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[PokeBlake]

I wrote this story on Pokemon Black & White. Some feedback would be greatly appreciated.

STORY!

Thanks everybody!

 

[Faye Scarlet]

Well, it's nice, but I don't think this is the place for this. ^^;

 

[Pyrax]

Well, it's spelled Mewtwo.
And the guy you battled was Red.

 

[Pidgeot]

First up, this isn't the place. Secondly, how is it a story?

 

[IceBlue]

Oooh. I wanna play Heart Hold.


Let's proofread next time.

 

[Somari]

"Ash Katchum"? First of all, it's "Ash Ketchum". Next, the games clearly state, broad as daylight, "Red".

 

[Farfetched]

I agree, even though this is a gen. V thingy whatever. I think you should place this in the Video Game forum. Maybe?

 

[Apex]

Also, it's going out for the Nintendo DS. How many times do people have to say that? 382946234638729 times?

 

[IceBlue]

Also, it's going out for the Nintendo DS. How many times do people have to say that? 382946234638729 times?

I think 382,946,234,639,730 times would be enough.

 

[Quilt]

Why is this here anyway? But I should go hunt forum trolls. *ducks in bush*