Rush Through Da Regions (Soulshipping, Updated Twice Every Week)

[Pidgeot]

Oh, boy. Here's my sprite comic, in fanfic format. That means that the fanfic will be describing the sprite comic slightly more. New chapters will be added every Wednesday and Saturday.​

Rush Through Da Regions​

Prologue​

Red threw his final pokéball into the air, as a yellow, excited Pikachu exited it in a short flash. He leapt onto the floor, his black-tipped ears swaying from left to right in a gust of wind. “Pika!” Small electric surges shot out of his blood red cheeks, as he threw his fist up to Blue on the other side of the stadium. “Pika-Chu!”

Blue threw his shiny pokéball onto the ground, as he sniggered cheekily. “I bet you’ll never defeat my Rhydon!” A Rhydon jumped onto the floor, triggering a large earthquake on its step. “Rhy… DON!” Blue laughed confidentially, and then pointed his finger at Red’s Pikachu. “Now, Rhydon! Earthquake!”

Red gasped angrily. “Now, Pikachu! Leap into the air!” Pikachu leapt onto the air, as the room started shaking madly. Pikachu hung onto the roof, and then jumped down when the shaking had stopped. “Pika!”

“What the!?” Blue glared at Pikachu unhappily. “How did Pikachu survive that earthquake? Ground type moves are strong against electric type pokémon!”

Red grabbed his pokédex from his pocket, then showed it to Blue. ‘Earthquake only effects pokémon on ground. For example, pokémon in the air would not be effected.’
“Now, Pikachu! Iron Tail!” Pikachu’s tail glowed brightly, then he rushed over to the Rhydon on the other side of the room. It slapped Rhydon in the face, which resulted in it collapsing on the floor.

The referee blew his whistle, then put his hand up straight, pointing to Blue’s side of the stadium. “Champion Blue’s pokémon are unable to battle! Therefore Red, the winner, is the new champion!”

The crowd applauded loudly, as Blue stormed out of the large room. Professor Oak walked up to Red proudly. “Well done for winning, Red! Follow me to the Hall of Fame!”

Red looked at Professor Oak curiously. “Hall of Fame? What’s that?”

“Just follow me, and find out!” Red followed Pro. Oak to a room in the front of the stadium, then took him to a desk. “Place your six pokéballs in the respective slots, please.”

Red placed each of his pokéballs in the six slots, then watched the monitor above the desk. ‘Pokémon One- Venusaur, Lv.63. Pokémon Two- Charizard, Lv.63. Pokémon Three- Blastoise, Lv.63. Pokémon Four- Jynx, Lv.58. Pokémon Five- Pidgeot, Lv.58. And finally, Pokémon Six- Pikachu, Lv.66.’ All six slots flashed red and blue, then turned dark. Red took out the pokéballs, and then his wife came rushing through the corridor.

She ran up to Red, hugging him proudly. “Oh, Red, I’m so proud of you! Oh, Red!”….

 

[Kamen_Fanatic]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

Wow, red text. My headache just grew. Some sentence have words missing from them, looks horribly rushed, and he wins through as Thunderbolt to the horn? Anime logic!

 

[Pidgeot]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

Wow, red text. My headache just grew. Some sentence have words missing from them, looks horribly rushed, and he wins through as Thunderbolt to the horn? Anime logic!

I'll change the colour. Which words were missing? And if you read correctly, it would of said Iron Tail, not Thunderbolt.

 

[revolvingscott]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

This looks interesting, is Red going to Johto next or something?

Description - 3/5
Grammar etc. - 3/5
Anticipation - 4/5
Overall, I'm giving this 3.5/5

 

[SerenaKetchum]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

not bad, i agree with the above posters tho. looked kind of rushed.

 

[Blazaking]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

So then... Red is already married....?

 

[Pidgeot]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

I've edited it.

 

[SSJ3_Raditz]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

It feels a bit short and simple, but I kinda like it.

And why is Red married? :/

 

[Pidgeot]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

You can't be an insanely strong trainer, and not have a lovelife.

 

[revolvingscott]

Re: Rush Through Da Regions

When can we expect Chapter 1?

 

[Pidgeot]

Friday, probaly. It'll be a written version of chapters 1 to 2 of the Rush sprite comic.

EDIT:
Chapter One:
My Name is Hibiki

Hibiki steered his Wii Wheel around 360 degrees, while trying to win his latest Mario Kart Wii game. He threw the wheel on the floor, after discovering he had just lost the last race. “Oh, damn it!” Mario started dancing madly on the television screen, before jumping into a blood red car with blue stripes. ‘Bad Luck, Mamma Mia!’ Hibiki jumped up straight, turning his Nintendo Wii straight off. “Oh well! Better luck next time!” He slid his window open, sticking his head out, soaking in all the sunshine.

The sun lightly glazed the smooth glass, as the peaceful wind swooped into Hibiki’s room. Tiny Pidgey cawed and cooed on the roof loudly, finally swarming down onto Hibiki’s front yard to peck all the brown-yellow bread crumbs off the green grass. They then flew into the air once again, after hearing the loud bark of a nearby Houndoom. It ran across the yard, its black, pointy tail swaying from left to right in the quiet wind.

Hibiki stretched his arms up while yawning, then opening the smooth wooden door. He passed his mother’s bedroom, finally rushing down the steep stairs. He then walked into the living room, noticing his mother reading the new volume of the pointless ‘Love, Johto Style’ manga. “Mum…” He started, “I think I’m going to check out town.”

“Really?” She asked, throwing her magazine onto her lap. “Looking round town? That’ll be fine! I think you need the fresh air!”

Hibiki threw the door open, then slammed it close once he had got through the doorway. He walked up his garden path, noticing a girl walking down the street. Hibiki walked up to her, his smooth brown hair slowly creeping out of his cap. “Umm…hi.” He pulled his gold cap off his head, his brown hair releasing from it. “My name’s Hibiki. What’s yours?”

The girl turned herself round, her long brown hair rushing across her hair. Her shiny brown eyes matched her hair perfectly. “Hibiki? My name’s Kotone.” She checked the time on her pretty pink PokéGear. “My parents named me that because they collected harps. Kotone means the sound of the harp, of course.”

Hibiki stared at Kotone curiously, then replied with, “My name’s Hibiki. Means… sound of the guitar. It’s because my dad was an eager guitarist.” He kicked a pebble across the path. “Umm… want to walk to Pro. Elm’s lab with me?”

Kotone stared at Hibiki, then laughed quietly. “Okay.” Kotone and Hibiki started walking up the long and winding path. “I’ve already got a pok♪émon, so I don’t really need to go Elm’s lab. But if you’re going there, then I certainly will.”

“Where do you live, then?” Hibiki and Kotone stepped round the sharp corner. “I mean, you don’t live here in New Bark Town, do you?”

The flowers on the nearby grass swayed from left to right, as Kotone replied to Hibiki, “That’s a good question.” She coughed cutely, then started talking again. “I used to live in Celadon City, but my big sister became a gym leader over in Goldenrod City, so we moved there. Now, I’m staying at Violet City.” Kotone faced Hibiki, continuing the conversation. “You haven’t lived here for long, have you?”

“Me and my mum moved here earlier this week. We used to live in Lilycove City in the Hoenn region.” Hibiki and Kotone walked to a large-ish building. “But now, of course, we live in New Bark Town.” Hibiki noticed a suspicious red-haired boy by Professor Elm’s lab. “Who’s that guy?”

The boy turned round to face Hibiki and Kotone. “That boy is about to beat your arse!”

Next time...

Hibiki has to battle the suspicous boy... but will he win or lose? Tune in on Monday to find out...