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EVERYONE: - Ongoing Sogurn and Wallax - Rough Draft

Nick

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I was kind of bored so I decided to write a weird story centering around two kings. I do realize that it will need a ton of work, though I'm curious on tips for improving it.

Part 1: The Beginning

Some time ago there was a meeting room between several very important people or so they thought they were important. The meeting took place between the king and his associates. Two associates in the room at the time were tired of the way the king ran things and decided they wanted to create another kingdom. Discussing plans of this prior to leaving their current stronghold, the king grew angry with the two associates, however they didn't care and left to begin their own kingdom.

The two associates who left the king were Sogurn and Wayber, who left their king Wallax. Sogurn and Wayber then decided to take the associates who still were part of King Wallax's domain and recruit them to their kingdom. Many followed over to this new place though some chose to stay at both places. Soon enough over the course of several years, Wallax and Sogurn began a fierce rivalry. Some waged loyalty to Wallax and others to Sogurn. This battle took place via the written word and messenger as opposed to the sword.

Over the course of many years though, the problems that surfaced over in the castle of King Wallax also surfaced in the castle of King Sogurn. In addition, it was being found out that a large amount of day to day decisions were being made by Wayber with Sogurn being the face of the new kingdom though not having complete control. In addition, one problem that had been a heavy issue with King Wallax, was that the village near the castle became flooded with village simpletons. King Sogurn and close associate and decision maker Wayburn had begun to notice this in their village as well.

Sadly though, nothing was done and rules were very rarely set in place. Both King Wallax and King Sogurn's were left with a majority of rather silly villagers. In addition, most of the associates at the two major kingdoms were perfectly content with the way the villages were run. Interestingly enough however, one of the top associates at Sogurn's Kingdom shunned upon a person trying to be an associate and trying to change the daily workings of things.

Those who dare disagree with either of two major kings were largely laughed at behind closed doors within the castle. However the future shall begin to hold an interesting bit of events for both kings. Those who have seen how both kings do business have taken notes on sacred scrolls. The sub-associates so to speak have some interesting plans down the line for the kings. Will they get noticed or will they be laughed at once again. Tune in to the next part of the story to find out.
 
Right now, I'm just reading some of the thought-to-be-hopeless stories people on here are typing. I have a question:will everything be this type of narration, or will there be more communication via letter with the two kings? More on how the problem was started? More villagers flooding in? More on where they came from in the first place? A discussion with their past king or whoever runs that place? You know what I mean. Anyways, I don't wanna hold you up, so I'm out!
 
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