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Ocean Waves: My first fanfic [ PG ]

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Hi. I'm flareon4ever and this is my first fanfiction. Constructive criticism is appreciated, but don't be rude.

Anyway, the story is called Ocean Waves. There is not a prologue. It could be compared to the HGSS storyline. New technology is introduced. Well, Here's chapter one. Its not very long but enjoy!

Ocean Waves
A Pokemon Fanfiction

Major Characters
(as of start of story)​

Humans

Mel- Team Rocket Commander ; in charge of Project Whirl; Dark brown hair, Brown eyes; pokemon: Houndoom and Dragonite
Becca- Pokemon Trainer of Johto; Brown hair, gray eyes; Pokemon: Quilava, Pidgeot, Gyrados
Professor Elm- PKMN Professor; You know what he looks like. Look it up on Bulbapedia.; Pokemon: Chikorita

Pokemon

All Legendary Pokemon






Chapter 1​
“Hey let’s battle!”
Walking down the road to Ecruteak City, I was challenged by a Picknicker.
“ Ok. Fine.”
We walked over to a nearby clearing. She threw her Pokeball into the air.
“ Time to shine, Aipom!”
My senses went on full alert. An Aipom? What am I, an amateur?
“ Let’s go, Pidgeot!” I called out as I threw the Pokeball. My Pidgeot and the other trainer’s Aipom sprung onto the battlefield.
I was starting to think about which attack to use when the other trainer called out, “ Aipom use Furyswipes!” Aipom started for Pidgeot when I called out, “ Aerial Ace, now!” Beak hit claw and, surprisingly, beak won. Aipom fell on the ground and fainted. “ Yes! Way to go Pidgeot.”
I returned Pidgeot to it’s poke ball.
The trainer I was fighting ran off.
Dusk approached so I set up camp for the night by a nearby stream. I let my Pidgeot and Quilava out of their Pokeballs. Later that night I asked Quilava a question that would change my life, “ Hey Quilava,” He poked his head out of the grass, “ Is it fun being a Pokemon?” He looked confused but then said something that my Pokedex translated as, “ Well, yes. It really depends on who you are.” My pokedex had an app. on it called PokeTranslate, which could translate what the pokemon said.
“ What do you mean?”
“ I mean it depends on where you are born. If you are born a legendary pokemon, then you have the best life possible. Being a wild is great, according to Pidgeot, being free. Being owned by a trainer, well it really depends. If it’s a terrible trainer then life is terrible. If a trainer like you, then life is wonderful. But, I wouldn’t know…”
“ You know. Sometimes I wish I was a Pokemon.”
Midnight came and a light shone. It caused me to wake up. A shape appeared and spoke.
“ I am Jirachi, the Wish Pokemon. I come from the distant Hoenn region. I have heard your wish to become one of us. Now, get up and fly to the Whirl Islands. I will give you your reward.”
Then it disappeared.
 
Not bad for a first timer, so I'll help you improve a bit. Keep the length in the story please. One thing I'd really like to mention is that you try spacing out your work. Or else it just looks like one big paragraph. But you've got the dialog right! I'm talking about paragraphs here though! Like every new time in the story should become a new paragraph. You know?
 
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