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TEEN: - Ongoing The Power that's Inside

FixBlix

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This is a story of power.
No.
Strength.
This story involves many.
But focuses on a select few.
In this story, many friendships will be made.
And allies fostered.
And perhaps as many enemies.
There will also be many deaths.
Hundreds.
Thousands.
But those who seek to protect will have given them willingly.
Because they feel the strength within.
They have The Power that’s Inside.

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Act I: Sour, Chapter I


The rain was unforgiving, beating down my cape as I attempted to find the place we had agreed on. It was early in the afternoon, but the grey clouds overcame the sun, and a forbidding darkness loomed overhead. At the time, I did see this as an omen, but now it was obvious the weather had not come to punish me, but rather, to warn me. I scrounged up the now wet, ink covered note from my back pocket.

Narrator: “’Izzy’s Ice Cream Parlor.’” I said to myself, peering at the note.

I looked up. There it was. The sign above the entrance stared down at me, mocking me, as if it were there the entire time. I stared back at it. Perhaps it knew something I didn‘t? I continued into the parlor. There was naught a soul to be seen, save the lone attendant waiting near the cash register. He had a surprised look his face.

Attendant: “A little cold for a ice cream don’t you think?”

Narrator: “You must be the manager.”

Manager: “Uh… well yeah. Can’t really expect too many customers on a day like this, so I let all my employees have a day off.”

Narrator: “Hrm. I see.”

Manager: “So, are you gonna buy anything, or…?”

Narrator: “I’m waiting for someone first.”

Manager: “Ah, ok, gotcha.”

The manager decided not to continue the discussion and turned away to look at his goods, contemplating which kind a guy like me would want. I sat down in the corner table, my figure was mostly hidden and I could see the clock adjacent to me. It was a quarter past 3 and the windows all around patted constantly with rain. I was beginning to worry. Not because she was late, because something could have happened to her coming here.

But just as that crossed my mind I saw a dark figure with a parasol walking swiftly through the rain. The window was blurred from all the water shrapnel so it was difficult to get a good look. The figure walked through the door and took a look in the direction opposite of mine. By it’s movements I could tell it was worried. It was obviously cold and shivering as well, but it peered into my direction and it’s face warmed up.

Figure: “Matthew.” She said softly. She placed her hand across her heart. She was relieved.

Matthew: “Cynthia.” I wanted to get up and wrap my arms around her.
 
Ch. 2
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She smiled as she placed her wet umbrella under the table, proceeding to sit across from me. Her golden lochs were as beautiful as ever. She peered at me with hazel blue eyes and I stared back. We sat just staring at each other for a good minute or two. I finally decided to break the ice.

Matthew: “So Cyn… what took you so long? We were supposed to meet up at 3 PM sharp.”

Cynthia: “The rain slowed me down. And you know me, I like to be fashionably late.”

Matthew: “I was worried.”

Cynthia: “Yeah, but you waited, right? And so long too. I’m flattered.”

I blushed slightly. The manager began to take notice of our conversation.

Manager: “So, hey you two! You guys gonna have some ice cream?”

Cyn and I looked at each other. We both smiled.

Matthew: “I’ll pay this time.”

After a bit of debating we decided on frozen sherbet, her favorite. We shared the same bowl.

Cynthia: “So the Elite Four want me as their Champion. What do you think of that?”

I chocked on a spoonful of ice cream slightly.

Matthew: “Are you gonna take the position?”

Cynthia: “I’m still thinking about it.” she turned the other way slightly.

Matthew: “You know how I feel about the Elite Four.”

Cynthia: “It’s alright, I understand. But, I’m not like them, Mattie.”

Matthew: “Yeah… you’re right. If you decide to become the new Champion, well… It’s alright with me, I guess.”

She looked at me, half relieved, half concerned.
Cynthia: “Are you sure?”

Matthew: “Yeah. I’m sure.” I smiled, indicating that I meant it.

We continued to chat on and off about what we had been doing the past year. It was like old times, back when were just little kids. Before… they came… My “parents” I guess you could call them. But that’s another story for another time, I think.
Cynthia had an awesome appetite, she ate about ¾’s of the ice cream we were having. She stopped eating when she noticed I had only taken a few bites.

Cynthia: “Matt, what’s wrong?”

I glanced outside. It was still pouring.

Matthew: “Something doesn’t feel right.”

She gave me a small smile and reached across the table to touch my shoulder.
Cynthia: “Whatever happens, happens. I’ll be right here for you.”

I relaxed.

Matthew: “Thanks.”

Cynthia: “Now eat the rest of this before it melts!”

I finished it up until the last bite. I let her have the final portion.
 
Why does this remind me of Max Payne?

Anyway, it's a decent attempt at a good story, but the structure is all wrong. If you're gonna write a story in the first-person, don't do it in script format. It just fargs everything up.
 
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