TEEN: - Ongoing The Goblin slayer....

[KronosClownz]

Over sixty thousand years ago in the land of Uruguay there was a small village named Rotimeti, It was named after a ancient hero who was said to slay horrible monsters which roamed the land, but did he?

934 A.D:

Diego ran, he saw the slimy creature approach as he poured the water, he knew that if he stopped the slightest the Creature would kill him, he ran down the road screaming in fluent Spanish ' HELP ME! PLEASE! ' of course the town-folk weren't there because they were celebrating Rotimeti's anniversary, he ran down in the house's, he ran upstairs through a house which he only recognised as the town leaders, he ran into a bedroom he was taken by the beauty, it was clearly fit for a Queen, a triple bed made of soft wool and pure wood oak, Diego would of stood longered had he not hear the heat of its breath hit the floor, he slid under the bed and whimpered, he grabbed his Sun of May necklace and whimpered silently, He heard it enter the room, his tears making his silk shorts damper than a baby's diaper, Then there was no sound, Diego thanked God for protection then a heavy-clawed slimy hot hand grabbed his neck, he screamed as it exposed its face, pure horror.

Outside the villagers smiled as they returned then they danced and giggled under the influence of cheap cider made by the locals then a horrible scream moaned
' GOBLINS ARE BACK! '
Everyone's face turned to horror and fear, everyone took out there weapons and ran to the house while only one stood, Custodio Asesino, he groaned silently to himself
' There back, NO! '
And with that from the corners came a thousand steamy ugly Monsters, ready to claim Uruguay.....

 

[some colour no doubt]

hmmm, where are the full stops? the whole first paragraph is one huge sentence dude!
It's an interesting idea, but how much do you know about Uraguay? Did/do you live or or have you been there?
Good idea on the plot, just try not to slip into stereotypical plot points, keep it fresh, keep it original.
Bit more description wouldn't hurt either.

 

[KronosClownz]

Sure thing, and I researched on Uruguay, chapter ones coming soon.

 

[KronosClownz]

2010:

Hola Mi nombre S- huh? Oh, sorry, I forgot you don't speak Spanish, lets start again, Hello, my names Sebastian Rodriguez, I live in the poor Argentina city of Rosario, its rough around here, people will try to rape you to ' Share ' there aids.

I'm fifteen years old and I live with my mama and papa, you see there jobs are the kind you and I laugh off, ' Aid cleaning ' Some lie's where they fake to heal you, never trust them, they once stole my pet Dog and ate him, cruel people.

Today was a massive party, one only staged in American countries expect, of course, poor old Uruguay, years ago they were attacked by strange creatures which were said to resemble Goblins, they were also said to carry the new plague, the American flu, I've know idea how it works but I know its a instant death.

 

[KronosClownz]

The horror of the slums.​

So, after the dull event which I, Diego clearly found boring Mama and papa agreed that we visit the slums, a strange decision by my parents but, as I say, everythings got to happen.

So I woke up at four ' O clock in the morning, quickly got washed and got ready to go, the slums were far back in the dark, dirty slums, I watched as papa turned the key and off we went in our Red Fiat
' So, we're off to the Aid infected highly dangerous yet beautiful slums '
I moaned, you see the aim of that statement was to make my family see sense but they ignored me
' Suit yourself '
I grumbled to myself, we drove through the dark, infected water, not only was this place AID infected but it was also full of a mysterious illness, dubbed ' The American flu ' It reached Brazil to its high point declaring the country shut, so you can't leave or enter, it was low in Chile, Paraguay, Bolivia and Peru were affected and any second Ecuador would get it then should Columbia and then it goes on and on.

I shut my window very quick, breathing near a heavy collection of infected people was trouble, that when it happened, we drove down a swampy area when something, not a human for a fact, something with tight skin, thats all I saw as the heat it released managed to melt through the metal, Mama and papa screamed and I was no exception, the car fell into the swampy water plunging a good ten meters, swampy water quickly jumped in, more than likely this was infected, I smashed the door with surprising strengh but I slipped under something hot and slimy and a door fell on me, I pushed but felt no move, I quick and shouted, I was close to conceding my death when something swam by, human form, it grabbed me, my breath reached zero percent and I passed out, in the hands of a stranger.....