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EVERYONE: - Ongoing Slasha's journey

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This is my first Fanfic and I hope you like it:

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Prologue: Deep in the wood of the Hoenn region Safari zone, Lie a special Scyther, a blue Scyther. Not a single trainer has found a way to travel so far in the safari zone without crossing the 500-step limit. Until... one trainer found a way... and didn't believe what he saw.


Chapter one:
"Scy..." Scyther began to cut some of the tall grass. She was a lonely Scyther... no one has seen her, not even another pokémon has seen her. It sighed again and sat down. It jumped straight up as it saw a Spinda lying where she usually slept.
"SCYTHER!!!"
She went into a fighting pose immediately. Then she noticed it was snoring, and lowered her scythes. (I will now start translating their pokémon language) She kicked it lightly.
"Wake up." it opened it's eyes slightly. "How did you get here?!"
It replied first "Ohhhh... uhhhh... I'm really sorry... I didn't know a pokémon lived in this area. I thought I was alone! Please don’t kill me. I'm harmless!!!"
Scyther replied back "Hmmmm... I'm not surprised... You’re the first one to ever reach here. Tell me, how did you get here?"

"Well... It's a long story but, I suppose we both have time on our hands. It all started at Fallabor town. My trainer had found a Skarmory in the ash and well... Left me behind. and so, to make a long story short, I've been traveling and eventually just found my way here."
They sat in silence after that for a while. Then the Spinda sparked up.
"I know a Scyther that you might like!" This caught the female Scythers attention.
"What is this Scyther like?"
"Well, the first thing you should know is that, he is a male, second, he lives near the volcanoes, he's a darkish gray color, and very wise."
This made the Female Scyther very excited.

Later that night, she heard a noise.
"Ugh. Those darn trainers. I can’t believe the place is open this late. It's AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!" She screamed as a trainer approached.
"Who what?!?! What’s the matter Scyther?!" cried the Spinda, suddenly started, and also ignored. Scyther walked up to the trainer, who was turning his head at the figure. He pulled out a flashlight, and gasped. This was the most extraordinary thing he ever saw.
TO BE CONTINUED!
 
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Review: Chapter 1
This fic was different to what I was expecting. Scyther is a very underused pokémon in fictions, as are most bug-type pokémon. Them having a negative, or hostile impression of humans is also an important thing to bring up, because these are, effectively, wild pokémon.

On the grammatical and format side, there are spaces missing line-to-line which can make it harder to tell when a new paragraph begins. Lastly, I think the author’s notes in the middle of the fic can be slightly distracting from the fic. It may have been better to use something like italics to symbolise poké speech, and leave a note at the top explaining that is how things work in this fic.

This fic had an interesting starting concept. It is always nice to see concepts like this around.
 
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