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EVERYONE: - Complete Delusions of Grandeur
- Thread starter Pride
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- Sep 17, 2008
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I honestly can't really tell why I liked this. I mean it's mostly done in a summary style, it's pretty short and it doesn't really focus on characters, only to the bear minimum. I think what I liked about it though was what it wanted to explore. The whole idea of someone that has been taught to be the best since he was young and all the things they have to deal with both physically, mentally and socially while they grow up. Everyone has had a parent that pushes them to be driven and make them proud and it's not easy to distance one self from the idea of wanting to make that person proud...maybe it's because it's an idea that kind of hit a bit of home for me.
Granted this is still a oneshot and for a oneshot I think you were able to get the general idea across well enough, it's not really subtle but it's also not up in your face and it does have some heartbreak to it. In the end the only thing I can't decide is if you just wanted to try and get the idea across or make a legit story out of it, if it's the former then I'd say it worked really well.
3.5/5
Granted this is still a oneshot and for a oneshot I think you were able to get the general idea across well enough, it's not really subtle but it's also not up in your face and it does have some heartbreak to it. In the end the only thing I can't decide is if you just wanted to try and get the idea across or make a legit story out of it, if it's the former then I'd say it worked really well.
3.5/5