EVERYONE: - Ongoing (New Chapters!! Tons of em'!)Chris & Friends:Poke' ventures:the zenion quests

[Swampert_Drifblim_Chatot]

Okay, before i start, i want to cover something, All non fan-made pokemon are based on my games.

Meet Chris, the hero:
Chris Tramontee is an 11-year-old boy from Jivestride city in the Zenion region. Although he is not new to pokemon training, he has yet to explore Zenion. He is just geting back from Sinnoh, and hyped for the new journey ahead. Some say he is mean, judging, and sarcastic, and only shows kindness to a select few. Some say he is strong willed and strong minded. Personally, Chris thinks he is both.(And i can't quite say i blame him).
He is a solo trainer and has explored hoenn, johto, kanto, and sinnoh so far. Now on to Skipper, Chris's Swampert. Like pikachu and Ash, Chris and Skipper share a close bond. (Skipper is derived from mudSKIPPER, the animal swampert is based on).Chris and Skipper's first encounter with each-other
was not a regular one at all. Back when Chris was 7, in
honor of the year 2000, Elm in Johto was holding a special "early trainers" day on new years.Well on the way there, going through a forest in the Shinoby-Duno region, Chris, pokemon-less at the time, noticed a mudkip being attacked by an Oralemare(Orre-ala-mare). Chris jumped in front of the beast's attack and took the hit for mudkip. Protecting the mudkip from harm until it's parents came to the scene, Chris began to feel a warm feeling of care for it. After thwarting of the oralemare, the mudkip thanked Chris and said good-bye. Upon reaching Elm's lab, Chris missed mudkip intensely. Just as Chris was about to choose a Johto starter, mudkip came bursting throught the door, crying and nipping Chris's pant leg, pulling at it, as if saying "Pick me, please!". From that moment on, Chris and Skipper have been best buds.

Now, finally, on to the fic.

Chapter 1:Let's get this thing started!
It is a dry, sunny day in Jivestride city.
Chris awakes with a spook to realize that it is 11:30, over two hours from when he planned on starting his journey.
"Skipper, wake up!" Chris shouted into the room.
A weak "Swaa...?" replied to his call.
"C'mon Skipper, we gotta' get going!" Chris jumped out of bed, now completely awake.
"Swamp, swa?" Skipper said, looking curiosly at a cloth covering an orb shaped object. "Oh! Thanks Skipper, I almost forgot about that!" Chris replied.
Skipper pulled the cloth off to reveal that the orb shaped object was a pokeball. But not any ordinary pokeball, this one had holes in it that looked as though a faint glow was emitting from them. Instead of the normal button, there was an "N". "That, is my greatesst invention yet, the almighty Neutron ball! This spectactular pokeball has orbs made of pokemon attacks: bubble beam, flamethrower, magical leaf, and dragonbreath.".
Skipper looked puzzled, scratching it's head. "Maybe I ought to show you instead". Chris pressed a button on his computer. It began to flash, and then started opening a file. *DING* Chris pressed the play button on the side of the machine and a computer-graphic wire frame simulation of what appeared to be the neutron ball covered the screen.
A virtual wire frame rattata apeared on the screen next to it.
It flew towards the pokemon, opened up and captured the rattata. Only this is where things get unique; the ball emitted glowing rings like well...a neutron.
"Each of those rings represents one of the attacks I mentioned earlier." explained Chris. "By weakening the pokemon INSIDE of the pokeball, you are garenteed a capture. Curtousy of a nuetron ball's automatic healing abilities, you also get a fully healed pokemon." Chris looked at the clock. 12:00. "SKIPPER, C'MON, WE GOTTA GO!". Chris and Skipper ran out the front door with backpacks stuffed.


And that, concludes chapter 1 of Chris & Friends Poke'ventures: the zenion quests. I know things may be a little slow now, but this is only the beggining. more to come soon.

 

[Blackjack Gabbiani]

Try telling us the backstory in the fic rather than having it seperate. Makes for better storytelling.

Also, if you're going for the real-world spelling, it's "neutron".

 

[Swampert_Drifblim_Chatot]

Try telling us the backstory in the fic rather than having it seperate. Makes for better storytelling.

like a flashback right?

 

[Swampert_Drifblim_Chatot]

New Chapters!

Chapter 2:All roads lead to zotmo

This chapter begins with Chris and Skipper heading down the trail begining their new journey. "Hey Skipper, didja' make sure to grab the P.A.D.T on your way out?" Chris said inquiringly.
Skipper grinned and pulled the P.A.D.T out of the backpack. "Good thing you got the P.A.D.T; Personalized Assistant Digital Travel-buddy, without it's wacky gizmo's, we could get major league-ly lost!".
Upon looking farther down the trail, Chris spotted what appeared to be a pink blob fighting a cyogre(sigh-ogure). Chris immediately pulled out his Poke'tlite, his own custom version of a poke'dex. Pointing it towards the Cyogre and the blob, the poketlite's mini-satellite dish started to spin as the screen displayed:
Zotmo, the deaD.N.A pokemon. The evolved form of ditto. This pokemon has powers of transformation similar to that of ditto's, with the exception that the selection of forms it can take on is now expanded to anything.
"Wow, that zotmo(zoht-moe) looks like it's gonna be in big trouble if we don't help it!" said Chris. "Skipper, use flash cannon!". Skipper's arm's and leg's orange patches glowed and started to form a light sphere. Skipper pushed the sphere towards the cyogre. "Cyre?". The cyogre spun around, swiftly dodging the attack, but still being stunned from the light emnating from flash cannon. "Zotmo, nows your chance!". The wild zotmo morphed into a giant mallet. *THWAP* There was cyogre, lying on the ground, fainted. "And now's mine..."Chris said with a devilish grin on his face. "Ultra ball, go!".
The ball flew through the air, right towards zotmo. With a flash of red light, the zotmo was inside the ball. *wiggle, wiggle, wiggle,wi....* "BAMMO! I caught a zotmo!(no pun intended)". "Thats my first catch of the zenion region!" Chris said, feeling triumphant. After that encounter, Chris now has zotmo on his team, and thus contines the adventures of Chris, Skipper, and now Zotmo too!

Chapter 3:Transformation Battle!! Zotmo v.s. Ho-oh!

Nearing closer to Calfoof town and Prof. Stigmary's lab, Chris is more excited than ever. "Hey Skipper, check the P.A.D.T to see how close to Calfoof town
we are.". Skipper checked. "Emph', pretty close i guess." Chris said.
"Hallo dere'!" said a voice that seemed to be coming from nowhere.
"Show yourself, whoever you are!". All of a sudden, a man about 5'10" with greenish-blue spiked hair, a lab coat, and the kookiest pair of lab goggles Chris had thought he ever saw appeared out of thin air in front of him.
"Who are you?" Chris asked, still stunned by his mysterious entrance.
"Why me, I'm Dr. Glitchawitz, inventor of the famous Glitchemon".
"Famous whoosi-witch?"
"The glitchemon, an evil machine that bends the laws of reality to create super pokemon. Ho-oh is mine. Ho-oh, c'mere buddy!".
And sure enough, a ho-oh came flying in from over the mountains.
"Did you say evil?" said Chris, eyebrows raised suspiciously.
"Yup, it defys nature. I'm thiking about using it to take over the world.".
"Well i can't let that happen!" Chris said while throwing a pokeball.
"Zotmo, free battle, lesgo!".
"Ho-oh, get in there and fight, fight, fight! Free battle for you too!".
The battle begins with zotmo morphing into an augmentation of machamp and seviper. It threw a mighty punch at ho-oh, which missed because zotmo's seviper tail got caught on a tree branch.
Ho-oh took this opportunity to morph into an Ursaring.
Quickly pulling it's tail out of the branch, zotmo morphed into prototist, an amoebae pokemon of the ghost and germ types. Upon loosing site of zotmo being it's small size, ho-oh morphed into a noctowl and proceeded to use foresight. Swiftly dodging the rays of light, zotmo darted left and right.
Noctowl's rays finally caught site of zotmo, and prepared to use drill peck...just as zotmo transformed into a steelix with the torso-and-up of an arcanine as a tail. Shooting flamethrower after performing bind did a great deal of damage on ho-oh. Quickly transforming into a donphan, using rollout acted as a sheild to deflect the second flamethrower that was launched by zotmo. Zotmo transformed into buneary and used bounce to dodge the reflected flames. Quickly transforming from a buneary to a vespiquen mid-air, launched attack order, temporarily paralyzing ho-oh in larvi, and then into an anvilious, and anvil pokemon, and slammed itself on ho-oh's head, causing it's pixels to corupt. *Static, crackle, zap* "It's gonna blow!!" screamed Dr. Glitchewitz, running as fast as his evil little legs could carry him. *KA-BOOM!!!* The fake ho-oh exploded in a cloud of atoms, as shock waves of purple-greenish electric faded away in the air. "P..p..please spare me and i will promise to suspend all work on glitchemon" begged Dr. Glitchewitz.
"Hmmmm...okay, but you gotta' promise." said Chris, sticking out his hand to shake and make the deal official. Dr. Glitchewitz ran off into the distance, snickering. "That fewl! MUAHAHAHAHA!!" said Dr. Glitchewitz, raising the hand that was behind his back while shaking hands to reveal...CROSSED FINGERS!
"THAT FEWL!! HAHAHAHA, MUAHAHAHAHA!!" *thunder crackle*.
And aside from all that, Chris continues his quest onwards, looking hopefully towards Calfoof town and the starter that awaits him.

 

[Luis92]

It's a nice story but you could put like spaces between quotes to make it easier to read good story looking forward to read it more

 

[Swampert_Drifblim_Chatot]

New Chapters! Hizzah!!

chapter 4:Zappy the Mysterious Marshtomp

Today's chapter begins with Chris right outside Calfoof town's gate.
Chris, looking at a pamphlet on the zenion region starters, was in deep thought on the not-so-distant decision. "This is so much unnesesary stress. Phlemga, Flamonin, or Chloryphlack? So much pressure..." . Chris was a nervous wreck. But hey, you'd be too if you had to choose between 3 animals to take care of. Just before setting foot in Calfoof town, Chris noticed a stray jolt of lightning over the horizon. Then some more lightning shot up. "As much as I'd like to go to Calfoof town, I think we should investigate this strange lightning." . "Swampert!" "Zotzot!" .
"Then it's decided, check out strange electric and THEN go to prof. Stigmary's lab!" . Immediately after Chris said that, the lightning became stronger. "Zotmo, morph into a motorbike and follow that lightning!" .
In a matter of minutes, a high-speed chase was in progress.
Swiftly dodging random lightning bolts from all directions, zotmo shot a net out in front of it. Sure that it would capture whatever was causing all this, zotmo swerved to a stop. But it was wrong. It got a direct jolt of electric and drove right into it's own net, tangling it, Chris, and Skipper up. Blinded temporarily, noone could tell what, but they could tell that something was carrying them somewhere. "Skipper, use flash cannon to break the net!" .
*snap* Upon looking outside the net via the small hole Skipper made with flash cannon, Chris saw that watever was carrying them was about to drop them off a cliff! "Quick, everyone go to the other side!" .
The net was rolling backwards and out of the grasp of the mystery someone holding them. Upon hitting the ground, the net finally collapsed to reveal that a Marshtomp was carrying them. But there was something unnatural about this Marshtomp, it was yellow, had sparks shooting from it's cheeks, and had zig-zaggy lines on it's tails and head fin. "Maybe it's one of Dr. Glitchewitz's glitchemon." Chris said, in awe. Marshtomp suddenly got mad and threw a shoxk wave attack at them. "Zotmo, do something!!" . Zotmo immediately stretched itself over Chris and Skipper. The shock wave was absorbed by zotmo, being that its 47% rubber. Th marshtomp looked exausted, and collapsed on the ground, breathing heavy, sweating like crazy.
"We should take it to Calfoof's Pokemon Center." said Chris.
*about 10 minutes later*
"Is it going to be okay nurse Joy?" asked Chris, felling responsible for the creature's possible demise.
"Fine, better than you said you found it" nurse Joy said reassuringly.
"But it is in a weird condition." nurse Joy said whilst pointing to the yellow coloring. "I don't know whats wrong with it." said Chris, "but I should probably take it with me on my journey and find out, it's obviously better off with me then in the wild." Chris said.
"Your'e probably right." said nurse Joy, handing Chris a poke'ball to keep it in.
"I'll call you....Zappy!" said Chris later outside the Pokemon Center.
And now with the mysterious Zappy joining thier team, Chris' adventure is better than ever, with a very bright future ahead.
"And next i'll finally get my starter!" Chris said with a grin stretched from ear-to-ear. Until next time, readers!

 

[Swampert_Drifblim_Chatot]

Lots of new chapters to make up for all the time in-between

Chapter 5: 3 to Meet

As Chris marched happily towards Prof. Stifmary's lab, he couldn't help but feel a strong feeling of accomplishment. Just looking at his team of 3 already made him feel like a champion. "I'm so glad all those filler chapters are out of the way! Now we can get down to all the REAL chapters!!" said Chris.
"But still, 3 starters await me, and i should try to appear calm, cool, and collected...even though I'm not.".

Upon reaching Prof. Stigmary's lab, Chris gazed in awe at stain-glass windows, palace looking towers, even mini-ferris wheel all clustered together alongside the lab. Chris stepped inside. "Ah, you must be the new trainer, Chris tromointuh!" said Stigmary. "Uh, actually it's Tramontee." Chris replied, more interested in meeting the starters. "Chloryphlack, Phlemga, and Flamonin are right in here..." said Stigmary, turning a rusty doorknob.

Sure enough, the Ooze snail pokemon, the flame imp pokemon, and the Seed-root pokemon were sitting in the room. "Hmmm.....which one..." Chris said, deep in thought about the gym battles. "Swam?" Skipper said, pointing to Flamonin. "Phl...no....Chl....Fl....no...no....CHLORYPHLACK!" Chris said after looking deep in Chloryphlack's eyes and feeling the same way he felt when he met Skipper.

Outside in the lab's back yard, Chris was ready for his first battle with his new Chloryphlack. "Go Phlemga!!" shouted Prof. Stigmary.
"Use razor leaf!". Chloryphlack shot a spray of sharp edged leaves at Phlemga at incredible speeds. "Phlemga, dodge it!". Phlemga was about to move out of the way, but got hit on the side.
"Now use vine whip!". Chloryphlack's arms stretched out and shot towards Phlemga. "Phlemga, water gun, and aim it at Chloryphlack's eyes!".
The spray of H20 hit chloryphlack's eyes, messing it's aim up.
"Now use the vines as a ramp to Rollout up to Chloryphlack!".
Phlemga popped into it's shell, hopped on one of Chloryphlack's vines, and SLAM, got a direct hit on Chloryphlack. "Hurry, recouperate and use grass-blast!". Chloryphlack buried it's vines into the ground like roots and started budding little sprouts randomly on it. "Phlemga, iron defense!".
Chloryphlack's "mini-roots" blossomed into flowers as a beam of moss-covered tree trunks shot towards Phlemga, peircing it's iron defense move.
"Finish it off with vine whip!". *BAM* Phlemga was defeated, Chris was overjoyed, Chloryphlack was pretty damn hungry, and Skipper was glad of the inevitable new addition to the team.

"Thanks Prof. Stigmary, for everything!" Chris said, looking at chloryphlack.
"Next, you'll be wanting to head to Bitterrind city. There you can get your first badge." said Prof. Stigmary. As Chris waved goodbye, walking down the path towards route 803, Prof Stigmary shouted, "I'll see you again when you get your 5th badge!". Chris looked at his team. "Everyone ready to battle Bitterroot city's gym?". "Swam!" "Zoto!" "Marsh!" "Chlory!". "Then it's onwards!" Chris said, looking at the sky, thinking of things to come.

 

[Habunake]

Well...your chapters are shot. Very short.

And try to format the text better, like pressing enter after every dialouge, to make it readable.

Also, generally you should write out numbers less then one-hundred in a story.

 

[Bluntasaur]

I don't mean to be rude, but the formatting here is terrible. The whole fic is like one long sentence. Pretty hard to read.