TEEN: - Complete Fetus (poetry)

[Eliana Rampage]

So I don't see a lot of poetry around these parts, but I'll still post some to share for everyone.

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Fresh out of the womb
Green and dripping bodily functions

And you dare tell me how to paint a portrait.

As you ripened up
Inside that hysterical uterus
Of Hippocrates’ making,
You clearly deciphered

All the universe had to offer.

The Trojan horse looms a
Raging 2 feet high.
You tower above the sky-line
Stomping and snorting
Dressed as a bull
Sporting a silken rag
In a vintage china shop.

Specifically vintage, of course,
Because it’s oh-so original.
All the artisans
And all the minstrels
Will worship you.
A deity among the gods
As you destroy Olympus
With the flick of a finger.
Grab the reins and
Woo the ladies
With your gentle words.
A Crystal rose
that will appear and vanish
at the slightest movement
of your “licorice” tongue.

O, for without the licorice, where
Would you be?

You speak art
You smell art
You bleed art
You die art.

But you overlook
The minute details
Which compose a piece-

For you are blinded
By human desire
And the sweat
That rolls off
Pinocchio’s nose

And into the frying pan
Where you burn
To a satisfying crisp

Only to write of
Your short-comings in

Your
virtual journal.

 

[revolvingscott]

This is actually so beautiful! It sounds like a Panic! At the Disco song (A Fever You Can't Sweat Out not that shitfest Pretty. Odd.)
I love this piece! Your words. They're like magic!
Just one thing - did you mean to mispell foetus?

 

[Eliana Rampage]

This is actually so beautiful! It sounds like a Panic! At the Disco song (A Fever You Can't Sweat Out not that shitfest Pretty. Odd.)
I love this piece! Your words. They're like magic!
Just one thing - did you mean to mispell foetus?

Oh my gosh, thank you so so much! How did know Panic! was one of my favorite bands, let alone one of my top lyrical influences?!

Actually, I did mean fetus. Lol Again thank you so much!

 

[revolvingscott]

Oh my gosh, thank you so so much! How did know Panic! was one of my favorite bands, let alone one of my top lyrical influences?!

Actually, I did mean fetus. Lol Again thank you so much!

This is totally Panic! in a good 'so similar yet so different' kinda way, it just jumped out at me and I can imagine Brendan singing these (let's hope they return to their original style for Electric-Heavy Dreams). I'm so glad you didn't take offence to a comparison to Panic! because for some strange reason people don't like them!

EDIT: Btw, thanks for bringing some poetry to the WW. I'd love to read more!

 

[Eliana Rampage]

This is totally Panic! in a good 'so similar yet so different' kinda way, it just jumped out at me and I can imagine Brendan singing these (let's hope they return to their original style for Electric-Heavy Dreams). I'm so glad you didn't take offence to a comparison to Panic! because for some strange reason people don't like them!

EDIT: Btw, thanks for bringing some poetry to the WW. I'd love to read more!

Ahahahaha thank you SOSOSOSO much...actually, I do believe Panic! broke up...unless you consider Brendan Urie and a few other random dudes Panic, but I don't...lol.
NONONO I LOVE PANIC. I'm one of those people who seems like a hater but I actually have been listening to them since before their debut CD!!!

OF COURSE! I know most anime forums don't have much poetry and I'd love to share the love <3 I'd love to see some of yours, too!!!

 

[revolvingscott]

Well, they're left with Brendon and the drummer but they're recording a new album so...still firmly together.
Oh no, I wouldn't post my poetry here; it's too terrible and private. And terrible. It'd get ripped to pieces.

EDIT: Picked out the most Panic! bit.

Specifically vintage, of course,
Because it’s oh-so original.
All the artisans
And all the minstrels

 

[Eliana Rampage]

Well, they're left with Brendon and the drummer but they're recording a new album so...still firmly together.
Oh no, I wouldn't post my poetry here; it's too terrible and private. And terrible. It'd get ripped to pieces.

EDIT: Picked out the most Panic! bit.

Ripped to pieces? By WHO? ahahah this place seems pretty dead. DO EEEEET. I won't be mean, I promise.

 

[revolvingscott]

Some of the regulars and I don't get on so well. I'll think about it but they're all me being some angsty emo sobbing about a broken heart. If you want to read my work, I just reposted my fanfic right here, C&C are compulsory (consonantal alliteration FTW!) from you because I want them and I've posted so far 4 times here and given you rave reviews (be HONEST!)

 

[Eliana Rampage]

Some of the regulars and I don't get on so well. I'll think about it but they're all me being some angsty emo sobbing about a broken heart. If you want to read my work, I just reposted my fanfic right here, C&C are compulsory (consonantal alliteration FTW!) from you because I want them and I've posted so far 4 times here and given you rave reviews (be HONEST!)

there is NOTHING wrong with a broken heart, and I'm not saying this just out of resentment to the guy who just cheated on me and broke mine. I'm serious. Sylvia Plath and Shakespeare wouldn't exist if it wasn't for heartbreak, so DO NOT SWEAT IT. Andddd I shall go read that right now

 

[revolvingscott]

Okay, thanks. Well, my beat friend asked the guy she knew I was in love with out. Bitch.