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EVERYONE: - Ongoing Pika-pika-chu!

Naruchu_believe_it

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"Kaa-chu" mumbled a pikachu."Pika-pikachu!" yelled a pikachu as it ran to the pikachu who had apparently been hit by a car..."Pika!Pika-pika...Chu?"squeaked the un-injured pikachu while holding back tears....It was stopped by the injured pikachu laying it's head against it's[un-injured pikachu]leg..."Pika...Pikachu-chu....Chu-ka-pi." muttered the injured pikachu..."Pi...Pikachu.Cha" said the un-injured pikachu as it looked into the sky...

[Flashback]

"Ka-chu!Kaa-chu!" squeaked a healthy pikachu with scurffy hair. "Pichu-pichu....Pikachu!" said a pikachu as it streached from it's nap and ran towards the other pikachu and pounced it..."It's nice to see you again,Ritchie" said a teenager with black hair,with a hat that had a blue symbol on it...."Oh,hey Ash!Long time no see!" said a,teenager about the same age as Ash who had brown hair and wore a blue hat with a yellow stripe , Ash he shook Ash's hand.

"Pika-pika!" said the larger pikachu with the scruffy hair as it pounced onto the smaller pikachu..."Pika.Pika-chu-chu" laughed the smaller pikachu...

"Hey,pikachu!" called Ash.."Sparky,hey!" yelled Ritchie to his pikachu..."Pika-pika!" yelled the pikachu named Sparky as it gently nuggied Pikachu.Then it ran to it's best buddy,Pikachu stayed stunned for a second before running to Ash...

"Hey...Ash!" yelled Dawn as she ran up the hill where Ash and Ritchie where standing. "Bune-buneary" said a exchausted Buneary."Pip-pip-lup!" yelled a Piplup as it jogged up the hill...."Oh,hello,I'm Dawn." said Dawn as she extended her hand to greet Ritchie...."And I'm Ritchie,nice to meet you Dawn." said Ritchie in a cheerful manor..."Um...NICE to meet you too!" yelled Dawn in a ooc manner...

"Pikachu-chu." sighed Pikachu as it jumped off Ash's sholder..."Buneary!" said Buneary as it shyly waved at Pikachu..."Chu!Pik-" started Pikachu until Sparky ran up to them and shaked Buneary's hand,"Pika-pikachu!" greeted Sparky..."Bun-bun-neary-buneary." said Buneary.
 
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I'm going to say this until I'm blue in the face, because it seems that every other person is doing this wrong...

START A NEW PARAGRAPH EACH TIME SOMEONE NEW TALKS. Seriously, it makes it a lot easier to read.

And "in an ooc manner" has no place in a story unless someone (preferably with experience in writing) is describing someone else's actions.
 
Is Sparky in love with Buneary and could you please make the Pokemon speak English Naruchu?
 
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