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This is a fan-fiction about Ash, Gary, Ritchie, etc. in a school teaching people how to train Pokémon. Here is the first chapter.
I would like reviews. Constructive criticism is accepted and encouraged.
Chapter 1
Everyone was cheering. Ash had just got his first Pokémon. He was going to do great things! Then everyone that was cheering started chanting! "WAKE UP ASH! PLEASE, WAKE UP!" The entire crowd was chanting in unison.
Ash Ketchum woke up, his mother was standing at his bedside.
"Sweetie, you're going to be late for your first day of school!" Delia Ketchum, Ash's mother, told Ash.
Four-year-old Ash Ketchum got up and opened his closet for his mother. His mother took out his favorite outfit. He absolutely loved his outfit, consisting of blue jeans, black and white sneakers, a black T-shirt, his blue jacket with white sleeves, and his white baseball cap.
He put on all of his clothes.
"Mom, I'm ready!" Ash shouted.
"Okay, Sweetie! I'll be right there!" His mother replied.
His mother came upstairs to his room.
"Ash, you still have thirty more minutes until school starts! Why don't you watch T.V? I'll be right back with some breakfast," Ash's mother told him.
Ash turned on his T.V. His favorite show was on! It was called Daily Battles. He absolutely loved this show. The show would show one battle between two top Pokémon Trainers every day!
Today's battle was the Elite Four Member, Bruno versus Professor Oak, the Pokémon Professor from Pallet Town, Ash's home town!
Ash was watching T.V. His mother walked into his room and handed him a bowl of cereal with pieces of cereal shaped like Caterpie, the worm Pokémon.
"Ash, I brought you your favorite cereal, Caterpie Crunchies!" his mom exclaimed.
After twenty-five minutes, Ash had finished his cereal and he had seen the finishing blow of the battle! Professor Oak's Dragonite had used Dragon Rage on Bruno's Onix.
Ash's mother walked into the room. She told Ash that it was time to fix his hair and get to school.
Ash walked over to the mirror in his room. His mother followed. Ash's black hair was a mess! His mom came over to him and took a comb and fixed his hair.
Three minutes later, Ash had walked to school. He walked up to the door of Pallet Town Elementary School and opened the door. He did not believe who he saw in the doorway. It was a boy his age with brown hair, a blue T-shirt, and blue jeans.
"Hey Ashy Boy!" He said.
It was Gary Oak, Professor Oak's grandson!
I would like reviews. Constructive criticism is accepted and encouraged.
Chapter 1
Everyone was cheering. Ash had just got his first Pokémon. He was going to do great things! Then everyone that was cheering started chanting! "WAKE UP ASH! PLEASE, WAKE UP!" The entire crowd was chanting in unison.
Ash Ketchum woke up, his mother was standing at his bedside.
"Sweetie, you're going to be late for your first day of school!" Delia Ketchum, Ash's mother, told Ash.
Four-year-old Ash Ketchum got up and opened his closet for his mother. His mother took out his favorite outfit. He absolutely loved his outfit, consisting of blue jeans, black and white sneakers, a black T-shirt, his blue jacket with white sleeves, and his white baseball cap.
He put on all of his clothes.
"Mom, I'm ready!" Ash shouted.
"Okay, Sweetie! I'll be right there!" His mother replied.
His mother came upstairs to his room.
"Ash, you still have thirty more minutes until school starts! Why don't you watch T.V? I'll be right back with some breakfast," Ash's mother told him.
Ash turned on his T.V. His favorite show was on! It was called Daily Battles. He absolutely loved this show. The show would show one battle between two top Pokémon Trainers every day!
Today's battle was the Elite Four Member, Bruno versus Professor Oak, the Pokémon Professor from Pallet Town, Ash's home town!
Ash was watching T.V. His mother walked into his room and handed him a bowl of cereal with pieces of cereal shaped like Caterpie, the worm Pokémon.
"Ash, I brought you your favorite cereal, Caterpie Crunchies!" his mom exclaimed.
After twenty-five minutes, Ash had finished his cereal and he had seen the finishing blow of the battle! Professor Oak's Dragonite had used Dragon Rage on Bruno's Onix.
Ash's mother walked into the room. She told Ash that it was time to fix his hair and get to school.
Ash walked over to the mirror in his room. His mother followed. Ash's black hair was a mess! His mom came over to him and took a comb and fixed his hair.
Three minutes later, Ash had walked to school. He walked up to the door of Pallet Town Elementary School and opened the door. He did not believe who he saw in the doorway. It was a boy his age with brown hair, a blue T-shirt, and blue jeans.
"Hey Ashy Boy!" He said.
It was Gary Oak, Professor Oak's grandson!