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My Pokemon Adventure Part 1

carlos spicey weener

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Imagine the world as you know it with Pokemon as replacements for animals. That is what this story is about. I'm the main character and my rival is my 9 year old sister (she is the biggest weener EVER!). Part 2 will be coming soon, or maybe not soon. It depends on how long it takes me to think of some thing cool.
Hope you enjoy it!

My Pokemon Adventure
Part 1

My pokemon adventure started when my dad gave me a jar of honey to rub on a tree. He told me that a pokemon would come and eat the honey, and that I could catch it. So he gave me a pokeball and my pet, growlith.
The next morning, I checked the tree. Sure enough, there was a pokemon eating the honey. But it wasn't a pokemon I had ever seen before. Usually I only saw pachirisu, buneary and starly in the neighborhood. But nothing like that. It looked like a purple monkey, with big ears and a long tail with a hand at the end of it.
I didn't waste any time. I said to growlith: "Hit 'em with ember!" A direct hit! I tossed the pokeball my dad gave me, and it sucked the pokemon right into it. "YES!" I yelled, but I spoke too soon. The pokemon jumped right out of the pokeball and ran away.
I told my dad what happened, and he said that I should have weakened it more. Then I described what the pokemon looked like, but he said that he had never seen a pokemon like that before.
But I didn't give up yet. I took growlith into the woods with me, and I told him to sniff out the pokemon we saw. He picked up his scent in no time. We found the misterious purple pokemon high up in a tree. Before I could tell growlith to attack, the purple pokemon jumped off of the tree and punched me in the face with the hand on his tail. then, everything went black.
I woke up several hours later in a daze. A growlith licking your face is definitely NOT the best wake-up call. Just when I realized that the day couldn't get any worse, I noticed that I had no clothes on. Then I heard the purple pokemon laughing in a tree. I looked at it, and it had my clothes in its hand!
That was the last straw. I told growlith to "go get him," but that was a fatal mistake. The pokemon jumped out of the way and countered growlith's attack with a very powerful focus punch. Growlith was out cold. I then realized that my battle techniques could improve alot.
Then came my 9 year old sister with a pokeball in her hand. "I'll get him!" she said, and then she threw the pokeball and out popped a cherubi.
"How did you get a pokemon!?" I asked my sister.
"Daddy bought one for me," she said in her prissy voice. "It's way easier than catching one."
She told her cherubi to use magical leaf, and it hit the pokemon directly.
I saw this as my chance to catch my very first pokemon. I threw a pokeball and caught the pokemon.
"Nice aipom. Even though I deserve it, I'll let you keep it."
I asked her how she knew what it was. "I saw one just like it at the pokemon store," she replied.
I went home to show my first pokemon to my dad, and I checked out what moves my aipom knew. It could use focus punch, swift, double team, and sand attack.
Then my sister asked me for a battle. She sounded really confident. "Get ready to lose!" I said in reply.
It was my aipom versus her cherubi. I had the first move.
"Use swift!" I said. "Protect!" my sister yelled. Aipom swift was blocked.
"Now use solar beam!" she said. This worried me. I knew that solar beam was one of the most powerful grass type moves. But I also knew that my aipom was very fast. "Dodge it!" I said. "Then use focus punch!"
Sure enough, aipom dodged the solar beam. But cherbi used double team, and threw aipom off guard. Then all of cherubi's duplicates used razor leaf on aipom. Smoke was everywhere. I couldn't see. All I could do was hope that aipom wasn't knocked out.

To be continued........
 
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Okay, I'm not going to lie: you need to make a lot of improvements.

Gramatically, a few things that need improved on (I'm not going through them all) are:
You need to use a capital letter when starting speech ie. "You are alone," is correct not "you are alone,"

You need to paragraph. Whenever there is a change of scene/time/setting you take a mew paragraph and also whenever a new person speaks.

In regards to spelling, I saw a few errors.

The plot, :-S there really isn't one at the moment and I hope the "cool" thing you think of, you know, creates one.
 
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