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EVERYONE: - Ongoing Genric Pokemon Adventure

Not Skarmory Armor

The Wings of a Butterfree
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This ismy First Fanfic I've ever wrote so any Comments or Critism is welcome!

Chapter 1: Adventure A Go Go Baby!


It was a beautiful Sinnoh morning in Sandgem town as the sun reached its apex in the sky. A flock of Starly and Staravia pasted over the crystalline blue waters of Lake Verity, as a heard of Bidoof grazed at its shores.


About an eight of a mile away from the shores of Lake Verity stands our hero, Jimbo. One would think that on a beautiful day like this and on ones eleventh birthday, a person would have not a care in the world, but this is not the case. In front of Jimbo are two Pokeballs and One Luxury ball. The Pokeballs contain his Chansey, Soren, and his Growlithe, Icabob, while his Dratini, Draca, inhabits the Luxury Ball. Still thinking he grabs both the Pokeballs and releases Soren and Icabob to have a word with them.

“Chansey!” cried Soren.

“Growl…” chirped Icabob.

“I know guys I’m happy to see you to,” Jimbo started “ That move from Fushia City must have been as hard for you as it was for me.” His Pokemon nodded in agreement

“But I have some tasks that might be hard for you. I want you two to stay at home while I start my life as a trainer.

“Now I want you to… now Soren don’t you give me that look.” Jimbo said to Soren as her face turned to a scowl “I want you to keep Mom company while I’m gone and I want you Icabob to guard the property until Dad gets back from the Pokemon Breeding Expo in Goldenrod city, okay?”

Both of his Pokemon nodded happily and trotted down stairs with Jimbo behind them. Throwing on his long dark green blazer Jimbo entered the Kitchen to say goodbye to his Mom, but she had already left to her job as a newsanchor for Jubilife TV. On the dining room table there was a small package with a letter on top

It read:

Dear Sonny (His parents nickname form him),


We are both so proud of you it cannot e expressed in words. Your father and I are saddened to miss the beginning of your very own Pokemon adventure, but there are some presents for you in the package it contains your fathers favorite TM and a small gift from me

Love, Mom

Jimbo tore open the package to find a Pokebelt™ with five Luxury Balls and a single blue disk labeled ‘Ice Beam’. Putting on the belt and pocketing the tm Jimbo pelted down the slope to Route 201.


Jimbo cursed himself again and again, for two reasons, one he had forgotten to break in his Running Shoes, so by nightfall he’d probably have blisters, and second he was late. Many people said that if he was a Pokemon he would have been a Snorlax, not that he was fat and over ate, just that he was a little on the slow side.

Finally Sandgem town came into view, and along with it Prof. Rowan’s lab

Hmm… Jimbo thought maybe all get CHimchar as my starter, or maybe Piplup, no Turtwig.

Jimbo continued this thought process untilhe reached the front doors of the lab.

“Prof. Rowan!” Jimbo called breathlessly “Prof. Rowan, I’m here for my starter Pokemon!”

“Ah yes,” rumbled a deep voice coming from some where in the second level “young Jimbo.”

An older man step out from the shadows and descended down the spiral staircase. Prof. Rowan was a large imposing man with a snow white beard and mustache. He approached Jimbo looking him up and down.
“Your mother just called me ,young fellow, to tell me you where on your way,” the man rumbled “If you will follow me I will give you effects.”

“Here is your Pokedex,” the Professor said “it will catalog all the Pokemon you come across during your journey, and has for you starter Pokemon, well I have some bad news.”

Crap thought Jimbo

“Unfortunately, the other three starters have already been taken by other trainers, but we do have one Pokemon that you can have. But I must tell you that it is a product of a breeding program that fail utterly, so It only knows the move Curse which raises Attack and Defense, but lowers speed.”

With that Prof. Rowan threw down a Pokeball and released a black Pokemon with a yellow circle on is belly.

“Lax?” the Pokemon yawned.

“Hun?” said Jimbo as he pulled out his Pokedex.

“Munchlax, the Big Eater Pokémon” The Dex reported “It wolfs down its weight in food once a day, swallowing food whole with almost no chewing. It hides food under its long body hair. However, it forgets it has hidden the food.”

“Okay,’ said Jimbo “I’ll take it, but to give you some attack moves I’ll use this on you.”

Jimbo pulled out the TM for Ice Beam and stuck it on Munchlax’s head.

“Munch!!” Munchlax cried in surprise, as there was a flash of whie light and the TM disappeared.

Jimbo returned Munchlax to its Pokeball and said, “Hmm… from now on you shall be known as Roley.”

As he turned to leave Prof. Rowan put his hand on Jimbo’s shoulder.

“May I ask something of you, young fellow?” he said

“Shoot, Doc.”

“Professor,” the older male corrected “I want you to keep an eye on the other trainers that received starters from me earlier today, I have a sense that some thing big is going to happen in the next few months. Their names are; Diamond, Pearl, and Opal. And please be careful…”

But Jimbo was already out the door.
 
Hmm… Jimbo thought maybe all get CHimchar as my starter, or maybe Piplup, no Turtwig.

The sentence should read: "Hmm," Jimbo thought, "maybe I'll get Chimchar as my starter; or maybe Piplup; no, Turtwig."

Jimbo continued this thought process untilhe reached the front doors of the lab.

Until is spelled wrong.
“Your mother just called me ,young fellow, to tell me you where on your way,”

...to tell me you were on your way.

Crap thought Jimbo

"Crap!" though Jimbo.

“May I ask something of you, young fellow?” he said

“Shoot, Doc.”

“Professor,” the older male corrected “I want you to keep an eye on the other trainers that received starters from me earlier today, I have a sense that some thing big is going to happen in the next few months. Their names are; Diamond, Pearl, and Opal. And please be careful…”

But Jimbo was already out the door.

This dialouge confuses me. When Prof. Rowan says he has something to ask Jimbo, Jimbo says, "Shoot" which means that he is listening. As the Prof. explains, Jimbo walks out the door as if he isn't listening. It's confusing because one minute he's listening and the next he's not. He must have a short attention span, lol.

Anyway, the title, I'm not sure if it's supposed to be "Generic Pokemon Adventure" or not. But, the title is rather Generic ('course, I can't talk. My title is just as generic.) But it's your decision on what your title is.

Overall, yeah, this is a generic start, as are all Pokemon Journey fics. I'll definitely follow, however, seeing as how I need a fic to personally review after every chapter.
 
You misspelled thought in your review, Turtle.:D
well, its defiantly a generic beginning, and generic plot so far, but whatever, it could develop.
 
You misspelled thought in your review, Turtle.:D
well, its defiantly a generic beginning, and generic plot so far, but whatever, it could develop.

Lol, How ya gonna review my review? Heh, anyway, you're right. You can develop, as did I.
 
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