EVERYONE: - Complete Forever Fire (poem)

[Shiksa ♥]

After seeing my Winona poem, Jenova wanted me to write a Flannery poem. I don't think I did a very good job on this one, I didn't have good inspiration but Jenova thinks it is good. Note: This is form Flannery's point of view.

Spoiler: CWs

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Forever Fire

He left me.
My grandfather went
to become a Pokémon Master
and I was alone.
I was left in the care of someone
whom I didn’t know and didn’t love.
Yet I knew my destiny:
to take my grandfather’s place
as a leader.
There was a fire burning within my soul
yearning to strive
to be the best of all fire masters.
A flame that nothing could extinguish.
I had the strength inside
to raise a fighter.
A Torkoal, the beast of fire.
The hot springs were the key to my success
with their mystical powers
to wash away fatigue
and whatever troubles came my way.
I knew that when that day came,
it would all be worth it.
Training on the rugged slopes
of Mount Chimney,
and the harsh battles
would all pay off.
The gym was mine,
and I was the leader.
A blaze in my eyes
warned all
what I could do.
I could not be defeated,
for I had a fire in my soul,
that kept me going
to fulfill my destiny,
at long last.
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Oh ya, on the old City of Trees thread, some people said they would like to see my non-Pokémon poetry (even though I don't call it poetry, I have another name) so if you want to see it you can PM me.

~The Indifferent One

 

[Cavespider_17]

Review: Forever Fire

Firstly, I liked this poem. It isn’t what one would call a traditional poem, but it is still poetry at its core. Unfortunately, I have no idea who Jenova is, but I think you have nothing to worry about. It was a well-written and nice poem.

The choice of Flannery for this poem was a good one, as she was an important character at the time of this poem being written. She was also very distinct too. Her gym was memorable and an important part of the protagonist’s journey in the series. You give us, the reader, an insight into why Flannery is how she is.

The first line in itself is a very powerful one – “He left me.” I think your choice of using that three-word sentence is perfect. It tells us so much in this first line. Someone important – maybe the most important – person in her life up and left. The lack of explanation in this first line gives the impression that she was rather young when this happened, and may not have fully understood the repercussions of it when it initially happened. Furthermore, I like how the poem is her journey. From beginner trainer to taking the gym, and how important this is for her.

My one minor issue with this poem is that I feel like there should be stanza breaks somewhere in here, separated with a gap or an empty line. The stanza breaks would give us time to take in what has happened so far, and see her progression.

Overall, you stuck to the theme of fire and determination very well and very clearly throughout.

 

[RichestAirPirate]

Review of Forever Fire​

For such an old poem, this one was still very well written!

Flannery is a good choice for a character like this. We know that she inherited the gym from her grandfather, and this poem reflects how she felt when the torch was passed down to her, starting off as unsure, sad, or nervous to eventually starting to sound hopeful and determined towards the end.

The wording used in this poem feels perfectly tuned to the fire type expert and the area she calls home. Words like "fire" "blaze" and "flame" reflect Flannery's burning spirit that, although weak at the poem's beginning, sparks and grows stronger as it goes on. Mentioning the hot springs around Lavaridge and the rocky and rugged terrain of Mt. Chimney just adds to the feel of the poem.

Overall, this is an oldie but a goodie. Makes me want to cheer Flannery on.