Kavidun
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Okay, this is my third fic, my first one failed due to lack of readers, the second sadly following the same process and I am DETERMINED NOT TO LET THIS ONE FOLLOW! I will REGULARLY post, and, well, that's all I'll say...
My third fic is a whole new genre to me, so please, I need advice.
First Fic: Action
Second Fic: Funny/Sport
THIRD FIC: ???
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The screen flickered as he pressed the “on” button on his new game. He was excited, he’d loved the franchise since he’d been five, and never missed a game. Now, at fifteen, he loved it still.
The on button glowed green, and he remembered what the packet said. “Fresh from Japan. Never seen before. ENGLISH PATCHED.
He knew that some patches were illegal, but the booklet confirmed the United Kingdom Government had approved it. He knew that if it happened to be it was illegal, he could point out the booklet and say, “I thought it was legal, it even says to here!”
He knew this was dodgy, and that he shouldn’t be doing this, and for some reason he was anxious something wasn’t right. A bead of sweat went down his head, starting from the hair, and dripped onto his feet.
His mother was at work (not that he cared) thus he was alone. The game displayed a warning for Photosensitive Seizures. He ignored it. He’d never had one before, why should he worry anyway?
The game froze. So did he. A swirling pattern appeared on the screen. His eyes flickered. The screen went black, and he stopped.
Confused, he looked at his watch, saw the time was Ten Thirty in the evening, and got up to phone Mum, so see why she was taking so long. Just then the phone rang.
He answered.
“Hello dear, it’s Mum!”
“Why are you so late?”
“Oh, about that… I’m sleeping over at Oaks tonight, he needs to take my somewhere in the morning.”
“But Mum, you pro…”
“I know I promised I’d be home for the football tomorrow morning, but it’s urgent.”
“Bye Mum.”
He slammed the phone down, stressed. It was the big game! England VS Germany! She’d promised to come with popcorn and everything. He supposed he’d watch it at Elm’s. When he first moved in he was surprised at the number of professors there were in this place. Mum said they were, “Visitors from the ‘Other Dimension’” which he still didn’t know where that was.
So, he went to bed with a glass of milk, and cleaned his teeth, got his Old Pyjamas on, and got into bed.
At exactly Three thirty three in the morning, the phone rang and woke him up.
He got out of bed, and the phone stopped ringing before he could pick it up. He heard a sound from the computer room. He walked in and saw the Wii screen glowing. A beam of light shot into the phone, which rang louder than a church bell. He quickly picked it up.
“Hello. I’m in your town.”
They hung up.
It rang again, slightly louder.
“Hello. I’m by your gate.”
He looked outside, and no one was there. It rang again.
“Hello. I’m coming up the stairs.”
Sure enough, they creaked and moaned, but no one was there.
The phone rang quietly.
“Hello Ash Ketchum. I’m right next to you.”
He turned around… and vanished into the Wii.
The "Pokémon Suprise Version" had done just what it had said. Suprised you.
My third fic is a whole new genre to me, so please, I need advice.
First Fic: Action
Second Fic: Funny/Sport
THIRD FIC: ???
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The screen flickered as he pressed the “on” button on his new game. He was excited, he’d loved the franchise since he’d been five, and never missed a game. Now, at fifteen, he loved it still.
The on button glowed green, and he remembered what the packet said. “Fresh from Japan. Never seen before. ENGLISH PATCHED.
He knew that some patches were illegal, but the booklet confirmed the United Kingdom Government had approved it. He knew that if it happened to be it was illegal, he could point out the booklet and say, “I thought it was legal, it even says to here!”
He knew this was dodgy, and that he shouldn’t be doing this, and for some reason he was anxious something wasn’t right. A bead of sweat went down his head, starting from the hair, and dripped onto his feet.
His mother was at work (not that he cared) thus he was alone. The game displayed a warning for Photosensitive Seizures. He ignored it. He’d never had one before, why should he worry anyway?
The game froze. So did he. A swirling pattern appeared on the screen. His eyes flickered. The screen went black, and he stopped.
Confused, he looked at his watch, saw the time was Ten Thirty in the evening, and got up to phone Mum, so see why she was taking so long. Just then the phone rang.
He answered.
“Hello dear, it’s Mum!”
“Why are you so late?”
“Oh, about that… I’m sleeping over at Oaks tonight, he needs to take my somewhere in the morning.”
“But Mum, you pro…”
“I know I promised I’d be home for the football tomorrow morning, but it’s urgent.”
“Bye Mum.”
He slammed the phone down, stressed. It was the big game! England VS Germany! She’d promised to come with popcorn and everything. He supposed he’d watch it at Elm’s. When he first moved in he was surprised at the number of professors there were in this place. Mum said they were, “Visitors from the ‘Other Dimension’” which he still didn’t know where that was.
So, he went to bed with a glass of milk, and cleaned his teeth, got his Old Pyjamas on, and got into bed.
At exactly Three thirty three in the morning, the phone rang and woke him up.
He got out of bed, and the phone stopped ringing before he could pick it up. He heard a sound from the computer room. He walked in and saw the Wii screen glowing. A beam of light shot into the phone, which rang louder than a church bell. He quickly picked it up.
“Hello. I’m in your town.”
They hung up.
It rang again, slightly louder.
“Hello. I’m by your gate.”
He looked outside, and no one was there. It rang again.
“Hello. I’m coming up the stairs.”
Sure enough, they creaked and moaned, but no one was there.
The phone rang quietly.
“Hello Ash Ketchum. I’m right next to you.”
He turned around… and vanished into the Wii.
The "Pokémon Suprise Version" had done just what it had said. Suprised you.