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TEEN: - Ongoing Nova's story... The corrupted Nigma Inc

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Prologue… The Forgotten past.

A young man sits beneath the shade of a tree and starts to have a dream that he wishes to forget… If it had been forgotten then maybe then he would no longer have to relive the pain he had been put through.

“I’m sure looking in this flower field that I will find my mother’s favorite flowers.”

A young kid only five years old is roaming around a flower field looking and picking his mother’s favorite flowers three days after a man named Zane built a lab designed to keep peace but no one would know Zane’s true intentions except for the young kid as he got home and was horrified his home up in flames and both his parents laying face down in pools of blood.

“MOTHER! FATHER!”

“Ah there he is… Our perfect test subject!”

Was all he would hear before being knocked out and taken to Nigma Inc where they began to splice a Humans DNA with that of an Animals DNA to make an army of to use and rule the world! The young man had awakened to find himself strapped to some type of table with two people standing over him with devilish grins on their faces.

“Lord Zane will he do?”

“Yes Kain… A kid of his age will work perfectly…”

“What are you planning to do with me?! I DESERVE T-“

“Just breathe deeply and relax.”

The kid tries to shout his demand to knock but a mask of some sort is put over his nose and a strange scent starts to flow into his nostrils and his mind goes fuzzy the gas putting out like a candle in water and the last things he saw before his eyes shut tight were a wolf being brought in and a knife cutting into him.

“Ugh…my head…”

“Ah the experiments successes will finally all come together today… Right after we clear his mind making him a mindless drone…”

“Experiment… WIPE MY MIND!”

The kid suddenly wakes up and rubs his head but when he sees his arm covered in Silver Fur and his hand has sharp claws coming from his paw like finger tips which causes him to scream which sounds like a howl. Things get worse when a Mirror is brought in and when he sees his reflection he sees a human like wolf in his clothing.

“A Perfect wolf Hybrid Warrior.”

“YOU! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO ME!!!!!?”

In his new found anger the kid grabs the one he believes to be responsible for this to him so he grabs them by the throat but when they suddenly turn into a dragon like hybrid he is over powered and attempts to escape.

“Stop! You are the perfect soldier for Zane’s army!”

“I REFUSE!!!”

The kid ran but some many others determined to stop him left him injured when he finally escapes and heads home but only finds ash and his parent’s skeletal remains.

“NO! How long have I been away!?”

He shouts as the dream fade and the young man awakes.
 
Very intriguing start.

I like the premise of your prologue and the characters and their motivation is interesting for sure. The only suggestion I might make is to be careful with your tense. It's fine to use present tense, but be careful to stay consistent. Towards the end, I think you reverted to a little bit of past tense.

But other than that, I'm excited to see where you go with this. Good luck! :)
 
It's odd.

Way too much dialogue. You aren't giving enough explanation or description which is something readers will need to really get into the piece.

In exactly what tense is this being told in?

This is a good start.
 
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