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EVERYONE: - Ongoing Digimon Heroes (sequel to Digimon Frontier) *one of my better fics*

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Just a heads up, each Arc will have a designated post, and this post will have Arc 1, and every time a new Chapter for an arc appears, they will be edited into their designated post.

It has been three years since Lucemon was defeated and the Digital World was restored. During those three years prior to the Legendary Warriors being gone, the Digital World went through a "Reformation Period". It changed greatly. A new evil Digimon, Yugimon (no offesne to fans of a certain anime, but his name is an inside joke, I'll explain later), was formed from the remaining fractal codes of the Seven Demon Digimon, including Lucemon. Yugimon deleted the three Angels. However, there were three Digimon called the Superior Titans, representing Ground, Sea, and Air, to replace them. Now, the ten holders of the Spirits, and six new Digidestined, who have Digimon Partners (who are usually Rookies in the Real World, but are Ultimates in the Digital World), must find the Ancient Spirit Digi-Eggs to help save the Digital AND Real Worlds. The new Digidestined have a new type of Digivice, called D-Oracles. D-Oracles can use the power of the Anceint Spirit Digi-Eggs. The power allows the human partner and Digimon to combine together, along with the egg. This is called Spirit Armor Digivolution. There also will be many explanations of past events that weren't really clear. This fanfiction will surely be epic.

Meet the new heroes

Riku, our gogglehead, is very brave, with a lot of energy and some anger management issues. His Digimon is Komodomon, a lizard-like Digimon, in the Digital World, but is Chiikimon, a Dragon Pixie Digimon, in the Real World. Riku's D-Oracle is Green.

Sasuke, our youngest hero, is full of hope. His Digimon is Ospremon, a Holy Bird Digimon in the Digital World, but is Kestremon, another Bird Digimon with similar characteristics to Biyomon and Falcomon, in the Real World. Sasuke's D-Oracle is Orange.

Jiro, our brain in the group, is the oldest, and is pretty calm most of the time. His Digimon is Orangumon, a simian Ice Digimon, in the Digital World, but is Leemon, a similar lemur-like Digimon, in the Real World. Jiro's D-Oracle is Blue.

Musashi, our only girl, is graceful, but likes to occasionally be some comic relief. Her Digimon is Gerlimon, a cute, candy-wielding fairy/blob/frog Digimon, in the Digital World, but is Kandimon, a cuter and less blob-like lollipop-holding Digimon, in the Real World. Musashi's D-Oracle is Red.

Yuuta, our lone wolf, is usually very serious, but sometimes complains a bit too much. His Digimon is Pikamon, the electric Machine/mutant Digimon who shares quite a few characteristics with some similar Pokemon, in the Digital World, but is Ekidomon, a similar electric Machine/mutant/tiger/mouse Pokemon. Yuuta's D-Oracle is Yellow.

?? is the sixth new Digidestined, whose identity and Digimon will be revealed soon after all the Spirit Digi-Eggs (excluding Ornithmon's), are found. All we know is that he has a Purple D-Oracle and a Dark Digimon

Chapter 1
The five known new Digidestined met near Shibuya Station. Their Digimon were at the Rookie forms, and recently hatched from normal Digi-Eggs. Nonetheless, they bonded well very quickly with their human partners. They came because all of their cellphones changed into D-Oracles, and a mysterious voice that came from them told them to meet here. Soon after, a new type a Trailmon, that had three purplish eyes, and a yellow exterior with dark brown spots. This Trailmon was named Wildcat. Wildcat said "Come on, you guys! This is urgent! We need to leave NOW!" Riku said "What the!? Did that thing just TALK?!" Chiikimon, Riku's Digimon, said "Yes. I think it did. I guess we should get on." Wildcat was about nine feet away from them. The new Digidestined ran, and their Digimon followed, as fast as they could keep up with their human partners. When they all got on, Wildcat said "Next stop... THE DIGITAL WORLD!" Sasuke said "Digital World? I never heard of it. It must be cool!" Wildcat heard Sasuke and said "Yup, it's real alright! It's where Digimon live. I'm sure your newly-hatched, non-human friends know about it. They're all Digimon, and so am I!" Kestremon almost lost his balance, and maybe a few feathers, as Wildcat rushed into the tunnel. After they got out of the tunnel, the five Rookie Digimon Digivolved into their Ultimates, right before their human's very eyes. Jiro said "What happened?" Wildcat explained, "As we got out of that tunnel, we entered the Digital World, and your Digimon Digivolved. They were Rookies before, but they skipped the Champion form, and went straight to Ultimate! Hohoho! Sorry if I confused you!" Musashi said "What did he just say?" Wildcat told them, "You'll find out more very soon! Oh, and you might want to get off in about five seconds, because we're at the Fire Terminal.", and he quickly stopped, and Komodomon was almost sent flying into Riku. The Digidestined, and their Digimon got off, and two familiar looking Digimon, a white koala-like Digimon with a pink belt, and a taller, yellow, rabbit-eared Digimon with reddish-brown footed pajama pants. They were Bokomon and Neemon. Bokomon said "You must be the new Digidestined. Hurry! Find the Spirit Digi-Egg of AncientGreymon!" Komodomon smelled Neemon with his forked tongue, and Neemon started giggling, and said "Hey! That tickles!" Bokomon dragged Neemon by his pants, and started running away. Then, Komodomon smelled the ground with his tongue. He then said "Uhhh. Guys? I think I smell something REALLY evil! Not smelly evil, but bad evil!" And ran toward the source of the smell. The others, including Riku, ran behind him. Then, he stopped, and saw a evil Wizard-like Digimon with pale aqua skin and blonde hair, fighting Agunimon. Komodomon then attacked DarkMagimon, who was the Digimon Agunimon was fighting. Komodomon shouted "TOXIC BLAZE!", and out of his mouth came an purple inferno that was also filled with poisons. DarkMagimon didn't seem to be affected by it at all. Then, Komodomon said "Oh, GREAT!" Agunimon then attacked the evil Digimon with Pyro Darts, but that did even less. Agunimon ran to the side, saying "I usually don't give up, but I don't think I'll beat you at all!" Ospremon, the large white and orange bird Digimon, attacked. He shouted "Eye of Horus!", and out of Ospremon's large, pale blue eyes, came a bright yellow beam of light, aimed at DarkMagimon. That didn't work either. Then, Orangumon, a bluish ape Digimon with a Raccoon-like tail, attacked. He shouted "Icicle Spear!" and out of nowhere, a lance-like figure made of pure ice, attacked DarkMagimon and shattered into pieces. Gerlimon was next to attempt to attack the wizard-like Digimon, and shouted "Amphibian Punch!", and punched Dark Magimon right in his crimson eyes. That didn't even leave a mark. Pikamon then shouted "Smiting Jolt!", as he summoned a mini thunderstorm, that disappeared right after sending down a shot of lightning at DarkMagimon. Even that didn't do anything. Komodomon said "Nothing worked! We used our strongest attacks, and couldn't even hurt him whatsoever! What do we do NOW?" Then, he noticed an red oval shape on a building above him, and shouted "I THINK I SEE THE SPIRIT DIGI-EGG OF ANCIENTGREYMON!" DarkMagimon then tried to go after it, and Komodomon ran toward it, too. Komodomon was faster despite his reptilian form and DarkMagimon's ability to float. Komodomon then climbed up a building, and threw a rock at DarkMagimon to slow the Dark Digimon down. It barely worked. Komodomon then got to the top and grabbed the egg-shaped object. Then, the lizard Digimon jumped down, holding it with his two front legs, and ran toward Riku. DarkMagimon tripped Komodomon with his magical staff, but Riku held up his D-Oracle, and the egg was stored in the green Digivice. Agunimon then told Riku and Komodomon to come toward him, and then told them "If you want to use that Spirit Digi-Egg's power, say 'Spirit Armor Up'! And you have to be right next to your Digimon partner! It might be the only way to beat that creep over there!" Riku took Agunimon's advice, and took out his D-Oracle and said "Spirit Armor Up!". Komodomon was right next to Riku. Then, a Digivolution sequence began. Komodomon said "Komodomon! Spirit Armor Digivolve To......", and floated toward Riku, who was also floating, but was holding the egg, too. After that, the three combined, and vague images of Flamon, Agunimon, BurningGreymon, Aldamon, and EmperorGreymon appeared. Then, out of an inferno came a figure quite like the Pokemon Charizard, only with AncientGreymon's wings, armor, hair, and helmet, instead of Charizard's features. Then, the Inferno shrank to a campfire-sized flame on the figure's tail. The newly formed Digimon roared its name and a title, "INTIIMON! THE KING OF FIERY DRAGONS!" The Digivolution sequence ended, and DarkMagimon shouted "HOW DARE YOU USE THAT SPIRIT DIGI-EGGS POWER! MY MASTER SENT ME TO DESTROY IT!" Intiimon growled, "You can't do that now, punk!", DarkMagimon then shouted "DEATH BOMB!", and out of his staff came a dark ball. DarkMagimon then threw it at Intiimon. Luckily for the Digidestined, Intiimon blocked it by shielding himself with his orange wings. Intiimon then attacked by shooting a large explosion of fire from his tail. As he was doing so, he shouted "CORONA BURST!" DarkMagimon's staff, which was the source of most of the wizard Digimon's, was obliterated by the flames. Luckily for everybody else, especially the citizens of Fire Terminal, the explosion did pretty much no damage. But DarkMagimon's fractal code appeared, and Agunimon said "If you want to revert back to your normal selves, say 'end', and then the Element of the egg, in your case 'fire'. It's the only way to go back, and you'll need to take your defeated foe's fractal code, too!" Intiimon then yelled "End Fire!", and Riku, Komodomon, and the Spirit Egg were back to normal. The Egg then went back into the D-Oracle, and Riku took DarkMagimon's fractal code. Komodomon was amazed. In the distance, Bokomon and Neemon were watching the whole thing. Then, the two Digimon ran toward our heroes. Then, Agunimon became his human form, Takuya, who thanked Riku and Komodomon for disposing of DarkMagimon. Bokomon then saw Takuya, and so did Neemon. The two Digimon said "TAKUYA!", as they ran up to him and started hugging his legs. Komodomon said to Takuya "You know these guys?" Bokomon said "Sorry, but we couldn't introduce ourselves before, because our home here was in danger. Thank you for defeating that evil Digimon. I guess tht two of us will come with you. I am Bokomon, keeper of the Sacred Book of Knowledge." Neemon then introduced himself, "And I am Neemon, keeper of my pants." Neemon then said "Sure, we'll come with ya." Then, Takuya waved goodbye as our heroes, and their two newly met guides to the Digital World, went off to their next destination, which was as of now, unknown.

Chapter 2
Our heroes kept walking until they reached a large wooded area. They saw Lobomon attempting to fight an obese, evil humanoid bear-like Digimon. This evil Digimon was Callistomon, who was a bounty hunter working for Yugimon. Lobomon attacked him with Lobo Kendo, but it had no effect. Riku and Komodomon decided to become Intiimon again. Then, Sasuke noticed something in a tree. Ospremon flew up and brought it down. It was a white and purple egg shape with two huge gold blades sticking out. It was AncientGarurumon's Spirit Digiegg. Lobomon hid up in a tree. Sasuke then said "Spirit Armor... UP!" Opsremon said "Ospremon Spirit Armor Digivolve to....", and Sasuke, his Digimon, and the egg combined after floating around in the Digivolution sequence. Then, the Digimon and human combined to become a large falcon-like Digimon. Strabimon, Lobomon, KendoGarurumon, Beowulfmon and MagnaGarurumon's images flashed. Then, AncientGarurumon's armor, blades, and other accessories flew onto the bird Digimon. The newly formed Digimon flew and shouted "AMONRAYMON! THE BRAVE BIRD OF LIGHT!" Callismon said "Two Spirit Armor Digi-Eggs. If I defeat you, my boss will be very pleased! RODEO BULLET!" and shot many rounds of bullets from his left hand, which had guns for fingers. Intiimon and Amonraymon valiantly dodged the shots. Intiimon attacked and said "INFERNAL FANG!" and bit Callismon's arm, and flames shot from Intiimon's teeth. Callismon roared in pain as Intiimon let go. Then, Amonraymon finished the fight with one of his attacks. He screeched "GALLANT BLADES!", and the blades, which were like a second pair of wings, spread out and glowed white. Then, the bird Digimon flew into the evil bear Digimon with a lot of brute strength. Intiimon said "End Fire!" Amonraymon said "End Light!", and soon after, Sasuke scanned the Spirit Egg that Opsremon found, and then scanned Callismon's fractal code. Then Koji came out and thanked them for saving him like that, then walked off. They kept on walking, and Neemon shouted "I THOUGHT CALLISMON WAS GOING TO EAT ME!" Bokomon then whacked Neemon with his sacred book of knowledge.

Chapter 3
Our heroes made it out of the forest after walking for a good hour, and made it to a frozen wonderland, but it was rather dangerous. A SnowAgumon came up to them and warned them about a SaberLeomon that lived nearby that had a very fiery temper. Then, Komodomon smelled the ground with his tongue, and perked up and said "Yup, I think that SaberLeomon is nearby.", and looked at the ground again, seeing a fresh footprint in the snow. It was huge, and likely belonged to SaberLeomon. They then saw Kumamon, and SaberLeomon was running after him. Kumamon attacked with Blizzard Blaster, aiming a shot of snow at SaberLeomon's face, but the Beast Digimon wasn't affected at all. A huge snowstorm then hit, and Orangumon got conked on the head by AncientMegatheriumon's Spirit Digi-Egg. The simian Digimon then said "Jiro, I think we should help." Right when he said that, Kumamon went back to being Tommy, who hid behind a rock. Jiro then said "SPIRIT ARMOR.... UP!" Orangumon then said "Orangumon Spirit Armor Digivolve To....", as he, his human partner, and the egg went around in a circle as flashes of Kumamon, Korikakumon, and Daipenmon appeared and disappeared quickly. Then, Jiro became one with Orangumon, becoming a large, muscular, bull-like creature. Then, AncientMegatheriumon's horns, hair, and hooves came flying onto the newly formed Digimon, which shouted "BUFFALOMON! THE BEAST OF ICE!" Then, Sasuke and Ospremon became Amonraymon, who attacked SaberLeomon with his Blinding Blast attack, which temporarily stunned the Beast Digimon for about a second before forcefully being defeated and reverting back. Then, Buffalomon finished the fight easily with Freeze Hammer, a trampling attack that defeated SaberLeomon. Buffalomon then said "End Ice!", and Jiro took SaberLeomon's fractal code right as Tommy thanked him for saving him like that. Then, Jiro scanned the egg and our heroes went to their next destination.

Chapters 4 and 5 will be posted later.
 
If your story was any good, you wouldn't need to post character bios before the atual story to help with character development.

It's also pretty sad that you took none of the advice from the previous thread and still write in giant blocks.

EDIT: Forgot to mention that the few things I managed to read here I liked better than the few things I managed to read in your other fanfic
 
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OMG. Seriously, I'm not going to even TRY to read this until you make separate paragraphs. It's just plain unattractive to readers.
 
GIANT BLOCK PARAGRAPHS THEY HAUNT ME!!!!

Seriously, I was with you with some of your digimon. They sounded cool. But the rest of the fic? Hell no.

And why would Bokomon and Neemon introduce themselves with the SAME LINES they used on the show? They're not RPG NPCs that only say the same lines over and over again.

Please try to show a little compassion for your readers. We give you so much advice and you could be a much better writer if you took it to heart.
 
Care to explain what it is then that is giving you trouble separating your fic into paragraphs?
 
No, what I'm hearing is, "I read your criticisms, but I'm too lazy to change my ways."

Then, out of an inferno came a figure quite like the Pokemon Charizard, only with AncientGreymon's wings, armor, hair, and helmet, instead of Charizard's features

How is it that you manage to use a creature from another franchise to describe a digimon? If you were to read this from the perspective of someone who doesn't know what Pokemon is, they would not understand what you are saying.

Also, how is it that this figure is quite like the Pokemon Charizard, while at the same time, you say that Ancient Greymon's features have replaced Charizards?
 
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