TEEN: - Complete One-shot I wrote for a prompt someone gave me.

[Arbirchy]

PROMPT: Post-apocalypse AU. An unknown catastrophe has ravaged your fandom's world. Your OTP (One True Pairing) are the only two known survivors, and one of them is dying.

TAGS: Pokemon, Apocalypse, Clingyshipping, Gore

Story:
It was silent in the Palmer household, after their whole world was taken over by an unknown disease. Barry and Lucas sure didn’t know what it was. In fact, Lucas was half-infected by the virus. Barry, an aspiring Frontier Brain, didn’t know what was coming for him when he heard that familiar voice come through his cell phone that one day. His lover had told Barry that he was infected.

Barry first learned about the virus over the news. The scientists didn’t even have time to research it before they all started going psycho. There was no known cure and no known name. But what he did know, was that they liked blood.

About two weeks later, people started going psycho and Pokemon started dying. Lucas and Barry stayed strong over the period when they seemingly couldn’t recognize their family and friends anymore. The two were shocked when they found Palmer, Barry’s dad, and Professor Rowan, Lucas’ dad, dead in cold blood near Professor Rowan’s lab.

It wasn’t long until Lucas showed signs of the infection. He limped and his eyes gleamed red instead of the cool brown Barry was used to. Barry frowned at his condition, aspiring to take care of Lucas, until he would go down too.

The first attack came on a Sunday. Lucas, now with sharp teeth and seemingly no control over his body, bit into Barry’s neck searching for blood. His vengeful look on his face seemed like Barry had done wrong to him. He promptly stopped and apologized, and Barry forgave him.

The attacks would keep on coming. Barry started cutting himself open and giving his blood to Lucas. After all, it hurt less than Lucas biting into him.



3/18/20- Present Day

“Hey, thanks man.” Lucas gleefully drank into a glass of Barry’s blood after Barry cut himself.

“It’s all I can do to make sure you don’t eat me,” Barry laughed.

Barry went downstairs to prepare food for them to eat. They were all they had; all their friends and family were either fully infected or dead.

Suddenly, Lucas stomped upstairs growling. He came downstairs with a limp and quickly ran towards Barry. He was shocked when he saw him; worms crawling out of his ears and red eyes shining bright as ever. Barry was scared, very scared.

“Lucas?” Barry picked up a frying pan and put it in a defensive position. He was ready to hit Lucas if it was required. Albeit, it would probably kill his friend and ruin every chance of his lover surviving.

“Don’t do this man,” he continued. Lucas growled with all of the newfound rage he had harnessed. His sharp nails dug deep into Barry’s bony body.

Lucas swallowed Barry’s arm whole, followed by his leg. Blood was gushing out of both of Barry’s severed body parts, and he felt as weak as ever. Finally, he limped on the ground and died.

By now, Lucas had realized what he had done and returned to normal. He caressed Barry’s face and cried.

“Barry, I’m sorry,” Lucas sobbed in hopes he would just seemingly come alive again. His tears hit Barry’s blood, dispersing it. Lucas just walked off, crying, leaving Barry there to rot.

 

[kintsugi]

Hey there! Saw you post this prompt in the WW discord (#shamlessplug) and was excited to see what would come out of it.

Apocalypse stuff is neat. You don't fully describe the cause of the virus/where it came from/why specifically it causes people to turn into flesh-craving monsters, but that's kind of in line with the nature of this story: it isn't about what happened in the past, but what's happening to the characters as a result. At some point, the reasons stop mattering because the present-day actions outweigh them. That's a unique way of presenting heavier stuff and it let you condense your story into a more bite-sized approach (pardon the pun), so I thought that was a good call.

That being said, I think you toe a fine line in terms of information. You can skip out on giving background on the disease; that's fine; it's not a character, but when you don't take the time to build up your characters, it's hard to care about them. We don't get any hints about who they were before Lucas becomes a gleeful blood-drinker or Barry becomes the guy who laughs while cutting his arms open. It's a strangely macabre approach to a relationship and we could argue that it's sad or tragic or reminiscent of how much these guys used to love each other, but there's really no gravity for how the world used to be that lets us be sad/care about how it is. You wipe out the old world in the third paragraph and we never look back, so the ending scenario lacks a lot of weight when I think you meant to play it up for tragedy.

On the whole, this is an interesting short piece! However, I think it could use a bit more fleshing out and detail to make it really pack a punch.

 

[Arbirchy]

Hey there! Saw you post this prompt in the WW discord (#shamlessplug) and was excited to see what would come out of it.

Apocalypse stuff is neat. You don't fully describe the cause of the virus/where it came from/why specifically it causes people to turn into flesh-craving monsters, but that's kind of in line with the nature of this story: it isn't about what happened in the past, but what's happening to the characters as a result. At some point, the reasons stop mattering because the present-day actions outweigh them. That's a unique way of presenting heavier stuff and it let you condense your story into a more bite-sized approach (pardon the pun), so I thought that was a good call.

That being said, I think you toe a fine line in terms of information. You can skip out on giving background on the disease; that's fine; it's not a character, but when you don't take the time to build up your characters, it's hard to care about them. We don't get any hints about who they were before Lucas becomes a gleeful blood-drinker or Barry becomes the guy who laughs while cutting his arms open. It's a strangely macabre approach to a relationship and we could argue that it's sad or tragic or reminiscent of how much these guys used to love each other, but there's really no gravity for how the world used to be that lets us be sad/care about how it is. You wipe out the old world in the third paragraph and we never look back, so the ending scenario lacks a lot of weight when I think you meant to play it up for tragedy.

On the whole, this is an interesting short piece! However, I think it could use a bit more fleshing out and detail to make it really pack a punch.

Hey!

I agree with ya, it really needs more detail. 2 other people have told me that lol

In my last story, someone asked me to write with action tags instead of dialogue tags, so basically this is just practicing action tags.

The prompt isn't mine; I got it off r/fanfiction's discord server in the prompts channel.