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Chapter 1:
~~Viridian City~~


Lex sat in a chair at his family's diner. The tv on the poke battle channel and the sound playing softly in the background,a small Chatot cooing/mocking the tv in the corner of the diner. It was late and the diner had just closed. Lex glanced over at the clock which read 12:30 am.

"Hey Mom,Dad....I'm gonna head home.Is that alright?" Lex yelled towards the back to the kitchen. He could hear clanking of dishes being washed so he waited to get a answer. As he took off his aprin he heard his Dad yell back telling him it was fine. As he made his way to the door his Mom poped out from the kitchen.

"Lex..take Chatot home with you ok." Lex turned around and was about to say something when music on the tv caught his attention.

"We are sorry to interrupt the following program but we have breaking news. Police have been chasing one of Kanto's most wanted from Pewter city all the way to Viridian city. So if you see this man please contact your local police rigth away."

"Local police, local police." Chatot said repeativly. Lex sighed and turned towards the door. "Come on you stupid bird."

Lex's mom waved. "And be careful. Love you!"

The door shut and Lex hopped on his bike. "Why do we have to live so far away from the diner?" Lex asked the Chatot as if it would give a real answer back.

"Far away, far away." Chatot replied. Lex ran his fingers through his short dark green hair messing it up more than it already was.

"I really don't like you,you stupid bird." The Chatot was about to say something when Lex waved him off the handle bars. "Shut up!" He then started peddling towards his house.

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The wind blew through his hair as Lex glided through the air on his bike.The chatot glided beside him easily keeping up. He was out of the city and almost towards his house, nothing on either side of the now dirt path but plain feilds of grass and trees. The night was very well lit by the full moon and the far off cries of Hoot-hoot and Noctowl could be heard. He wasn't but 5 mintues from his house when he saw a shadow moving in the feild.

"What the?" He said as he came to a stop and stared at the moving shadow. Chatot flew around in circles in the air above Lex. Normally Lex would blame it on a pokemon or whatever but unlike all the other times this figure was human shape, and as far as he knew there weren't any human shape pokemon in this area.

He focused on the figure as it moved closer towards him. The figure stopped and stood there facing Lex. He couldn't really tell what it was that watched him but he had a feeling it wasn't good. The figure to a step closer and the light hit it just right Lex could see everything now.

A man with blonde hair and a gaint red R on his shirt. He had a backpack hanging on his shoulder. The man then looked behind him and then ran towards Lex. Lex stood there and watched the man run towards him, the same man that was on tv as one of Kanto's most wanted. He stood there trying to remember what the news said to do.

All he could think about was that he was in the middle of along and empty road by himself with one of Kanto's most wanted. Once the felon was with in 5 feet everything became clear. The answer was simple.

"Chatot." He said. The man stopped and poped his knuckles.

"There isn't anything here."Said the man. Chatot was too high for the man to notice.

"Use steel wing!" Chatot let out a screech and it's wing lit up and he flew down and slammed into the man with great force. The man let out a cry of pain and fell to the ground his bag had ripped open and hundreds of pokeballs rolled out. The man looked at the pokeballs and then back at Lex.

"Why you stupid kid!" The man held his chest as he got up. "I think that stupid bird of yours broke my ribs." He reached for his belt and grabbed a black and gray pokeball. One tap and it grew larger. "Now I'm gonna have to teach you a thing or two about how to take down a opponet properly."

He threw the pokeball and out busted white light taking shape of a Granbull. The Granbull got in a fighting stance and was about to attack when a figure flew infront of the Granbull and began to punch it multiple times. On the last punch it was hit so hard it flew back and hit the man.

Lex stood there in awe. He had no clue what just happened. Maybe he was dream all of this, he didn't know. A man with shaggy and wavey dirty blonde hair stepped up next to Lex and laughed. "Good job Hitmonchan." A red beam it the figure and made it disappear.

"You're under arrest by the P.I.I.A" Said the man with the Hitmonchan. Two more men flew down from the sky on Pigeot's back. They cuffed the Felon and placed him on the gaint birds back. The man with the dirty blonde hair and the Hitmonchan turned to Lex and smiled. "Thanks kid. You helped me out here...I'm Perry."

He extended his hand out for Lex to shake and so he did. "Um,Lex."

Perry chuckled. "So How old are you son?" Asked Perry.

"Um,...15"

"And is that your Chatot?"

"Um,...No sir...it's my Mom's"

"Ah, I see...well here." Perry reached in his jacket and pulled out a silver pokeball. "Take this as a gift for helping me out."

Lex took the pokeball and stared at it. "It's an Eevee." Perry said. Lex laughed with joy. "No way! Awesome!"

Perry laughed and began walking off. "I'll see you next time Lex!"

"Thank you." Said Lex as he watched Perry disappear in the night.


-End
 
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It would be a lot better if you had put a prologue ahead of it, giving the character a little bit of an introduction. There are a few spelling mistakes, but they're probably just typos. I suggest typing your story in word before posting it so you can catch all of them. Maybe change the alignment from center to left too, the constantly changing indents make it a bit hard to read. Otherwise, it's not bad.
 
It would be a lot better if you had put a prologue ahead of it, giving the character a little bit of an introduction. There are a few spelling mistakes, but they're probably just typos. I suggest typing your story in word before posting it so you can catch all of them. Maybe change the alignment from center to left too, the constantly changing indents make it a bit hard to read. Otherwise, it's not bad.

Thanks for the advice. I was orginally going to make this the prologue but went against it for reason I don't know why.
 
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