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TEEN: - Complete Obsession (Critically Acclaimed Fic ^_~)

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Obsession (UPDATED!)

I see a lot of familiar faces here. Anyway, for those that don't know me, I'm a mod. at Pojo. I moderated the Pokemon Fanfiction Forum for quite some time. Anyway, here is a fic that I wrote over a year ago. I did a teensy bit of editing, but other than that, it's pretty much the same, so it's a bit rough in some parts.


Obsession: Part I

Under the dense canopy of tropical flora, a lone figure cut through the underbrush with a wooden machete. His hand traversed his forehead, wiping off the perspiration. It would soon be midday, and the humidity was high. He paused for a moment to catch his breath and look at his watch.

“It’s almost time…”

* * *

“Dad, where do you want these?” A young man in his mid-twenties called out, holding a stack of ancient manuscripts. They were crude and yellowing, most of them books, but a few scrolls were mixed in with the rest.

“Just put those somewhere in there.” His father motioned to the far side of a shed about twenty feet away. He shook his head in amazement. “Boy, it’s been a long time since I cleaned out this garage.”

“I’ll say. I still can’t believe you collected all of this stuff on your pokemon journey!” The young man headed towards the shed. “You must have travelled a lot to get all of this stuff.”

“Yeah. I spent the best years of my life journeying.” He ran his hand through his graying hair. “All of this brings back a lot of good memories.”

“Isn’t that when you met Mom?”

“Yeah. That brought a quick end to my adventuring lifestyle. We settled down, bought a house, and I stuck all of this stuff in the garage.” He chuckled to himself. “Heck, I haven’t even looked at half this stuff.” He walked back into the garage to continue cleaning up.

The young man walked carelessly across the lawn with the stack of old manuscripts blocking most of his view, oblivious to the rock jutting out of the ground. His foot connected with it and he tumbled onto the ground, papers flying everywhere.

His father peered out of the garage. “Jack, are you all right?”

Jack quickly stood up and started gathering the papers. “Yeah, I’m fine.”

“You need any help?”

“Nah, I got it, Dad.” He soon had almost all of the mess cleaned up, just one parchment piece left. He bent down to pick up.

Something about it caught his attention. Out of all the papers, this was one of the few written in English. Then he noticed that halfway down the page there was a rough drawing of an insect of sorts. Quite the curious person, he wanted to read this intriguing piece of paper; but his father would never let him keep it, even though it would just sit in the shed and collect dust. His father could never let go of anything. The garage was proof of this. Jack looked around to see if his father was looking, and folded it up and shoved it inside his pocket.

* * *

January 20, 1800

Much like my father, I have a keen sense of adventure. I guess you could say it is in our blood. As a child, I travelled with him on all of his “expeditions”. As I became older I started to go out into deserts, jungles, and other amazing places by myself, and I have been doing so for the past twenty years. You can imagine, then, that I have seen many grand and marvellous things, and have had many wonderful adventures.

Of all my adventures up to this point, however, none is as amazing as the one that I had some three weeks ago while I was exploring the deep jungles of South America. I had been in the jungle for about two weeks, observing the behaviors of those wonderful creatures we call pokemon.

Native pokemon are the most interesting creatures I have ever seen. When a wild pokemon is captured, it is usually hard to train, seeing as it must relinquish most of its primal instincts. Likewise, third-generation pokemon bred in captivity usually do not have any of these instincts, so it is up to people such as myself to observe their habits in the wild.

This expedition was not unlike many of those that I had made in the past. Matter of fact, I had explored in the same region several times before. I used the Amazon River as my guide, so as not to get lost. Then, on January 1, 1800, when I was exactly one mile from the most western point of the mighty Amazon, I made a marvellous discovery.

I had been carefully observing and following a young Bulbasaur, hoping to record its eating and migratory habits. I watched as it slowly crept into a clearing. I quietly made my way through the underbrush and to the area into where I saw the young pokemon disappear. When I pulled away the branches, the sight that met my eyes astonished me.

Sitting there, right in the middle of the clearing, was a cylindrical rock approximtely two feet high and six feet in diameter. The Bulbasaur forgotten, I ran towards this strange sight. Cut deep into the rock were two concentric circles. The first was one foot in from the edge, and the other was one foot in from that. Engraved near the center was the word “CELEBI”. I had no clue what this meant, but there was something on the outermoust part that I did understand. It read “January 1, 1800 midday”.

This surprised me so much that I almost stumbled over backwards. There was an unusual break in the canopy of trees directly over this rock. From where I was standing I could see up through this hole and guessed by the position of the sun that it was almost midday. But what did it mean? I decided to wait in the clearing until midday to see if anything happened.

And wait I did. I leaned up against a tree and started to relax. I took out my canteen and thoughtfully sipped at it. The soothing sounds of the jungle lulled me into a deep stupor. The iridescent glow of the sun filtering through the trees that met my eyes slowly started to fade, as the allure of the jungle took its toll on my aching body.

I slowly opened my eyes, but bright light forced me to squint them. I noticed that the sun was now directly over the hole in the trees, but instead of normal sunlight, an eerie golden light filled the clearing. This blinding light finally condensed into a small circle that shined right on top of the innermost circle, giving my eyes a much-needed break. The circle started glowing, and tiny white particles shot up into the clearing. At first, it was just a few, but soon hundreds of the tiny particles were swirling around me and everything else in the clearing.

I had, of course, by this time moved to stand right next to the rock. I was almost scared, but the particles gave off a soothing glow, almost telling me not be afraid. The sight was amazing enough that even if I was scared, I do not think I would have wanted to move from the awesome sight.

Suddenly, all the particles flew directly above the circle, swirling faster and faster. They closed in tighter and tighter, and then all melded together into one form. The blob of white continued to spin, contours forming. It kept spinning until it took the shape of some kind of creature.

The creature was spinning, hands at its sides, eyes staring into the sun. It slowed its spinning and finally stopped, facing me, floating a few inches above the stone. It was then that I first got a good look at the creature. It has been almost three weeks since I saw this creature, but its image has been carved permanently in my mind. I have attempted to draw this creature to the best of my abilities below.

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As you can see, the creature had a rather large head for its body, with big eyes, small antennae, and tiny wings. I am not sure how these tiny wings supported this creature, but I suppose it was some sort of magic. This creature, which I guess was a very powerful pokemon god, was mostly green, but its face was white.

Alas, I digress. As soon as the creature (which I now call Celebi because of the marking on the stone) appeared, manifold kinds and colors of flowers started to bloom all around me. It truly was a beautiful sight, of which I cannot completely describe through mere words.

We sat there staring at each other for what seemed like ages. Almost an hour, I have guessed. The sun was moving away from the break in the trees. I had the feeling that as soon as the sun was completely past the hole that this marvelous creature would leave. The sun was almost past.

“Don’t go…” I told the creature. It looked into my eues. Its eyes told me that it did not want to go either. It was a prisoner, bound by time and the sun. I wish that there were something I could have done. Time was almost up. It was about to leave. It extended its three-pronged hand palm-first to me. I extended mine as well, joining certain fingers together to make my hand three-pronged as well.

When our hands touched, I could almost feel its pain. Then I heard a voice inside my head that did not belong to me.

“Goodybye…” I knew that this voice must have come from this marvelous creature, this Celebi. I mouthed the word “goodbye” back to it. Then the sun fully moved away from hole. The creature faded like an intangible dream. It was gone.

I was about to leave this saddening scene when I noticed something. The date and time, “January 1, 1800 midday,” had disappeared. Then the outermost ring started to glow. When it faded, I could see the words “January 1, 2000 midday” engraved on it. I was momentarily confused, but then I understood. That was when it would come back.

-Chester M. Longwood, Explorer and Nature-Lover



“Wow,” Jack said softly to himself as he set the manuscript down on his desk in his apartment. “This is amazing! This man has seen the legendary Celebi!” He looked at the date of the Celebi’s return. “That’s only three years away! I can train up a team of pokemon to beat it, and then I can capture it,” he said to himself. “I’ll be the only man in the world with a legendary pokemon! But I can’t tell anyone about this! I can’t take any chances at all...”

And so began Jack’s quest. He spent those three years training pokemon and planning. He planned every single little detail he could think of, every contingency. This one event, this one hour of time consumed his every thought. His girlfriend dumped him, he lost his job; his house, his car repossessed, but it didn’t matter. He would be rich. He would be famous.

It was all planned out. He traveled out to the site several times to better plan out what he was going to do. He would leave three weeks before the first of January. That would give him time for any problem he might come across. He would camp out by the edge of the river where there was a cave. Then, he would set out at daylight on the first of January to meet the legendary Pokemon. He would starve his Pokemon during this time to make them more ravenous. Within the span of an hour, he would use them to weaken Celebi enough to catch it. He bought a plethora of pokeballs, comprised of every kind of Pokeball except the famous Master Ball. He was indeed ready.

* * *

As the first rays of daylight pierced through the trees, Jack shouldered his backpack full of pokeballs, grabbed his wooden machete, and headed off for the site. He had stayed up all night in the excitement of what was to take place, and now the exhaustion was catching up to him. But he strove on, for it was more than just a goal or a dream. It was an obsession.

* * *
 
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That's pretty darn good. I'm assuming that the years given match up with the same years in the real world...

One question--*EVERY* kind of ball except for Master? So...Safari? Dark? That one kind Mewtwo had in the first movie?
 
Every kind he could get his hands on. He was so desperate to catch Celebi that he got every kind he could, just in case.
 
.... Wow.

I regret that I didn't read this at Pojo, Rob.... Alas, do not pity me, for I now see the splendour that is... "Obsession."

This is one facet I saw in the path of my fic-type encounters with Celebi.... Some being or another coming into contact with the lil' bugger, only never to see him again but will always feel as though he's being watched by Celebi....

Of all the portrayals of Celebi I've seen and thought of, I think I like this one best. Foss's Paleowarp described it as a skittish, weak creature. My RoseIII described it as an apathetic guide, unscathed by time by any means. Your "Obsession" brings both of these conceptualisms into a single idea: that Celebi is a creature blessed with an immense power, but cursed by being trapped in its strength. Fantabulous.

:3 *is ecstatic that another from Pojo has come to BMG at last!*
 
That was very good.. I wasn't sold on the section with Jack, but when I read the section with Celebi I have to say I think this deserves to be "critically acclaimed".

BTW - that was some very interesting criticism Kurai, and forced me to go back and think about the story in more depth than I would normally do for fanfiction.
 
Ok, here is the conclusion:

Obsession: Part II

Under the dense canopy of tropical flora, a lone figure cut through the underbrush with a wooden machete. His hand traversed his forehead, wiping off the perspiration. It would soon be midday, and the humidity was high. He paused for a moment to catch his breath and look at his watch.

“It’s almost time…”

Jack cleared away the final foliage guarding the entrance to the small clearing. It was just as he had imagined it. Lush flora surrounded the area. There was the cylinder in the middle just as the manuscript had described, and there was a break in the trees. He looked up through it and saw that the sun was almost in position.

Jack sat down and meditated. He had to have a clear head for this. He had been planning it out so long, and couldn’t let some stupid mistake cost him everything he’d worked for. He went over in his head everything he needed to think about for this upcoming event. Which pokemon to use when, what moves to use, it was all being churned inside his head.

Suddenly, a strange eerie light filled the clearing. The sun was in position. Jack remembered what the manuscript said as it happened before his eyes:

The light condensed into a small circle that shined right on top of the innermost circle. The circle started to glow, and little white particles shot up into the clearing. At first, it was just a couple, but soon hundreds of tiny particles were swirling around me. By this time, I was standing right next to the rock.

Suddenly, all the particles flew directly above the circle, swirling faster and faster, and then all came together into one form. The creature was spinning, hands at its side, eyes staring into the sun. It slowed its spinning and finally stopped, facing me, floating a few inches above the ground.


It was as if he was looking through the eyes of that explorer, every vivid detail coming to life in front of him. He gazed longingly into its eyes. The greenest eyes that sparked beautifully with lightning and the stars in the sky. The legend was true. For truly this was Celebi, the legendary pokemon of time. Time. He only had one hour. He stopped his reverie and went into action.

“Char, GO!” A giant winged dinosaur formed out of the red light emitted from the pokeball. He flapped his wings and snapped his jaws menacingly. The flame on his tail burned brightly. Jack wasted no time.

“Char, Flamethrower!” The Charizard let out a stream of fire. The heat from it was so strong that dead leaves laying nearby caught on fire. The attack had been perfected over time. Jack made sure that each of his Pokemon’s attacks used their full potential. But the strong flame was quickly deflected by a Light Screen.

The Celebi shook its head. It doesn’t have to be this way.

Jack ignored the Pokemon’s telepathic message. “Yes it does. You’re not going to weasel your way out of being caught. Team CELEBI will prevail! Char, use Fire Blast!”

Fire Blast was Char’s most powerful attack, and Jack hadn’t planned on using it this early. But seeing as it would take the strongest attacks to defeat it, he decided that now was the time to use it. As the five-sided flame shot out of Char’s mouth after a short power-up, the air could be seen being heated to an extreme temperature. It flew through the air until it connected with the Light Screen, shattering it. However, Celebi was untouched, not even having moved out of the circle.

Your heart is not pure. You care only for yourself. I refuse to willingly go with someone who cares only for himself.

“Quit probing my mind!” Jack yelled. “Char, its Light Screen is broken. Use your body slam!” The behemoth folded its wings in and charged the Celebi, which still remained unmoving within the circle.

“No…” As the Celebi extended it hand out palm forward, the Charizard froze in its tracks, still leaning forward. “…it is my turn.”

An eerie purple light swirled all over its body. As the Charizard stood transfixed with its mouth hanging open, its body also swirled with purple light. Suddenly, it flew backwards, right into the trunk of an enormous tropical tree. It fell forward onto its stomach, coughing up dust and blood. It slowly got up.

“Char, return.” The Charizard disappeared in the same red light that it arrived in. “Hmm…I’ll use-”

You really think that pokemon will work? It lost its last two battles.

“Quit messing with my head! I know! I’ll use-”

Yes, that is a strong Pokemon, but it isn’t enough to beat me…

“Dang, you’re right! That one Pokemon may not be able to beat you, but you can not take on all of Team CELEBI at the same time!

C har, GO!
E nigma, GO!
L exy, GO!
E clipse, GO!
B lackness, GO!
I nferno, GO!”

A Charizard, Umbreon, Rapidash, Murkrow, Houndoom, and Arcanine all gathered around the cylindrical stone, respectively.

You pathetic human, naming your pokemon to fit my name! Why are you wasting your life obsessing over me?

“I may be obsessed, but in no way am I wasting my life! I will have power! I will be famous! Once you belong to me I will be invincible!”

The Celebi shook its head. I have nothing else to say to you. What’s done is done...

“Char, use Fire Blast! Enigma, Faint Attack! Lexy, Flamethrower! Eclipse, Fly! Blackness, Crunch! Inferno, you know what to do!”

The Charizard quickly powered up and shot a Fire Blast just as the Umbreon disappeared. Celebi saw the fire attack and sensed the Umbreon approaching. It deftly did a graceful somersault in the air just as the flame was nearing it. The Umbreon appeared in the circle expecting to find a Celebi, but was met by vindictive flames. It was propelled all the way out of the clearing, still conscious, but not able to battle anymore.

Meanwhile, the Murkrow had flown up in the air, waiting for the right chance to attack. When the Celebi had reached the peak of it jump, Murkrow initiated its dive. The Houndoom, oblivious to the Murkrow’s dive, charged Celebi with its teeth bared, intending to intercept it on the way down. The Murkrow edged closer to its prey. The Houndoom lept into the air.

Suddenly, the Celebi Teleported right above where the Murkrow had been. The Houndoom’s teeth sank into the Murkrow’s side, but the momentum of the bird hurtled the two pokemon towards the ground. Unfortunately for them, the Rapidash, also trying to catch the legendary Pokemon off guard, had released its Flamethrower just a second earlier. The flame connected with the two Pokemon, causing them to skid across the forest floor.

Just as the Rapidash’s Flamethrower subsided, Celebi floated gently to the ground. But the sight that met its eyes horrified it. The Houndoom, having been starved like the others for ferocity, and now tasting the flesh of Murkrow, completely lost all thought of the battle in hopes for a decent meal. It started ripping into the bird of prey’s body.

The Legendary Pokemon froze, horrified at the grotesque sight. Then, out of nowhere, Jack’s Arcanine plowed into it with a powerful ExtremeSpeed. For the first time, the Celebi flew out of the circle formed in stone. Any other time but this, the Celebi would have been overjoyed, for the stone was its prison, and it could not voluntarily leave. But now it was in a state of weakness. Now it would be able to be caught. Caught by someone with a heart full of greed.

“Now is your chance!” Jack yelled. “Get it while it’s down!” All of the Pokemon except for the Murkrow and Houndoom moved as if to attack Celebi. Suddenly, their movements were totally constricted. Surrounded by the eerie purple light, a Psychic attack, they remained motionless.

Stop it! Stop it, all of you! This has gone on long enough. Can’t you see you are being used by your master? The only reason he trained you was to capture you! So what do you expect will happen to you if he catches me? He will see no use for you! He will see you as just another burden. Why do you let him treat you this way? Go, go now and find masters that love you for who you are, not for what you can do! Masters that tend for your needs, feed you! You are not bound by this man, if he can be called that! Leave now, for you are oppressed! Break the chains of slavery he has put upon you! Let freedom ring!

Celebi healed the wounds of those with bad injuries. One by one, they started to leave the clearing, including the Houndoom, who went in search of another meal. Jack, all of his aspirations shattered, his obsession beyond reach, tried to scavenge up what he could. He knew he wouldn’t last long in the Jungle without his Pokemon.

“No, don’t leave! I need you! You need me! Don’t listen to it! Don’t go! That’s it…” He reached for a Pokeball, but soon froze in place. Out of the corner of his eye, he saw Celebi shaking its head. The Pokemon were soon long gone, and eventually even Celebi, now free from his prison, left in search of someone with a pure heart, worthy of being his master.

Jack fell to his knees, crying. All was lost.

* * *

Under the dense canopy of tropical flora, a figure, now truly alone, cut through the underbrush with a broken machete. His aching hand traversed his forehead, wiping off the blood and perspiration. It would soon be midday, and the humidity was high. He collapsed on the ground, panting. He looked at his watch, forgetting that it was broken.

Your time has come… The voice echoed in Jack’s head one last time.

Hearing a slightly vindictive snort, Jack slowly looked up into the eyes of a ravenous Houndoom. Eyes that burned with hatred. As the starved pokemon licked his lips, Jack’s eyes began to slowly close. All of his dreams shattered, Jack gave up, lying on the ground, pitiful and quickly fading into unconsciousness. He had truly lost everything; everything he had, truly lost, lost to his obsession.
 
Ah, a mortal vs. immortal battle at the cost of the mortal's life.... ;3 Gotta love it. *applauds*
 
That was very good... I really liked how you wrote Celebi - its first comment "It doesn't have to be this way" was quite chilling, though the rest of the story didn't quite capitalise on that.
 
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