Hoth's work in progress :/

[ngaurhoth1]

So I have one pokemon picture so far... I'm practicing the Pokemon Adventure/Special manga style and thus far I have done Gold:
http://ngaurhoth1.deviantart.com/art/Pokemon-Special-test-1-146280782

Um so yeah it sucks, but critque is nice ^^;
Also if anyone has any tips for doing Manga style and/or is willing to help me get full body pictures, close ups of eyes, and/or big pictures would be much appreciated. I'll tka e a request for any character but silver, he's my favorite so I don't want to do him until I have mastered this style.

 

[Pidgeot]

Looks good, but work on the left eye. Looks kinda bad.

 

[ngaurhoth1]

Looks good, but work on the left eye. Looks kinda bad.

Yeah, I always have trouble with other eye, even when they are looking straight-foward o_x
There anything you think doesn't look pokemon special like
Oh and there anyone you want me to try drawing, any position(except for sexual but not the point)? Like I said I'm up for anyone but Silver.