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TEEN: - Ongoing Clipped Wings of Youth(PG, maybe PG-13 later, violence)

Jarreddo

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Yes, newbie to this site, but some *glances at TPMers* may know me. Not that I've written anything worth remembering. This is my fanfic, I'd like to think it's not crap but I'm probably delusional. Can't think of anything else to say, really... It's more based off the games rather than the anime, except for Pokemon talking to eachother and Meowths walking like humans. There are NO characters from the games or anime in this fic.

Table of Contents/Timetable
2/28-Chapter 1 posted
3/04-Chapter 2 posted
3/18-Chapter 3 posted
5/1-Chapter 4 posted

-----~=Chapter 1=~-----

Sharp eyes looked down on the conference, watching for anything suspicious... The one known as Skee, owner of the eyes, looked over every last politician attending the peace meetings with complete disinterest. He'd looked at them all hundreds of times before. A giant mass of Pokemon ranging from miniscule to gargantuan had been arranged in rows based on size. Dozens of lesser diplomats composed most of the group, but a few were very well-known. Not many people, and certainly not the Pidgeotto on guard duty this time around, could easily identify any of the Kedkedek delegates, but the lead minds here from each of the other nations stood out easily. He looked at the sleek, shimmering Miss Mizuumi, a beautiful almost snakelike Vaporeon whose tail waved back and forth slowly. Also obvious to anyone was General Kataku, whose dull grey armor plates and hard features looked threatening even at a peace conference. The drill on his nose spun slowly, counting the seconds this went on.

'Damn those militaristic Haichuru', Skee thought bitterly. His eyes wandered from there up to the podium, where the last leader stood. A small clump of vines, with absurd-looking Human shoes holding it up, and a pair of mysterious eyes peering out. This was Clom Ivee, the head of these talks. The choice was obvious. Though Tangela lacked strength physically and mentally, they were adept at rhetoric. Rather ironic since the old question of whether or not they even had mouths was still unanswered, but it was the undebated truth. Their Psychic voices were extremely beautiful, the words flowing through the listener's mind like a stream. They were also more convincing than most, as a Pokemon not used to Psychics would be more likely to listen to a voice coming from inside their mind than any influences external.

Skee paused for a moment to listen to the speech. He'd tuned it out earlier as unimportant, so he had no idea what point Clom was going over now. '...and anyone who decides that trampling a peaceful region with their foolish power struggle should not be trusted to make such decisions! It is imperative that...' So, he was still trying to keep them from marching through Trey. The Pidgeotto doubted that was still possible. All this really was, was stalling. Or perhaps not, Skee thought, it wasn't like he knew much about politics. His job was just to protect people.

But not in the military. No, he had no symbolic indication of rank, no real combat training. He was a bodyguard. Protecting Clom Ivee, that was his job. But so far there had been no signs that anything was going to happen. It was hard to tell there was strong tension under the surface, as soldiers of the North and East gathered near their respective borders.

Best not to think about that while people like Clom fought so hard to stop it, Skee thought. Everyone in Trey was doing their best to keep it off their minds...

Glancing around the room again, the bird looked at the architecture. It was somewhat funny, right after the humans were overthrown most Pokemon had been against buildings of any kind. There were plenty of buildings now, but most were based off of some element of nature. This stone structure was built like a clearing in a forest, with the ceiling painstakingly carved with thousands of individual branches and held up with uneven pillars made to look like tree trunks. Hundreds of holes had even been put in the ceiling, giving the appearance of sunlight filtered through the treetops. The rows of seats were formed by roots, and the podium was in the shape of a small elm sapling. The only thing unnatural-looking about the room was the large banners draped from the ceiling, a symbol of Pokemon unity painstakingly embroidered in to each.

The colors of that symbol had always confused him. He'd heard they were chosen because it was a combination the humans had never used, but he couldn't be the only one to see the irony...The four colors that made up the symbol were red, black, blue, and green. The same colors associated with hatred, deceit, sadness and envy, all together on the symbol shown at every international event.

The colors also individually symbolized each of the four nations, and this also held extreme irony. Red was the color of Haichuru, the country that, although it was denied, obviously despised all other nations and seemingly had plans of world domination. Kedkedek, the black nation, was ruled by corrupt tyrants who made promises and alliances and then broke them without remorse. Blue symbolized Mizuke, a former world power that had been banished from the land by the Haichuru years ago. And green was for Trey, the smallest nation, which had never had power and was now caught in the middle of the Haichuru-Kedkedek power struggle.

Skee realized he was getting slightly groggy and backed away from the edge of the balcony, letting his head droop down in to the warm feathers on his shoulders. But then, he suddenly detected a strange smell, and reluctantly glanced around.

At first everything seemed normal, but then he noticed a slightly yellowish tint in the air around him. He looked closer and realized it was very fine powder falling on him. He shook it off himself and glanced upwards confusedly. He thought he saw the very tip of a blue tail disappearing in to one of the holes in the ceiling, but it was probably just his imagination. At first Skee shrugged it off and began to relax again, but then common sense hit him in the head with a random blunt object and he shook all thoughts of rest from his mind, quickly leaping up on to the railing of the balcony. Unfortunately, the leftover momentum made him lose his balance, and he opened his wings, flapping them once to get back on top of his perch. He glared down at the audience, looking for any sign that something was about to happen.

Nothing was wrong. Skee's gaze passed over every single person in the room, looking for any suspicious behavior. But nothing had changed, everyone's eyes were still passively watching the Tangela, listening to his speech. Skee glared for a moment more, determined that something had been planned. Obviously, someone had tried to keep him from interfering, though what was planned he had no idea.

Suddenly, General Kataku turned in his seat, glancing upward at the balconies. With his eagle-like vision, Skee could see sweat dripping down the stony face, and the pupils of his eyes frantically searching for movement.

'DAMN THOSE HAICHURU!' Skee yelled in his mind, whipping his head upwards. There, in the balcony opposite his, he could see a flash of rough, deep red skin... And then, in the blink of an eye, a large lizard-like creature had leapt on to the railing. It leered downwards maliciously at the podium, and its target, Clom Ivee.

Skee opened his wings and bent his legs, preparing to launch himself in to the air. But before he could jump, the Charmeleon curled its lips back in to a grin, and the Pidgeotto could see flames flickering out from between its teeth. He was too late. All he could do was watch as, seemingly in slow motion, the monstrous jaws opened. The huge flames, growing too large for the mouth, began spreading outwards. And then they were suddenly launched out, compressing in to a sphere. The strong fire-element attack shot through the air as Ivee looked up and froze, the diplomat's eyes widening. Then the flames collided with the vines, creating a burning mass of plants and flesh.

Everyone in the entire room clutched their heads in agony, most falling over, as a mental shriek pierced their minds. Even Skee and the Charmeleon, up in the balconies, were momentarily incapacitated as the pacifistic Tangela frantically rolled on the floor.

It was over in seconds. The ball of flames stopped moving and the flames began losing intensity silently. The Pidgeotto recovered quickly with one thought on his mind. Vengeance. Though he hadn't personally known Clom, the peacemaker was a very well-known pacifist and even a hero in Trey. His senses regained clarity and he glared at the assassin, shaking its head and completely oblivious. He jumped back on to the railing, once again losing his balance. But instead of righting himself, he leaned forwards, quickly slipping until he was looking directly at the floor.

The entire room was in chaos as everybody struggled to get out. Although there was no further danger, politicians feared very much for their lives. Even supposedly loving and kind Pokemon were fighting to leave. One humongous Gyarados, the closest thing the Mizuke had to a general, was doing more damage to his companions than he was helping himself. 'Egotistical fools,' Skee thought, pulling his head upwards. The Charmeleon had regained its senses, and it was watching the frenzy below with satisfaction.

Narrowing his eyes at the target, the bird kicked off the railing as hard as he could, launching himself horizontally in to the air. He unfurled his wings and began flapping quickly.

He got halfway across the wide expanse of air between the balconies before the lizard finally noticed him. Its eyes grew much like Clom Ivee's had right before his death, and Skee wondered if the Charmeleon realized the irony of this.

Unfortunately, the fire-type had instincts the Tangela did not. It jumped up, kicking off the railing and running in to a staircase leading inside one of the large tree-like pillars. Skee reluctantly followed, but then realized that the passageway, designed for smaller Pokemon, would under no circumstances fit a pair of wings.

He pulled his head back and then the top half of his body, turning his spread wings in to a parachute of sorts. Once his speed was lowered significantly, he dropped his talons to the floor, attempting to stop in front of the passage's entrance. However, as the doorway got nearer, he clawed harder and harder at the flooring, trying to stop. He skidded in front of the small doorway and turned towards it.

Then his eyes opened in shock and he began flapping his wings frantically while kicking uselessly at the floor in a blind panic. In the corridor was a rear guard for the Charmeleon, and it had been warned of his coming. Somehow crammed in the small stairway was a gigantic draconic serpent, an endless tail forming a complete wall. Its skin was constantly changing colors, but blue was always a base hue. The entire thing was constantly moving, and in one spot a hole was being filled in. A second before the gap closed Skee saw a flash of red disappearing in the direction of the lower floor, and then his entire vision was filled by the creature.

Slowly, a head emerged from the depths of the endless body. Though tiny in comparison to the long coils, it was still menacing. Cold, remorseless blue eyes peered down at its new prey, and what appeared to be a small pair of wings flared in anger. A small, spiraling horn on its forehead was lowered and aimed at the alarmed bird.

Suddenly the horn was enveloped in blue flames. The flames swirled along the grooves in the horn and grew, forming a small tornado of intense icy heat.

In just one second the flames withdrew and shot out, spreading and covering the entire ten-foot radius the Pidgeotto was stuck in. The attack fired steadily for several seconds and then dissipated. The Dragonair's head turned and wove a trail back through its coiled body, and the rest slowly followed. The tail finally gave one last flick in the direction of the bird's remains, then disappeared down the staircase and left the hallway empty. When the police squad came to investigate, the only evidence left behind was a severely charred floor and a few blood-caked feathers to tell the tale.

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Revenn stared down at the task before him, concentrating entirely on it. He knew that his life and possibly others' lives hinged upon his decision here... He felt like the entire world was resting on his shoulders.

'2.What were the Human race's faults that led up to the Pokemon's rebellion of Year 001, Pre-Rebellion Callender?'

He glanced around the plain and simple classroom, hoping for some reason that the answer would be written in bright letters in midair. He caught himself and returned to 'reality'. There wouldn't be any lit-up signs declaring the answer. It was all a test of memory.

Of course, his memory was horrible. He had never understood history class anyway. What was the point of reading about humans? They'd been extinct for generations. Nobody cared.

He mentally slapped himself on the head. He could hear his old history teacher's voice in his mind. She was an old, eccentric Sneasel, with very strong opinions.

"We've got to remember the humans so we don't repeat their mistakes!" she'd screech, waving her claws in the air dramatically. "All of the problems in the north and the east are because they're forgetting what everyone fought so hard for in the Revolution! If nobody learned history, there'd already be a war right now, and armies would be marching RIGHT through this town!" The pupils of her eyes would dilate at this point, and she'd begin muttering for a minute or two before continuing with the lesson. She had been very scary, and also a cat of course. For those reasons Revenn had never liked her, and wasn't all that suprised by his lack of remorse when she died.

Revenn's mind snapped back to the test in front of him. He looked into his vague memories of months ago when they'd actually covered this in class, and tried to picture what the teacher had said.

'No freedoms... Pokeballs... Forced breeding after 2000 H.C....' He counted his responses off on his claws and, considering three points to be satisfactory, he stopped there.

He dipped his claw in to a small dish of ink, the most common way for Pokemon to write. After all, only four dozen or so kinds of Pokemon had opposable thumbs. He then lowered the talon to the paper and scribbled out an answer in messy handwriting. He realized it was hardly eligible, but he left it. Perhaps this way nobody would notice his spelling errors.

He slowly made his way through the rest of the questions and tapped out the last period with satisfaction. He didn't do TOO badly, and unlike last time he wasn't the last one done. After drying off his writing claw, he rolled the test up with his foot and grasped it in his beak. He left his desk and waddled up to the front of the classroom, then submitted his test and returned to his seat.

Quickly getting bored, he glanced around the plain and simple classroom. His gaze passed over the common brown walls, with the roof sloping down to meet the floor instead of clear-cut corners. Made to look like a burrow or hole, the walls were rough and uneven. He glanced at the teacher's desk, as always on the eastern side of the classroom. This was common in schools, supposedly students' minds were growing along with the rising sun. Revenn found that it really just hurt his eyes for the first five minutes of his first class. But now it was midday, and the entire classroom was lit up by a round escape hole in the ceiling. Another custom, also from the days of burrows.

The teacher's desk was a large, flat stone, a larger version of the students' desks. The teacher, an old, graying Alakazam, looked at some pieces of paper while stroking his long mustache.

Revenn turned his head, looking at his classmates. Mostly flying and normal-type Pokemon, though grass, water and lightning Pokemon were scattered here and there. The one Psychic, a Drowzee, sat in the front row looking pleased with his straight M's(the highest possible grade, named after Mew).

The small bird almost jumped when the announcement came that class was over, the cry of a Doduo that echoed through the building. It sounded somewhat dejected to Revenn, a cry of surrender that announced the release of the prisoners. But all it meant to him was freedom.

He excitedly ran down the hallway, somehow darting between dozens of larger Pokemon. After a moment he found his way to the exit, which was really just a big gap in the wall. The small bird burst out of the structure and stood there for a moment, adjusting to the bright sunshine. A brown wing was lifted to shield the eyes momentarily while the muddy red head looked at the surroundings.

Up ahead of him was nothing but plains. A humongous field of grass and small trees. Though he couldn't see them from here, there were dozens of homes hidden in the waving sea of green. This was where almost all of the rodents in the town of Fey lived. Although one town, it was divided in to three different environments. On his right he could see the large lake overshadowed by a rocky cliff, home to the somewhat-large aquatic population. And in the distance, past the field, was the large cluster of trees he called home.

The Spearow crouched down and launched himself off the ground, then opened his wings. Flapping a few times to gain altitude, he began the flight back to his home.

Luckily for him, he had a few minutes all to himself in the sky. He closed his eyes and smiled, feeling the wind flying through his feathers. He loved everything about flying. The speed, the sensation of weightlessness, the sound...

...The isolation. The world was left on the ground and he was alone up here. Nobody could bother him with orders, chores, anything... And that was all he wanted. It wasn't that he hated the world, but it got rather boring. Too wrapped up in stupid little tasks. No, that world of school and work wasn't for him.

He wished he could just glide on the warm breeze forever. It wouldn't happen, but he wished it could. He would have to go back down sometime... He always did.

Speaking of which, he could see his neighborhood up ahead. 'No,' he thought, 'just a few more minutes. Let me stay up here just a minute longer...' He couldn't go back yet. He wouldn't. He refused.

Instead of circling downwards, he flapped even higher and continued past his home. He suddenly thought of his family and began to feel guilty at first, but he repressed those thoughts. 'Just a minute or two,' he told himself. He stared in to the clear blue sky, not concentrating on any specific spot, and slowly began to relax as he glided along.

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Yes, that's the first chapter. If you read it(I hope you did), I'd like for you to reply, but please, give me some criticism. I know I did plenty of things wrong, so tell me what they are. Please.
 
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Interesting...

It kind of makes me think what would happen if the Pokemon socialization of "Magical Pokemon Journey" was combined with the darkness of "Pokemon Adventure"
 
Well well

Well I must say that I'm impressed by that chapter, it's an interesting combination putting pokemon in a semi-human environment and acting almost human themselves.

The only real comment that I can make in criticism is your formatting; You've got sentences that start on one line and then halfway across that line they jump to the next line, it happened in most of your paragraphs so you should probably watch for that.

You've done well in creating this world and the factions/countries and history. An excellent start.
 
Red! You've finally posted your fic! ^_^ Tis really good ^^ I've been wondering what it was that you've been working on all this time. I think the plot(or at least, the events that have happened) is great, and I really like Revenn, especially that last bit at the end where he's thinking about flying.

In terms of critisism, you need to smooth out the flow of some of your sentences a bit. Your description is good, but the wording gets a little awkward here and there, and when your fic consists this heavyily of this kind of description, you need it to flow as well as possible. I don't really know how to be specific about how to make it flow better, except to, when you feel you're up to really editting, re-read and tweak as you go. ^^

But great job overall. Can't wait to see how this turns out ^_^
 
Blackjack Gabbiani(Can I call you Blackjack? Gabbiani? Black? Jack? Gabbi? BG? Anything?)-Thanks for reading! ^_^ Hehehe, my sister loves Magical Pokemon Journey... Funny. Though I've never read Pokemon Adventure...

K2-Thanks. ^_^ Glad you liked it, especially the world. I think the setting's the best part of this fic... Maybe I should write a prequel someday. Or a sequel. Anyway, yeah, I don't know where those breaks came from. If they appear again in this chapter, I'll edit them out.

T-Whee, you read it! I was going to recruit you in a while anyway. =P Revenn is fun, especially later in the fic... Though that's quite a ways away. Yeah, my sentences are crappy. I need to work on that. ^_^;;

Chapter 2 now... Suppose I shouldn't be posting so quickly, considering I've only got one chapter after this, then everyone has to wait for my incredibly slowness. Oh well, suppose I'll try to get people addicted with the first three chapters...

Eh, this chapter isn't as good as the first one... Oh well.

---~=Chapter 2=~---

Green. Green everywhere. Nothing but waving, glimmering emerald as far as the eye could see.This was the world of the small, vaguely feline creature that sat in the center of it all.

He never lifted his furless, yellow head to look around. His slitlike eyes never opened. Small hands with opposable thumbs never moved from their resting place on the ground. Yet the whole time, his advanced brain was active. Though later in life he would be able to influence the physical world, for now he was limited to mental perception.

His mind randomly explored the surroundings, lacking the skill to focus on anything further than a few meters. He sensed the tall blades of grass he was sitting in. He sensed a large, round tree-shaped building just a few feet away, the place he would later know as 'home'. At the very edge of his perception was another, identical building, home to some other family of Pokemon. This was all he knew of the world.

All of a sudden, something new. Something far more complex. A sable-furred creature, feline in nature like the Abra, shot in to the psychic range of the infant.

Something about the mere presence of the black cat not only slightly suppressed the Abra's abilities but also made him extremely uneasy. 'This shouldn't be happening,' his subconscious thought. 'Something's wrong.'

Yet, at the same time, the child was curious. This was something new. Something completely different from anything he had previously experienced. Something exciting.

The untrained psychic powers now had purpose. Something that they could focus on. Another mind. Uncommanded, they reached out and penetrated the mind of this mysterious newcomer.

The shock almost knocked the Abra unconscious. He had entered a mind far more complex than his own. The only reason he was able to continue was that his abilities weren't advanced enough to sense any coherent thoughts. All he could feel was the emotions.

But still, the emotions... Feelings never experienced before by the infant were everywhere in the mind of the black cat.

And none of them were pleasent. Most powerful was depression, pulling him downwards in to an ocean of despair and making death seem like a paradise. Next came hatred, controlling him and forcing him to think things he would never want to think. And then came envy... Oh, so much envy. Whatever this creature was, it envied the entire world.

The Abra sat, shivering quietly. He tried to cut the connection, to stop feeling these horrible things. This wasn't worth it, he wasn't curious any more... But his psychic abilities continued to dig deeper in to this foreign mind, past the emotions to subconscious thoughts. Suddenly, a single word appeared in the Abra's mind, and he guessed this was a name. 'Kenonokt.'

Suddenly, he was cut off. He gasped, the only real physical motion he had actually gone through that day, and reached back out mentally to figure out what had happened.

The black-furred being was gone. While experiencing so many new emotions, the Abra had lost track of time, but the stranger had continued running at a high speed. After only a few seconds it had left the range of his psychic abilities.

He was glad it was gone, but unfortunately he still had memories. He sat silently for a few minutes trying to forget those feelings, unaware of a tear that was rolling down his cheek.

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Kenonokt, as the dark creature was indeed known, dashed onwards obliviously. He would have known that his mind was being read, but he had stopped paying attention to the outside world. He was focusing entirely on the hunt.

His eyes continually scanned his surroundings as he ran. He glanced between the false trees spaced evenly throughout the area. He peered upward in to the sprawling oaklike branches. He glared at each doorway on the sides of the fake trees, the only thing betraying them as homes. No windows were carved out of the walls. The forest-descended types of Pokemon who lived in them were not used to having light indoors, nor doing much work inside.

Could the thing he searched for be indoors? No, he thought, it was unaware of his pursuit. And it had its own mission to accomplish. It would be busy.

He heard a small noise, so miniscule he couldn't identify it. But still, he heard something, and that was enough. He leaned to his right and slowly turned without slowing down at all.

This was his world. What he was meant for. What his entire species was meant for. Though they hadn't evolved a bit in centuries, nobody could dare call them weak. His sable fur blended in perfectly in the shadows. His legs, flexible and strong, offered maneuverability. The padded paws let him move silently, the claws let him silence his opponents. His jaws, although small, were powerful and filled with pointy teeth, designed more for causing pain than actually killing. His long ears could hear even the smallest sounds, and his nose wasn't bad either. His piercing black eyes could see in the shadows just as well as sunlight. And to top it all off, shimmering golden rings around his limbs and on his forehead gave him supernatural powers. Along with finely-tuned instincts, he was a creature built with one thing in mind. The hunt.

Still, he didn't even know what he was hunting. He had no idea if the supposed 'Kedkedek invaders' a hysterical Wartortle had reported even existed, much less what they looked like.

Suddenly, a cry came from his left, but it was immediately cut off. He curved around a nearby house and dashed in that direction as quickly as he could.

Nothing. The scream couldn't have come from very far off, but the wide pathway in front of him looked perfectly calm. The deep green grass sat undisturbed, and the rows of homes on either side gave no hints either. Still, something seemed suspicious. Intuition or his dark powers, he didn't care. He continued forwards, watching everything on either side of him.

Suddenly, the ground a foot in front of him was split in half. A small lump of fur shot out of the earth and stretched its head out towards him. Kenonokt tried to slow down, but he'd been running too fast. Everything seemed to be moving in slow motion as he watched his foreleg slam in to the shapeless brown creature and slide backwards through the dirt as the back half of his body pushed against the suddenly stopped front half and redirected its energy upwards. After two more seconds, the pressure on his right front leg was lessened and reversed as he was pulled in to the air and flung over the head of the Diglett.

After watching helplessly for another moment, he realized his vertical ascension was coming to a stop. Finally taking control, he twisted his head around and felt his torso jerk around behind it, and then finally his back legs. The momentum created by this pushed him in to a flip, so that by the time he reached the ground again he was able to land on all four feet facing the small ground-type.

Or, at least, where it used to be. Naturally, it had moved. He glanced around for a second before something slammed in to the small of his back and his perfect landing was wasted as he was pushed in to the dry earth beneath him. All the air in his lungs was forced out as his stomach hit the ground. He closed his eyes and coughed in pain, then training kicked in. He rolled out of the way mere seconds before a foot stamped a print in the solid earth he had just been pounded in to. He jumped to his feet and spent a second regaining his breath before looking up.

Towering over Kenonokt was a huge mass of blue-skinned muscle, the skin literally stretched from the large lumps under it. Large blood veins stood out against the surface. Though as of yet it only had two arms, it was still extremely menacing. An ugly face looked down on him, a large mouth dwarfing the small eyes. Most notable, though, was the square fist coming closer very quickly. Kenonokt jumped backwards and crouched down, preparing to jump forwards.

At that time yet another force exerted itself on his back. Something heavy forced him back in to the ground, then claws from the same creature dug in to his back. He slowly got to his feet and tried to shake the third attacker off, but it clawed at his skin even harder and refused to let go. He finally began rolling over, and instantly heard an alarmed squawk followed by the satisfying sound of beating wings getting further away. He finished rolling on to his back and looked up at his newest attacker.

Another black shape, like him. However, it was of course a bird. As it flew upwards seeking a perch, he wondered for a moment how it could even stay in the air. Small wings were attached to a small body. From there, a thin neck led to a head roughly the same size as the entire rest of the bird. This gave it an extremely lopsided appearance and its head bobbed up and down loosely as it flew.

Just then, a large blue foot crashed in to Kenonokt's ribs and he was launched in to the air again.

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Revenn closed his eyes, feeling and listening to the wind flying through his feathers. He was feeling rather calm, having flown aimlessly for around an hour. But now it was time to go back to the ground... To reality. It didn't seem so bad, now that he'd been away from it for a while. Of course, he wouldn't stay disillusioned for long.

Unfortunately, it turned out his feeling of being overwhelmed was returning sooner than he'd thought. Suddenly he heard words being spoken inside his own mind.

'Look to your right,' a strange voice said. He panicked and began flailing around randomly, trying to look in every direction at once. No sign of any other creatures, he even checked above him. Then the voice returned. 'Just do it, we don't have time to tell you who we are. Please, just do it.' The words seemed to be echoing through his head, and he couldn't pinpoint which direction they were coming from. Despite the request, he didn't move.

'Why should I?' he thought to himself, not stupid enough to blindly follow orders. Especially without even knowing where they came from.

Revenn nearly panicked again as the voice returned, this time taking on a harsh tone. 'Hmmm, let's see, well, first of all because we can reach into the most private parts of your mind and tell everyone that you have ever met everything they don't know about you, and secondly we can give you amnesia if we feel like it. Oh, yeah, there's also the fact that the entire town may be invaded soon, and you'd be helping us stop it. Just do it.' It could apparently read his thoughts. A telepath? That explained why he couldn't see whoever it was.

Revenn wasn't stupid, so he didn't dare risk provoking the mysterious Psychic any more. It seemed dangerous... Maybe it was just a bluff, but the young Spearow wasn't exactly daring. 'Or even strong-willed for that matter', he thought, closing his eyes and sighing. 'Nothing but a wimp.' Therefore he surrendered and dipped his right wing downwards slightly, slowly sweeping right.

He opened his eyes and stared forwards, scanning the landscape. Ahead of him was a large hill, the center of the 'forest' he and many other Pokemon lived in. The large tree-shaped houses were only visible from above as large clumps of green. Actually, the foliage was nothing but hollowed-out living space, but it certainly seemed real from here.

'Concentrate', he told himself. Instead of looking at the plain green, he looked at the spaces between the homes. But those were nothing but dry dirt, plain and simple. There was no sign of anything interesting, much less anything that a telepath would go to so much trouble to find.

Then, suddenly, a dark blur appeared. A black shape shot out from behind one house and landed in the dirt, launching up a cloud of dust. Once it cleared, the shape stood there like a statue. Revenn looked closer, then realized it was a dark feline creature. It stood there for a moment, breathing heavily... Was it hurt?

'Bingo.' The strange voice's final word echoed through his mind, the singularity of it making it seem amplified. Though he tried not to assume, Revenn had an odd feeling that his thoughts were once again private, the strange presence seemingly gone.

Almost instantly, curiosity began growing inside him. Though he had never thought of himself as 'adventurous', he had been getting awfully tired of his routine life... And it was a sort of duty to the town, right? He often heard that Dark-types were bad news. So, he had an urge, a reason, and an excuse... He might as well go. He flapped a little higher and flew onwards towards the last place he had seen the dark creature.

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Kenonokt stood facing his opponents, guessing at his chances. To the inexperienced eye the battle would seem to have three-to-one odds, but he had felt their attacks. His opponents were untrained fools, and his strength and concentration were already recovered from the initial onslaught.

Still, strength in numbers and elemental advantages could not be underestimated. He would have to be careful.

The Kedkedek(or so he guessed) fighters stood, thinking they were ready for a fight, spread out in front of him. The Machoke, probably knowing nothing about strategy, simply cracked its knuckles in the middle of the street, grinning. The Diglett, obviously trying not to be noticed, sat in the shadow of a nearby house. And the Murkrow perched on top of another house across the street, peering down at him like he was already roadkill.

The Machoke dashed forward stupidly, letting his guard down. He had a lot to learn. He had a target in his sights, and therefore he thought he couldn't be caught by a surprise attack. At first Kenonokt readied a teleport to get behind him, but then he decided he should go after another target. No matter how inexperienced, this blue mass of muscles had a type advantage, and he wanted to be able to concentrate solely on it when they fought hand-to-hand.

Copying the Machoke, Kenonokt ran towards the fighting-type. Already he could see at a glance that the Diglett was preparing to interfere, like he'd guessed. As the two larger fighters met in the center of the street, it dissappeared in to the ground. Too obvious.

Jumping in to the air, Kenonokt spun around, passing the slow fist easily. He lashed out with both his back legs, kicking off the ugly face and launching himself backwards in the process. Still in the air, he looked down at the street. The Diglett needed to come up to see where he was now, and that was the perfect time to strike.

There. A few feet away, the furry head suddenly shot up from the ground. It turned towards the Machoke and just stared for a moment. Instead of two Pokemon trading blows, there was just the Machoke, standing there clutching its eyes. Taking advantage of its confusion, Kenonokt landed and changed direction, jumping towards the unaware ground-type.

Damn, how could he have forgotten Diglett's and Dugtrio's sensitivity to the vibrations caused by things hitting the earth? The moment he jumped, it spun around, its eyes growing in surprise. Unfortunately, it wasn't stupid enough to just sit there, and it quickly shot off through the dirt, forgetting to submerge itself first. Kenonokt landed where it had been seconds before, and spun his head in its direction, having gathered dark energy even while he was still airborne. He opened his jaws as wide as he could, and the wind around the fleeing Diglett changed direction, seperating as if something was passing through it. Small dark clouds formed in the space around the small brown furry creature. He clamped his jaws shut, and suddenly the clouds clumped together, forming black jawbone shapes. These clamped down on the suddenly squealing Diglett, lifting it in the air. The Umbreon thrashed his head around and watched the ground-type shake in the air, quickly losing consciousness.

Then, suddenly, the Crunch attack was scattered in the winds, and in the same instant Kenonokt was knocked over. Both of these caused by the Murkrow, which had realized that its side was going from dominating to doubtful. The black cat quickly got to his feet, but the strong dark element attack had been somewhat draining. He'd gone all-out, trying to take the Diglett out of the fight in one attack. Though his Crunch was interrupted, it looked to be successful. The ground-type, having fallen to the ground when everything keeping it suspended was nullified, had squirmed its way in to the ground, but it wouldn't be fighting again anytime soon.

Still, he had two targets left to defeat, one of which had an elemental advantage. This could be difficult. Though training had told him to expect worst-case scenarios, he couldn't help wondering where his allies were. They'd be a great help right now...

Snapping his full focus back to his battle, he jumped backwards, dodging an overhead attack from the Machoke. He didn't even fully land, kicking off the ground instead and launched himself forwards. He lowered his head, keeping his eyes focused on his target, and stiffened his neck, preparing for impact. The fighting-type, having swung with all its strength, was nowhere near prepared for the skull slamming in to its abdomen. However, its body was hardened from millenia of evolution and years of training, and it didn't even fall over. Kenonokt fell to the ground, but he wasn't harmed either and he landed easily on his feet, quickly jumping out of reach.

The Machoke rubbed its stomach, seemingly hardly damaged at all. It laughed, a deep uncontrolled rumble, but then it froze. It stood there for a moment, its mouth stuck halfway through the change from laugh to gasp, then buckled, falling to the ground. A cloud of dust billowed up where it fell, enshrouding it for a moment.

It would regain its breath quickly, so he had to hurry. Spinning around, he searched for the Murkrow, but couldn't find it. Where was it hiding...?

He heard a footstep behind him, and he spun around. Standing there on two feet, breathing heavily, was an oh-so-familiar, wild-eyed, milky white feline. At her feet was the Murkrow he'd lost sight of, and it certainly wasn't looking healthy. Heavy scratch marks practically covered its face and stomach, and one wing was bent at a strange angle.

He narrowed his eyes momentarily. "What have I told you about 'overkill'?" he inquired angrily. "That's SUPPOSED to be our hostage. And you're SUPPOSED to use disabling tactics."

She laughed. "He was getting away. He could have gotten away if I didn't 'disable' his wing."

"Well, there are less injuring ways you could have stopped him. You're skilled enough to knock the wind out of a bird," he countered.

"Like you did with the Machoke? I don't know if you noticed, but he got away." Kenonokt glanced past her and saw that she was right. "This way torture is so much easier anyway."

The Umbreon's glare became more powerful. "We're supposed to be AGAINST torture. Sektre's better anyway."

She sighed. "Over a year, and you still can't tell when I'm kidding?" She closed her eyes and turned around. "Ah well, let's go." She began walking away, leaving the black bird for him to carry.

He had to admit he couldn't. Her utterly carefree voice was the same whether she was kidding or not. Hard to believe she was so different in battle.

"Wait, Feln," he said. She stopped.

She turned around quickly. "What?" the Meowth known as Feln asked with a hint of anger in her voice. She was rather moody at times.

He simply nodded at a house down the street a little ways. "Come out, spy," he called out.

She laughed again. "Stop being so uptight!" she scolded. "It's just a local. Sektre 'convinced' him to help us find you when you placed an anti-Psychic barrier around this area. I'm not surprised he's curious."

He shook his head. "He saw the whole thing. I doubt he can keep a secret. We need to talk to him." He raised his voice again so the small bird crouching behind the house could hear. "Come out!"

Revenn cautiously stepped out from his hiding place, wondering just how much his life had changed in the last half hour...
 
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Course I read it. ^_^ Been wondering what you've been working on. I like Kenonokt and Feln ^_^ This chapter was also pretty good. Much more action and dialogue than the other one. Still a few awkward bits but there's always awkward bits. Great job Red. I'm liking the characters and the plot, and you have some paragraphs that really shine.
 
T-I actually haven't been working all that much... Mostly just procrastinating. But yeah, I suppose this is what I've been writing, in the little bits of time I've been writing... I'm trying to get in to the habit. Kenonokt isn't really gonna be developed much until late in the fic, I suppose I should maybe change that. Yeah, this chapter had mostly action, and chap 3 is really almost nothing but dialogue...

Which is really why I'm posting now. I was going to post the third chapter, but I realized it kind of... Sucked. Turns out I'm extremely bad at dialogue. So, it's being edited a bit. Yes, delays after just two chapters... Not a good omen.
 
Righto, here's chapter three... No matter how bad it is, it's much better than it was, believe me.

-----~=Chapter 3=~-----

Kenonokt stepped forwards, glaring at the creature before him. It shrank down out of fear, looking up at him with wide eyes. Such large eyes, rather odd. Other than that, it was perfectly average. Ruffled feathers in shades of off-white, brown, and rusty red covered its body. Yellowish legs continued to bend under his gaze, until it was finally nearly sitting in the dirt. Such a cowardly creature, though he supposed it had reason to be afraid.

"Name," he commanded. There was no questioning tone, just a simple prompt. Its beak clicked open and shut nervously. When he began moving towards it, it finally spoke. "R-Revenn," it said unsteadily, as though it was having trouble remembering.

"Affiliation," he said now in his commanding tone.

The answer came quicker this time. "What?"

He didn't move. "Who payed you?" he asked, and although it was a question, the tone was still unchanging.

"N-nobody," it squeaked. He would have normally demanded the truth, but it was obvious that this pathetic being really was being honest.

"Why are you here?" he asked, in a slightly softer way. Slightly.

"I-I don't know..." it said slowly, as if afraid it would be punished for such an answer.

"Why did you come here?" he asked, more demandingly now. It may have been just a reinstatement, but he made it sound like a much more dreadful question.

"I-I... Don't know..." It seemed to be getting even more anxious with each answer.

"Why?" Kenonokt repeated, louder this time, insisting on getting an answer. He loomed over the tiny bird and narrowed his eyes, only to see a tear pooling up in the corner of its eye. Children. How troublesome.

"He doesn't know!" Feln cried out behind him. He turned to face her, leaving the Spearow sitting there for the moment. "Give it up, he's just a kid! You're gonna make him grow up to be a disgruntled mail carrier, damnit!" She stood a few feet away, glaring intensely at him with angry eyes. Her hind claws were instinctively sticking out and flexing in the dirt, like always when she was angered. Which was rather often. He'd learned not to pay much attention to these threats, she would very rarely resort to violence against an ally.

"I don't think we can trust the future mail carrier," he said to her quite plainly. "It easily cracks under pressure. If the enemy captured it..." He was cut off. Annoying...

"They WOULDN'T, that's the problem! He's the least noticable creature I've ever seen, who would ask him anything?!"

"We can NOT take any chances!" Kenonokt's deep voice was steadily rising dangerously as he continued. "I doubt you've forgotten that our numbers have already decreased this week, and the enemy will be watching out for us! ESPECIALLY since two of those scouts just escaped!" As his volume peaked with the word 'especially', he slammed his paw on the ground, kicking up a small puff of dust. The two cats stood as still as statues, glaring at eachother with narrowed eyes, as the dirt blew through the air between them.

They continued this strange contest of willpower and endurance for a few minutes more before a small voice surprised them both. "Leave... Me alone..." Kenonokt turned around and faced the small bird, now fully standing but with its eyes closed. The tear that had appeared in its eye now had turned in to a small trail down the side of its beak. Its legs wobbled slightly, almost as if it were in pain, but no damage appeared to have been done. It was just still afraid. "Go away..." he said quietly, almost whispering.

"We're not going to hurt you," Kenonokt said simply. There was no reassurance in the words, nor any other emotion. He had no time for sympathy, and he didn't see a point to such things anyway.

"Just... Go away, evil..." The Spearow immediately stopped, clenching his eyes shut a little more. It seemed he hadn't wanted that last word to come out.

Now he was intrigued... Kenonokt stood up to his full height. Though he normally slouched down, glaring upwards at whatever held his attention, he was in fact a rather large creature. Although the Umbreon was on average second smallest of the family, when he raised his head he was slightly taller than a normal Jolteon. He glared downwards at the quivering mass of feathers below him.

"What did you say?" he asked slowly, through clenched teeth. His voice was rising dangerously, daring to flare out angrily at any second.

Something about being confronted directly made the small bird slightly more daring. "I said... You're evil." he muttered, quietly but more deliberately. He was beginning to think about what he was actually doing, rather than blindly saying whatever he could think of.

The dark-type actually stopped frowning at this, his eyes softening slightly. "Evil...?" he whispered to himself. Then, as if catching himself doing something he shouldn't be, his gaze hardened once more. "You think we're evil?" he asked, though not as harshly as before.

"Of course you are," was the response. The Umbreon's expression didn't change in the slightest as he heard this.

"Well then, you obviously don't know evil," the large cat said, still not menacingly. "What makes us evil?" He appeared to have lost all intent of violence, and was now focusing purely on discussion.

Somehow, Revenn wasn't actually sure of this. He thought for a moment, then gave in and said the first things that came to mind. "Well... You hurt those other people... And you're cats..." The large feline looming over him seemed to want to smile again.

"Being a bird living in the Teien countryside, I don't quite blame you for your upbringing. But really, you've got to get rid of racist thoughts like that. Now then, anything else?" Kenonokt seemed to accept his answer as factual proof that the flying-type was wrong. He began staring off to the side, seeming to purposely ignore the bird.

"...You're a dark type..." Once again, the cat's lips twisted in the direction of a slight smirk.

"So is the Murkrow we captured. Don't take his side because you're both birds." Once again he used a factual tone and looked as though that part of the argument was over. In fact, he began licking a forepaw absentmindedly.

Obviously, this wasn't quite working for Revenn... And was he being... Insulted? After trying to think up another reason, he decided to take a more daring approach. Placing one of his taloned feet on the ground in front of him, the bird stood up completely and narrowed his eyes at the sable creature twice his height. "Look, I don't see you trying to prove you're not evil," he said quickly. It seemed he had fully recovered from his fear.

After not acknowledging Revenn had even said anything for a moment, he placed his paw back on the ground and opened his eyes, looking right back in to the eyes of the Spearow. "Very well... We're protecting you and this entire village." Once again, that seemed to be the entirety of his response.

"I don't know that," the bird said, not so easily defeated. "You could be trying to trick me. Why should I believe you?" He continued maintaining eye contact, a testament to his newfound willpower.

"Simple. You don't have a choice." Kenonokt's eyes narrowed menacingly once more, and for a moment the young Spearow looked like he was going to back down.

"I could leave. I could warn people about you." Revenn said in a rather threatening voice. What had simply been the first thing to come in to his mind was seeming like a better idea now... He appeared to have the cat's full attention after the threat.

"We wouldn't let you. In fact, we could take preventative measures right now... I believe you saw my companion Feln's idea of such a thing?" Kenonokt's voice rose to overpower the threatening aspect of the other Pokemon's. He knew he had halted any thought of escape the bird had, so he began moving on. However, he was stopped by the creamy-furred feline as she re-entered the conversation.

"This has nothing directly to do with you anyway, why do you care so much?" Feln asked, sounding more curious than interrogative.

The Spearow paused for a moment. Why was the cat asking...? Thinking up an answer quickly, he said it. "Well... I like this town. And I don't want anything to happen to it."

The cat smiled in a friendly way, surprising the bird. Was this the same creature that had mauled the Murkrow only minutes before? Could it be that they weren't really as bad as he'd thought... Or was this just a trick? "You'll protect the village? All by yourself?" The bird nodded slowly. "You think you can really make a difference? You couldn't even watch us fight without getting weak in the knees." Though not particularly cruel, her voice had lost all of its understanding.

Revenn blinked, then lowered his head, sighing. He couldn't actually think of a response to this, was she right? Besides that, it didn't seem to matter anyways. Was there a point to all this? Was she right? Was he just useless? But still, why did she care anyways?

"Whoa, wait up," the white cat said suddenly. "Don't get depressed or anything, I'm on your side. You've got good motives, but I think you're going about this the wrong way."

"What does any of this have to do with me, anyway?" Revenn asked, not willing to wonder any longer.

"I was about to ask the same question," Kenonokt said humorlessly, looking towards the other feline.

"Well, Kenonokt, I should talk to you about it alone," Feln said to the black cat. "But he could be of assistance, could he not?"

The Umbreon's eyes flared all the way open suddenly. "No!" he said rather loudly through clenched teeth. "What are you thinking?!"

The Meowth ignored his anger like she couldn't even detect it. "Simple, really. We need a scout, the three of us are stretched too thin already. He's got great eyesight, nobody will be surprised by his presence. Why not?" Copying the larger cat's movements from a couple minutes before, she began grooming a forepaw absentmindedly.

Her lack of regard only seemed to anger him further, or was it just what she was saying? Either way, she was obviously trying to get this effect. "I am NOT involving a civilian! Especially a child! I won't allow it!" Revenn just watched as they argued, wondering if they were talking about what he was thinking of.

He finally decided to make sure. "What are you talking about?" he asked in a hopefully very naive, just curious voice.

They both turned towards him and started talking at the same time, but speaking louder for a moment, it seemed the nicer of the two, as he was beginning to identify her, won that bout. "Well, you see, our group is interested in your sort of ideals. And, as I may have noted before, we're a trio, so there's a lot of work for each of us in this town alone."

"We're doing fine," the 'mean' one said gruffly.

"Ignore him, he's a bit too..." she paused for a moment, searching for a word. He continued glaring at her, but she just grinned. "Stubborn for his own good. Anyway, the point is that we could use someone like you. We're not forcing you to do anything, we'd just like you to consider joining."

"Joining what, really?" Revenn asked. He was certainly curious, and wasn't afraid to ask after the success of his last question.

"Well, we like to call it the Fey Freedom Defenders." She smiled satisfactorily.

"No we don't," Kenonokt muttered. He was ignored.

"That doesn't say much," the bird said plainly. He was thinking about this, but he still didn't know anything. "What do you do?"

She seemed to get slightly nervous, or was he just imagining things? Her forepaws fidgeted slightly at her sides. "Yes, well... We defend freedom here and hopefully in other places." This time both males glared at her, and she sighed. "All right, I suppose you could call us rebels. We make sure nobody even thinks about invading. You saw how we do that just a few minutes ago, I believe."

Just what he'd expected... Revenn had heard stories of groups like that, which government officials usually referred to as terrorists. The so-called terrorists usually didn't last long, they tended to either surrender or they were stopped by more forceful means... But these two weren't like those common criminals. They were... Smarter. So something about this didn't quite fit together... The Spearow thought for a moment before replying. "Aren't they just going to send more people?" he asked quietly, afraid he was about to look like an idiot.

That sentence definitely caused a reaction... This time, when the smaller cat sighed, the other looked like he wanted to as well. Both seemed to shrink slightly, losing their intimidating auras. The Umbreon began staring off to the distance, his eyes not so hard any more. "Yes, they will," the Meowth said sadly. Her eyes closed slowly as she continued. "But we're all that's left... The Teien government has been slowly whittled down and now there aren't any strong politicians left. A treaty here, a threat there, and there won't be anything left to stop Kedkedek or Haichuru from walking in and taking over. And if that doesn't happen, it would only take a fraction of their armies to just run the place over. We like to think we're setting an example, but..." She trailed off, as if she didn't have the strength to continue.

Revenn couldn't help but stare as he thought through what she said again... All that's left? As they stood there silently, one glaring off in to the distance bitterly and the other with her eyes closed regretfully, he was suddenly sure they were being honest. This was the truth... This was what was going on, while he was sitting in school all day? Now he knew why... Why his life felt like it had no purpose. He opened his beak and spoke slowly. "How can I help?"

Right as he said that, Feln's eyes opened and she smiled once more. However, Kenonokt's head swung around and his eyes angrily leveled with the bird's. "By forgetting about us and going back to your life," he said before she could start to talk. "I won't involve children." The cloudy black irises glared downwards harshly as if declaring him unworthy. Still, not one but two Pokemon glared back at him challengingly. When the Spearow realized he was being supported again by the smaller of the cats, he began wondering why she was helping him.

Even with the other two pairs of eyes challenging him, the Umbreon stayed strong. The three stood there for several moments concentrating on their menacing glares before both paler-pigmented creatures began talking at once. "I can still help..." Revenn only got halfway through his sentence before letting the cat take over the argument. She knew this dark-type better, after all, and he didn't have that much to say anyway...

"He's not even going anywhere near combat," she said. "Just another pair of eyes watching out for trouble. We'll be ready to save him in an instant." She relaxed and waited for him to answer, standing confidently.

"It's still too risky," he said quietly. "And we could be captured, or attacked. I don't want him dragged down with us."

"I don't care," the Spearow replied. "I want to do something to help... I'm not as useless as you think I am."

"He's right," Feln added unexpectedly. Her coworker raised an eyebrow at her, but didn't inquire. Revenn stared for a moment. Was she really just strange like he suspected, or did she actually have a reason for acting so confusing? He decided to ask later.

Like he had before, Kenonokt seemed to wish he could smile. Though this time he seemed to be showing actual kindness, rather than bitterly smirking at supposed stupidity. He lowered his head defeatedly, closing his eyes. Without looking at them, he spoke plainly. "Two stubborn ones now? Seems I can't win. Very well, I'll give you one chance. Tomorrow we'll see what you've got. Meet me here at the same time you found us earlier."

The two prevailing Pokemon stopped paying attention to him right after that, as they smiled triumphantly to eachother, seeming almost friends from the outside though they had only just met. "Welcome to the team," Feln said happily.

"Don't act like he's already been accepted," the Umbreon said harshly as he turned his head away. "I don't expect he'll be of any use. I'm letting him try it so you'll shut up." He quickly spun around and walked away silently.

Revenn's gaze dropped dejectedly as he sighed. "Does he really think I'm worthless?" The question wasn't aimed at anyone in particular, but the cat next to him answered anyway.

"When he actually says something, it's what he really thinks," she said. "But he thinks almost everyone is worthless until he gets to know them. You'll change his mind tomorrow."

Without looking up, he asked his next question. This one was obviously targeting someone. "Why did you stick up for me?"

"I had a gut feeling," she said simply. The Meowth continued when she saw this was plainly distressing him. "Don't worry, my hunches are always right. I always listen to them, it's how I live. My instincts are incredibly accurate, you'll do fine." She placed a paw on the smaller Pokemon's shoulder reassuringly, but he shrunk away and glanced up at her momentarily, sending a rather plain message. She ignored it.

"Now, then, what can we do before tomorrow?" she asked, to no one in particular. She smiled suddenly and clicked two claws together. "Ah, training!"

The Spearow looked up at her. "Training?" he asked simply. There was no underlying emotion, no hidden message. It was just a simple question.

"Yeah, combat training." When he blinked, she explained. "Not that you'll be getting in any fights. We just want you to stand a chance in case of an emergency, you know?" Without waiting for a reply, she walked away and began looking around on the ground.

He began thinking deeply as she left him alone momentarily. This whole thing, it was very strange... Had he really just made a life-changing decision? Was this all really happening? What on earth was he doing here? None of this actually felt real, but he supposed he could just be adapting... Maybe all this was just taking a while to sink in. But still, he felt like he was in a dream, like he wasn't really controlling himself.

He was pulled back from his reflections by the fast, relaxed voice of Feln. He looked up to see her holding a decent-sized fallen branch. "Ready? Watch closely, now." Without hesitation, she tossed the piece of wood in to the air. In the next second, her face changed completely. The fanged smile changed to a grim frown, her eyes hardened and became fierce as a primitive hunting beast. Then she suddenly crouched down on four legs and kicked off the ground, launching herself in to the air. Snarling, she lashed out with her extended claws and caught the twig in the middle of its arc. As she hit the ground softly, the branch burst in to several small pieces which rained down on the ground around her. Returning to her smiling normal self, she turned around. "Get it now?"

The Spearow just stared, partially unable to believe what he'd seen. "...No, I don't think so," he said slowly.

"Didn't think so. All right... Just rely on your instincts. Do whatever you suddenly feel will hurt your target. And if it's hard to do that... Imagine that everything you care about is in danger, and the only way to protect them is to win."

Revenn thought for a moment. "It didn't look like the Umbreon fought like that," he said finally.

Feln laughed. "Yes, he has a more complex style. And it is more effective, especially against people who use my kind of strategy. But he spent a long, long time learning all that, and you've just learned something that's not so bad in only a few seconds. We don't have his kind of patience."

Once again, the bird spent a few moments thinking about what she said. The mysterious Umbreon... The more he heard, the more questions he had. He supposed it was best to learn what he could now... "Where'd he learn how to fight like that?" he asked.

And again, she laughed. "Who knows? I've been around him for quite a while, and I don't really know anything about him. Best not to think about it, and definitely don't ask him." She glanced around for a moment. "Well, I should go now. See you tomorrow, good luck!" In what seemed to be her fashion, she didn't wait for a response. She smiled once again before turning around and lifting the still unconscious Murkrow up, draping it over her shoulder. Without saying another word, she walked off quickly.

The Spearow sat there for a minute, still thinking, before remembering that he had been on his way home before this entire thing started. He frantically kicked off the ground and flapped quickly, turning around and heading for his home while thinking about all he'd seen and heard in the last hour. It still felt like a dream... But this now was definitely real. So he did his best to concentrate on the present. Still, his mind kept drifting back to the strange people he'd just met, and especially what was going to happen tomorrow...

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See, what did I tell you? Horrible. Worst chapter so far.

Oh yes, and another thing about replies... Stop lying so much. Stop being so damn nice because you pity me. Say what you REALLY thing, none of this 'good job' babble. I mean, honestly... I KNOW it sucks, you don't have to pretend it doesn't.
 
Red, trust me, I don't embellish my replies just to make people feel good. There's always truth to what I say. If there's something in here that I feel the need to nitpick, I will, because I'm a nitpicky person, but if I don't find anything, then I didn't find anything. Simple as that.

I actually liked this chapter a little better than the other two. I dunno, maybe it's just the fact that Revenn got to do a little more developing and he was being cute about it. But I think it might also be that you didn't like the chapter and therefore spent so long re-working it. I really think you've got a good fic going here. Plot's a little cliché so far but that can be worked around.

Seriously, Red, good job.
 
T-Thanks for reading... Again! Yes, the plot is cliche... Maybe because I thought it up when I was twelve or so? ^_^;; Yeah, the plot isn't the best, but I'm hoping the characters will make up for it. And yeah, character development is fun. There's a lot of it in this chapter, including a little... Gloominess. Whee.

Yeah, speaking of this chapter, it's FINALLY done... Took me FOREVER. I blame my vacation. Yes, a month-long delay because of a six-day vacation... True, I swear! So... Here it is. Yep.

-----~=Chapter 4=~-----

In a chamber almost completely devoid of light, several semicircles of energy sat alone. Not moving at all, as far as any mortal eye could have seen, they shed their supernatural yellow light silently. Though bright, they failed to light up anything around them, not even the being they were permanently inlaid upon. This was not surprising, though, as the warm-blooded animal was even darker than the light-absorbing material of the walls.

Right at that second, Kenonokt ended his rest. Though he did not move for a second, it was obvious from the atmosphere in the room. Suddenly giving off a sense of danger and foreboding, the body was still silent and undetectable save the rings on its limbs.

And then, he lurched in to movement. His eyelids didn't open, nor did he use any other known senses to guide his legs. Quickly and smoothly getting on to his feet, he began walking without stopping to gain any bearings. Indeed, even walking, he was so similar to moments ago when he'd been dormant that it was difficult to tell if he'd changed at all. Was he still asleep, and subconsciously moving? Or had he not even been sleeping during his nighttime hours of inactivity? Only he knew.

Without looking around at the cold stone walls he knew well, he traversed the passageway. Turning smoothly with the path throughout its various twists and turns, he seemed to know exactly where each uneven rock stuck out of the walls, where each lump of stone sat in his path. Walking without making a single sound, it seemed almost like he wasn't in control, like something was tugging that shiny-furred body through the winding tunnels.

And that was almost what it was. Not paying any attention whatsoever to the present, his mind was still constantly active. He was almost in a dreamlike state, detached from the physical world. His subconscious was constantly bringing up images, sounds, recollections from years ago. Passing quickly through memories, he always unwillingly relived some story of his past that nobody else knew. He would have chosen to leave all this behind long ago, but he lacked the power to move on... This was his existence.

As Kenonokt recalled more tales he would never reveal to any of his teammates, he noticed from the warmth raining down on his back that he had left his hidden dwelling. Ugh, the cursed daylight... Now almost in the sun, he seemed to gain more energy, though he resumed his almost-constant frown. After just a meter between his front paw and the edge of the sunlight pouring through the opening of the cave, there were two dozen feet of shining, full-on sunny field. After that, though, a looming pine forest provided substantial shade... Fully awake now, he stopped walking and sat there a moment before bursting in to a full-on run. He fled through the beaming rays of light as quickly as possible, but didn't slow down when he reached the other side. What was he really running from, the displeasant warmth, or the cold remembrances of regretful events? Jumping instinctively between trees, he finally opened his eyes. The town wasn't far. Glaring coldly forwards, he tried to concentrate on what was ahead rather than what was permanently stuck inside his mind...

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Revenn, on the other hand, was not nearly so calm. Rushing as quickly as he could, sloppily shoving his wings downwards as hard as possible, he pushed his way through the air frantically. He didn't notice his various errors, completely preoccupied with his destination. 'Late!' his mind screamed at him, pushing him to go faster. Occasionally his book bag threatened to slip through his clenched claws and he had to pause for a second, haphazardly grasping wildly for a better grip.

His mind, panicking to the point of denying itself a chance for rational thought, could think about nothing but the meeting. Hardly even paying attention to where he was going, he certainly didn't pay any mind to his surroundings.

Continuing his near-tumble through the wind for a few more minutes, he finally realized he was above the scene of everything that had happened yesterday. Pulling his wings in quickly, he dove down, concentrating on the unmoving dark figure waiting for him. Tiring out quickly and not quite concentrating enough, he did little but stretch out his feet as best he could to prepare for landing. Opening his wings almost too late and hitting the ground a little too hard, he absorbed most of the force of landing with his legs. As a small puff of dust was kicked up around him, his head drooped towards the earth momentarily as he cringed. However, he quickly recovered and looked up at the black feline in front of him.

Rather than pressing his size advantage again by standing over the Spearow and glaring downwards, Kenonokt was standing plainly several feet away. Though they kept every bit of their judgemental watch from the day before, his eyes were not so cold and distant. Still in no way friendly, he looked somewhat trustworthy at least. He kept eye contact, rather than constantly analyzing everything around. His voice was plain and factual, more scholarly than his superior tone from the day before. "Late," he said. "Just like I expected."

Revenn's beak opened for a moment, as he tried to think of an excuse and say it at the same time. However, a slight stutter was all that resulted, so he wisely gave up. Now that he was actually trying to calm down, the Spearow noticed how exhausted he was... His heart pulsed from the adrenaline of his rushed flight, sweat dripped down in to his eyes... Had he pushed himself a little too far? As he tried to regain energy, he glanced around and noticed something. "Where's Feln?" he asked innocently.

"I convinced her not to come today," the dark creature said simply. "Don't expect help from her. This is a test of your own skills."

Thinking this over, Revenn nodded slowly. Had he really relied on her that much before...? He listened closely to the next words of the Umbreon's official-sounding voice.

"We'll start now," Kenonokt said plainly. No 'all right?', no 'are you ready?', not even an 'okay?'... Just an announcement. He continued before the bird could think to say anything. "Report on your trip here."

The Spearow blinked. "What? Report?" Like the day before, he didn't think before speaking, and he had a naive, confused tone.

"What species did you see?" Like before, his voice was plain and simple, giving the impression that his expectations were common knowledge.

His eyes wavering as his mind jumped around somewhat randomly, Revenn began searching for a reply. His heart beating faster as he realized how stupid he must seem, he stuttered slightly. "I-I wasn't really... Paying attention..."

Still looking cold and calm outwardly, Kenonokt seemed inwardly amused. "Congratulations," he said somewhat loudly. As the bird's head perked up curiously, he continued.

"You could have just doomed this entire town." Revenn's eyes dropped to the ground disappointedly. Why had he expected a real acceptance after that answer? The cat continued still. "Awareness is the only thing we require for your job. If you don't watch your surroundings constantly, how will you notice any suspicious behavior around you? You fail. Goodbye."

Without waiting for any sort of response, he began turning away. But the young Spearow was not giving up so easily. "Wait! I think... I remember..." Looking up and seeing the Umbreon's gaze returned to him, Revenn realized that he really had no recollection... But he was desperate.

More sweat was blurring his vision now... He felt weak, and his heart was pounding in his chest. What could he say? The impatient glare from the cat was getting steadily more menacing as he was no doubt getting annoyed... Revenn's mind grasping desperate for a solution, any solution, he glanced past the dark-type. His eyes wandered for a moment, looking for something to connect with. Desperately, he told himself he just needed a word... But what? Tree... Grass... Only the ordinary parts of the area. On the verge of collapsing from the impact of this sudden stress, he noticed a miniscule patch of contrasting color in the distance, and spontaneously blurted it out. "Houndour!" he cried out, hardly even forming the word in his mind before uttering it.

The dark figure a few feet away seemed once again amused, but like always he hardly showed it except for a slight relaxing of his harsh expression. He returned his foot from the position it had found as he had been turning, moving back to his original stance of facing the bird head-on. "Lying," he proclaimed quickly. "A Houndour, in Trey? What makes you believe I could possibly believe that?"

Still in a state of panic, Revenn's beak opened, but he didn't manage to force any words through his dry throat. Did he really have anything to say, anyway? As his heartbeat began to gradually slow down, rational thought started returning to the small bird's mind, and he realized the response that was sitting plainly in front of him all along. How could he have been so stupid...? "I-I'm not lying," he said, still not entirely calmed down. At least he was beginning to think things out. But he had a strange feeling he was missing something...

"You have no proof," Kenonokt replied. "Where is this so-called Houndour?" His voice had returned to its tone from the day before, arrogant and dismissive. His cold eyes were almost mocking, somehow.

Again, something called out for his attention, yet remained at the back of his mind, refusing to show itself. Revenn tried to shake it off, sure it was not as important as this conversation. It took him a moment to find the small dark spot on the background, but he didn't take long to bring his wing muscles back in to action. Stretching out the appendage, he pointed the longest off-white feather sticking off the tip of his wing in the correct direction. "Over there," he sounded out simply.

For a moment Kenonokt stood still, glaring arrogantly. But then his eyes flared open in realization, and in that same instant, Revenn realized what had been bothering him...

'The Houndour family had a long history of spontaneous violence and murder, among many other various crimes... And had been banished from most places except Kedkedek.' He recalled this easily, it seemed most of his fatigue had disappeared. He realized that he was now calm and collected, or at least as much as he could be in the situation.

Kenonokt, of course, had not been still while the bird had been thinking placidly. Stretching out one foot almost faster than Revenn could see, the Umbreon placed the forepaw in the dirt behind him firmly. Lifting his hind legs off the ground, he tugged his body around in a semicircle around his two forelegs, digging his back feet in to the ground again to stop when he was facing the opposite direction he had started from. Glaring quickly, he saw that there was in fact another dark-type in the distance. 'This is bad,' he thought. 'No. Worse,' he thought as he realized the Houndour had noticed the young Spearow's gesture. And, of course, his quick spin...

The dark cat began a dash in that direction, but it was futile... Turning almost as fast as he had, the canine started running just as the feline did. He was quickly lost in the expanse of tree-homes, and the distance between them was already too great. There was little chance of catching him.

Turning back around somewhat angrily, he realized that the bird had been sitting there the whole time, a blank look on his face... "Why didn't you tell me earlier?" he asked, perhaps a little too bitterly. Watching the Spearow cringe, he thought, 'Perhaps I should be softer with weak-willed creatures... But no, he will learn the way of the world sometime.' "Never mind," he amended, knowing that he would get nothing useful from the child.

Now turning away from Revenn again, he looked upwards. "Sektre!" he called out, seemingly to nothing.

Revenn had been sitting there the whole time reflecting, observing silently. He felt helpless... This had nothing to do with him, and he could do nothing with it. It was a world seperate from his, one full of action and danger, while he was still just a schoolboy with a boring life... Was he really trying to cross over in to the exciting world that Kenonokt and Feln lived in?

However, he was pulled out of his thoughts by the Umbreon's call. Sektre? He'd heard that name before... Yesterday? Curious, he watched.

And then was surprised by a familiar presence appearing in his mind. Yes, the voice from the day before. 'Sorry,' it said, and the message seemed to be spread through the area, though meant for Kenonokt.

And then he was surprised once more... A bright light appeared next to the dark-type, glowing brightly somehow though it was tinted a deep purple. It stretched out vertically as it quickly moved to one side, becoming an advancing line through the air. As it moved through the empty space, it left a changing trail of semi-solid matter that grew, fluctuated, and then shrank back again. In just one second, it had moved several feet and created a purple shape hanging in the air. Then it was gone, and the non-geometric, strangely shaped form was left. He could still see a small trace of the background through it, but it was almost solid.

At that point, it began moving. As it rotated smoothly in mid-air, he noticed that it was in actuality one large, slightly pointed shape and two smaller, jagged forms that remained on opposite sides of the larger one. And then, imprints were suddenly on one side. Two abstract white triangles stuck on a rounded side of the master shape, with large, pure black circles in the centers. Below those was a curved strip of the same solid white, with the tips pointing somewhat upwards. This was lined with diagonal black strips, dividing it in to several triangles. As he looked at the entire thing, he realized... That it was a face. An unrealistic, flat face stuck in a menacing smirk, but still a face. On the opposite side of the 'head' was a short pointed 'tail' sticking slightly downwards, giving the entire thing the vague shape of a circle with a cone sticking off one end. On the top of the sphere were several spikes of various sizes, the most obvious of which was a pair of bull-like horns, giving it a slightly devilish image. As it lifted one of the side shapes, he realized those were shaped somewhat like claws. Perhaps a mix between his own talons and the humanlike hands of a Machoke. Hovering, disembodied hands with three fingers, including one larger 'thumb' that moved opposite the others. All the digits came to dull points.

The hand was lifted up to the top of the head, and rubbed back and forth over the surface of the spikes. Embarrassedly? Possibly. Meanwhile, the eyes closed and the mouth snickered softly. 'Is this thing really alive?' Revenn found himself wondering.

That was when the anatomically impossible being began talking, casting aside any doubt that it wasn't real. "Yeah, really sorry about that," it said in the same sharp voice the Spearow had heard in his head. So, this was the Psychic... But he could think about that later. It was continuing. "You dark types are so hard to track, especially when there's more than one close together. The auras really muck up my telepathy." Kenonokt just listened disinterestedly, not seeming to really care. "Aww, c'mon big guy, can you forgive me?" The tone was obviously not seriously, bordering on mocking. The young bird wondered what exactly it was doing, joking at a time like this...

"Can you still find it? Where is it going?" the Umbreon asked plainly. It was obvious he had long since learned not to pay attention to the transparent creature's jests.

"Eh, sorry again. This Houndour's a pro, stealthy as I've ever seen." The purple shape rubbed its "hair" again, seemingly ashamed.

The cat's eyes, narrowed in thought, didn't react at all. "Understood" was all he said, emotionlessly. He stood there for several moments, his mind racing with thought. Like this, his brain was a cold precision machine, endlessly calculating a solution to the problem. Racing almost too fast for he himself to comprehend, he considered odds, possibilities, and factors in this equation of life and death. But there was no clear solution... What was going to happen? And more importantly, what should he do...?

Meanwhile, it seemed the small bird had finally caught Sektre's attention. Moving while making unearthly little sound, it floated smoothly to the Spearow. "So, we finally meet in person, eh? No introductions needed, of course." It grinned wider than something with actual bones ever could, making it appear even stranger than before.

Now that it was actually looming over him, Revenn realized he'd been staring this whole time with his beak dangling open. He quickly pulled his mouth shut, but couldn't stop staring up at the almost indescribable... Thing. He realized he could only try to be polite for so long before curiosity would get the better of him. "...W-what ARE you?" he finally asked more loudly than he'd intended, quickly adding "If you don't mind my asking..."

The creature laughed loudly, a mix between an extreme chuckle and a cackle of glee. The high, exceedingly loud laugh unnerved Revenn somehow, or maybe that was just from the way its mouth grew even larger as it flapped open and closed unrealistically. After a whole minute, it finally calmed down. "I was hoping you'd ask that!" it finally managed to say. "I know you've been wondering for a few minutes. Anyway, I'm a Haunter, and yes, I'm male. Or was, anyway."

The Spearow's eyes opened with realization. A Haunter... A ghost... An extradimensional being. That certainly explained the slight transparency, the lack of any vital organs that he could see, and the telepathy. But still, it did nothing to explain the highly eccentric, somewhat giddy, behavior...

The Haunter began talking again, startling the smaller creature somewhat. "You'd be eccentric too, if you spent most of your time cooped up alone under that damned mountain."

Kenonokt entered the conversation at this point, angrily objecting to Sektre's last sentence. "Don't say any more," he snapped. "He doesn't need that information." He returned to his thoughts, but continued glaring at the apparition through the corner of his eye.

Through it all, Sektre continued grinning. "But what about the grand tour of our hidden little hideaway?" he asked with mock disappointment. Revenn couldn't help but wonder if this ghost could actually be serious. Feln was one thing, but this was just ridiculous. The Haunter continued. "And why aren't we letting him be our little friend? I was looking forward to it."

"I already decided we don't need him," Kenonokt said simply. "We're fine without dead weight." Realizing that the cat hadn't paused or flinched in the slightest while insulting him, Revenn began staring off in to the distance while his mind reflected disappointedly... 'Then, am I really worthless?' he thought sadly.

"Dammit, what's wrong with you?" an unexpected voice inquired angrily. The bird looked up to see the familiar Meowth standing just a few feet away, glaring haughtily at the Umbreon.

Choosing to ignore her altogether, Kenonokt glanced at Sektre. "You told her to come?" he asked, though there was very little anger in his voice.

The ghost somehow managed to perform a vague equivalent of a shrug. "I just told her about the spy the new kid found," he said helplessly. "You can't blame this one on me."

"Stop ignoring me!" Feln said firmly. He turned to face her, and she smiled satisfactorily. "And you always say we act immaturely." Then her smile dwindled, and she was serious once more. "That was a scout, but he can't have come from Kedkedek alone. Now, we need another member more than ever. You HAVE to see that." She glared at him, almost daring him to disagree.

Kenonokt sighed. "I understand that," he said calmly. Once she relaxed, he continued. "But this child is unsuitable. We will find someone better."

And unsurprisingly, Feln's glare returned, intensified exponentially. Revenn wondered what exactly was making her so angry... "We're running out of time!" she said, almost yelling. "All we need is vision, he's as good as anyone we'll find on such short notice. He noticed that Houndour, so he's not completely dense... You can't argue." As he thought through what she was saying, Revenn realized she too was saying he was nearly worthless... Dropping deeper in to his sudden sadness, he wondered if she was only being polite before.

Sighing once more, Kenonokt stared at the ground. He said nothing for several moments, his cold demeanor seemingly dissipating. Finally, he looked up, some of the resolve gone from his eyes. He seemed somewhat older now in Revenn's mind, as if some of the power had been sucked out of him. "Very well," he said slowly. His voice seemed steady and confident as always, but his eyes made it obvious he was somewhat dead inside. "He can help us for a while... If he's sure he wants to." As his eyes rotated in their sockets to face the bird, the Spearow realized the feline could detect his doubt... Those eyes pierced his skin and saw in to his innermost thoughts somehow.

"Of course he does!" Feln said, smiling. Turning quickly to the bird, she added in a sweet voice, "Right?" ...But was it just Revenn's imagination, or was there something fake about her kindness, something hollow about her smile? Had it always seemed so... Falsely reassuring?

As he looked around the group, Revenn noticed Sektre had backed off slightly. He knew of the doubts, the warnings in the back of his mind... But the other two were either oblivious(as he was beginning to think of Feln) or attempting to unnerve him(like Kenonokt's cold, lifeless eyes), staring at him impatiently.

It was then that the small bird first really tasted inner conflict. Most of his mind was still eager, curious, and wanting to explore or experience anything... But this other part of him was doubting, untrusting. It didn't look at these rebels as friends, but as possible enemies, people who wanted to use him. But still... He didn't want to think like that. It made him think of... Humans, evil, and everything he hated. The world couldn't be like that, the humans had been killed to get rid of all that. So he had to be wrong...

And the cause... He couldn't forget that. He thought back to the day before, their sadness as they explained the state of the world... That was genuine, dedication like that couldn't be faked. He pushed the suspicion back to the deepest recesses of his mind, but he couldn't get rid of it completely. Still... These were good, honest people. And he would do anything to help them.

"When do I start?" he asked finally, putting on a smile that hid his inner thoughts.
 
Phew! Caught up at last! I like this a lot I must say, there's some good character development in Kenonokt (who I love BTW) and in Revenn.

Some good early chapters here, the plot needs a shove in the right direction but overall it's pretty damn good, I didn't really pick up on any spelling or grammar errors that I can remember.

Bravo! Keep writing or pain shall forever stalk you. :D
 
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