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EVERYONE: - Ongoing The Marage Kingdom's Last Stand

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AN: This is based off of the idea I had in the Misty's Togepi Topic. How a Togekiss appearance could be done.

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"Such pretty flowers," Misty sighed, breathing in the sweet fragrance of lavender. It had been so long since she had been able to walk outside in a garden that she had forgotten how wonderful the flowers smelled in the spring. "I really need to get out of them gym more," Misty thought as she laid back on the grass, closing her eyes and letting her skin soak up the sun rays. It was a beautiful day and she wanted to enjoy every minute of it that she spent outside of the gym and away from her sisters and paper work. Who knew running a gym would require so much office work? It was good practice, though, for when she finally did get the gym all to herself and didn't have her sisters around. She predicted, or hoped at the very least, that that day would come very soon, but for now she would enjoy the presant moment.

She felt herself drifitng away, into what she thought was sleep, but when her eyes fluttered open suddenly, she found the beautiful bacground of the garden gone and great clouds of dark grey surrounded Misty. She shielded her eyes as a large lightening bolt passed right by her. She shivered and hugged her arms close to her body. "What's going on?" she wondered aloud.

She then heard a soft, cooing noise. She looked up and saw Togetic! Her dear, sweet Togetic! Tears filled her eyes as she held up her arms and Togetic flew lower and gave Misty a hug. Togetic smiled gently at her, but then looked up with a worried expression on his face. Misty looked up as well and noticed a bright light surrounded by a ring of darkness. "What's wrong?" Misty asked. Togetic looked deep into her cerulean eyes and tried his best to make her understand. Misty looked away, unable to understand. "Is the marage kingdom in danger?" Misty asked, hoping that that wa swhat Togetic had been trying to tell her. He shook his head yes and flew up and away. "Wait!" Misty called after him, but to no avail. A feather fluttered down from the sky and Misty grabbed it.

"Buh?" Misty awoke with a start, sitting up in bed and looking around. "It was only a dream," Misty sighed, laying back down. She then realized something soft wa sin her hand. She opened it and noticed a feather clamped tightly in it. It hadn't been a dream! Togetic and all of the Togepis in the marage kingdom were in danger!
 
It's very good so far. TOGETIC'S A HE!!!!!????? Anyways, I suggest you check your writing and spacing(was what and was in come out as wa swhat and wa sin). BUT you leave a person waiting, just hoping to find out what happens next!
 
Well, it's a very interesting concept, but the story's starting off kinda slow, and there's more than a few grammatical errors.

But if you can clean those up in the next chapter, it could make for a good read.
 
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