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EVERYONE: - Complete Illumination

Jaye

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So this was a short story (about 6 or 7 chapters) I was working on but have kinda neglected lately for other projects. I'm thinking of finishing it at some point, but thought it'd be a good idea to put up what I've written so far to get some feedback.

A brief summary of the story: set after the events of Pokemon XY, told from the perspective of the rival character as he attempts to rediscover his purpose as a trainer.

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Chapter One

Cul-de-Sac

~*~

Calem had lost again.

He really shouldn’t have been surprised. Serena, his neighbour and appointed rival, had not only beaten him several times before, but had since defeated the Elite Four and the Champion. He couldn’t remember what drove him to even challenge her again – did he think that she would have grown complacent after attaining Champion status?

The sky above Kiloude City was clear obsidian and dotted with countless stars. The moon was full and impossibly large, almost reachable from the hill they were standing atop of. Serena stood in front of it, her pretty face slightly flushed from their recent battle and beaming at her success. Her shoulder length blonde hair was covered by a navy blue cap. Now wearing her large blue overcoat with gold embroidery, she looked the part as Kalos’ new Champion.

Then there was Calem, still in the same clothes from when he left his home many months ago, still with the same boring haircut.

“You’re really amazing, you know that?” he said.

Serena’s smile turned sheepish, and she scratched her cheek with her finger.

“I don’t know about that,” she said. “If it weren’t for my Pokemon, I would have never gotten this far. And I always had you pushing me to get better.”

Calem tried to smile, but it didn’t quite reach his eyes. He had been the one to start their rivalry, solely with the intention of having her push him to get better, with the end result being him standing ion top. He hadn’t considered that the opposite would end up being true.

“It looks like I’ve done all I can now, though.”

Serena tilted her head in confusion. “What do you mean?”

Calem leaned back against the railing surrounding the hill-top plaza. He looked up at a streetlamp glaring at him. It flicked momentarily, then continued to shine on him.

“The gap between us is too wide now,” he explained. “Hell, if I’m being honest, it’s been that way for a while. The moment you beat me for the Mega Ring you just… accelerated way beyond me and I could never hope to catch up.” He chuckled humorously and looked down at his wrist where his own Mega Ring resided. “Not that I’m saying that Mega Evolution is the difference between us. I might have thought that before, but that’s clearly not the case.”

Serena frowned. “I always found you a difficult opponent, though.” Calem raised his brow. “I mean it! Even today, I had to really give it my all to win.”

“I’ll take your word for it,” Calem said. He had no doubt Serena was being sincere, but he just couldn’t accept her assessment of their battle. He may have forced her to use all six members of her tea, but he only managed to defeat two.

There was silence between them. The streetlamp continued to flicker on and off above Calem’s head.

“What will you do now?” Calem asked.

“I’ll be taking a short break,” Serena said. She looked up at the moon and the smile returned to her face. “The last month or so have been so crazy, what with the Team Flare incident, preparing for the Elite Four and the parade. Some downtime would be great.”

“You deserve it.”

We deserve it,” Serena said, looking at him. “After that, I’ll be starting my new schedule. Events, seminars, interviews – things like that. What about you?”

Calem was silent. He had spent the past month training with the Mega Evolution Guru in an attempt to catch up to Serena. He hadn’t given much thought about what he’d do afterwards, whether he won or lost.

“I guess I’ll go home and put my feet up for a bit,” he said eventually. “After that… I don’t know, maybe I’ll go to another region or something.”

“Oh, that sounds great!” Serena chirped. “Just imagine – you could become the Champion of another region, and we could have exhibition matches.”

He gave an unsure smile. “That’s the dream, I guess.”

The street lamp flickered once more before the light extinguished.

~*~​

Calem stayed in Kiloude City for the night before he parted with Serena and boarded the train headed back to Lumiose City. He stepped out of the station and into North Boulevard. The sky was overcast despite it being a warm, summer’s day, giving the air in the city a clammy feeling. Several of the people walking across the city’s many streets were visibly sweating, and a long line was forming in front of a gelato stand not far from the station. He walked over to the taxi bay and took a seat on a bench, intending to take a taxi to the Pokemon Centre on South Boulevard and then leave the city via Route 4. After that, he would head straight home.

As per usual in Lumiose City, he didn’t have to wait long for a taxi to pull up in front of him. Calem told the driver where he wanted to go and got into the back seat of the blue and white car. The car drove along in silence. Calem busied himself by looking out the window at the city’s traffic, idly wondering if it’ll take longer to get to his destination.

“If you don’t mind me saying, sir,” the driver, a portly man with silver hair and moustache, started, “but were you not one of the five awarded the Star of Kalos two weeks ago?”

Calem grimaced. Sycamore had honest intentions when he arranged a parade celebrating their efforts to take down Team Flare. Serena, as the newly crowned Champion, had been the undisputed star of the show, but that didn’t mean the rest of them escaped the spotlight. When he took to the city’s streets the following morning and was instantly recognised by several people, he grew even keener to isolate himself in a mountain somewhere for training.

“I was.”

“I thought so,” the driver said, voice high in admiration. “To be able meet heroes like you is one of the perks of this job.”

Calem stared at the back of the driver’s seat. “A hero?” he said. “I don’t know about that. It’s not like I did much, honestly.”

“Don’t sell yourself so short, my boy. Anyone who faced Team Flare that day was a hero.”

He remained silent and looked out of the car window again. They were stopped at a traffic light, surrounded on all sides by other vehicles. He felt sweat form on his brow and he wiped it with his sleeve. The taxi was stifling.

“Shall I turn the air conditioning up?” the driver asked, having spotted his movement in the mirror.

“Yes, please.”

The driver tapped a button on the car dashboard. The whir from the air vents increased and Calem immediately felt cooler.

“So I have to ask,” the driver started. Calem sighed quietly. “How well do you know the Champion, Serena? She had a lot of nice things to say about you in the interviews.”

There it is, he thought. Having people wanting to know more about him would have been flattering, but he knew he was far from the star of the show.

“She moved to my hometown a few months ago, we left on this big journey together, and were rivals for a bit. That’s all there is to it.”

“To beat Diantha at such a young age is incredible. That girl will be a huge success.”

“Of course she will.”

“But you’re not bad yourself, right? Maybe you could challenge her for the title.”

Calem gave a non-committal grunt. “Yeah, maybe.”

The light finally turned green and the taxi accelerated. They passed the Hotel Richissme, where Calem, Serena and the others had stayed the night before and after the parade, and eventually turned into South Boulevard. The trip went by mostly in silence, broken only by the driver asking questions about Serena that Calem answered patiently.

“Is there anything else happening in the city right now?” Calem asked, keen to steer the conversation away from Serena’s choice in fashion.

“Oh, not much, really. I had a passenger in here the other day who was concerned about children frequenting dark alleys, but I don’t believe it’s anything sinister.”

Finally, they arrived just outside the Pokemon Centre on South Boulevard. Calem thanked the driver and handed over the fee, then left the vehicle. He walked in the Pokemon Centre and immediately felt the chill of the air conditioning turned on at full blast. The centre was a little more populated than usual, and he suspected people were more keen to take advantage of the air conditioning than to use the centre’s services.

Calem spotted an open spot on the lounge sofa and took a seat. He wanted to use the centre’s phone services to call home and inform his parents he’d be home soon, but every booth was occupied. Beside him, two mature women, dressed in business suits, were talking animatedly about their work conditions. Calem ignored them, until the conversation turned.

“My boy went into one of those alleys,” one said while scrunching up her face.

The other looked aghast. “Not again.”

“I keep asking but he won’t tell me why he’s going down there.”

“Maybe it’s about time someone went and checked on what they’re doing.”

“But I want to trust him when he says there’s nothing going on…”

He stopped listening then and took a look at the cue for the phones. Seeing that the lines weren’t going to go down any time soon, he rose from the sofa. He figured he could just call his parents in Santalune City when he arrived.

Calem left the Pokemon Centre and walked down the path towards a crossing. There, he would cross over, and then head towards the Route 4 gateway. Along the way, he passed a narrow alley way. He looked down the narrow strip of path leading into a shadowed area, and wondered what kids could possibly be doing down there. Exploring, maybe. Grand cities such as Lumiose had no shortage of unexplored nooks and crannies that could be claimed as secret hideouts or something. Yet it was also possible that there was something more untoward and sinister going on; this was, after all, the city that Team Flare resided in under the noses of all its residents.

Maybe I should check around, just in case, he thought. And with that in mind, he turned down the alley.

It was a tight squeeze, with barely enough room to extend his arms either side of his head. As he progressed deeper, he caught the sound of young, high-pitched voices. He stopped and listened for a bit, but couldn’t quite make out their conversation. He went in further, until the path fed up into a much wider, rectangular cul-de-sac. Awaiting him there were four children huddled around something. Two he recognised as school children, a boy and girl in uniform shouldering backpacks. The other two were small girls with blonde hair, most likely twins.

The moment Calem took a step towards them, their heads snapped in his direction. Calem immediately froze, as if he had just been spotted by a horde of wild Pokemon.

“Um, hi?” he said lamely. “I’m not going to hurt you or anything—“

“It’s an adult!” one of the blonde girls cried.

“Adults aren’t allowed!” said the other.

The schoolgirl stepped in front of the blonde twins and pointed dramatically at Calem.

“You shouldn’t be here!” She turned to the boy, who was standing nervously to one side. “Come on Macon, say something as well!”

Macon stood to attention. “Huh? Oh, yeah, um… no grown-ups allowed. Yeah.”

The girls all sighed, gazing at Macon in disappointing as he rubbed the back of his head sheepishly. The schoolgirl looked to Calem again who, by this point, was more bemused than alarmed at the children’s aggressive behaviour.

“If you don’t leave peacefully we’ll make you leave.”

Calem smiled down at her. “You don’t need to threaten me. I’m not here to hurt you.”

She frowned. “Yeah, right, we’ve heard that one before!” She pulled a Pokeball from her skirt pocket. “Help me out here, Marcon.”

Marcon sighed and also took a Pokeball from his pocket. “Fine, if I have to.”

“I really don’t want to fight you,” he said, holding his hands up in a placating way. “I just need you to listen to me.”

“We’ll listen to you if you win,” the girl retorted.

Calem considered his options. He had only turned down the alley out of concern for the shadier elements of the city, but he had stumbled into one of those secret hideouts. Anything keeping him there now would just be his own curiosity, and he certainly wasn’t about to be battling kids to satisfy that.

“You know what? Forget it. I don’t care what you’re doing,” he said, and turned to leave.

Marcon gave a sigh of relief. “We won’t have to fight after all.”

The girl latched onto his shoulder. “Don’t let him leave!” she hissed down his ear. “He might tell on us to our parents…”

“I don’t even know who your parents are, kid.”

Calem could feel a headache coming on. Were kids always this suspicious? He decided he couldn’t be bothered to deal with them anymore and began walking away, ignoring the indignant cries from the girl to stop.

“Why did I even bother?” he grumbled.

He only got partway down the alley, however, until he felt something soft bump into his shins. He glanced down to see a pair of lilac, vacuous eyes staring back up at him. They belonged to a bipedal, feline Pokemon with pale grey fur. He instantly recognised it as an Espurr, a Pokemon he was very familiar with.

“Where did you come from?”

He knelt down to pet it on the head. The Espurr evaded his hand and darted into the cul-de-sac behind him.

“Mimi’s always been there,” a new voice said. “You just didn’t notice, mister.”

He looked up to see another girl. She was taller than the others, with thick, dark hair bunched together into two messy ponytails and blue eyes. Her face was grubby, like it hadn’t been washed in days. She wore a white blouse with a thinning, patched up pale blue sweater, a stained brown skirt and a ripped pair of tights. Yet despite her ragged appearance, the girl was smiling, and her eyes were clear and bright.

“I see,” Calem said. “Have you always been there, too?”

The girl tilted her head. “No, I just got here. What about you, mister? When did you get here?”

Before Calem could answer, the four children gathered around the newcomer and burst into conversation, each voicing their opinion about Calem’s presence at the same time. He grimaced as he caught words like “suspicious”, “sneaky” and “snitch”. The older girl raised her hands up and told them to calm down.

“It’s not nice to make accusations about someone you don’t know,” she said. “Why don’t we let him explain his side of the story?”

All eyes turned to him. Calem sighed. “Well, you see…”

~*~​

He stood at the window and squinted through the binds at the busy avenue. His face was rough and unshaven, and his eyes red and puffy. In his mouth hung a lit cigarette, idly smoking away; a rare indulgence but one that felt entirely necessary after an all-nighter spent pouring over files and documents in his office, with nothing but his sleep-addled brain for company.

He had been in the city for only a few days, but he could already see why it was the number one tourist destination in the world. There was an abundance of things to do and places to see, and to be associated with the city’s style, if only for a short while, was an enticing prospect for anyone. Yet little did those people know that the web-like design of the city was also a trap.

He took a long drag of his cigarette and exhaled loudly. The larger and more complex a city became, the easier it was to hide away its criminal elements. It was common knowledge now that Team Flare, who but a month ago threatened all life in the region, operated from a café tucked away in an alley not for from Lumiose Tower. But before then, people walked past the very same café without suspecting a thing. It wasn’t a lack of vigilance on their part; they just had no reason to suspect anything was going on.

That was why people like him existed.

The same people would go on with their daily lives, thinking the problem was resolved. Previous experience told him otherwise. He had been sent to the city for the very purpose of tying up that inevitable loose end.

The sun emerged from behind the thick cloud cover and light filtered in through the binds. He turned away and stood next to his desk. Scattered all over the surface were pieces of paper and cardboard folders. In one corner was an empty mug where the scent of strong coffee lingered. Next to it was an ash tray. He placed his cigarette inside it and extinguished it, then looked at his watch.

12:30.

There was a meeting with an informant scheduled later that day. In the meantime, he would head out to patrol the city. Rumour had been rife about suspicious activity taking place in the city’s alleys. It may not have any connection to the other case he was working on, but his gut was telling him it was worth investigating.

And when you had a gut as hard boiled as his, it was worth paying attention to.
 
Chapter Two

Emma

~*~

“Oh, it’s that rumour again,” the girl said from her seated position on the ground. She sat with her knees up, tucked in toward her chest, with her arms wrapped around them. The other three girls sat close enough to her to be touching, while Marcon, the one boy of the group, sat nearby but made sure there was a decent gap between them. Mimi, the Espurr, sat at the girl’s feet.

Calem found himself sitting opposite the group with his back to the alleyway entrance. He didn’t think he’d need to, but he was well positioned for a quick escape.

“I wasn’t sent here by anyone,” he said for what felt like the hundredth time in the last few minutes. “I thought there could be something a bit more, you know, sinister behind the rumour, so I decided to investigate.”

“Nothing sinister here – just some kids playing around,” the older girl said. “I know everyone’s a bit on edge after recent events but come on, we’re not planning on taking over the city or anything.”

“If that’s the case, why not tell your parents the whole story? Maybe they wouldn’t worry so much then.”

The girl gave a bitter smile. “I’m the ratty, filthy street urchin with no home. Parents don’t want their children near me.”

Calem wasn’t sure how to respond to that. The kids sitting close to the girl were quick to protest, however.

“Don’t put yourself down like that, Emma!” the schoolgirl said.

“Yeah, you’re really cool!” the twins chorused.

The girl, Emma, smiled warmly and patted the twins on the head. “Thanks.”

“So is that why you guys tried to drive me away earlier? Because you were protecting Emma?”

“Mimi too!”

Calem took a closer look at the Espurr. Its fur was matted and covered in patches of dirt, and it looked a touch on the thin side. Its claws were longer than usual, doubtlessly uncut for some time. Coupled with its psychic power, he didn’t think Mimi needed any protection.

“Mimi’s a wild Pokemon, right?”

Emma nodded. “That’s right. How could you tell?”

“You wouldn’t need to protect a Pokemon if it belonged to someone,” Calem explained. “You’d just put it back into its ball. Also…”

He took note of Emma’s appearance and circumstances.

“Also?”

He shook his head. “Nothing. Just rambling on.” He took a look at his watch; the afternoon was creeping on. He stood up. “I better get going.”

“He’s going to tell on us!” the schoolgirl cried, leaping up onto her feet.

“Cut that out,” Emma told her sharply. “He already said he wasn’t going to tell anybody, right?”

Chastised, the girl fell silent. Calem sighed.

“While I do think you guys,” he started, gesturing to the younger children, “shouldn’t keep this a secret from your parents, it’s not really my business. I’m just going to head straight for the gatehouse and leave the city.”

“Are you on a Pokemon journey?” Marcon asked, noticeably more interested in the conversation than he was.

“I was. I’m actually returning home now.”

“Do you think we could have a battle?” the boy asked, his eyes suddenly lit up. “I’ve never battled someone outside of school before. It’d be a great experience!”

Calem was reluctant. If he wanted to be home by evening, he had to leave soon. Marcon seemed to take his silence for a no and deflated. Calem tried not to feel guilty.

“Come on, mister, one little battle wouldn’t hurt, would it?” Emma said. “It’ll just be a bit of fun. No need to be so stiff!”

Stiff?

He tried to muster a response to that but the words died in his throat. He saw the children eyeing him expectedly. It was a silent pressure, one imploring him to reconsider. Did he dare disappoint them?

He considered Emma’s words. A battle with a boy from school would certainly be harmless, and likely over quickly. After all, there was a vast difference in their abilities, right? Marcon was a young boy, just learning about Pokemon, whereas he had travelled the land and earned eight gym badges.

But are you as good as you think you are? The thought had been lingering. He dismissed it as stupid. He might not be as good as Serena, but he was good enough to beat most trainers. Of course he was.

Finally, he gave in.

“All right, fine,” he said. Marcon cheered. Calem smiled sardonically. “Just go easy on me, okay?”

~*~

How does someone check alleyways for suspicious activity without looking suspicious themselves? He pondered this as he walked down South Boulevard, with his hands buried deep into the front pockets of his bulky brown trench coat. His choice in fashion attracted some eyes – a big, heavy coat on a hot and humid day seemed madness, even for the over-conscious, stylish types. But it wasn’t a fashion statement he was making; when he was on duty, he wore the coat.

From what he gathered during his own patrols and from surveying maps, South Boulevard had only one alley wide enough for humans to walk down comfortably. It was a short walk away from Restaurant La Nah, right on the threshold where South Boulevard became North Boulevard.

When the alley came into view, he noticed people peering into it with curious expressions, but walking on by as normal. As he stood in front of its shadowy entrance, he heard voices – the high-pitched, excited screaming of children. He stopped a passerby and asked what the noise was about.

“It’s probably just a battle. Those happen often in alleys like that one.”

He thanked the person, muttered something about wanting to go watch, and started down the alley. The deeper he went, the louder and more distinguishable the voices became. He heard what sounded like commands – a call for a Dark Pulse, countered by a call for Moonblast. The alley was suddenly lit up as the attacks collided, forcing him to shield his eyes. A cheer followed. He continued on, and came to the wide, rectangular cul-de-sac.

“That was an impressive Dark Pulse,” a boy said – a teenager, by his reckoning. He was of average height, with dark hair covered by a red cap. He wore a blue and white jacket with blue jeans, which were tucked into a pair of black boots. “Did you raise this Spiritomb?”

The teen was addressing a much younger boy, with neatly parted brown hair and wearing a pair of glasses.

“It belongs to my big brother,” the boy said sheepishly. “He lets me practice with it, since I’m not old enough to have my own Pokemon, and we can’t take the school’s Pokemon outside.”

In between either boy were the Pokemon in question. The Spiritomb, a hazy, swirling mass of deep purple and black emanating from a large stone, with a wide, jagged smile and pointed eyes, floated in front the younger boy. In front of the older boy was a Clefable, a bipedal creature with strawberry pink fur about the size of a small child. It had long, pointed ears with black tips, and a tightly curled tail resting below a pair of short wings.

He then noticed four girls standing behind the two boys, against the wall opposite the alley entrance. Two were very young, with blonde hair tied into pigtails – they appeared to be twins – and one appeared to be the same age as the boy with the Spiritomb. She had darker skin, and brown, bushy hair scrunched up either side of head.

The remaining girl caught his eye. She was older than the others, yet her appearance was far more ragged, with her filthy race and patched up clothes. His instincts as a detective was telling him there was something about this girl.

Then, her eyes met his.

“What are you standing over there for, mister?” she called out.

Immediately, all attention was on him. There was a mix of suspicion and surprise, with the eldest boy frowning and the eldest girl simply looking curious.

“I heard your battle taking place, and thought it may be connected to a case I’m investigating,” he said. He reached into a pocket on the inside of his coat and pulled out an ID card. “My name is Looker. I’m a detective, and I have some questions for you.”

The eldest boy sighed, and spoke to the younger boy. “Looks like our battle’s over.”

The younger boy nodded, and they both recalled their Pokemon.

“Now then—“ Looker was interrupted by a scruffy Espurr jumping out from behind the girls’ legs and charging straight for him. Startled, he took a step backwards, but before the Espurr could pounce on him, the eldest girl leapt forward and scooped it up into her arms. It flailed about before finally calming down. Looker looked at the pair reproachfully. “Is that your Pokemon?”

“No, Mimi is my friend,” she said, gently stroking the top of Mimi’s head. “She’s a little sweetie, honestly.”

Looker wasn’t convinced. “Maybe you should catch Mimi in a Pokeball, so it doesn’t attack humans in the future.”

“I’m not a trainer, and I have no money for Pokeballs,” the girl said. “Besides, she doesn’t usually attack people. Must have thought you were suspicious.”

The children nodded in agreement with the girl’s words and spoke some words of encouragement for Mimi. The elder boy muttered something to himself, but Looker was unable to make out what he said.

Looker cleared his throat. “That aside, I have a question for you, Mimi’s friend: what are you all doing here?”

“Well, everyone here are friends. We’re just playing,” the girl said. She pointed to the eldest boy. “This guy here—“

“Calem,” the boy said tersely.

Calem here arrived not long before you did, for the same reason. We’re really not doing anything suspicious.”

“But why pick a dark alley to play in?” Looker said. “Lumiose is filled with open spaces, plazas and sunny corners. It’d be better for you kids to play in the sunshine.”

“Oh, would it?” the girl said innocently. “Mimi and I have always lived in alleys, so we wouldn’t know much about that.”

Looker hesitated before asking his next question. “What about your parents?”

“They’re gone.”

A heavy silence fell on the alley. Looker assessed the situation. Whatever sinister dealings may have been occurring in the alleys of Lumiose, it was evident that it wasn’t occurring in this particular alley, and wasn’t involving these children at all. Rather, it was a case of a group of children rallying around a homeless girl.

That was an entirely different problem for him. He may not have discovered any suspicious to investigate, but he found something that, as a person who enforces the law, and simply as an adult, he couldn’t leave alone in good conscious. That a child had been left alone for any length of time was something worth investigating.

“But I have Mimi with me, and all my friends, so I’m never alone,” the girl said, perhaps in an effort to lighten the mood.

“Indeed, you may not be alone, but that isn’t the problem here,” Looker said. “Now that I’ve found you, I can’t just leave you here like this, so I have a proposition for you.”

The girl raised her brow, while Mimi glared at Looker, as if warning him to pick his words carefully. To the side, Calem was watching the scene unfold with interest. Looker made a note to speak with the boy as well.

“What did you have in mind?” the girl asked.

“I want you to stay in my bureau,” Looker said. “It might not be for long, but it’d be better for you to stay somewhere safe while we work out what to do next.”

The girl was flustered by Looker’s suggestion. “Um, I don’t know…”

“I won’t force you,” Looker added, “but I have to insist. You’ll be warm, safe and well-fed at the bureau. I’ll extend the offer to Mimi as well.”

Mimi hissed at Looker and wriggled free of the girl’s grip on her. It charged straight at Looker, passed through his legs and escaped down the narrow alley entrance, ignoring the girl’s pleas for it to stop. Looker watched it go in surprise.

“Why did she run off?”

“Mimi’s not good with humans, I guess,” the girl said. “Listen, Mr. Looker-guy, I’m happy that you’re looking out for me, but I can’t go with you. Mimi likes it here better, and I’m not going without her.”

“That’s understandable, but it’s possible Mimi may come to accept me in time.” Looker was silent as he pondered a moment. He was uncomfortable with leaving the girl alone, but also didn’t want to force her to come with him against her wishes.

“How about this,” Calem said. “I’ll go look for Mimi and bring her back here. Meanwhile, you two can talk things over, and get to know each other a bit better. If Emma feels like Mr. Looker is trustworthy, then maybe Mimi will as well.”

“That sounds like it’d be worth a try,” Looker said. He looked to Emma. “Is that okay with you?”

Emma nodded uncertainly. “I guess so.”

“Then I’ll be counting on you, young man,” Looker told Calem.

“All right then,” Calem said, “any idea where Mimi might have gone?”

“Mimi likes to go into the alleys on North Boulevard when she wonders. You could try there.”

Calem nodded, then took off down the alley and back out into the city. Looker then took a seat on the floor, using the bottom of his jacket to protect his trousers from the dirt and dust, and faced Emma.

“Now then, where do we begin?”

~*~

Calem had rushed out the alley as quick as he could, and was fortunate enough to catch a glimpse of Mimi as she weaved in and out of people’s legs. He did his best to follow without losing sight or knocking into people.

His pursuit took him to North Boulevard, and when he saw the scruffy Pokemon turn into an alley, he stopped to catch his breath. His forehead was drenched with sweat, and his cheeks flushed with exertion. In truth, chasing the Pokemon might not have been the best way to earn its trust, but he knew if he lost sight of her he would be in for a very long and exhausting day of searching the wide expanses of North Boulevard for a small and easily missed Espurr.

Once he had recovered, he followed Mimi down the alley, and came to a cul-de-sac much like the one he found Emma in. Mimi spotted his approach and backed up against the wall. She hissed at him. Calem got down onto his knees and held out his hands in a placating way.

“Easy there, Mimi. I’m not going to hurt you or anything.”

His words had no effect. Calem figured he would need to take a different approach, and called out his Meowstic – of the male variety, Meowstic had navy blue fur trimmed with white. It’s large, pointed ears were folded either side of a white, fluffy fringe of fur. It had two puffy tails that curled inwards.

“You think you could convince Mimi,” Calem nodded to the Espurr, “that I’m not a threat to her?”

Calem’s Meowstic padded up to Mimi and began speaking to it in what sounded to Calem like a nonsensical string of sounds. Mimi was reluctant at first, but gradually grew into conversation. He watched as Mimi started waving its tiny arms around animatedly, and his Meowstic nodded his head. Then, it turned to him, and squeaked at him. It began to hop up and down, its ears and tails bobbing along.

Calem frowned. “Do you want me to jump?”

Meowstic shook his head. It hopped a couple of times, then did a pirouette.

“Hopping, spinning… dancing? You want me to dance?”

Meowstic and Mimi both nodded at this, and then stared at Calem expectantly. Between Mimi’s vacant, wide eyed gaze and the sharp stare of his Meowstic, Calem found the sight a little disconcerting.

“I don’t dance.”

Yet the staring continued. Calem grimaced at the thought of dancing, not least because he simply didn’t know how and would almost certainly make an idiot of himself. But if he needed to do it in order for Mimi to trust him, then…

He stood up and looked around the alley, making sure nobody was looking.

“Any requests?” he said. He received two blank stares in return. “No, I suppose not. Um…”

Calem stood rigid, his mind drawing blanks about what to do next. He started by moving his arms around a bit, extending them fully, then bringing them back into the body, looking as if he was doing an aerobic exercise then a dance. He hopped on the spot on the bit, then waved his arms about randomly, performing some form of star jump. This was followed by a spin, and then more star jumps.

Mimi and Meowstic continued to stare blankly, but soon burst into high-pitched laughter. Calem, feeling his face heat up, halted his flailing and glared at the pair of them.

“Okay, that’s enough,” he said. “Does Mimi trust me now?”

The two Pokemon finished laughing. Mimi nodded its small head, and Calem breathed a sigh of relief. He took another glance over his shoulder, and thanked whatever higher power there was that nobody had seen him.

“Thanks for your help, Meowstic,” he told his Pokemon, stroking his head before returning him to his Pokeball. He then reached out tentatively to touch Mimi, and when the Espurr didn’t move away, he ran his fingers gently through her fur. “Now let’s get you back to Emma. She has a big decision to make, and you’re an important factor, you know?”

He scooped Mimi up into his arms. She didn’t resist, and simply rested there as Calem exited the alley and return to the open area of North Boulevard. He walked at a brisk pace, knowing it’d take a good few minutes to return to the South Boulevard alley. He wondered if Looker and Emma were having a good discussion, and hoped Emma would accept his offer in the end. Guilt pricked at him. He hadn’t volunteered to find Mimi because he felt confident about finding her, but because he had no right to listen in on the delicate discussion taking place between Emma and Looker. He respected the detective for his desire to help her, if only for a short while, while he had been prepared to leave the kids alone and go on about his life as if he hadn’t met them. The thought was an uncomfortable one.

~*~
Calem, with Mimi still in his arms, returned to the alley on South Boulevard to find only Emma and Looker there. The children, he guessed, had been either sent away or returned home before their parents grew worried.

Emma wore a big smile on her face that somehow grew wider when she spotted Calem and Mimi.

“You actually brought her back! How’d you get her to like you so fast?”

“I’d like to know as well. You were very quick about it,” Looker added, stroking his chin in thought.

Calem released Mimi from his arms, and she scurried over to Emma’s side. She beamed down at her. Calem smiled at the scene.

“I had my Meowstic help me out and bridge the communication gap,” was all he said.

“Nonetheless, it’s impressive work,” Looker said. “I’d like to talk with you once this is all sorted, if you don’t mind.”

Calem was curious, but just nodded in agreement for the time being. There was a more important matter to attend to.

Emma picked Mimi up so she was face level with her. “Mimi, I’ve had a long talk with Mr. Looker, and he’s a really cool guy. He’s not going to hurt either of us.”

Mimi seemed to contemplate her words for a few moments, before nodded its head once. Emma grinned. “Then it’s decided! We’ll be staying with Mr. Looker from now on.”

Looked appeared relieved after those words were spoken. “Let’s return to the Looker Bureau, then. Young man, if you could join us, that’d be good too.”

Calem looked at his watch. It was late afternoon. By this point, his plan to return home by the end of the day had been curtailed completely. He expected to feel annoyed about that, but having helped, in his own small way, a homeless girl find a home made up for it. What was being held back an extra day compared to that? He could always leave the next morning.

Yes, he would complete his business with Looker, says his goodbyes, and then set off home. After that… well, he needed to think about that.
 
I really enjoy Kalos so I enjoy your fanfiction. Words are smooth and sounds good in my head when I read. Good job. Thank you.
 
My awards review:

‘Post-game’ stories seem to be on trend at the moment, and this one is an interesting take on that. The first half of the first chapter is intriguing and sets things up well in laying the ground for Calem and telling the other side of the X/Y story. However, as intriguing as the dodgy alleyway story is, it hasn’t gone anywhere in two chapters, merely setting things up while also leaving Calem in a lurch.

Setting of any form is sparsely described but some beautifully simple descriptions do emerge from time to time, most notably the world Serena and Calem find themselves in post-match. Later attempts at describing the city itself are not of the same level, but several pleasing word choices do highlight the atmosphere of Lumiose post-Flare

The story excels with it's characters. The first chapter is dripping with relatable and intriguing characters: Calem’s disappointment and loss, the schoolkids, the nosey, starstruck taxi driver, stubborn Emma, Mimi, Looker. I wish the second chapter had done more to move Calem’s story along instead of giving us a lengthy dance interlude, especially given it’s apparent length, but the stage has been set and I have high hopes for the future of Calem and where he will go.

There was a lot of simple description that worked when executed and it allowed the story to focus on Calem like it is supposed to. However, I am not a fan of dialogue, short sentence heavy stories, and I think some more description or juicier sentences could have helped the story out.

However, for a story only two chapters in, I was very impressed. This style of post-game stories do tend to work well as they give you a lot of information and character history right from the get go. The main downside here though is that there isn’t much of a story, and the whole second chapter does little to move along anything that was set up in the first chapter. An ambitious and intriguing idea that looks set to go places, but needs to maintain the quality of the first in order to achieve that. Hopefully we see more of it soon!
 
Illumination | VTP-Dawkins93

PLOT

For starters, I like the angle you've taken. The XY rival always, always made me sad. Calem, in this case, was destined --daresay, programmed-- for you to beat down over, and over again. I genuinely felt bad for beating him. I've always wanted to read his side of the story.

This Calem seems to be a close copy of the game's version. Right off the bat, Calem admits to having a selfish edge to his rivalry with Serena: "He had been the one to start their rivalry, solely with the intention of having her push him to get better, with the end result being him standing ion top. He hadn’t considered that the opposite would end up being true." That's interesting for a protagonist to admit. The genre usually has two flavors (douche rival or smol, eager child), so seeing his resentment up close is insightful. That quote also has a typo, oops!

SETTING

Lumiose City (the setting so far) isn't described in much detail. While reading about Looker and Calem traveling through it, I find myself imagining the gameplay from my own playthrough. While not necessarily bad (I do get a vivid picture), it just leaves a bit to be desired in the description.

It's currently a game-to-text rendition of XY, but focusing on Calem (the rival) as a participant in the Looker sidequest. As of chapter one, it hasn't deviated from the gameplay in any major way, although it does expand on Looker's perspective slightly. The story hasn't really differentiated itself from the others yet. Yet. Chapter two includes Emma in this a bit more, and follows Calem as he finds Mimi/etc. Standard fare from the games.

CHARACTERIZATION


The "smoking detective musing darkly" scene was chock full of cliches, but they weren't necessarily bad. Calem is rather apathetic toward each situation; this technically makes sense. I always figured the poor guy was mildly depressed over his lack of success. The scene with Meowstic and Mimi giving Calem the staredown was very cute.

STYLE

The prose is plain, but to the point. No floweriness. It makes for a slow, refreshing read: not everything has to be ~~magical~~ or screaming about its uniqueness. It's not trying to be flashy and I can really appreciate that. However, there's a lot of explanation going on. We know the plot of XY and the Looker sidequest, and while some explanation is fine, it just dragged on a bit. It's causing me (and other readers, no doubt) to skim the material since I already know what's happened.

I enjoyed the references to the name Illumination: the lamp's light cutting out dramatically was a nice callback to the title. Little things like that make me happy.

Also, this is probably because I'm a huge fan of titles (and pay an inordinate amount of attention to them), but calling chapter one "Cul-de-sac" was such a good touch. Every time the word came up, it helped carry that nice, mysterious feel. Just my two cents.

TECHNICALITIES

I spotted an error in: "His choice in fashion attracted some eyes – a big, heavy coat on a hot and humid day seemed madness, even for the over-conscious, stylish types" . . . "seemed madness" would make more sense as "seemed mad."

Also, "It was a short walk away from Restaurant La Nah" should be corrected to "Le Nah." / Pokémon isn't spelled with the é in this fic, but that may be a stylistic choice.

In this sentence, "She was older than the others, yet her appearance was far more ragged, with her filthy race and patched up clothes," I did a massive doubletake at "filthy race" because I think/hope that was a typo!

In addition: "Looker was interrupted by a scruffy Espurr jumping out from behind the girls’ legs" . . . should this be "the girl's legs"? And, finally, I think it's odd that Mimi keeps getting called an "it" by the narration, yet Emma/etc keep calling her female. Meh!

In conclusion, I'm going to keep reading. We've only seen two chapters so far. We don't know much about this story yet. We surely know the outcome, assuming that it sticks to the gameplay's narrative, but . . . there's definitely room for something more. Thank you for writing this!
 
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