on a flower. Suddenly he remembered something his mother always told him.

‘Barry, you know that if we leave we can get attacked by wild Pokémon, right?’
‘What? Oh yeah, I know. It doesn’t matter that we don’t have any Pokémon though! Trust me on this one! I have an idea!’
That would be a first, though Lucas but he decided to hear Barry out.

‘Now listen, you know how Pokémon just jump out at you if you are in the tall grass? So what you do is you scoot through it all before the Pokémon attack! Bad-a-bing, bad-a-boom! If we dash we can make it to Sandgem town in minutes!’
Lucas tried to protest ‘Barry, it’s more than that. It’s not just the grass anyway! Pokémon are everywhere!’

‘Trust me, Lucas, it’s fine,’ Barry argued. ‘Now, let’s go!’
Without any time to stop him, Barry began sprinting towards the right.

‘Barry,’ cried Lucas as he began to sprint after him, but before he took more than a step a mans voice called out.

‘Hold it right there,’ yelled the man.

Barry turned to see who had shouted. ‘That’s Row-ARGH!’ He screamed as he tripped over a root of tree and he tumbled to the ground.

‘Watch it, Barry,’ shouted Lucas as he ran over to help his friend. He reached out a hand.

But instead of taken it Barry just yelled ‘Get down, Lucas’ and he tugged at his arm, pulling him to the ground.
Lucas’s mouth filled with grass and dirt as he hit the ground and he looked up quick enough to see three Starly fly over head.

‘Wait, what,’ Lucas gasped as he stood up, dragging Barry to his feet.

Look out,’ cried a female voice and the two boys heads turned towards the right to see in horror the three starly turn around and head towards them at full speed.

‘Oh crap,’ murmured Barry as the three Pokémon came closer.

 

[Gama]

Re: Barry's Story

Ah, another Rival's Story has been born, I believe this is the third. That is with mine, the story of Blue, as the first and Ryuutakeshi's, the story of Silver AKA Dante, as the second. I'm not trying to say there's anything wrong with that though, nothing wrong with inspiration.

Firstly, there's nothing wrong with you writing Barry's story (I know I've already said this), I don't believe anyone else has tried to so you're far from treading on anyone's feet.

There's no need therefore to apologise. And there's nothing wrong with wanting to top other people's fics imo, as long as you're not nasty about it.

Barry's starter is simply the one that is strong against Lucas', similarly, Dawn's is weak against Lucas'. Therefore you can accurately choose whichever you wish him to start with as long as you make Lucas' and Dawn's correspond.

See spoiler for further details

Spoiler

If Barry starts with Piplup, Lucas will have Chimchar and Dawn will have Turtwig

If Barry starts with Chimchar, Lucas will have Turtwig and Dawn will have Piplup

If Barry starts with Turtwig, Lucas will have Piplup and Dawn will have Chimchar

Hope this helps

If you're unsure about what Pokemon he's supposed to catch, just check 'pedia, you'll be able to get all sorts of useful information on Barry that'll help you write your story.

The way you write a table of contents is simple, click spoiler for more details (don't want to make this post even longer than it already is)

Spoiler

Write (url=link to appropriate chapter)Chapter Name/Number (/url) but replace curved brackets with square

for instance, this chapter would be (url=http://bmgf.bulbagarden.net/showpost.php?p=1689927&postcount=1)Chapter One(/url), which, when replaced with square brackets, looks like so:

Chapter One

Hope this helps too.

As for the story, I like it. At one point you say 'taken' where it should say 'taking'. I really like the characterisation of Barry and Lucas, I can really feel their personalities. I'm looking forward to seeing more! I'm hoping you can get the whole of the time that Lucas accompanies done with in the next chapter and maybe include some unadulterated Barry time!

 

[Yumega]

Re: Barry's Story

Ah, another Rival's Story has been born, I believe this is the third. That is with mine, the story of Blue, as the first and Ryuutakeshi's, the story of Silver AKA Dante, as the second. I'm not trying to say there's anything wrong with that though, nothing wrong with inspiration.

Firstly, there's nothing wrong with you writing Barry's story (I know I've already said this), I don't believe anyone else has tried to so you're far from treading on anyone's feet.

There's no need therefore to apologise. And there's nothing wrong with wanting to top other people's fics imo, as long as you're not nasty about it.

Barry's starter is simply the one that is strong against Lucas', similarly, Dawn's is weak against Lucas'. Therefore you can accurately choose whichever you wish him to start with as long as you make Lucas' and Dawn's correspond.

See spoiler for further details

Spoiler

If Barry starts with Piplup, Lucas will have Chimchar and Dawn will have Turtwig

If Barry starts with Chimchar, Lucas will have Turtwig and Dawn will have Piplup

If Barry starts with Turtwig, Lucas will have Piplup and Dawn will have Chimchar

Hope this helps

If you're unsure about what Pokemon he's supposed to catch, just check 'pedia, you'll be able to get all sorts of useful information on Barry that'll help you write your story.

The way you write a table of contents is simple, click spoiler for more details (don't want to make this post even longer than it already is)

Spoiler

Write (url=link to appropriate chapter)Chapter Name/Number (/url) but replace curved brackets with square

for instance, this chapter would be (url=http://bmgf.bulbagarden.net/showpost.php?p=1689927&postcount=1)Chapter One(/url), which, when replaced with square brackets, looks like so:

Chapter One

Hope this helps too.

As for the story, I like it. At one point you say 'taken' where it should say 'taking'. I really like the characterisation of Barry and Lucas, I can really feel their personalities. I'm looking forward to seeing more! I'm hoping you can get the whole of the time that Lucas accompanies done with in the next chapter and maybe include some unadulterated Barry time!

Thanks a million mate for all the info! Also thanks for the review and help. I've decided on the starter Barry will get. Anyway thanks again!

 

[Yumega]

Re: Barry's Story

Guys, for anyone that cares, I can't post chapter three until next week because this week is exam week :O
But I managed to finish Chapter two tonight and so here it is!

It's pretty long but I really enjoyed writing it. I always had a feeling that Dawn and Barry didn't get along and that's exsactly what I try to show in this chapter. So here it is;

Chapter two- The first battle​

For Barry time seemed to slow down then. He could see the Starly, their wings outstretched, preparing to attack. They had been fooled once already and weren’t prepared to fall for the same trick twice. They had now flown lower; the two boys couldn’t go under or over. In Barry’s head he could only see two seconds before impact. But he wasn’t letting the wild Pokémon stop him. Not here, not now! He had to do something!
But what…?

‘Piplup, hurry, bubble beam!’ There was that female voice again! But who?!

Lucas turned to see a small blue penguin like Pokémon waddle towards them. It opened its beak and shot out a long, blue beam of bubbles.

Barry watched as the Starly cried out and began to flee, colliding into each other. Somehow the Starly had been scared off by…bubbles? With one last flap of their wings the Starly scurried away into the sky.

Barry stayed speechless for a second before suddenly yelling out, ‘Yeah you better run! One step closer and I would have kicked your-’

‘Barry,’ hissed Lucas before gesturing with his head in the direction of the two people behind them.

Barry pointed a finger towards the old man as if it was his fault that the Starly had attacked them. ‘You! You’re Professor Rowan, aren’t you?’

Rowan grunted before turning to the girl beside him. Barry glanced at her for a moment. She wore a red coat buttoned to her neck with a thick, white scarf. She carried a white bag over her shoulder and on her right arm was some sort of digital watch. On her head was a ridiculous white hat and her hair was long and black, going down past her shoulders. She couldn’t be any older than me, thought Barry and she must be the owner of the Piplup. This hunch was confirmed when she bent down and picked the small, blue bird up off the ground and return it to a small red and white orb that she got from her bag. That must be a Pokéball thought Barry, the place where Pokémon are help. Pokémon! Pokémon professor! Rowan…

Barry opened his mouth to say something to the old man but the Professor merely held out his hand, indicating that Barry should stay quiet, which was one of the many things that Barry hated.

Instead the professor began talking to the girl.

‘Thank you Dawn because I’m afraid that if it wasn’t for you these young boys would have been Pokémon food!’ The professor turned to Barry and Lucas. ‘What are your names?’

Worried that Barry might say something he could regret Lucas answered, ‘I’m Lucas and this is Barry,’

The girl, Dawn, began blushing at the praise and Barry felt his face burning. How dare him! Pokémon food?! Ha!

Barry’s patience was small and he had a temper. Without knowing it he blurted out, ‘No we wouldn’t be turned into Pokémon food. I…err….I mean we had everything under control!’ This time it was Lucas’s time to go red. For some reason he felt responsible for Barry’s behavior and the rudeness to such an important elder was ten times worse.

Rowan grunted again. Didn’t Barry deserve a proper answer?! This dude had an attitude problem. But finally the old man began talking. No, not talking; ranting.

‘You two don’t seem to have any Pokémon between you? Then what is the meaning of running off into tall grass?! What were you thinking? Don’t you know that Pokémon are everywhere and without any to protect you then you will get attacked. The Starly incident is a great example of this! What you two did was stupid!’

The professor began mumbling to himself and Lucas decided it was time to step in.

‘Umm…Rowan, sir? I admit that what we did was wrong. But we were just trying to get to Sandgem town where we thought you were. You see we just wanted Pokémon and we thought maybe you could give us one,’ Lucas finished and looked up at the man. His eyes were closed, deep in thought. Was he even listening? Barry tried to keep his cool as the man still thought silently. Then he began mumbling to Dawn and the two boys managed to catch some parts of the conversation.

‘…..They tried to go into the tall grass because they wanted Pokémon…..Hmmm….What to do? Their world would surely change if they were to meet Pokémon…..Is it right for me to put them on that path….?’

Lucas nudged Barry.
‘What were you doing back there, mate? You have to watch what you say round this guy,’ he whispered. Barry nodded.

‘Yeah I know that! But he was really annoying me! I just lost my cool for a second,’ Barry whispered back.

‘You’re telling me!’

‘…..A pair of reckless kids who foolishly try to enter Pokémon habitats without Pokémon of their own….!’

Barry heard Dawn say something, ‘It really looks like it was Barry’s fault anyway. It worries me what someone like that would do to Pokémon. ’ Barry cringed and the small amount of popularity he had felt for Dawn shattered. But for the sake of the argument he stayed quiet and stared at the ground, silently wishing Dawn would piss off. But then he had an idea.

He quickly blurted out, ‘…Uh…Well, I uh… … …Well, then forget about me, but please give a Pokémon to my friend here. It was my fault anyway. He tried to stop me and when I fell he was just trying to save me...’

While Lucas blushed Rowan grunted again but Barry could see a small smile appear on the old man’s face. Maybe there was still hope.

‘How big of you! Well I do have three Pokémon with me,’ the professor said, nodding towards a brown briefcase beside him. ‘And back at the lab we have just finished studying them. Maybe I could part with them to rookie trainers if I knew that they would treat them with care!’

Barry’s heart skipped a beat. He was so close. But something the Man said worried him. Could he just pick up a Pokéball and become a Pokémon trainer. No. There was something else. Something every trainer needed. A….Trainer card!

It seemed that Lucas had been wondering the same thing because he said, ‘But sir, don’t we need a trainer card to become a trainer?’

‘Yes and no,’ the man mumbled. ‘But as a Pokémon professor I can give you a Pokémon as a temporary test drive. See how you cope with them, and more importantly; how they cope with you! Then if you reach Sandgem town I could set you boys up with trainer cards.’

Barry grinned. Yes! This was going good. But then Dawn had to butt in,

‘Professor, that’s putting a lot of trust in these boys! What if the Pokémon end up hurt, or worse, dead?!’
Damn it! Why was this girl so interested in stopping me getting a Pokémon, Barry thought angrily.
‘I know what I’m doing, Dawn,’ the professor said firmly before turning to the boys. ‘You two! You truly love Pokémon don’t you?’

Lucas opened his mouth to reply but Barry jumped in. ‘Huh? You could ask a hundred times! The answer will never change! We both love Pokémon. Right, Lucas?!’

Lucas hurriedly replied, ‘yeah!’

Rowan grunted once more before snapping the buttons on his briefcase. With a click the case opened revealing loose documents and folders. But there, on top of these things sat three red and white Pokéballs, within touching distance. Barry resisted the temptation to reach out and grab one. This was it! After twelve long years of waiting he was finally here.

‘Very well,’ nodded Rowan his voice cutting through Barry’s dream. ‘I will entrust you two with Pokémon! I apologize for putting you through that exercise. However! You must promise me that you will never recklessly endanger yourselves again. Now, then…’

‘Sir, those Pokémon are hard to replace. Are you sure about giving them away,’ asked Dawn.

Barry now felt a strong hatred towards Dawn. What the hell did she know?! What an annoying little girl!

‘Hm! We exist side by side with Pokémon,’ the professor continued. ‘There comes a time when people should meet Pokémon. There is a world that should be explored together. For them, today is that time. Right here! Right now!’ For once Dawn fell silent. Ha! That showed her!

Barry really wasn’t listening (though he could see Lucas appeared to be more than interested in what the man was saying) he was busy staring at the three spheres. His heart was pounding. This was really it! Barry was shocked when Rowan coughed noisily, sending Barry into panic. He quick stood up straight and looked at the old man.

Rowan nodded. ‘Now boys. You can both choose a Pokémon! Choose carefully. Don’t just go with the one you think is the strongest! Pokémon are your friends so you should pick the one that you feel you bond with best!’ And with that the old man bent down and pressed the buttons on each of the Pokéballs.

Click!

‘Really, Professor?! Wow!’ Barry was actually shaking with excitement! And the click set off something in his head. He found himself with his eyes closed. Yes! His dream was finally becoming a reality. He opened his eyes and seen the three Pokémon stare up at him, their facial expression showed confusion. Barry inspected the trio.

First there was a piplup, like the one the know it all Dawn owned. It looked quite strong with its sharp beak and it also looked quite cool with its awesome ‘cool blue’ coloring. Barry bent down to stroke the small bird.

The small water type didn’t like this however and it quickly pecked Barry sharply on his hand.

‘ARGGH,’ Barry moaned, clutching his hand and sucking the small cut. ‘Damn it!’

He realized that Dawn was laughing and anger boiled inside him. Well forget her. Obviously the Piplup wasn’t best for Barry.

His attention was picked up by a small green turtle with what looked like a small seedling on its large head. Barry knew it as the rare grass type Turtwig. Unlike the Piplup this Pokémon looked friendlier it actually put its green head on Barry’s knee, it’s large eyes shining,. Barry took this as an act of affection and patted the grass type on its surprisingly smooth head before harmlessly flicking the small tree like plant. The Turtwig made a loud sneezing like noise and began to shake, chuckling. …weird.

Finally there was a fire type. It was the only Pokémon out of the three that Barry hadn’t seen before. It was orange for a start and rather small. It sat hunched in the grass, staring at Barry with big, white eyes. Barry noticed that it had a small flame on its back almost like a tail. It had a strange swirly pattern on its stomach and when Barry reached out to pet the small fire type it took it as an invitation to climb onto Barry’s body. It quickly hopped onto his arm and scampered onto his shoulder and began to play with his blonde hair.

Barry grinned and looked up at the Professor. ‘What’s his name,’ he asked as he had noticed the Pokémon was a boy. Obviously the Pokémon was playful as it climbed onto Barry’s head and covered his eyes while giggling hysterically.

‘That is Chimchar, a playful fire type Pokémon,’ Rowan said. ‘It seems to like you, Barry.’

Barry picked Chimchar off his head and put him onto the ground again. The small Pokémon seemed a little hurt at this but ran back to the trio where Lucas was now petting the Turtwig on its shell. Barry noticed that Dawn and Lucas were talking, deep in a conversation. She was probably gloating about something or other thought Barry, miserably. It seemed like it was the only

thing she was good for.
Lucas seemed to have an interest in the Turtwig so Barry said,

‘Hey, Lucas. You can choose first!’
Lucas raised an eyebrow at Barry and began laughing.

‘Hey,’ protested Barry. ‘I’m practically a grown up. I have to show some class here.’

This made Lucas laugh even more and Barry couldn’t help seeing the funny side also. He chuckled before adding, ‘seriously, though. You choose first.’

He immediately regretted it. What if Lucas chose Chimchar?! It was easily Barry’s favorite out of the three and it was the only one that he felt particularly close to. It had to be his! Luckily Lucas smiled.

‘I’m going with Turtwig,’ Lucas nodded.

‘Good choice,’ blurted Dawn and she began talking to Lucas again. Stuff her, Barry thought. She obviously enjoyed sucking up to Lucas!
‘And you, Barry,’ grunted Rowan.

There really was no question about it. ‘I choose Chimchar,’ Barry grinned.

At the sound of his name Chimchar crawled over and began climbing Barry’s leg. Barry picked up the small Pokémon and realized that this was his. Chimchar smiled at Barry before pulling at his nose.

‘Then it’s decided,’ mumbled the Professor as he bent down and handed over a Pokéball to the boys. Barry stared at the sphere for a long time and timidly hit the small button on the middle.

Pop!

The ball opened and a red beam of light emitted, wrapping itself around Chimchar. It then began to return to the ball and Barry gasped as the Ball snapped shut with a sharp click.
‘Where did he go,’ panicked Barry as he looked at the old man in puzzlement.

‘It’s a Pokéball,’ explained Dawn, deliberately saying each word slowly. ‘It’s where a Pokémon lives.’
Barry felt a strong urge to toss the Pokéball at the girl’s head. Why did she have to be so superior all the time?

‘Very well! Both of you have chosen a good Pokémon, it seems,’ said Professor Rowan. ‘Now listen well! The Pokémon you have been entrusted with are unfamiliar with the world. In that regard, they're much like you. As fellow newcomers to the world, I hope you'll do well together! But remember to treat them both well. Come and meet me in my lab in Sandgem town tomorrow and I’ll give you trainer cards. Now I must be off. Come along, Dawn. Professor Elm will be wondering what’s taking us so long back at the lab. He will be wondering where we went off too!’

And with that, the professor walked away, with Dawn behind him.
‘Goodbye, Lucas,’ she called and then began to jog after the old man who was surprisingly fast at walking.

Barry glared after her. But enough with her. It was Lucas he was more interested in.

‘Did that really happen,’ muttered Lucas as he stared down at his Turtwig.

‘Yeah I know,’ said Barry. ‘That Rowan guy’s actually easy going. On TV he looked so…stern.’

Barry once again looked at the Pokéball in his hand where he knew his Chimchar was inside. I wonder what he does in there, he thought. But he was about to come out of his Pokéball. Barry knew that. He knew that after twelve years of waiting he was going to be in a Pokémon battle. Right now.
He smirked at Lucas and Lucas knew exactly what was coming.
‘Lucas! I’ve always wanted to say this,’ exclaimed Barry, his heart thumping. ‘But now it’s actually happening! We’ve both got Pokémon now! Lucas! I challenge you to a battle!’

Finally he pressed the button on his Pokéball and tossed it into the air and watched as it got the light off the morning sun. It landed, and with a click it burst open in a flash of white light.

Barry's first Pokémon battle was under way.
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[Gama]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

Nice chapter. There were a couple of iffy bits like what remaining popularity he had of her or something like that. That doesn't really make sense, popularity is the wrong word, I can't think of the correct one off of the top of my head, but it's definitely not popularity.

I was hoping Barry would start with Chimchar, which means that between me, you and Ryuutakeshi, the trainers in the three existing rival's stories, all start with the same pokemon as their manga counterparts! (Green/Blue - Charmander, Silver/Dante - Totodile and Diamond/Barry - Chimchar)


Anyway, I like this chapter, but more than anything I'm looking forward to Barry and Lucas splitting up, I'm sure it'll be much more interesting then.

Good luck with your exams.

 

[SSJ3_Raditz]

Re: Barry's Story

Ah, another Rival's Story has been born, I believe this is the third. That is with mine, the story of Blue, as the first and Ryuutakeshi's, the story of Silver AKA Dante, as the second.

I should start making one for May. (y'know who she is.) :ksmile:

The collection of fics involving the rival would be complete.

Anyways, on-topic, I like this fic. Sometimes you misspell stuff though.

 

[Kimori-Hinoarashi]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

This is great! I always knew that Dawn hated Barry... I can't wiat to see the battle!

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

Nice chapter. There were a couple of iffy bits like what remaining popularity he had of her or something like that. That doesn't really make sense, popularity is the wrong word, I can't think of the correct one off of the top of my head, but it's definitely not popularity.

Yeah I didn't actually know what to put there. But I'll fix it in a few minutes.

I was hoping Barry would start with Chimchar, which means that between me, you and Ryuutakeshi, the trainers in the three existing rival's stories, all start with the same pokemon as their manga counterparts!

I actually looked to the manga on what to choose for the starter and I seen he had an infernape. Also, notice the rivals all have a starter that used scratch....I think. I don't know much about May (never did play the game she was in) so I could be wrong and maybe she doesn't even have a manga counterpart. :/

Anyway, I like this chapter, but more than anything I'm looking forward to Barry and Lucas splitting up, I'm sure it'll be much more interesting then.

Then you will like the next chpater It's the last one when Lucas and Barry are together.

Good luck with your exams.

Thanks I finished them on Friday but then I couldn't get the time to write the next chapter (I had to go down south and I got Super Mario Galaxy 2 XD) But it should be up buy the end of the week.

Anyways, on-topic, I like this fic. Sometimes you misspell stuff though.

Thanks, I like your fic btw And I'm working on the spelling.

This is great! I always knew that Dawn hated Barry... I can't wiat to see the battle!

Thanks a million and I'm glad you thought that too. Dawn will be a big part in the fic, likely to actually make a bigger role than Lucas XD. I'm also a fan off your fic also. ;D

 

[Wheels]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

I like the fic so far - hope you continue.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

I like the fic so far - hope you continue.

Thanks mate And yeah I'm continuing. I've written the battle (I did that weeks ago) but honestly anything after that sucked so I'm re-writing anything after the battle. Also I'm back from a cruise and between life and holidays I've actually had very little time to write. But I'm back now so I can safely say that a chapter will be up by the end of the week. (I'm working on it now, actually)

 

[Ranger Jack Walker]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

Great, we have another fanfic telling the story from the rival's side. All we need is one for Brendan/May and we're complete.

I like this. Its quite good.

 

[Der_Neuevenmenschen]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

9/10. Good fic. Now I want something portraying Team Galactic in a more sympathetic light.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

9/10. Good fic. Now I want something portraying Team Galactic in a more sympathetic light.

Well team galactic will be there (they have to be, and you would know why if you played d/p/pl) but there is a whole new made up enemy that I plan to put into the story.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 2 Up)

Well guys I'm afraid that this week has been hectic to say the least. Let's just say I have a virus on my laptop. Yes, honeslty I do. Everthing gone? Almost.
I'm now having to use my dad's laptop and my writing has been slowed down. I've resecently finished the battle in chapter 3 but I also planed to write more. Bu because of my delay It could be a whil before I get the chapter done in full so I'm cutting it in half: chapter three will only contain the first battle.
The good news is that Chapter three is here, though a little shorter than planed, But it's still there. Enjoy ;D

Chapter three- An early lead?​

Barry realised that he should have made his opening line more epic. In truth he had wanted something slow and dramatic like he had imagined every day of his life; but when Chimchar’s Pokéball opened with a click and a great bright white light flashed around it he had never felt happier.

The small ‘chimp’ Pokémon appeared from the ball of light and Barry was surprised to see the red and white sphere click shut on it’s on and fly through the air, aiming at Barry’s own hand. Surprised and shocked, Barry clumsily caught the ball, and stared down dumbly at it. Chimchar seemed to also be surprised at the Pokéball randomly shooting through the air and Barry could see Lucas staring wide-eyed at it, as if it might explode.

In his head Barry tried to remember what he read in a book Lucas had bought him for his tenth birthday. It was called ‘Pokémon and Pokéballs for dummies’. He remembered reading about Pokéballs having the power to register the trainer’s aura inside them and link both the trainer and the Pokémon to the Pokéball. In this case the Pokémon was Chimchar and the trainer was Barry. Now that Chimchar was his, so was the Pokéball and could respond to Barry’s commands through his thoughts. This excited Barry and he put the Pokéball into his jacket pocket and turned to Chimchar.

The fire type seemed to be ready for the battle and it faced Lucas and Turtwig, confident and waiting. Barry smiled at his new partner. Now it was time for the battle.

‘Right, Lucas get ready because the battle starts now,’ grinned Barry. He nodded at Chimchar. Here goes nothing he thought.

“....It is up to the trainer to decide what moves a Pokémon should know or pull off. This does not mean that you just ask a bulbasaur to use the move fly for example. Although a Pokémon will learn moves themselves they also need help from their trainers, especially the younger ones. Think, could my Pokémon pull off a tackle attack or does it have the build for something else like a pound. Remember not to expect too much from a Pokémon and take things slowly one thing at a time. If your Pokémon evolves then you could maybe expect a stronger move to come from your Pokémon for example instead of tackle maybe a takedown attack instead. Do not push your Pokémon too hard. You may get better results but your Pokémon will become distant or even dislike you if you don’t treat them well. Remember to encourage and praise your Pokémon. A happy Pokémon will perform better for their trainer if they share a bond. It’s up to the Trainer and the Pokémon to establish that bond together....”
Extract from ‘Pokémon and Pokéballs for Dummies’

Barry remembered this passage well and decided he could use it for this battle. Judging by Chimchar’s body shape a tackle wouldn’t be very effective. But on the other hand, Chimchar had claws; perfect for scratching something with.

‘Right, Chimchar let’s see a Scratch attack,’ said Barry, smiling at his new friend. This seemed to be like second nature to Chimchar as he too smiled and quickly scampered over to Turtwig, his claws at the ready. He quickly scratched once, sharply at Turtwig’s head. The tiny leaf Pokémon jumped back briefly before Lucas cried, ‘Turtwig Tackle Chimchar!’

Obviously Lucas wasn’t slow either; he had come to the conclusion that Turtwig could pull off a powerful tackle attack and this seemed to be true. Turtwig ran into Chimchar with enough force to not only send him on his back, but also into a small pile of snow, sending clumps of the white powder everywhere.

‘That one hurt,’ gasped Barry in awe. It seemed Chimchar’s speed was higher than Turtwig who was a slow mover but obviously a high attacker.
Chimchar seemed a little taken back by the attack but quickly pulled himself to his feet. The chimp Pokémon had landed under a tree and this gave Barry an idea. Quick as a flash he called, ‘Chimchar climb that tree!’

The fire type smirked before scrambling up the thick old willow. Wild Combee scattered when the small Pokémon reached the top but Chimchar wasn’t put off and began to shimmy over a thin branch overlooking the two trainers and Turtwig. The chimp Pokémon wasn’t fond of heights and suddenly felt panic explode inside him; but he wanted to show Barry how much he was worth; what he good do.

‘Turtwig, ram that tree,’ ordered Lucas and to Barry’s dismay the Pokémon obeyed. It ran back a few meters before attacking, its whole body slamming against the tree. With a crack it began to shake and Barry gulped when he seen Chimchar’s tiny body tremble with fright. But he had to think; Turtwig was lining up for another tackle. Damn it, this wasn’t going his way. But he had to focus on keeping Chimchar on that tree until Turtwig tuckered out. But as the grass type slammed again he could tell this wasn’t happening any time soon.

If Barry felt scared on the ground he had nothing on Chimchar. The small Pokémon felt like he was going to fall to his death and he cried out, clinging to the tree for dear life.
Lucas too seemed worried. Though he wanted to win the battle he also had no intention on scaring Chimchar and he realised that that was exactly what was happening. However, he didn’t have to call Turtwig off, Chimchar beat him too it.

The frightened fire type was scared but still managed to stare at his opponent and slowly narrowed his eyes. This seemed to have an immediate effect on the tiny leaf Pokémon and it suddenly tried to stop running and skidded, showering anything around it with dirt and snow. The grass type stood, its eyes fixed on Chimchar, its mouth in the expression of fear. Barry grinned proudly; it looked like the fire type had just pulled off a perfect leer attack. Chimchar (his eyes still narrowed) crawled over a branch to see the results of his handiwork and true enough Turtwig was still frozen to the ground. But Chimchar’s happiness didn’t last as with a sharp crack the branch he was on snapped and down he fell, crying in fright.

Barry gasped. Holy frick on a stick, he thought as Chimchar plummeted to the ground. With a dull thump Chimchar fell into a small pile of snow and leaves. Turtwig suddenly ran to the pile and tried to help Chimchar by dragging the small Pokémon from the pile as Lucas and Barry sprinted over to help. Barry feared to worst but was relieved to find Chimchar shaken but otherwise okay.
‘You all right, buddy,’ he asked despairingly as he lifted up his new friend. Chimchar nodded enthusiastically and he jumped to his feet, preparing to continue the battle. Barry smiled; it was time to use both leer and scratch combined with Chimchar’s speed to win this battle.

‘Right, Chimchar, let’s use Scratch,’ he cried getting into the spirit of the battle once more.
Chimchar again used his speed to his advantage and ambled towards Turtwig, its claws at the ready.
‘Turtwig, protect yourself,’ Exclaimed Lucas.
Both Chimchar and his trainer took this as an empty threat and Chimchar continued going further. But as he finally reached the Grass Pokémon Turtwig quickly retreated inside his shell, leaving nothing outside. The Chimp Pokémon’s claw came down on the brown shield but seemed to do nothing at all.

Barry cursed under his breath; Lucas wasn’t slow when it came to tactics either.
‘Now use Tackle,’ commanded Lucas and Turtwig obeyed, it’s head and legs appearing from its new protection and rammed Chimchar sending the chimp Pokémon back a few paces.
‘What in the...?’ Chimchar had already taken serious damage without inflicting much on Turtwig. If he had been watching this battle on TV Barry would have already thought of the grass type as the winner but now that he was actually battling he felt like he could pull anything off. ‘This is where we hit our stride,’ he said to no one in particular and pointed at his Pokémon. ‘Quick, Chimchar let’s go through with a scratch attack again’

Chimchar successfully managed to scratch Turtwig’s head (which seemed to be the only weak point on the Pokémon’s body) and he recoiled in pain. But Barry’s victory was short lived as Lucas continued with another order for Turtwig.

‘Let’s finish this, Turtwig! Tackle!’

‘No! Jump and Scratch Chimchar!’

Chimchar jumped over the tiny leaf Pokémon and scratched once more. To Barry, the attack seemed critical. And it was. The grass type suddenly seemed exhausted and weak; it’s stumpy legs close to buckling. Barry was surprised at how much one attack can change something. But then he remembered that Chimchar was really not exactly on full health. Could the next move end the battle? Barry felt a rush of adrenalin that he couldn’t almost control.

‘Turtwig, tackle!’

‘Chimchar, leer!’

‘Withdraw!’

‘Scratch!’

And it was all over. There, panting in the snow was Chimchar, his eyes almost closed. But he was still hanging on; unlike Turtwig. The grass type was spread out in the snow with it’s head poking out of it’s shell, it had fainted.

‘YEEEEES,’ Barry cheered and ran to meet his Pokémon. ‘You were awesome mate!’ And that’s when it hit him; like a ton of bricks.
HE had just won his first ever Pokémon battle. He had just made the first step towards being a champion and HE was now a Pokémon trainer. The grin on Barry’s face widened at the thought of it all. God, He thought. How could something so big happen in one morning.

Lucas also seemed oddly happy; but Barry always remembered his friend as a bit of an optimist. With a smile on his face, Lucas returned Turtwig to his Pokéball. ‘You did great, Turtwig,’ he chirped.

Chimchar was knackered so with another ‘good lob,’ Barry returned him to the red and white sphere before slumping down in the snow. Despite his win, his adrenalin rush had ended rather quickly and he too felt tired.

‘Whew! I’m heading home, Lucas. I’m beat after that battle,’ he yawned and jumped to his feet. ‘Chimchar needs rest, too. See ya, Lucas!’
‘Right, Barry. I’ll see yo-’ again Lucas felt his sentence trail off; Barry was already heading back to Twinleaf town.

 

[Marik]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

That last paragragh fits Barry's personality perfectly. I liked the battle, and the creativity for the moves that Chimchar and Turtwig used.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

That last paragragh fits Barry's personality perfectly. I liked the battle, and the creativity for the moves that Chimchar and Turtwig used.

Thanks mate

Anyway I edited the post a bit. Changing some words AND I forgot to put in Italics. Anyway it's fixed now :-D

 

[Wheels]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

Holy frick on a stick is right, nice chapter. By the way, out of curiosity, which starter did you pick in D/P/Pl? I went with Turtwig, Torterra was too good to pass up.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

I had one of each game and I only knew what Chimchar's final form was.
I had Piplup in Diamond (my first game before I got pearl and before plat came out) and it as great as a prinplup. then it evolved and I wanted to thro my DS at the wall. Honestly part steel?! Yuck! No Infernape could pwn me! Two of steels weaknesses were given to two of the starters as secodary types... I released Empoleon btw.
But yeah, I played pearl with Turtwig and when Plat came out I breeded and sent a turtwig over so I had two staters ;D

 

[Jabberjaw]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

I like what I've read. But you might want to correct a small error or 2.

"made it the place were some fairytales where based on."

Don't mean to be nit-picking. Just trying to help.

"Barry realised that he should have made his opening line more epic."

This line alone made it worth reading. This is seriously something he would think. I didn't notice the slight mispelling, but I re-read that part a couple times.

 

[Yumega]

Re: -Barry's Story-(Chapter 3 is up)

I like what I've read. But you might want to correct a small error or 2.

"made it the place were some fairytales where based on."

Don't mean to be nit-picking. Just trying to help.

"Barry realised that he should have made his opening line more epic."

This line alone made it worth reading. This is seriously something he would think. I didn't notice the slight mispelling, but I re-read that part a couple times.

Thanks much, editing it now. Honestly thanks for pointing that out mate.

For all who care, I'm adding the finishing touches to chapter four now. Should be up very soon