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This FanFic is about the new region of Sinnoh or as most people know it as Shino'u.I hope you all enjoy!
Episode Guide
Episode 1-Tyler and his First Pokemon!-Released
Episdoe 2-Tyler's Rival and New Ally!-Released
Episode 3-All That Glitters Isn't Golden!-Unreleased
Episode 4-Odd Pokemon Out!-UnReleased
Episode 5-Arrival In Mino Town!-UnReleased
Episode 6-Tyler Vs Hyouta! Geodude Vs Pochama!-UnReleased
Episode 7-Matt's HQ!-Unreleased

Wake Up Brother Your Getting Your First Pokemon Today"A litte girl say's as she runs around her big brothers room.
"Okay"Tyler say's as he wakes up in.Tyler woke up."Your right sis I am getting my first pokemon today."Tyler say's as he walks to his closet.Tyler puts on a pair of blue baggy jeans,a pair of red and white slip on shoes,a black and white shirt,a dark red hat,and his backpack."Okay now i'm ready"Tyler say's, as he puts on his watch(Poketech).Tyler walks down his stairs to see his mother.
"Tyler now when you get your first pokemon come home so i can see it."Tyler's mom say's.
"Okay"Tyler replies as he runs out the door.

Tyler walks until he reaches Prof.Kanes lab."Hello Tyler"Prof.Kane say's, as he greets Tyler.
"Hi Prof.Kane."Tyler say's ,as he looks around the lab.
"So here are the avalible pokemon."ProfKane say's as his assistant rolls out a cart of three pokemon eating pokefood.
The first one was a green turtle with a small brown shell and a twig with two leaves sticking out of his head."This pokemon here is Naetoru the grass type pokemon. The next pokemon was a penguin with two white dots on it's chest." This pokemon is Pochama the water type pokemon." The next pokemon was a red monkey with a flaming butt and a little squilly thing on top of it's head."Last but not least Hikozaru the fire type pokemon". "now which pokemon do you want?"Prof.Kane ask's.
"I want Hikozau"Tyler answers, as he picks up Hikozaru.
"Okay here goes your pokedex and five pokeballs."Prof.Kane say's as he gives Tyler the items.
"Thanks!"Tyler say's, as he walks out the door.

Tyler walked into his house to be greeted by his mother.
"Hey Tyler so what pokemon did you get?,"Tyler's mom ask's, as she sets down a laundry basket full of clothes.
"Well mom I got a Hikozaru,"Tyler replies.
"Good for you I want you to take these two pokeballs"Tyler's mom say's, as she hands him two small pokeballs.
"Mom what are in these?"Tyler ask's as he puts the pokeballs on his belt slot.
"One of them is a Pochama, and the other one is a Naetoru"Tyler's mom replies.
"Mom where did you get these?"Tyler ask's as he put's two empty pokeballs on the table.
"Well while you kids were in pokemon school I did some breeding,and your sister has hers already but legally there still mine"Tyler's mom say's, as she walks in the nearby laundry room. Tyler's poketeck starts to beep.
"Hey I have a message from Prof.Kane."Tyler say's, as he looks at his watch."It say's
Dear All Pokemon Trainers,
We now allow trainers to carry 10 pokemon instead of six.
-Sincerely all Professors
"WOW I CAN CARRY A TOATAL OF 10 POKEMON"Tyler exclaims, as he puts his two extra pokeballs back on his belt.
"Good! That's great for you honey!"Tyler's mom yell's from the laundry room.
"Well mom I'm off I'll call you when I get to a pokemon center"Tyler yell's as he walks out of his front door and runs until he reaches Route 202.


Tyler walks past a sign that say's Route 202 and underneath it it say's Watch Out For Wild Korinku, Bippa, and Mukkuru.
"Hey you trainer I challenge you to a battle,oh and before we start my names Yuuta" A young boy yell's, as he runs up to Tyler.
"Okay, Go Hikozaru!"Tyler commands. Tyler throws the red and white pokeball into the air as a small monkey appears out of it.
"Alright time to lose, Go Bippa!" Yuuta commands. Yuuta throws a blue and white pokeball into the air as a dark brown beaver with two buck teeth sticking out of his mouth.
"I wonder what Dexter has to say about this pokemon"Tyler say's, as he takes out his pokedex.
"Bippa The Round Mouse Pokemon It's teeth are so strong they can eat through solid steel. When angry or sad it can't stop eating.
"Bippa use Defense Curl then go into Rollout"Yuuta commands. Bippa rolls into a small ball and rolls directly at Hikozaru.
"Hikozaru dodge and use Ember!"Tyler commands. Hikozaru jumps over Bippa and blows small fire balls out of his mouth."Now Hikozaru use Ember again!"Tyler commands. Hikozaru blows out more small fire balls at Bippa from behind knocking it into a nearby tree.

"NOOO Bippa"Yuuta cries. Bippa stands back up."Okay Bippa lets do this!"Yuuta exclaims,
"No matter Hikozaru use Ember one more time!"Tyler commands. Hikozaru lets out flaming bullets of fire again.
"Bippa dodge and use Tackle GO!"Yuuta commands. Bippa moves to the right of the fireballs and throws itself at Hikozaru.
"Hikozaru let's finish this use, use Ember head on!"Tyler commands. Hikozaru jumps over Bippa and releases a strong blast of fire balls, knocking Bippa off balance.
"Now use Tackle Go!"Tyler commands. Hikozaru lunges at Bippa knocking him into another tree, causing it to faint.
"No I lost!"Yuuta cries.
"Don't worry about it Yuuta you almost had me near the end,isn't this your first battle?"Tyler ask's.
"Yeah, but you probably had like a trillion battles"Yuuta say's with dissapointment on his face.
"Actually it was my first battle as well."Tyler say's.
"Well that for the encouragement"Yuuta say's with a smile on his face."Heres something for winning"Yuuta say's as he digs into his bak pocket. Yuuta pulls out a bag with a picture of a Magost Berry."It's a Berry Bag!"Yuuta exclaims, as he give Tyler the bag
"Thanks! Now I can put the berrys I have in here."Tyler say's, as he put's the bag into his backpack.

"Oh yeah there's going to be a battle tournemet soon in Mino Town the winner gets a medal and a surprise pokemon egg."Yuuta say's.
"Oh I'll be there!"Tyler exclaimes.
"See ya there!"Yuuta say's, as he walks off.
"Wow he's a good kid I hope he does well in the tornament."Tyler whispers to himself.
To Be Contiued.....
 
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Okay. In addition to cleaning up the duplicate threads of this fic, I just wanted to say that your syntax needs work. It's 'says' without the apostrophe. Running your fic through a grammar and spellcheck in MS Word (or whatever program you use) would be helpful.
 
And on a more logical note--why is Prof Krane in there, all the way from Orre?

And DAMN. You need work. Let me pick just the first line for you...

Wake Up Brother Your Getting Your First Pokemon Today"A litte girl say's as she runs around her big brothers room.
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That should be "Wake up, brother! You're getting your first pokémon today!" a little girl says as she runs around her big brother's room.
You don't capitalize every single word, only ones at the beginning of sentences. Learn the difference between "your" and "you're", among others.
 
Blackjack Gabbiani said:
And on a more logical note--why is Prof Krane in there, all the way from Orre?

And DAMN. You need work. Let me pick just the first line for you...



That should be "Wake up, brother! You're getting your first pokémon today!" a little girl says as she runs around her big brother's room.
You don't capitalize every single word, only ones at the beginning of sentences. Learn the difference between "your" and "you're", among others.
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Uhhh it's not Prof.Krane it's Prof.Kane
 
Episode 2-Tyler's Rival and New Ally!
"Now Naetoru use RazorLeaf!"Tyler commands
"Neh,Neh!"Naetoru yell's. Naetoru releases sharp blade like leafs at the pokemon.
"Okay Pokeball Go!"Tyler commands. Tyler throws the pokeball at the pokemon.Once,Twice,Ping!
"Alright we did it!"Tyler yell's , as he picks up the pokeball and put's it into one of his belt slots. Tyler walks to a nearby lake. "Okay come on out everyone."Tyler yell's. Tyler throws his pokeballs into the air.
"Hiko!"Hikozaru cries
"Neh,Neh!"Naetoru cries
"Pocha,Pocha!"Pochama cries
"Korin!"Korinku cries
"Well everybody meet your new friend, Korinku!"Tyler says, as he points to Korinku.
"Hiko!"Hikozaru cries in excitement.
"Neh,Neh!"Naetoru cries in excitement.
"Pocha,Pocha!"Pochama cries in excitement. Hikozaru jumps into a nearby tree full of fruit.

"Good Hikozaru throw them down Tyler says, as he opens the Berry Bag. Hikozaru throws down 15-20 berry's and fruit.
"Good work now Naetoru use RazorLeaf on these fruits and berry's."Tyler commands. Naetoru throws sharp blade like leafs at the fruit and vegetables cutting them into small pieces.

"Okay good work Naetoru now Hikozaru use ember on these pieces of wood."Tyler commands. Hikozaru blows small fireballs from his mouth."Good work guys!"Tyler yell's, as he pulls a small pot from his backpack to cook the food."Okay while the foods cooking you guys can eat!"Tyler yell's,as he pulls out four small containers of Fire,Grass,Water,and Electric Type pokemon food. Tyler fills up four small dishes of pokemon food."There guys all set."Tyler says as he stirs the pot of stew.

"Hey there might if I stay for dinner"A young says, as she taps Tyler on his shoulder.
"Sure"Tyler says, as he stands up.The girl was the same height as Tyler she had brown hair with pink streaks in the front,a white scarf, pink boots a pink skirt,and a black and white vest.
"Oh yeah my name's Rose"Rose says.
"Yeah well my name's Tyler, nice to meet you"Tyler says, as he continues to stir the stew.
"Hey why don't you let out your pokemon so they can eat I have plenty of pokemon food for all types.
"Okay come on out Mimiroru,Aipom,and Riishan!"Rose commands.Rose throws three pokeballs into the air.
"Cool I wonder what Dexter have to say about them."Tyler says,as he pulls out his pokedex.

"Mimiroru The Rabbit Pokemon It's ears are so strong they can hear from fifty feet away.They say the when it evolves it's ears grow even bigger."Dexter says. Mimiroru was a small brown pokemon,one ear stood in the air while the other was flat.The top half of it's body was brown while the bottom half was a giant beige cotton ball.

"Aipom The Long Tail Pokemon It uses its tail to hang on to tree branches. It uses its momentum to swing from one branch to another. Aipom was a monkey just like Hikozaru only purple and instead of
having butt of fire at the end of It's tail was a large hand.

"Riishan The Bell Pokemon Before it evolves it get into a group of Riishan and sing a lovely son which only happens at night.When it evolves it follows It's trainer anywhere. Riishan was a small yellow bell with two small twirling scarf's where person would ring a bell.

"Okay so that will be two normals and a psychic"Tyler says, as he digs through his backpack. Tyler pulls out 3 extra dishes and 3 containers of pokemon food.

"Before you wimps eat I challenge you to a double battle"A boy says.
"I never back down from a challenge"Tyler yell's.The boy was the same height as Tyler and Rose he had red spiky hair, a yellow muscle shirt,gray pants and red shoes.
"Okay lets do this"Rose says.

"Alright, Go Sneasel and Scorpi!"The boy commands. Sneasel was a dark blue pokemon with a pink feather like left ear.It had a gold pendent on both it's forehead. Scorpi was a light blue scorpion only bigger. Scorpi had sliver pincers on it's jaws,tail,and hands.The three each stand on the other side of the lake

"Alright,Go Pochama!"Tyler commands.
"Go Aipom"Rose commands.
"Pocha,Pocha!"Pochama cries.
"Aipom!"Aipom cries.
"Okay let's start Pochama use Water gun on Sneasel!"Tyler commands.
"Aipom use Swift!"Rose commands.
"Sneasel use Metal Claw"The boy commands
"Scorpi use Poison-"The boy stops and looks at his dark green poketeck.

"Matt we need you at HQ now!"A voice yell's over the poketeck.
"All right I'm on my way!"Matt says."I guess we'll have to finish this match later"Matt yell's as he runs off.
"Well I guess he had a good-"Tyler stops."THE STEW!"Tyler exclaims, as he runs back to the pot."Oh thank God it's not burned."Tyler says as he takes the pot off the fire.

"Okay dinners ready!"Tyler yell's, as he gives Rose a bowl full of stew and a spoon.
"Thanks!"Rose yell's as she takes a bite out of the stew."This is delicious!!"Rose yell's."Not even my parents make food this good and they're cooks.
"Yeah my mom taught me how to cook"Tyler says, as he rubs the back of his head."Hey where are you from anyway?"Tyler ask's
"Well I'm from Mio City"Rose answers.
"MIO CITY!THAT'S LIKE SIX CITIES FROM THIS FOREST!"Tyler yell's in astonishment.
"Yeah I want to be a famous breeder like my mother."Rose says, as she looks into the sky.
"Yeah well I want to be a famous pokemon trainer."Tyler says."Hey I have a great idea, why don't you travel with me!"Tyler exclaims.
"You'll really let me come along!"Rose yell's.
"Of course I could use the company"Tyler says with a smile on his face.Tyler and Rose talk for a few more hours.
"Well it's getting late and I'm tired"Rose yawns.
"Yeah me two."Tyler says,as he rubs his right eye.
"Well goodnight"Rose says, as she rolls out her pink and purple sleeping bag.
"Yeah I'll see you in the morning"Tyler says, as he rolls out his black and white sleeping bag.The two fall alseep.
To Be Contiued
 
(Tyler's poketeck starts to beep.
"Hey I have a message from Prof.Kane."Tyler say's, as he looks at his watch."It say's
Dear All Pokemon Trainers,
We now allow trainers to carry 10 pokemon instead of six.
-Sincerely all Professors
"WOW I CAN CARRY A TOATAL OF 10 POKEMON"Tyler exclaims, as he puts his two extra pokeballs back on his belt.)

Okay, first of all, the Pokemon Professors of the region do not decide what pokemon trainers are and are not allowed to do, the Pokemon League of that region does, or "Pokemon HQ" as its reffered to in the games.
And second, if you are going to give the characters more room for their pokemon, I think a reason is in order, have the league tell them why they are now allowed to have that many. The reason that it was six before was because it was a small number, equal and fair to all trainers.

Time Charge
 
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Heres a list of everyone's pokemon (That are in the series so far.)

Tyler-Hikozaru,Pochama,Naetoru,and Korinku
Rose-Mimiroru,Aipom,Riishan
Matt-Sneasel,Scorpi(More to be found out)
 
Episode 3-All That Glitters Isn't Golden!
Tyler and Rose walk down a lane until they come to a ranch full of pokemon.
"Wow look at all the pretty pokemon!"Rose exclaims, as she looks at all the pokemon.
"Yeah they're very nice"A man says.
"Oh we didn't mean to intrude"Tyler says, as he backs away from the picket fence.

"No harm done,Oh yeah my name's Aaron,what's yours"Aaron ask's.
"My name's Tyler"Tyler says
"My name's Rose, nice to meet you"Rose says with a warm smile on her face.
"So where are you guys headed to"Aaron ask's.
"Were headed to Mino Town for the Battle Contest,and Pokemon Contest.
"That's cool,Hey on your way over here did you guys happen to see a Squirtile with a golden shell
"No not that I recall"Tyler says, as he scratches his head.

(Nearby Tree)
"Oh a golden Squirtile,James we must have it!"A woman says,as she stairs through a pair of binoculars.
"Right Jessie"James says, as he looks through a pair a binoculars.
"James you're such wimp."A Meowth says.
"Mime,Mime,Mime,Mime,Mime,!"Mime Jr yell's, as he twirls in circles.The three sneak off somewhere.

(Back to the trio)
"Well ya see Squirtile fell into a bucket of paint,and when the other pokemon were mean to her she ran off I've had my Darkrai look everywhere for it but we just can't find it,and I'm really scared because somebody might think the shell is really golden and hurt her"Aaron says,as he hops off the fence.
"Don't worry we'll help you find her"Rose yell's.
"Yeah it would be fun looking for a pokemon."Tyler adds.
"Thanks"Aaron says.The three walk into the forest.
"Squirtile"Tyler yell's, as he moves bushes out of the way.

"Hey I got an idea!Go Aipom!"Rose commands.Rose throws the purple and white pokeball into the air as he Aipom materializes.
"Yeah you're right!Go Hikozaru!"Tyler commands. Tyler throws the red and white pokeball in the air.
"Hiko"Hikozaru cries.
"Hikozaru search from the trees and see if you can find a Squritile with a golden shell."Tyler commands.
"Aipom you go too"Rose commands. Aipom takes the left side of the trees, while Hikozaru takes the right side of the trees.
"I hope they find her"Rose say's.The three contiue to search when Hikozaru comes back carrying Squitle.
"You found her thanks"Aaron says,as he grabs the Squritile from Hikozaru.


"HA Prepare for trouble!"Jessie yell's
"Make it double!"James yell's
"To protect the world from devastation"Jessie yell's
"To unite all peoples within our nation"James yell's
"To denounce the evils of truth and love"Jessie yell's
"To extend our reach to the stars above"James yell's
"Jessie"Jessie yell's
"James"James yell's
"Team Rocket, blast off at the speed of light"Jessie yell's
"Surrender now, or prepare to fight"James yell's
"Meowth,dat's right"Meowth.


"Now let's get this golden Squritile."Jessie says, as she aims a net at Squritile.Jessie fires the net at Squritile and Rose catching them and pulling them into the Meowth shaped air balloon.
"Hey put her down!"Aaron yell's"Or you can suffer the consinquences of Darkrai."
"Go Naetoru!"Tyler commands.Naetoru materializes out of the Green and White pokeball.
"Naetoru use Razorleaf on that net!"Tyler commands.Naetoru shoots sharp leaves at net cuuting it down.
"I got cha!"Aaron says, as he catches Rose.
"Thanks!"Rose says.
"Squritile use Icebeam on that hot air balloon!"Aaron commands.Squritile shoot a light blue ray from her mouth freezing the balloon.
"Okay Darkrai use Shadowball!"Aaron commands.Darkrai appears out of nowhere and shoots a huge balck orb at the balloon.The balloon gets hit and is sent flying
"LOOKS LIKE TEAM ROCKETS BLASTING OFF AGAIN!"The trio yell.

(Later That Night)
"Hey Aaron do you want to come on our journey with us"Rose ask's.
"Sure and I think Squritile wants to come with you Rose"Aaro answers.
"Really Squritile you want to be my pokemon!"Rose yell's, as she picks up Squritile.
"Hey the paint came off"Tyler says.
"Yeah well let me grab my backpack and my Poketech."Aaron say's s he runs inside.
(10 Minutes Later)
"Okay I'm ready to go"Aaron says,as he walks outside.
The trio walk walk into the forest to see what adventures wait ahead.
To Be Contiued.......
 
FirePet said:
Episode 3-All That Glitters Isn't Golden!
Tyler and Rose walk down a lane until they come to a ranch full of pokemon.
"Wow look at all the pretty pokemon!"Rose exclaims, as she looks at all the pokemon.
"Yeah they're very nice"A man says.
"Oh we didn't mean to intrude"Tyler says, as he backs away from the picket fence.

"No harm done,Oh yeah my name's Aaron,what's yours"Aaron ask's.
"My name's Tyler"Tyler says
"My name's Rose, nice to meet you"Rose says with a warm smile on her face.
"So where are you guys headed to"Aaron ask's.
"Were headed to Mino Town for the Battle Contest,and Pokemon Contest.
"That's cool,Hey on your way over here did you guys happen to see a Squirtile with a golden shell
"No not that I recall"Tyler says, as he scratches his head.

(Nearby Tree)
"Oh a golden Squirtile,James we must have it!"A woman says,as she stairs through a pair of binoculars.
"Right Jessie"James says, as he looks through a pair a binoculars.
"James you're such wimp."A Meowth says.
"Mime,Mime,Mime,Mime,Mime,!"Mime Jr yell's, as he twirls in circles.The three sneak off somewhere.

(Back to the trio)
"Well ya see Squirtile fell into a bucket of paint,and when the other pokemon were mean to her she ran off I've had my Darkrai look everywhere for it but we just can't find it,and I'm really scared because somebody might think the shell is really golden and hurt her"Aaron says,as he hops off the fence.
"Don't worry we'll help you find her"Rose yell's.
"Yeah it would be fun looking for a pokemon."Tyler adds.
"Thanks"Aaron says.The three walk into the forest.
"Squirtile"Tyler yell's, as he moves bushes out of the way.

"Hey I got an idea!Go Aipom!"Rose commands.Rose throws the purple and white pokeball into the air as he Aipom materializes.
"Yeah you're right!Go Hikozaru!"Tyler commands. Tyler throws the red and white pokeball in the air.
"Hiko"Hikozaru cries.
"Hikozaru search from the trees and see if you can find a Squritile with a golden shell."Tyler commands.
"Aipom you go too"Rose commands. Aipom takes the left side of the trees, while Hikozaru takes the right side of the trees.
"I hope they find her"Rose say's.The three contiue to search when Hikozaru comes back carrying Squitle.
"You found her thanks"Aaron says,as he grabs the Squritile from Hikozaru.


"HA Prepare for trouble!"Jessie yell's
"Make it double!"James yell's
"To protect the world from devastation"Jessie yell's
"To unite all peoples within our nation"James yell's
"To denounce the evils of truth and love"Jessie yell's
"To extend our reach to the stars above"James yell's
"Jessie"Jessie yell's
"James"James yell's
"Team Rocket, blast off at the speed of light"Jessie yell's
"Surrender now, or prepare to fight"James yell's
"Meowth,dat's right"Meowth.


"Now let's get this golden Squritile."Jessie says, as she aims a net at Squritile.Jessie fires the net at Squritile and Rose catching them and pulling them into the Meowth shaped air balloon.
"Hey put her down!"Aaron yell's"Or you can suffer the consinquences of Darkrai."
"Go Naetoru!"Tyler commands.Naetoru materializes out of the Green and White pokeball.
"Naetoru use Razorleaf on that net!"Tyler commands.Naetoru shoots sharp leaves at net cuuting it down.
"I got cha!"Aaron says, as he catches Rose.
"Thanks!"Rose says.
"Squritile use Icebeam on that hot air balloon!"Aaron commands.Squritile shoot a light blue ray from her mouth freezing the balloon.
"Okay Darkrai use Shadowball!"Aaron commands.Darkrai appears out of nowhere and shoots a huge balck orb at the balloon.The balloon gets hit and is sent flying
"LOOKS LIKE TEAM ROCKETS BLASTING OFF AGAIN!"The trio yell.

(Later That Night)
"Hey Aaron do you want to come on our journey with us"Rose ask's.
"Sure and I think Squritile wants to come with you Rose"Aaro answers.
"Really Squritile you want to be my pokemon!"Rose yell's, as she picks up Squritile.
"Hey the paint came off"Tyler says.
"Yeah well let me grab my backpack and my Poketech."Aaron say's s he runs inside.
(10 Minutes Later)
"Okay I'm ready to go"Aaron says,as he walks outside.
The trio walk walk into the forest to see what adventures wait ahead.
To Be Contiued.......
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You've obviously only ever seen the first season of pokemon, I say this for various reasons:

First and foremost: No character on the show, has ever, ever captured a Legendary, OCs they've met have had them, on very rare occasions, and on some of those occasions, Ash's Pokemon have defeated them, such as Noland in the Battle Factory with Articuno, beaten by Charizard, and in case you didn't know, (which you probably didn't) Darkrai is in fact, a Legendary, the first dark type Legendary,
Second of all: Team Rocket are not complete and total morons, and on a slightly different note, what you should have done, is have Jessie say after Tyler messes up their plan is, "oh great, we finally get rid of one set of twerps, and another comes in to take their place" end quote. And besides, they changed their motto after Pokemon Advanced battle, for your story, it should go something like this:

“Prepare for trouble cause you’ve got something we want!” says Jessie.
“Make it double cause we’ve got every right to taunt!" says James.(They usually modify those first two lines to fit the episode)
“An evil as old as the galaxy…" says Jessie.
“…Sent here to fulfill our destiny," says James.
“Plus, there’s me!" says Meowth.
“To denounce the evils of truth and love…” says Jessie.
“…To extend our reach to the stars above," says James.
“Jessie," Jessie says.
“And James," James says.
“And Meowth are the names,” says Meowth,
“Anywhere there’s peace in the universe…" Jessie says.
“Team Rocket," James says.
“Will be there," Meowth says.
“To make everything worse!” all three of them yell.
“Wobba…wobba!” says Wobbafett.
“Mime, mime!” says Mime Jr.

And finally, and I don't mean to be rude, but, your grammar is atrocious, it's a disgrace to the very English language. If you have Microsoft Word on your computer, run your stories through there first, it should correct most of your story's problems. If you don't have Word, run it through whatever it is you do have, or through a computer that does have Word, believe me, you need to. I copied and pasted it onto my own Microsoft Word program, and the mistakes you made even in only the first sentence were enough to make my head spin, and I'm not even nearly the grammarfreak my sister is, I showed it to her, and she fainted.
In short, you really need to work on your writing skills and other factors, if you're ever going to write an even quarterway decent story.

This is not a flame, this is a forceful informative, so I request that you do not act like it is one.

Sincerely, Time Charge
 
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Blackjack Gabbiani said:
The Iron Mask Marauder had Celebi, Jirarudan had Moltres and Zapdos, and the final Frontier Brain had all three Regis.
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The Iron Mask Marauder captured Celebi in 'Celebi, Voice of the Forest,' and that was a movie, I said, no character on the show had ever captured a legendary, and the Battle Pyramid Brain and Jirarudan didn't exactly capture the Regis or Moltres and Zapdos on camera or in that episode did they? And besides, I meant the golden trio/quartet, they have their own characters that the fans actually know and follow, and although Ash has seen and/or come into contact with every f%*#in' Legendary ever previously concieved! He has yet to actually capture one! Even when it wouldn't do any f%*#in' harm to anything!

So that is what I meant.

And now I rest my case.
 
Jirarudan made all his captures on screen. But that was a movie, so you wouldn't count it. But Brandon still has the Regis, even if he didn't capture them on screen.

And Ash never saw Raikou.
 
Even though they were animatronic, he did still "technically" see Raikou in Wattson's gym. I know it doesn't really count, but he's seen it, and/or, come into contact with it.

And I said I rest my case already!
 
It's been 4 months!

You know, ever since I posted my last message, 4 months ago I might add, absolutely nothing has been added to this page, and I am kind of wondering why. Regardless of the careless grammar flaws, I felt this story had much potential, and I would rather like to see something new on this board, you know...see where you take it.

In short, this page has been silent too long in my opinion, and I really would like to see an update to this story.
 
Necropost ahoy! Wow, talk about a dead thread. And to think I posted all this two years ago, it seems like a lifetime ago. And to top that off, my 'forceful informative' sounds in all iterations like a flame, there's no getting around it.
Wow, it really has been a long time, and FirePet, if you're reading this, I appologize for my callous words and shortsightedness; I'm sorry.
 
Blackjack Palazzo said:
May I ask why you felt the need to bump this for that reason? Reviews are always a valid bump, but this...this is something entirely different.
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I haven't seen this thread, or indeed this forum or it's constituant threads in two years. My account has basically been dead and... well... It just hit me how much I've changed in those short two years...

Granted, the bump was not neccesary at all, you're right, so if I Bump a very dead thread again I will make sure it is for good reason, however I felt I sincerely needed to apologize and I wanted to close the subject for myself.


...Plus I've never really been able to 'look but not touch', it's a weakness of mine, as evidenced by the "It's been 4 months!" Post well over a year ago... actually, two years if I'm not mistaken... Yup, a good two years since I last couldn't sit still on this site... wow...
 
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