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EVERYONE: - Complete Stupid (R100 #86)

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Another R100 prompt, slight Steelshippyness...kinda.




/My god, that Silver's been shot!/

/Get the traitor!/

/Bashou...don't let go of my hand...don't let go.../

/Buson? ...oh no.../



And now Bashou was alone in his room, in his bed, both of which had ceased to be "theirs" nearly twelve hours ago. He lay in his typical manner with his hands folded over his stomach, on what was always his side of the bed.

"Idiot," he muttered, going over the day's events.

No, it wasn't Buson's fault. Bashou knew that. It was that traitor who decided to pick off the first officer he saw.

Buson wasn't even supposed to be in uniform. He hardly ever wore his uniform on his days off. He'd spilled something on his shirt as they were leaving the apartment and grabbed his uniform jacket to cover it.

And the traitor saw it and fired.

"Idiot," he growled, the scene replaying.

Buson had always said that he was sure he'd die doing something heroic. But it wasn't to be. Shot down by a grunt outside the cafeteria, that had to be the worst way for an officer to die. Nothing heroic about that; he was shot and he fell, and that was it.

The traitor had been swiftly dealt with, as a dozen witnessing agents sicced their pokemon on him. But all Bashou could do was hold his dying partner's hand and watch helplessly as his other half faded before his eyes.

"Idiot," he hissed, his fists balling.

They were...he was a Silver. He wanted to think there was more he could have done, but aside from ignoring Buson and taking down the traitor himself, there wasn't and he knew it.

And he couldn't have left Buson. Not with such little time left between them, not with others there to snuff the traitor. He did what was right, what was logical, and it wouldn't have gone any other way.

"Idiot," he sighed, his eyes closing.

Bashou pictured what things would have been like if the situation was reversed. He knew Buson would put on a brave face in public, but that would have melted the second he got back to the apartment. For all his professionalism in the field, Buson was considerably more emotionally driven. He could see the tears falling, the sheet matted in tense fists, and who knew what else.

Overreacting. Buson would have cried and carried on and to what ends? It wouldn't have changed fate one bit. Bashou squeezed his eyes tight to dispel the image.

"Idiot," he said, but he didn't mean it at all.
 
;_____;

That was very nicely written! I doubt I would have managed without much dialogue. ^^;

You've got l337 skills. :D
 
Bashou and Buson - Legend of Thunder, right?

Another brilliantly written little fic. Discounting the brief introduction at the top, you managed only five words of dialgue in this story, and they were used to great effect. Those five words each showed a diferent aspect of Bashou's feelings at the time, and through those five words we also learnt a lot about Buson; probably more than we would have done if Buson wasn't dead and interacted with Bashou normally. You did what so many others fail to do; give characters who are portrayed as being filled with contempt and evil in the anime, the ability to love. Kudos.

I only wish that it had been longer. Many of your oneshots contain a lot of detail and development in a short amount of writing, and normally that works really well for you. But in this case I think that the short length holds it back. There was potential to expand on Bashou's feelings and thoughts, to develop his character even more. I can't help but feel if you had written just a little more, this oneshot would be even better than it is now.

That said, for such a short piece it was well-written and an interesting read. Keep up the good work!
 
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I'm not sure how to make it longer, though. Is there anything else you think needed to be said? Bashou's a very unemotional character; the only real emotions he shows in the special are annoyance and frustration, both rather restrained compared to Buson, who shouts and (if you trust the fansubbers) swears. Compare their reactions to Shiranui showing them the Crystal System. Buson's all OMGWTF over it and Bashou just calmly raises an eyebrow.

Yes, most of the Rockets are interesting to write for. I love getting inside their heads and figuring what makes them tick.
 
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