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Shades of Grey

Sovereign

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This is my first fanfic, so constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated! The prologue contains my rendition of the attack on the Goldenrod City Radio Tower, this time being led by a different man. Sorry if the format is annoying, I was in a hurry and didn't have time to fix it. Hope you enjoy it!

Shades of Grey


Prologue

Goldenrod City, a beautiful megalopolis of

opportunity! The sun was beginning to set, and the sky was a

deep orange, with crimson streaks gracing it. Tranquility was

setting in, the local Sunflora were beginning to close their

leaves, when chaos ensued. A choke of black smoke strangled the

sky, as if the Radio Tower had let out a demonic scream. Flames

began to spew from the windows on the top floor, as glass rained

down like snow. An intense, terrifying bellow was released from

the tower, as two onlookers gazed upon the discord. A young

woman with soft, lavender-colored hair and passionate

blue-stained eyes looked over, as tears welled in those same

cyan eyes. She quickly shook her head, scattering the tears, as

she felt a warm hand on her shoulder. As she looked over, she

saw that same face which had comforted her so many times

before. The man had spiky golden-blonde hair, and foggy blue

eyes. He had a face that had the enlightenment of a life-long

journey completed successfully. A stern look was quickly and

suddenly chiseled into his face. Like the woman, his face was

filled with remorse, although constrained. She looked up at him

and quickly stood up from the bench. She slowly nodded, and the

gestured was quickly returned. The got up and darted into the

flame-consumed spire, as the man tackled through the doors, and

explosion of flame shot out.


“Ampharos, we need your help!” yelled the man, as he

threw an unusual Pokéball into the air, topped with a deep gold

rather than the generic red. The ball exploded upon, and with a

flash of light, the Pokémon appeared. Ampharos let out a loud

cry, as it followed the man up the stairs to the second floor.



The woman remained on the first floor, where the

reception table was located, as she hurried and sorted people as

they ran through the doors, gasping and coughing as screaming

and crying could be heard echoing from upstairs. Suddenly, a

man with a maniacal grin and curly pink hair descended the

stairs, laughing madly. He was dressed in an ash-covered black

suit, which was seized by a large, bright red “R”. “Team

Rocket..!” gasped the woman “I-I thought… you disbanded three

years ago..!” she stammered through a choked voice. The man

laughed as he cold, life-less eyes pierced her false courage.

“Ha! C’mon sweetheart, you say that like it’s a good thing!” he

laughed while he pulled a Pokéball from his belt and tapped the

middle button with his index finger, thus expanding it. “C’mon

out an’ play Weezing!” he growled as he through the ball into

the air, releasing the monstrous, double-headed, fiend as it

coughed and wailed while releasing a toxic, green-colored gas

from its two mouths.


The woman gasped as she covered her mouth with her arm, trying

to protect from the lethal combination of smoke and toxic gas.


“Slowbro, I need you!” she muttered to herself as her eyes began

to tear up from pain. She reached for a small pouch on her

waist, which she soon produced a Pokéball from. The man laughed

maniacally as she fell to her knees, dropping the Pokéball on

the floor.


The fire had now worked its way downstairs, and the floor was

covered in a blaze that surrounded the two trainers. The fallen

Pokéball that had been dropped by the woman had exploded open,

releasing Slowbro.

The Pokémon quickly ran over and doused the woman with a spray

of water from its mouth, as she slowly stumbled to her feet.

“S-Slowbro, use... I-ice-punch..!”

The normally lax-looking Pokémon had a serious look creep upon

his face, as his right hand began to glow a bright blue. The

Pokémon thrust forward, his right arm pulled back in preparation

as he shot it forward into the depressed-looking Weezing’s

larger face. The Weezing shot back, plummeting through a now

weakened wall as embers and ash fell slowly to the ground. A

blaze shot up and welled around the Team Rocket member.


The madman-look in his face quickly disappeared as he called on

his Pokémon to return and ran out of the tower.



“Ampharos, use Discharge!” roared the young man as

his Pokémon released a blue bolt of electricity towards three

Team Rocket members’ Pokémon.

“Return Raticate!”

“Return Arbok!”

“Return Golbat!” rang out the three frightened and disappointed

voices. The trio quickly scrambled halfway up the stairs

leading to the third floor, when a man came running down the

same stairs.

“You idiots, which one of you started the fire!? Get

downstairs, now!”

“I-it was August, n-not us!” stammered the grunt who battled

with an Arbok.

“August, you say? He will be dealt with accordingly” muttered

the man. “Get out of the tower, head back to base. Make sure

you aren’t followed. It seems we have a ‘hero’ I have to deal

with.” said the man calmly. He had a generic Team Rocket hat

pointed down on his head, covering his eyes. Silver hair could

be seen underneath the hat, as well as a confident smirk. He

was wearing a slightly altered Team Rocket uniform. It had an

open chest that had stitching crossing the gap, which revealed a

white shirt underneath. The trademark “R” was also silver,

instead of the bold red. The man gave another intimidating

smirk, as he drew a Pokéball from behind his back.

“My name is September. How are you?”











Most of the ceiling had collapsed, and the woman had

nearly been struck by a falling support beam. As she wiped her

eyes with her arm, she looked up at a now gaping wound in the

ceiling while Slowbro had been attempting to douse the flames.

She looked up and saw man who she had seen countless times

before. She had never seen him like this. He laughed at a man,

who was smiling ominously on the other side of the room, tossing

up a Pokéball with one hand, and catching it repeatedly, while

his other hand sat in his pocket.


“Damian! The tower’s coming down, we need to get out of here!”

the woman yelled up at the man.

“No, I can’t let their leader get away! You run, I’ll get this

punk…” replied Damian.

The woman should her head defiantly, and threw a Pokéball up on

the second floor, next to Damian. The Pokéball released an

Ivysaur, which shot down vines that grabbed the woman, pulling

her up besides him.

“Heh, you really are stubborn, aren’t ya Lacie?” laughed Damian.

Lacie stuck her tongue out and winked “Almost as stubborn as

you!”



September smiled, and looked up, revealing cold

green eyes underneath his hat. “Cute. Are you two done?”

The two looked at each other and nodded, quickly looking over

towards their foe.

“Two vs. one? Tyranitar should be enough” September snarled as

he released the ferocious Pokémon from its ball. Lacie withdrew

Slowbro and Ivysaur, in return releasing her Altaria.


Damian withdrew his Ampharos, quickly replacing him with his

Typhlosion.

“Hyper Beam” September said coldly. Tyranitar released a

massive orange beam from his mouth, which shot towards

Typhlosion, who barely dodged the attack. The beam kept

shooting forward, as it blew through the wall behind the two,

causing the right side of the third floor to come plummeting

down. Damian and Lacie coughed frantically as a cloud of debris

fell upon them, completely obscuring their vision of September.

A disturbing silence soon followed, which was broken by a cold, familiar voice.

“Team Rocket is back, and we’re stronger than Giovanni ever was.”

Immediately after, a large support beam fell upon the duo, who

just managed to return their Pokémon. The beam was covered in

embers, and was smoldering.

Lacie let out a cry of fear, as she heard the beam falling.

After a moment of preparing for the worst, she looked up in

surprise of the beam never making contact with her. She saw

Damian, hunched over and on all fours over her, with the massive

beam burning into his back.

“L-Lacie… I… Love you” he choked as he winked and gave that same

smile she had seen thousands of times before.

“No! Don’t leave me… You can’t leave me!”

Damian smiled again, this time, tears rolling down his

ash-covered cheeks.

“I’m not going… Anywhere” he said, giving one last smile.

Damian soon collapsed. Lacie, crying, tried to push the flaming

beam off his back, burning her hands as she screamed out in

pain. A mottled choke of tears and pain echoed out from her.

“I won’t leave you! I can’t leave you..!” the beautiful young

woman with lavender hair and blue eyes cried.



Neither ever left the tower.







Chapter I

The Journey Begins





“Last night, a terrible even struck the city of

Goldenrod. It’s been reported that just before the destruction

of the Radio Tower, a man could be heard on the radio saying and

quote, ‘Team Rocket has returned. Hear that Giovanni? We’re

back!’”

The camera switched views from the reporter to a sky view

showing a smoldering tower, burned to the bottom floor. A group

of firefighters and their water Pokémon were attempting to quell

the few remaining embers, as the view switched back to the woman

with long, black hair and a frightened look. “Thankfully, no

one was killed.” said the reporter, who was soon confronted by a

young woman with pink hair and a soft face. “No! Someone was

killed! Err… Two people actually… They saved me…” the woman said

while looking down somberly as she pressed her fingers together.


The T.V. went black, as a young man threw the remote

across the room, grimacing with hatred. He was around 15 years

old, and had long, shiny, black hair that fell just above his

eyes, which were a dark, chocolate brown. His face was thin and

gaunt, complimenting naturally pale skin, and a small,

hatred-torn mouth. He was wearing a black T-shirt, with a grey,

long-sleeved overcoat with gold trim and a deep red scarf. He

buried his face in his palms, inhaling deeply. A tall man

opened the door, and approached his chair, putting his hand on

his shoulder.

“Ya know, you should really stop watching those recordings.

They’ll just bring up bad memories” said the tall man behind

him. He had a rugged, care-free face, and was no older than

30. He had long, wavy brown hair that fell to his shoulders,

and a goatee around his mouth. His eyes were a deep green, like

the color of a forest in the summer. He was wearing a long,

brown coat that ended at his knees, and a white shirt that was

regally frilled.

“Really? I don’t remember having any good memories. Do you,

Uncle Sebastian?” the boy said sarcastically.

“You’re hilarious, Alice, truly” replied Sebastian, while

ruffling his hair. After a moment of silence, Sebastian spoke

somberly.

“Ya know… She’s right.”

“Who’s right?” asked Alice, confused.

“That girl, you know, the one with the pink hair. They went

into the tower to save people. They’re heroes.” He said

smiling sadly.

“They’re dead” he said, looking away. “Why help people at all?

You try and save them, and you end up being the one who dies.”

“Don’t say that… You don’t mean it, you’re just angry. I told

you those videos were no good.” Sebastian replied. After a

short moment of silence, Alice replied.

“Yeah, I guess you’re right” he said looking down at a small

necklace his mother gave him when he was young that was clutched

in his palm. It was looped with a delicate silver chain. The

chain came down and looped through a diamond-shaped pendant that

contained a faintly red gem.

“C’mon, it’s late. You’d better get to bed, big day at Pokémon

School tomorrow” Sebastian said, patting his shoulder.

“Yeah… big day” Alice muttered to himself.

Chapter II



The teacher stood at the front of the room, writing on his chalkboard. In big letters, a schedule was written.



1. Pokémon Battles – Become acquainted with Pokémon and how to communicate with them.\



2. Knowledge Test – Test to see if you know enough about

Pokémon to obtain your own.



3. Catch a Pokémon – If you score high enough overall, you

will be allowed to venture out and catch your first Pokémon

today, rather than waiting to visit Professor Rowan or until the

end of the year.


Alice was sitting in his desk with his feet up and his arms

behind his head, appearing to be sleeping, when Mr. Card yelled

from across the room, without even turning around to look.

“Mr. Crane, if, mind you, this class is so easy that you would

sleep through it, you wouldn’t mind answering a question, would

you? Why is the Dragon-type often sought out to be used

competitively in battles?”

Alice’s neighbor and long time friend, David, leaned over and

whispered to Alice.

“I think it’s because they’re the strongest type!” Without

making a single movement, and not even bothering to open his

eyes, Alice replied.


“It’s because they have only two weaknesses. The Ice-type, and

ironically, themselves.”

Mr. Card turned around and spoke, his shock was visible even

through his thick, gray moustache.

“Yes… That is… correct” Mr. Card said slowly. He cleared his

voice, and made an announcement. “The battles are about to

begin, if you wish to participate for a chance to catch your

first Pokémon early, come this way.” Ten students rose from

their seats, including Alice and David. After a short time

walking, they entered a large room, with tall ceilings and stone

floors. Seven giant fans hung from the ceiling, and the room

floor was scattered with boulders and small ponds. Mr. Card

gestured to the south side of the room, where a table and 10

Pokéballs were located.

“Over there, you will get your Pokémon. I will read off this

list, and assign one to you. You will find an ID Card next to

each Pokéball that will tell you which Pokémon it is, what moves

it knows, etcetera.” Mr. Card cleared his voice, and began

naming off his list.

“Isabelle Plant, Tangrowth.”

“David Ortime, Lickilicky.”

“Roman King, Rapidash.”

“Auburn Rose, Politoed.”

“Jacob Bracht, Machoke.”

“Graham Mahana, Magneton.”

“Allister Crane, Sableye.”

“Jason Brown, Wartortle.”

“Ian Rowlison, Luxray.”

“Alan Cruz, Snorlax.”

Mr. Crane looked up from his clipboard and gestured towards the

table again, and then he spoke.

“We will begin the matches after everyone has obtained their

assigned Pokémon. Meet back here, and we will assign matches.”

Everyone went to the table and picked up their Pokéballs. Alice

found his, and looked at the card next to it.

Sableye

Dark/Ghost


1. Shadow Ball
2. Dark Pulse
3. Shadow Claw
4. Focus Punch


“Huh, guess I’m stuck with you” Alice said, looking at his

Pokéball. His trance was soon broken by Mr. Card.

“First match shall start immediately. Roman King shall battle

Auburn Rose.”

The two got up and took opposite positions across a small box,

drawn on the ground. Alice thought to himself. “No way Burn

can win, despite her type advantage; Roman is one of the best in

the class. He’ll find some way to win.” Roman stood chuckling

to himself. He was just a small bit shorter than the rest of

the class, and had short red hair. His eyes were brown and

piercing, and he was extremely narcissistic. After a short

display of ice and water attacks by Auburn’s Politoed, it was

quickly defeated by Roman’s Rapidash.

A flurry of battles ensued, and finally, it was Alice’s turn.

“Allister Crane will battle Jason Brown.”

Alice smiled. “This will be easy,” he thought to himself,

“Jason is a complete idiot.”

Jason stood, excited. He was a cocky young man, his face

beaming with false superiority. He used to be best friends with

Alice when they were young, but Alice quickly abandoned him

after he grew ignorant as an adolescent.

“C’mon Alice, no way you can beat me!” Jason yelled.

“We’ll see about that…” Alice said to himself, smiling.

Jason threw his ball into the air, releasing Wartortle. Alice

did the same, as he released Sableye.



It was a quick match; Wartortle had charged Sableye,

who had already had Shadow Ball ready, as he threw the black

ball surrounded by blue sparks towards his foe. That attack by

itself almost defeated him, but he quickly got up and attacked

with Hydro Pump. Sableye dodged, and began to float in the air,

gathering a black aura into his center. Wartortle charged with

Skull Bash. Right before making contact, Sableye released an

explosion of black energy, sending Wartortle across the room and

into a small pond. Alice had won.



Chapter III



The rest of the day had gone quickly, and soon, it

was nightfall. The winners of the competition were Roman,

Alice, and David. Roman and Alice had won through a combination

of doing excellent in their battles and tests, but David had

flunked his test. He managed to make it, due to his “invention”

of a new move during battle. Tangrowth had wrapped up

Lickilicky tightly, and he was about to lose, when he used Gyro

Ball. Tangrowth flew into Lickilicky, and upon contact, was

flung across the room, knocking Tangrowth out.


“When do we start, Card?” David asked impatiently.

“Soon; we leave Jubilife City for a secluded route where many

types of Pokémon live.” Mr. Card replied.

Just as he said, they soon left, following a path that led them

to a spectacular canyon. It was a brilliant sight to see, the

stars were twinkling in the sky, with purple streaks and ribbons

graced them. The canyon looked to be rather small; however, it

was filled with diversity. There were lakes and cliffs, plains

of grass, and even a small glacier towards the end of the

valley.

“You may begin your journey. Here are your Pokéballs” Mr. Card

said proudly, as he handed five balls to each of the three.

“You are on your own from here on out.”

Mr. Card released his Noctowl and grabbed on to its leg, as they

flew back to Jubilife.



Alice had gone down into the valley, near a cave.

An enormous, white, dead tree stood before him. Alice sat down

at its base, and looked up at the sky, taking a few moments to

think. Across from him was a large, glowing blue pond. Steam

could be seen rising off of it, when Alice quickly recognized it

as a hot spring. He went over to wash his face, when he heard

an ominous noise. It was the sound of a long, solemn cry,

sounding as if it were being played through an ancient

instrument. He quickly scrambled to his feet, and looked around.

“Who’s there? Reveal yourself!” he yelled. He frantically

looked around; spotting something he hadn’t expected to see. A

small creature carrying what looked to be a bone in his hand was

at the base of the tree that Alice was formerly sitting

beneath. The creature had a brown body, with two spikes coming

out of its back. It was short, no taller than Alice’s legs, and

had a pure-white head. Alice slowly approached, when he

realized the mysterious cry was coming from this creature.

“It’s a… Cubone” Alice said to himself in sudden realization.

He slowly dragged his feet towards the small creature, putting

his hand on its small shoulder when he reached it.


The creature jumped up, and let out a melancholy

wail. The Cubone drew his bone-club like a sword, and was

prepared to fight. Alice jumped back and grabbed a stone,

willing to defend himself. Just as he was about to throw the

stone, he saw the creatures eyes through its mother’s skull.

Tears were running down its face, as it tried to put on a false

courage. Alice dropped the rock, and approached slowly.

“You lost your mom too, huh?” “Don’t worry, I won’t hurt you.”

He said, holding his hands out as to show him he was

weaponless. The Cubone shook its head wildly in disagreement,

as if to show he didn’t trust the human. Alice looked over

behind the Cubone and found that it had been building a small

tower of stones at the base of the tree. It looked to be a sort

of shrine. Alice’s voice choked.

“I get it now… This is where your mother died” he said slowly.

Cubone stretched out its arms, not allowing Alice to pass.

Alice’s eyes began to water as he reached for his pocket. He

pulled out the faintly glowing crimson pendant his mother had

given him. He got down on one knee, and showed the lonely

Pokémon. Cubone stood silent for a few moments, let out a sad

cry, and nodded.

“I know what it’s like… I feel your pain” he said, with a

constrained voice as he fought back tears. Cubone looked up at

him with his eyes sparkling with a combination of tears and the

reflection of the hot spring. The Pokémon came closer to Alice,

and pulled on his sleeve.

Alice picked the Pokémon up, and spoke.

“You wanna come with me?” he asked. The small Pokémon nodded

its head. Alice wiped the tears from his cheeks and nodded back.



“We’re in this together.”





Chapter IV




Alice had just entered the Jubilife PokéCenter, when

he noticed a large group of people gathered around a monitor.

He managed to squeeze himself through most of the crowd, and saw

the screen. A man in a black suit with a silver “R” in the

middle was sitting in a chair, and speaking.

“Team Rocket is back! Here that, Giovanni? We’re back!”

A sudden shock fell upon Alice, as he ran home. He hurried up

the stairs leading to his home, and found that that when inside,

Sebastian was gone.

“Uncle Sebastian? Uncle Sebastian!?” he yelled with fear in his

voice. He ran into his bedroom, and saw that the T.V. was on,

and playing the same message of the man he saw in the

PokéCenter. He recognized the room he was in as the Jubilife

T.V. building, and quickly darted out the doors.


He forced himself through the main doors of the T.V.

building, and saw a group of men battling a familiar face.

“Hehehe, lets play, little hero!” laughed a man in a Team Rocket
uniform.

“Go, Hypno!” Sebastian yelled as he released his Pokémon.

“Hypnosis!” he bellowed, as Hypno’s eyes began to turn multi-

colored. The Team Rocket grunt’s eyes were transfixed, as he

fell on the ground, appearing to be unconscious.


Alice ran up to Sebastian.

“Nice. I could’ve done better though” he said smiling.

“Oh please, you don’t even have a Pokémon!” Sebastian laughed.

“I do now. Cubone!” said Alice as he threw his Pokéball into

the air, releasing his new companion.

“Cubone, eh? Let’s see what he can do” Sebastian said, pointing

at a grunt that had just run downstairs.

The grunt panicked at the sight of Cubone and Hypno,

and sent his Zubat out.

“Gah! G-get them Zubat! Use Leech Life!” stammered the grunt.

Zubat flew towards Cubone, showing its gleaming teeth.

“Cubone, use Skull Bash!” Alice yelled, as Cubone jumped through

the air and collided with the Zubat. The Zubat fell to the

ground, unconscious.

“Nice. I could’ve done better though” Sebastian said snidely.

Alice stuck out his tongue, and hurried up to the top floor with

his uncle. Upon reaching the 4th floor, he found Roman and

David battling two grunts.

“Go! Growlithe, use Ember!” Roman roared.

“Poliwhirl, use Water Gun!” David said simultaneously.

The flurry of flames struck a grunt’s Weepinbell, while the

stream of water shot out at the other grunt’s Ekans.


“About time you showed up!” beamed David towards

Alice. Roman shrugged, and spoke.

“Hmph, I had it under control.”

“Yeah, yeah, you’re the greatest Roman” Alice replied

sarcastically.


The four kept heading up the floors, defeating

countless grunts along the way. Sebastian had run into an

Admin, and was forced to use his Nidoking rather than Drowzee.

Sebastian quickly disposed of the grunt after using Nidoking, as

they came upon the final floor. The man Alice had seen on T.V.

with the silver “R” on his jacket was waiting for them. He

lifted up his hat, revealing his icy, pale green eyes.

“Four vs. one? Tyranitar should be enough” snarled the man,

pulling out a Pokéball. He threw the ball into the air,

releasing the terrifying Pokémon.

“Hyper Beam” the man said coldly. Tyranitar shot out a massive

orange beam that struck Nidoking directly, knocking him out

cold. Tyranitar kept the beam going, as he turned his head,

causing it to explode with power into Growlithe and Poliwhirl,

causing them to faint.


Alice stood frightened, as he muttered in sheer

terror.

“Who are you…?” The man smiled.

“My name is September. How are you?”
 
Firstly, each chapter should be posted in a separate and should have at least three hours between them.

There are a few mistakes, nothing major, they mostly look like accidents, I suggest you proof-read the story. Also, the format is quite irksome, please edit it as soon as you get a chance.

Anyway, I loved the prologue and thought chapter 1 was good. I didn't like chapter 2 or 3 at all. Chapter 4 was alright. I thought the original idea was very good, the alternative version of the attack on the Radio Tower was great and I really liked it. I also thought the idea of naming the Rockets after months was a pretty cool and novel idea. "My name is September. How are you?" seems like a bit of a weird catchphrase but sure, why not. On the topic of names though, Alice is a weird one for a guy, I realise his full name is Allister (are you sure this is how you meant to spell it?) but it just seems a bit odd to me.

Anyway, the reason I didn't like chapters 2 and 3 was because after your original, unique and eye catching start, you went into a bit of a generic formula. Not too generic, but you still had to include someone getting his first Pokemon, which I think wasn't necessary at all. You could've had a flashback to that, but I think it'd have worked better if Alice already had a few Pokemon, maybe he'd have a Marowak and it'd feature a flashback to his first meeting with Cubone. It just seemed like a bit too much of a kid's hero story if three rookie trainers were there kicking out Team Rocket. It's just a bit silly.

I also didn't like how easily Team Rocket were taken care of, I'd definitely have preferred it if they were a BIT stronger, at least strong so someone who had literally just caught their first Pokemon couldn't take out a Grunt.

So yeah, good basic story, but a fair few flaws too. Work on it and this will be some good shit.
 
Yeah... sorry about the format.

I really drew a blank after the prologue, I felt like I just kept dragging it on. Originally, the battles were a lot longer, but I had no idea how long these stories were supposed to be, and I thought it was too long already, so I just shortened them down.

Oh, and the whole catch-phrase thing and main-character naming... Again, writers block. I guess I wasn't inspired to really care at the time.

Thanks for the comments, originally, I was going to make a part two featuring Alice, David, and Roman now that they were officially "Trainers", and maybe have them going to gyms or whatever, and probably more on August (pink-haired guy with the Weezing) or introduce a new guy named November. Don't know about that now, xD
 
Yeah... sorry about the format.

I really drew a blank after the prologue, I felt like I just kept dragging it on. Originally, the battles were a lot longer, but I had no idea how long these stories were supposed to be, and I thought it was too long already, so I just shortened them down.

Oh, and the whole catch-phrase thing and main-character naming... Again, writers block. I guess I wasn't inspired to really care at the time.

Thanks for the comments, originally, I was going to make a part two featuring Alice, David, and Roman now that they were officially "Trainers", and maybe have them going to gyms or whatever, and probably more on August (pink-haired guy with the Weezing) or introduce a new guy named November. Don't know about that now, xD

September's catch phrase works but barely, it just makes him really, really weird. My advice to you is not to bother with Gyms. This fic has such an original idea that it'd probably be better to just have them fight Team Rocket.

Up to you OF COURSE!
 
I actually just started it, and they aren't doing gyms, they're fighting Team Rocket.
 
Hmm... I'm trying to post Chapter V, but it's not wanting to double-space...
 
Chapter V​


Alice was alone in complete darkness. His head was pounding madly, and he

felt like screaming, but whenever he tried, his voice would choke up,

leaving only a mottled echo resounding, worsening the pounding in his head.

After a few minutes of the agonizing torture of being trapped in this

madman’s dungeon, he heard a noise. A noise that came from outside of

this place. Alice ran towards the noise, but the further he ran, the quieter

it became. He stopped to rest, hunched over and panting wildly, when a

trickle of light beamed down. He looked up, and saw a small opening. Soon,

hundreds of beams shot down, surrounding Alice. It became bright, far too

bright, and Alice was forced to squint to retain what little sight he had.

There was a gust of wind, and a loud beep, and he was free. Alice slowly

forced his matted eyes open, as he tried to distinguish the blurry world

around him. He was in a white room, and a tall figure in a green jacket was

standing near him. The person had a skinny body, and a face covered in

freckles. It had cropped sand-colored hair, and passionate hazel eyes. Alice

quickly forced open his eyelids, blinding him with light. He looked over, and

recognized the figure besides him as David, his child-hood friend.


Alice felt a sudden blow to his stomach, causing him to gasp loudly, losing

his breath. He looked down at the foot of his bed, and saw a boy with red

hair and an angry smirk.

“Princess is awake, let’s go.” Roman snarled, pointing at the bag he had

just thrown on Alice. Alice scooted back so that he was sitting up, and

stretched his arms.

“C’mon Roman, give ‘em a break. He almost died!” David replied slowly.

“Wha-what’s going on?” Alice mumbled while wiping his eyes with his

shoulder, still blinded by the harsh light.

“You’ve been in a coma for about two weeks now. As you can see, you are

now awake. Anymore questions?” Roman said while frowning rudely.

“A… coma?” Alice muttered with terror in his voice.

“Naw, he’s just playin’ around! You were only unconscious for a few hours.

You hit your head pretty bad when that September guy's Tyranitar used

Hyper Beam” David said while giving a huge smile.

“You’re… A real jerk… Roman” Alice forced.

“Yeah, well just because little Alicia got a boo-boo doesn’t mean I’m going

to change.” Roman said with a harsh voice, although Alice thought he saw

a smile through the blurriness.


Alice was discharged from the hospital about half an hour later. He

gathered his stuff and set out the door with Roman and David side-by-side.

His head was still a little foggy, but he was determined to keep going. After

leaving Jubilife City, they continued down a route surrounded by patches of

tall grass, when Alice spoke.

“Where exactly are we going?” he asked.

“We’re headed towards Sandgem. There’s a small movement going on

there.” Roman said without looking back at Alice, despite the fact he was a

good ways ahead of the other two.

“What kind of movement?” Alice asked.

“You ask too many questions. How about you keep walking, and find out

when you get there?” Roman replied in a steely voice.

The trio kept moving down the route, when they came to a small cliff with

a patch of grass sitting atop.

“Looks like the only way is down.” David slowly said to himself, leaning over

the cliff.

“Yeah, we’ll have to ju- gahh!” Alice said, letting out a small holler as he

felt something push him over the edge. Alice fell face-forward, but managed

to grab a small ledge, jerking his body around upright. He looked up at the

top, and saw a Mankey laughing wildly. Roman had already released his

Growlithe, and pointed at the small Fighting-type.


“Growlithe, Take Down!” he yelled as Growlithe leapt through the air,

colliding with Mankey. Upon contact, Growlithe shot back, sending him into

the ground, scraping up his back. The Mankey fell over backwards, but

transitioned into a hand stand, pointing and making an uproar that

resembled laughter.

“Grr… you think that’s funny!?” Roman growled.

“Hehehe… I did” snickered David behind his back.

Growlithe got up and shook angrily, sending dust flying from its coat.

“Ember!” Roman roared as his Pokémon shot out small balls of flame rapidly

from his mouth, most missing the wild Mankey. However, three of the small

orbs grazed its left side, leaving a small burn. The Mankey ran around

hysterically crying out in pain.

“Hrmph! Not so funny now, are you?” Roman said with a dark pride in his

voice.

“Finish him off, use Flame Wheel!” Roman cried as Growlithe dashed

forward, becoming encased with a cloak of spinning flames. Growlithe

jumped forward, but mere seconds before he struck the wild Pokémon, a

small red and white ball struck the Mankey on the head, as a flash of white

light sucked it into the orb. The ball fell, shook a few times, and darkened.

David walked up and held it to the light, smiling.

“What was that for!? I was gonna make that rat pay!” Roman barked. David

merely smiled, and showed him the Pokéball.

“Yeah, well you weren’t fast enough!” he said grinning madly. Roman

punched him in the arm, and David stuck his tongue out at him, rubbing his

sore arm. The two walked over at the small ledge, and saw Alice sitting

with his hands on his knees down below on a small ledge.

“Hey! Long time no see!” Alice said with a certain sense of sarcasm in his

voice.
 
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