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Book 1-Chapter 1

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Hi everybody!I've always dreamed of becoming an author and making series that everybody wants to read.I'lll start of hear and make a series.I hope everybody will like it!!!!

Book 1-


PROLOGUE
It swirled above and the clouds turned dark and gloomy,full of anger.The dragon roared of anger and distress.It was frantically searching for something...or someone.The dragon bursted out of the clouds and flew away,deciding it would be best to search elsewhere where it wouldn't be seen.It's green,long body flew towards the moon and disappeared...


Chapter 1-Dragon of the Sky

Emerald woke up and gently touched his forehead.
"Good,it's still there...."Emerald sighed.He always had a beautiful green diamnd on his forehead and he did not want it stolen.He stared out the window and Crystal was standing by the table she and the others would hang out at.He smiled and ran downstairs.
"Gold!Hey,Gold!"Crystal waved her hands wildly.Gold glanced at her and jogged over.
"You seen the others?"Gold asked.Crystal nodded.
"Yeah,they are coming out in a bit."Crystal's face light up.
Emerald ran out and stared at Crystal.She smiled and Emerald thought of the sweet dream he had one night....He was suddenly shook.All of the others walked past him;Emerald suddenly felt so insignificant.Yellow walked past last and she glanced at Emerald.
"C'mon Emerald-You're part of the group!"she smiled and motioned for Emerald to come over.Emerald had a look of hope on his face and smiled faintly.He walked over and sat by Crystal.Yellow wlaked back over,sitting by Green.
"Did you guys see that thing fly past the sky?"Sapphire asked.Emerald stared at her curiously.
"What thing?"Green asked.Sapphire glared at her.
"You should know exactly what I mean."Sapphire retorted.Green loooked taken aback,but she moved on.
"You...saw something..?Are you sure,Sapph?"Ruby asked.Sapphire did a facepalm.
"I saw....a....um.....green dragon..."Sapphire said.Red's eyes widened.
"........Ray...quaza...?"Blue asked.Sapphire nodded slowly.
"I'm pretty sure it is that now...."Sapphire said.Emerald touched his green diamond again.Rayquaza was sounding oddly familiar....
"I'm pretty sure it's just a coincidence."Platnium said.Pearl stared at her and Diamond munched on a slice of bread.
"..Are you...sure,Platnium?"Pearl asked.Platnium nodded firmily.
"Rayquaza belongs in Hoenn..not Sinnoh."Platnium said.Pearl thought about this for a moment.
"But Mew travels everywhere...."Red said.Blue,Green and Yellow stared at him.Yellow nodded.
"That's true..."she said.Silver looked at Yellow quickly.
"I guess Red is right.."Platnium said.Sapphire jumped back into the conversation.
"So it is Rayquaza!!!!"she said.She jumped up and ran towards the woods,only to run into a girl.
"Ouch!"Sapphire yelled,rubbing her head."I'm so sorry.."Sapphire said to the girl.The girl laughed.
"Sapphire!"the girl said,laughing.
"Uh...?"Sapphire looked up and she looked into the face of White.Sapphire ooked flushed.
"Oh....er heh heh heh...."Sapphire tried to make any excuse of not noticing White.Black walked up and looked at Sapphire.
"Cat caught your tongue?"Sapphire nodded.
"Yeah,it did..."Sapphire walked away,trying to forget what just happened.Ruby stared at her,watching her disappear into the forest.
"Discussion over now,I guess."Green said.Blue nodded and he got up.
"I'm going to go get a coffee."he said,walking away.Yellow and Red looked at each other and nodded,running after Blue.Green sighed and slammed her fist on the table.
"They always forget me..."Green said,giggling.Silver stared at her in amazement and Crystal layed her head down..Emerald looked at her.
"Are you OK?he asked.
"Yeah...I am.."Crystal said,nearly asleep.Black and White walked over,sitting down near Silver and Green.
"Did we miss anything important?"White asked.
"Nope-just talking about the now suspected Rayquaza."Green said.
"Oh..."White said.She looked at Black.
"I guess this canges everything now,doesn't it?"Black asked.
"Yeah...I guess it does..."White said.


Did you guys like it?I ran out of ideas a few times....Anyways,hope you liked it! =D


~Yellow of Viridian
 
Firstly, you really need to space out your sentences. it's all in one hunk of text that I'm finding difficult to read.
Also, in the beginning, with the dragon part. THe prologue. Couldn't you add a bit more detail in there? I mean, the long-green part is kind of a dead giveaway, but still, you could have said more about what the dragon was doing and how it felt.
As for the actual part, can you try and describe the characters more? ALl we know about one character is that he has an emerald in his forehead. You need to le the reader visualize more!
I really like the idea though! It's quite an interesting little story that I'm sure will go far!
 
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