Nuzlocke: Heartgold challenge!

[GengarEatBanana]

Well, this is the nuzloche comic I drew. I know it's kinda crappy, but I did it for fun I put it here as it's kinda artwork, but please correct me if I'm wrong.

I used all the simple rules for maximum enjoyement:

-If a Pokemon dies, IT DIES!
-Only may catch first Pokemon of each route, however non-ledgendary stationary Pokemon (Sudowoodo and Snorlax) are up for grabs. Ledgendary Pokemon are off limit though. Gift Pokes are fine.


And that's it, here's the first comic...

Spoiler

Thanks and please comment. Please remember this is just for fun

(Oh and Cyndaquil is called Volcano)

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Well here's another one, please comment!

Spoiler

Just kind of a filler, it will pick up the pace soon though.

 

[Erasmus]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Something appears to be up with the images. I can't see anything when I expand the links. Not even the traditional red x. Is that the same for you?

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Sorry I don't seem to understand...

Well that sucks. My first reply is a technical error

 

[J J M]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Yeah, I can't see the images either.

 

[やみのディアルガ]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Well, I can't see the images. It's like you didn't put the image inside the post (the code, like [-IMG]***[/IMG-]. Remove the minus symbols and the *** is where you put the image's link.)
Why don't you delete the image from the website that has your image (a site where you upload images, like Photobucket) and then upload it again?
Or you delete the code (like I said before, it's [-IMG]***[/IMG-]. just remove the minus symbols and the *** is where you put the image's link.) and then put it again (before you put the code again, save the post, then edit it again)?

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

I don't get it, I can see the comic strips. And I've checked and there is no minus symbol.

 

[J J M]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Did you upload the image to your album? Link it to the album if it's there.

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Here's the link:

http://bmgf.bulbagarden.net/members/gengareatbanana/albums/nuzloche/

 

[J J M]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Apparently the images doesn't show up even in your album...

 

[Erasmus]

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Odd, because I can see them. In fact, they now show up in the spoilers where they didn't before. Don't know what could be causing it.

Anyway, on the nature of the comics themselves.
True enough, the art isn't exactly stunning. I would suggest, as something simple to make it look a little better without having to draw things any more complicated, is to use a text tool for the words and a line tool for the panels. It will make things easier to read and give it a bit more of a professional look. Also, perhaps expand the size of the panels. Things can get squished, though not to any truly bad levels yet. It will at least give characters and dialog more room to separate and generally look less cluttered.
It's a bit to early to comment on anything like plot or characters, though it looks as if you're not going for anything terribly complex. The lack of coverage of a rival battle between comics one and two seems odd, though I suppose the battles are not so interesting at this point.

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Well thanks for actually commenting, and that's wierd how you can see it but everyone else can't... 0_o

I promise to make the comics better, but really they're just for a laugh, and not to be taken too seriously. I didn't feel the rival battle is too overly important, as it's just two Pokemon using Tackle and Scratch really.

 

[Erasmus]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

I figured as much.
Both in general and about the rival battle

I just offered any advice I saw as useful. The things about the dialog and panel lines were just simple pointers on ways to improve without needing a whole lot more actual time and effort. Fun is fun, of course, but a little professionalism when structuring things, even if it's not actually all that much to do, helps makes things more enjoyable to read. Even for off the cuff, silly comics. Unless the whole scrawly thing is the point, I suppose.

As for the pictures, perhaps host them off site, like on imageshack, and then try again. It might be different.

 

[GengarEatBanana]

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Thanks for the imput, it has actually been helpful

EDIT: Here's the third one (if you can see it).

Spoiler

 

[GengarEatBanana]

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Sorry for double posting, I felt in necessary.

Guys the next one might be up tomorrow, either that or the next day as school is on tomorrow.

Also, in case you didn't notice there is another comic above^^. I edited it in

 

[2[]]

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Yeah,but I felt like you ran the events too fast in every strip.So I didn't actually find this funny but this is better than the mess that the first two were...

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Sucks that you feel that way. Really it's just a general overview of my gameplay, but the next one will be more drawn out and overall better.

 

[GengarEatBanana]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

Here's the new comic, No. 4 Surprised I could be bothered to do four comics.

This one is more evenly space out, and it has some colour! 0_o

Spoiler

Hope you enjoyed it.

 

[Thanatos]

Re: Nuzloche: Heartgold challenge!

todays weather report:
hello folks, today we will be expecting mud of wooper, tears of trainer and......... angry yellow flowers?

cant wait for more

 

[FallingPrey]

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Can't see it for whatever reason

EDIT:You do realize it's Nuzlocke and not Nuzloche,don't ya?