EVERYONE: - Ongoing pokemon: hannah of johto in sinnoh

[ilovepaul]

pokemon: hannah of johto is something i made. currently the character is in sinnoh. but in johto her starter was chikorite. she competes in both battles and contests but mostly battles. she travels with her brother luke and her best friend caitlin. hannah loves grass types. in sinnoh she occasionaly runs into ash brock and dawn.luke develops a crush on dawn.hannah has friendly rivalry with ash and dawn as they are against each other often in contests and laer in the sinnoh league. hannah has a not so friendly rivalry with paul. in other words she hates his guts. well thats how it starts anyway...i wont tell you how it ends! ill be putting a story on sometime. ill have pics soon too.

 

[ilovepaul]

hannah goes to sinnoh chapter 1
hannah: caitlin, can you believe were going to the sinnoh region?
caitlin: i know its so cool! you did great in the johto league.
hannah: thanks.
luke: come on! lets go see if professor rowan can hook us up with a sinnoh starter!
hannah: okay!
later
hannah: i choose turtwig of course!
luke: and i want chimchar!
caitlin: piplup please.
later
hannah: i just love our starters.
luke: me too.
caitlin: hey who are they?
luke: i dont know.
hannah: HEY YOU! STOP!
ash: whos that?
dawn: dont know. lets find out.
ash: hey im ash. who are you?
hannah: hi im hannah. nice to meet you.
dawn: im dawn
brock: and im brock.
caitlin: caitlin's the name.
luke: im hannahs brother luke.
ash: so what are you doing out here?
hannah: im setting out to be a great pokemon master.
ash: me too!
hannah: i sometimes compete in contests.
dawn and caitlin: im a contest coordinator.
caitlin: cool!
dawn: i love contests!
luke: i compete in contests but i have issues getting badges but i love both.
brock: im a pokemon breeder.
hannah: so ash and dawn sounds like were rivals now.
ash: sounds like it.
dawn: yeah. caitlins a rival of mine too.
luke: *dawn sure is pretty...*
hannah: so ash, you have any other rivals in sinnoh?
ash: yeah this guy named paul.
hannah: okay well we neeg to get going.
does hannah run into paul? will she meet them again? find out in chapter 2!

 

[Æsahættr]

You should have posted this in the Writers Corner. That's where the Fics belong. If that's what you can call this.

 

[Blackjack Gabbiani]

You've got to be kidding me. We get dialogue (and not very good dialogue at that), but where's the description? What's going on with these people? Do they exist in a featureless void? You have to tell us what's happening, what they're doing, not just what they're saying!

 

[The Pig King]

And please, at least use proper English.

 

[Turtle Tamer Kammy]

How old are you, ilovepaul?