Detective Calvin
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Greetings, loyal audience. This is Calvin127, bringing a brand new production. I know, it's been way too long since I produced anything. Unfortunately, I've been stricken with writer's block in all my stories, and I've had important schoolwork. This might just make up for it, I think. Funny story about this: it was the result of a dream I had after watching some yuri anime. The dream was mostly original, but had minor aspects borrowed. When I was telling my fellow otaku/crush about it, she convinced me to write a fic about it. Please bear with me here, as I'm still recalling the details of the dream, and I only remember chunks right now. Basically, I'll be filling in the gaps as I go. And I'm still working on the title. Alright, so enjoy!
“Hey, when do you suppose this train will get there? We've been riding for hours!” A whiny female voice said, piercing through the recent silence. The owner of the voice was a brunette of about average height and weight with dark brown eyes and a perpetual scowl.
“To be precise, exactly 3 hours, 47 minutes, 23.5 seconds, mark.” A second voice said, this one sounding more mature and sophisticated. The speaker was a skinny black-haired girl with large glasses and an apparent inability to smile, as it looked like she hadn't smiled once in her life. Her nose was currently in a thick book. “By the way, that round of silence lasted 5 minutes, 18.675 seconds.”
“Shut up, Tomoko. Go back to your book.” The first girl snapped, cutting her eyes at the bookworm.
“You know, Akako, you have no one to blame for your boredom, save yourself.” Tomoko said calmly, looking over the top of the book and her glasses at Akako. “I've offered you books to read, and you declined them all rather rudely. Even Hanako suggested you go to sleep, but did you listen?” Her answer came in the form of Akako getting up, snatching the book, and closing it. “I was reading that, you know.”
“Read this.” Akako sneered back, slamming Tomoko over the head with the book. The weight and density of the book was more than enough to render a person unconscious for awhile, which was exactly what it did to Tomoko. Akako smiled, knowing she wouldn't be hearing from her for awhile, and put the book next to her before going back to her seat.
“You know, you didn't have to knock her out.” A blond girl said, going over to check Tomoko's unconscious form. “She did nothing wrong.”
“Hanako, stay out of it.” Akako growled, looking out the window. “Unless, of course, you'd like to join her in Dreamland.”
“Kiyoko-chan, she's threatening me!” Hanako called out, casting a fearful look at Akako. At that moment, a tall redheaded girl stepped into their car, looking none too amused.
“Akako, what is it gonna take for you to settle down?” The girl apparently called Kiyoko said with a tired sigh. “Honestly, you've been insufferable this whole ride, and we've still got x amount of hours to go.”
“If you must know, I'd love nothing more than to be able to take a nap, but it's too bumpy.” Akako grumbled.
“It can't be if Tomoko's fast asleep.” Kiyoko said, pointing to the unconscious girl.
“Actually, she hit her with the book and knocked her out.” Hanako said meekly. “She got mad because she scolded her for whining.”
“Really now?” Kiyoko said, turning to face Akako with a tired expression. “Akako, you're one of my best friends, but seriously, pull the stick outta your ass and grow up.”
“You shut up, or else you'll be pulling my foot outta your ass!” Akako growled, standing up.
“Does that mean you've learned how to fight overnight?” Kiyoko asked.
“Well... not exactly...” Akako said hesitantly. “But I'll still hurt you.” To punctuate this, she walked over to Kiyoko and stood inches from her, glaring at her.
“How many times have I told you that I do not fear you, Akako?” Kiyoko asked, narrowing her eyes. “If you wish to fight me, I will not back down.”
“Come get me when it's over!” Hanako squeaked, hurriedly exiting the car.
“Great... we've scared off Hanako.” Kiyoko sighed.
“She's scared off by even the slightest conflict, you know that, right?” Akako asked, not looking concerned in the slightest. “Forget about her for now. This is between you and me.”
“I'll worry about whoever I want, whenever I want, thank you very much.” Kiyoko snapped. “Now, I suggest you sit down and find something to do before you make me really mad.”
Akako suddenly seemed less enthusiastic about fighting her friend. “Whatever.” She huffed, sitting down and staring at the floor.
“Hanako, it's over.” Kiyoko called, turning to examine Tomoko. “Great... she might have a concussion.”
“Good, no one was hurt.” Hanako sighed out in a relieved tone as she entered. “Wait, Tomoko-chan has a concussion?”
“She might. There's a bump growing.” Kiyoko said. “Can you go get some ice for me?”
“Okay.” Hanako said with a hint of sadness, leaving again.
“I hope you're proud of yourself.” Kiyoko snapped, looking at Akako angrily. “She did nothing to deserve a concussion.”
“She pissed me off with that mouth of hers.” Akako snapped back. “I'm not in the mood for her big words and snarky attitude.”
“Then you ignore her!” Kiyoko growled. “You need to keep that temper of your in check!”
“Whatever. Just leave me alone.” Akako sighed, not looking at them.
“Here's the ice.” Hanako said as she entered, holding up a bag of ice.
“Thank you, Hanako.” Kiyoko said with a smile, taking the ice and applying it to Tomoko's head.
“Oh, and we're almost there now. Only a few more minutes.” Hanako added, sitting down.
“It's about time!” Akako cheered in exasperation. “I can't wait to see the place!”
“Yeah, the pictures in the brochure were beautiful.” Hanako said. “It must look even better in person.”
“If Tomoko doesn't wake up by the time we get there, one of us is gonna have to carry her out.” Kiyoko said. “And someone's gonna have to get her luggage.”
“Hmph. I'll handle her luggage.” Akako said grudgingly, still looking away.
“Thank you for volunteering. I'm glad you're showing some responsibility.” Kiyoko said with a smile.
“Shut up already. Someone has to do it, and I think I can handle her stuff.” Akako muttered.
“All of it? She needed help getting her stuff on the train.” Kiyoko laughed.
“She's weak. I'll handle all of it.” Akako boasted, puffing out her chest.
“We'll see. We may as well get our stuff gathered now before we get there.” Kiyoko said with a shrug. “The storage car is 3 back that way, I think.”
“Alright, let's go.” Akako said, leading the way to the storage car. When they got there, they locate all of their luggage, and started making trip back to their car. Akako and Kiyoko had an average amount of luggage, while Hanako had several more bags, filled with ecology magazines and the like. When they finally got to Tomoko's luggage, the three sweatdropped. “You mean THIS all hers?” Akako shouted in disbelief, staring in shock at the large pile of suitcases, most of which were filled with books.
“Yep, that's all hers.” Hanako said. “It took ten trips to get all this stuff on.”
“Anata wa karakatte iru iu.*” Akako muttered.
“Nope. Not kidding.” Kiyoko said. “You might need help.”
“Yeah... I will.” Akako stuttered. “This is gonna be fun.”
(*Say you're kidding.)
Well, that was Chapter 1. It only took a whole weekend to do it, less if I hadn't have needed to play with my sister by my mom's mandate, and my mom needing the computer for her stuff. This was fun, and I'll be starting the next chapter as soon as possible. So as always, enjoy, and review, if you would. I need as much constructive criticism as possible. Thank you, and sayonara.
Calvin127 out.
Chapter 1: Train Ride of Hell
“Hey, when do you suppose this train will get there? We've been riding for hours!” A whiny female voice said, piercing through the recent silence. The owner of the voice was a brunette of about average height and weight with dark brown eyes and a perpetual scowl.
“To be precise, exactly 3 hours, 47 minutes, 23.5 seconds, mark.” A second voice said, this one sounding more mature and sophisticated. The speaker was a skinny black-haired girl with large glasses and an apparent inability to smile, as it looked like she hadn't smiled once in her life. Her nose was currently in a thick book. “By the way, that round of silence lasted 5 minutes, 18.675 seconds.”
“Shut up, Tomoko. Go back to your book.” The first girl snapped, cutting her eyes at the bookworm.
“You know, Akako, you have no one to blame for your boredom, save yourself.” Tomoko said calmly, looking over the top of the book and her glasses at Akako. “I've offered you books to read, and you declined them all rather rudely. Even Hanako suggested you go to sleep, but did you listen?” Her answer came in the form of Akako getting up, snatching the book, and closing it. “I was reading that, you know.”
“Read this.” Akako sneered back, slamming Tomoko over the head with the book. The weight and density of the book was more than enough to render a person unconscious for awhile, which was exactly what it did to Tomoko. Akako smiled, knowing she wouldn't be hearing from her for awhile, and put the book next to her before going back to her seat.
“You know, you didn't have to knock her out.” A blond girl said, going over to check Tomoko's unconscious form. “She did nothing wrong.”
“Hanako, stay out of it.” Akako growled, looking out the window. “Unless, of course, you'd like to join her in Dreamland.”
“Kiyoko-chan, she's threatening me!” Hanako called out, casting a fearful look at Akako. At that moment, a tall redheaded girl stepped into their car, looking none too amused.
“Akako, what is it gonna take for you to settle down?” The girl apparently called Kiyoko said with a tired sigh. “Honestly, you've been insufferable this whole ride, and we've still got x amount of hours to go.”
“If you must know, I'd love nothing more than to be able to take a nap, but it's too bumpy.” Akako grumbled.
“It can't be if Tomoko's fast asleep.” Kiyoko said, pointing to the unconscious girl.
“Actually, she hit her with the book and knocked her out.” Hanako said meekly. “She got mad because she scolded her for whining.”
“Really now?” Kiyoko said, turning to face Akako with a tired expression. “Akako, you're one of my best friends, but seriously, pull the stick outta your ass and grow up.”
“You shut up, or else you'll be pulling my foot outta your ass!” Akako growled, standing up.
“Does that mean you've learned how to fight overnight?” Kiyoko asked.
“Well... not exactly...” Akako said hesitantly. “But I'll still hurt you.” To punctuate this, she walked over to Kiyoko and stood inches from her, glaring at her.
“How many times have I told you that I do not fear you, Akako?” Kiyoko asked, narrowing her eyes. “If you wish to fight me, I will not back down.”
“Come get me when it's over!” Hanako squeaked, hurriedly exiting the car.
“Great... we've scared off Hanako.” Kiyoko sighed.
“She's scared off by even the slightest conflict, you know that, right?” Akako asked, not looking concerned in the slightest. “Forget about her for now. This is between you and me.”
“I'll worry about whoever I want, whenever I want, thank you very much.” Kiyoko snapped. “Now, I suggest you sit down and find something to do before you make me really mad.”
Akako suddenly seemed less enthusiastic about fighting her friend. “Whatever.” She huffed, sitting down and staring at the floor.
“Hanako, it's over.” Kiyoko called, turning to examine Tomoko. “Great... she might have a concussion.”
“Good, no one was hurt.” Hanako sighed out in a relieved tone as she entered. “Wait, Tomoko-chan has a concussion?”
“She might. There's a bump growing.” Kiyoko said. “Can you go get some ice for me?”
“Okay.” Hanako said with a hint of sadness, leaving again.
“I hope you're proud of yourself.” Kiyoko snapped, looking at Akako angrily. “She did nothing to deserve a concussion.”
“She pissed me off with that mouth of hers.” Akako snapped back. “I'm not in the mood for her big words and snarky attitude.”
“Then you ignore her!” Kiyoko growled. “You need to keep that temper of your in check!”
“Whatever. Just leave me alone.” Akako sighed, not looking at them.
“Here's the ice.” Hanako said as she entered, holding up a bag of ice.
“Thank you, Hanako.” Kiyoko said with a smile, taking the ice and applying it to Tomoko's head.
“Oh, and we're almost there now. Only a few more minutes.” Hanako added, sitting down.
“It's about time!” Akako cheered in exasperation. “I can't wait to see the place!”
“Yeah, the pictures in the brochure were beautiful.” Hanako said. “It must look even better in person.”
“If Tomoko doesn't wake up by the time we get there, one of us is gonna have to carry her out.” Kiyoko said. “And someone's gonna have to get her luggage.”
“Hmph. I'll handle her luggage.” Akako said grudgingly, still looking away.
“Thank you for volunteering. I'm glad you're showing some responsibility.” Kiyoko said with a smile.
“Shut up already. Someone has to do it, and I think I can handle her stuff.” Akako muttered.
“All of it? She needed help getting her stuff on the train.” Kiyoko laughed.
“She's weak. I'll handle all of it.” Akako boasted, puffing out her chest.
“We'll see. We may as well get our stuff gathered now before we get there.” Kiyoko said with a shrug. “The storage car is 3 back that way, I think.”
“Alright, let's go.” Akako said, leading the way to the storage car. When they got there, they locate all of their luggage, and started making trip back to their car. Akako and Kiyoko had an average amount of luggage, while Hanako had several more bags, filled with ecology magazines and the like. When they finally got to Tomoko's luggage, the three sweatdropped. “You mean THIS all hers?” Akako shouted in disbelief, staring in shock at the large pile of suitcases, most of which were filled with books.
“Yep, that's all hers.” Hanako said. “It took ten trips to get all this stuff on.”
“Anata wa karakatte iru iu.*” Akako muttered.
“Nope. Not kidding.” Kiyoko said. “You might need help.”
“Yeah... I will.” Akako stuttered. “This is gonna be fun.”
(*Say you're kidding.)
Well, that was Chapter 1. It only took a whole weekend to do it, less if I hadn't have needed to play with my sister by my mom's mandate, and my mom needing the computer for her stuff. This was fun, and I'll be starting the next chapter as soon as possible. So as always, enjoy, and review, if you would. I need as much constructive criticism as possible. Thank you, and sayonara.
Calvin127 out.