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EVERYONE: - Complete Unspoken Truths

Kiyoshi881

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Alright this is the first story i've ever dont on the net. I hope you enjoy it!! I've been writing/revising this story for about 4 years so i hope you guys enjoy this LONG story.
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May 2nd, 1997: My First Day As A Trainer

"Ryu...Ryu... wake up. It's dawn, and your breakfast is getting cold" my mother said.

"I'll be down in a minute. Let me get up and take a shower. I'm not bothered by cold food" I spoke as I rose from the covers

"Well, you better hurry up. Besides breakfast, your friend Ken is here and in about an hour or so you must go to your fathers lab to get ready on you Pokèmon journey."

"Alright!!" I yelled as my mother was walking down the stairs.

My name is Ryu Birch. And about a month to this day I got my licence to become a Pokèmon trainer. As of now I'm 16 years old, and have blondish hair.
My best friend Ken has had his Pokèmon licence for about a year or so. He was just waiting for me to get mine, so we could go together. He's 16, but turning 17 in about a week. He has brown hair and is taller than me, but he says it's better to be small because you can fit through smaller cracks.
Today is going to be fun because I finally get to live my dream of getting a badge and catching a Pokèmon. My mom said not to get my hopes up, because it is hard to get a badge.

"You would'nt know how hard they train unless you became one yourself. They dont call them Gym Leaders and give them badges for nothing" she constantly says when i bring badges up.

When i was done taking my shower I got dressed in my favorite blue jeans and my lucky red shirt with the white stripe slightly over my navel. I got my socks on, sliped on my shoes, and took one strap of my bookbag and slug it over my shoulder. I was ready to leave. But it was only 7:45 a.m. and Ken and I were to leave the house at 8:30.

"Ryu, come down your mother's about to throw your eggs and toast out" Ken said. "If you don't want 'em i'll be glad to take them. Haven't eaten in about a half-hour.

"Sure Ken, you can have them, i'll be down in about a minute. I said chuckling at what Ken said.

I put my watch on, and took my Pokèmon booklet, with all the moves, names, and stats of the Pokèmon, and put it in my bookbag. After that I ran downstairs.
My house isnt that big. It's a two story building with 4 rooms a kitchen, a resting room, and two bathrooms. I had a pet pidgey, but when it evolved into pidgeotto, my mom made me release it because it was more teritorial, and would often pick at her garden.
When I got downstairs it was longer than expected. My mom was washing the dirty breakfast china, Ken was done with my food, which is surprizing since he eats slow, and the time was 8:20.

"I'm going to miss you Ryu." my mom spoke as tears ran down her face "Your finally looking like the actors on tv that portray Pokèmon trainers."

"What about my Mrs. Birch?" Ken stammered

"Oh Ken, you know i'll miss you too."

My mother turned on the radio and my dad was on the radio being interviewed.

"Ken, which one will you pick?" I spoke. "I''m picking Treecko"

"I'll prolly pick Mudkip" Ken said "Besides I was researching the first gym leader and she uses rock pokemon so not only is Treecko good but Mudkip is good too!"
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"Professor Birch, what is with the starting three Pokèmon this year. We all thought it would be Treecko, Mudkip, and Torchic?" The VJ spoke shocking both Ken and I.

"Well I thought I would go back to the old roots and pick Bulbasaur, Charmander and Squirtle as the starters. The other three are good it's just that, we need to do more research on the. Bulbasaur, Charmander, and Squirtle we know all about. There's no more research we need on them. So we figure just give them to the new trainers because everyone knows about them, and they will be eaiser to raise because of that" my father said.

Just then my mother ran in from the living room and said "I can't believe it....he wasn't lying. Well you kids get a move on. You only got 5 minutes untill you pick the Pokèmon. I'll be there to give you kids your "equipment to survive" she said in a laughig voice.
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As Ken and I were walking we saw the third trainer that was recieving a pokemon, her name was Jen.

"HEY!!! How are you guys doing on this wonderful day? I'm great just trying to focus on what pokemon to get. I think I'll get Mudkip....yah..no, wait..Torchic" Jen spoke exuberntly.

"Should we tell her Ryu" Ken said

"Tell me what??!!" Jen said

"Ah, my father is not giving us the new three pokemon" I said in a hazy voice "He's giving us the original three, Bulbasaur, Charmander, and Squirtle."

"Ahahahah....you-ou-our kidding me right?? Right?" she said looking confused as if we were joking around"

"No. Were not!" Ken said

"Oh, well I know alot about Bulbasaur so i guess i'll get him" she said as if she didnt care what Pokèmon she got. "I guess I'll introduce myself to you. Im Jen and i just turned 16, i just moved here from just out of Cerulean City. I got my licence so early because I went to a Pokèmon Academy when I was 14 I know you Ryu but who is your friend here?"

"Oh, this is Ken Sugumi, he's cool and also my best friend" I said

"HI FIVE BRO" Ken screamed as we gave each other a Hi Five.

Jen was different from any other girl. She was an inch or two smaller that me and she had golden blond hair. She was beautiful and had a nice attitude. I was going to ask her then to join Ken and I on our journey but i decided to wait untill we got our Pokèmon.
When we got to the Lab. My dad came up to me and asked to follow him, as the crowd outside grew bigger and bigger geting ready for us to come out.

"How are all of you doing? Well you all know me I'm Ryu's father Professor Birch. You are hear to recieve your starting three pokemon. You can choose from either Bulbasaur the grass/poison Pokèmon, Charmander the fire Pokèmon, or Squirtle the water Pokèmon. Now, each of them have been tamed and will love whoever spends time with them. They will not disobey you unless you treat them wrong which you certainly will not. Now come here, I have all of your licences and Pokèdexs here. You all know what these are from because you all were schooled. Now I know what your thinking, you three arent the only trainers this year there are over 30 new trainers all over the Hoenn, Jhoto, and Kanto lands. Now come pick your Pokèmon you each will take a straw, whoever gets the biggest one picks first. my dad said.

We all picked straws and Jen got the smallest, Ken got the biggest and I would go second.

"Hmmmm, I guess I'll pick this one
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:007: Squirtle Tinyturtle Pokèmon
Ht: 1'08" Wt: 20.0 lb

After birth its back swells and hardens into a shell. Powerfully sprays foam from it's mouth.
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"Oh, cool i want it" Ken said excitingly

Now it was my turn and i was making the tuff decision

"Umm, i guess i'll take this Pokèmon"
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:004: Charmander Lizard Pokèmon
Ht: 2'00" Wt" 19.0 lb

Obviously prefers hot places. When it rains, steam is said to spout from the tip of it's tail
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"I love it" I said happy as can-be

"That means..yeeeeAHHHH. I get Bulbasaur, I can't wait to show my mom"
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:001: Bulbasaur Seed Pokèmon
Ht: 2'04" Wt: 15.0 lb

A strange seed was planted on it's back at birth. The plant sprouts and grows with this Pokèmon.
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"Well it is 9 a.m. right now" my father said "Time to show your parents what you have and then you can start your Pokèmon journey. Dont forget to call in every city you fall in" One more thing, take this manual with each of you. It gives as many tips including , food recipies, gyms, cities, and a built in map.

"Thanks!!" Ken said

"I love ya dad!" i spoke

"Hear I come gym leaders everywhere, oh, thanks Professor Birch" Jen said exhillerated.
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"What did you get Ken hunny" Mrs Sugumi said to her son"

"Squirtle mom, I'm so happy this moment came!"

"Well, im proud of you hunny, showing responsiblilty" she said "Heres your wallet with 50 dollars in it, fresh clothes, fruit and spring water in your backpack. Go get 'em"

Then my mom came with a big bag and she said "Here is a bag with 5 potions, and 10 pokè balls for you and Ken. Split them 5 each since you can only keep 6 Pokèmon in your party."

"Alright mom,I love you" I said as i kissed my mom on the cheek.

"Hey, Ryu. Where's Jen" Ken said as the crowd was leaving towards thier houses.

"I have no clue" I said looking around

"Aw, forget her she prolly got so caught up that she forgot to wait up" Ken said quite angry that she left without saying good-bye. "Let's get going."

And at exactly 9:38 we left not knowing that we were going to be in for the greatest adventure of our life.
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As Ken and I walked up to Odale Town I looked up trying to find a pidgey or a taillow to catch. But, all i saw were clouds and leaves blowing in the wind. Ken turned to me and asked

"Well, we can't both fight a gym leader on the same day, and definatly don't have time to wait two days in a city just because. So, do you really want to get badges in Hoenn?

"I don't know when we get to a gym i'll inform you" I said

"Alright i guess that's allright with me." he said

It took us about an hour to get to Oldale Town but, when we made it we went to the pokemon center to take a break. Ken and I were discussing the Pokèdex and what it does exactly.

"What it does is it tells you what your Pokèmon's level is at. When it grows a level it's stats get higher but you knew that. It also records how your Pokèmons status is such as if it has been in a battle wheter it needs to be taken to PC (Pokèmon Center) or not. "It could look tired and make you think you need to take it to a PC but sometimes you dont need to, and it's always good to make sure its doing alright" Ken was explaining. "It also gives you information of a pokemon you've seen or have captured"

"I see" I said

We stayed at the Pokèmon Center for lunch and headed for the Pokèmon Shop for more supplies. I had 100 dollars and Ken had 50. We each bought an antidote and a paralyze heal because we overheard Shroomish and Wurmple, Caterpie and Weedle were up ahead in Route 103. At the end of our shoping spree it was already 3 p.m. And we were ahead of schedule we walked up to Route 103 and i saw a Caterpie and Ken saw a Shroomish. We each battled the Pokèmon we saw

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:010: Caterpie Worm Pokèmon
Ht: 1'00" Wt: 6.0 lb

It's feet have suction cups designed to stick to any surface. It tenaciously climbs trees to forage
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"Go, Charmander" I said as threw my pokeball

A white light gleamed from the middle of the pokèball and the dot that I learned turned red when you would throw one at a wild Pokèmon was turning white. An image of a charmander appeared in white then beacame clear and I could see it and when I first glanced at it, it looked back at me. We were ready to attempt to catch a Caterpie
The caterpie took no time to fight. When it slung a String Shot attack at Charmanders face. I told it to rip the string off of its face and to scratch Caterpie. It did and when I pulled my Pokèdex out and pointed it to Caterpie. It was almost fatigued so I threw a Pokèball at it and a red light shone on Caterpie. It all of a sudden went inside the Pokèball. The ball wiggled for a bit before it stopped which meant I Ryu Birch had captured his first Pokèmon.
After that I looked at Ken who wasn't to thrilled.

"What happened Ken?" I said

"Oh, my Squirtle grew from level 1 to level 2 but it made Shroomish faint and now i still have just one Pokèmon." he said in a sad voice.

"It's allright Ken, you will eventally catch a Pokèmon." I said trying to cheer him up.

"Your right, why am I sad? I'm living my dream with my best friend" Ken said

After we went back to the PC to heal our pokemon it was 5 p.m. when they were fully healed so we were trying to decide where to head off as our pokemon were eating.

"Well, we cant go back to Route 103 because its blocked off by a lake" Ken said.

All of a sudden a voice said "How about going down with me to Route 102. Me, my Bulbasaur and my Shroomish need company."

"Bulbasaur...Bulbasaur" I said "Jen? Is that you?

"Yah" she said "Sorry I left you guys, I just wanted to get a head start. It was wrong but its early so Ryu, how would you like to Pokèmon battle with me. If any of our Pokèmon faint we can bring them back here. Besides, its more experience."

"Go ahead" Ken said. "Im going back to Route 103 to catch a Pokèmon"

"Alright" I said. "I won't hold back"

"Don't want ya to hun" she said "Now, LET'S GO!!"
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It was 6:00 p.m. when I had my first Pokèmon battle. and it was hard. Very hard!!

"GO Shroomish" she said as she called out her first pokemon

"Charmander, I choose you" I said usings my first Pokemon

According to the Pokèdex Charmander is faster so it attacks first. A crowd was formed of Pokèmon trainers was formed watching Jen and my every move. It was nerve-wrecking!!

"Chramander, Scratch attack" i yellled

With one swoop of the paw Shroomish was down but not out

"Shroomish, Stun Spore" she said

And out of the top of the head but unfortunaltly for Jen, being fast has it's advantages.

"Ah it missed, Shhhoot!!" she yelled

"Now finish it off Charmander, Scratch it again" I said excited to defeat my first Pokèmon in my first Pokèmon battle.

"Char-Charmander" it cried.

With another swipe of the paw Shroomish was down AND out. Not only did Charmander grow 2 levels for being in a pokemon battle it was 3 for being in an actual battle and defeating a Pokèmon a level ahead of it but, it was already experienced at level 2 so it was 2 levels away from learning a new move, Ember.

"Thats it Ryu, your going down!" she said determined to knock out my Charmander. "GO Bulbasaur"

Charmander was faster but, Bulbasaur has more Hit Points which means it will be harder to Knock Out!

"Charmander, Scratch" i said exuberantly

It hit Bulbasaur. Bulbasaur looked like it didnt hurt but it flinched, which gave me an advantage.

"Charmander, Growl" i spoke trying to weaken Bulbasaur's Attack

"Bulbasaur" Jen said "Use Leech Seed:

"Uh,Oh" I said "Bulbasaur is already at level 7."

Charmander was geting weaker while the vine was still attached to Bulbasaurs back giving him energy.

"Erm, Chramander, scratch!!" I said trying to get a advantage.

Bulbasaur was at a stage according to the Pokèdex where with 2 more hits it would faint.

"Bulbasaur, tackle NOW" she said as Bulbasaur tackled my Charmander.

One more hit would knock out my Charmander so i remembered somthing my dad tought me: "If your Pokèmon is weak and will faint in one more hit, switch it with another pokemon it your party."

"Charmander have a potion" i said as the potion restored my Charmander.

"HA!, ill still defeat it before my Bulbasaur faints" she said cofidently.

"Oh no you won't! Charmander return" I said as I left Jen's face stunded "Go Caterpie"

My Caterpie was at level 4, a slight disadvantage but one more hit would knock it out.

"Caterpie, finish that Bulbasaur off!, Tackle!" I said with a load of cofidence as Caterpie tackled a weak Bulbasaur knocking it out and winning me the match.

"Ho-ho-ho-how could you?" she studdered as she picked up her Bulbasaur and ran into the Pokèmon Center.

"Ryu..RYU!! Good news bro!" Ken said as he ran to me from Route 103.

"Not now Ken" I said dissapointly "Lets talk about it in the Pokèmon Center.
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After the match our Pokèmon where getting healed and Jen wouldn't talk to me. She wouldn't even look at me.

"Jen, what's the matter, you win some, you lose some" Ken said

"Well, there are some things I dont wanna talk about. And some people I don't wanna talk to!!" she said in a pouty mood.

Just then Nurse Joy came to the table with a late snack and our Pokèmon.

"Here you are boys, have a great night! The showers are in the back room first door to the left, beds are the first door to the right."

"Thanks" I said "Now Ken, what was the good news?"

"Well check it out for ourself" Ken said
"Come out 'ol buddy"
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:016: Pidgey Tiny Bird Pokèmon
Ht: 1'00" Wt: 4.01 lb

Common in grassy areas and forests, it is very docile and will chase off enemies by flapping up sand
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"You see, I told you that you would catch a Pokèmon" I said

"What can I say? You were right all along. You the MAN! HI FIVE" he said as I gave him a Hi Five.

"Oh, what a cute Pokèmon. I absloutly love Pidgeys" what level is it?" Jen said as she came back from looking at the poster of the Elite Four.

"Level 5 I believe" Ken said.

"Woah, your Squirtle is only level 2! How did you get a level 5 Pidgey? I asked.

"I trained it. My Squirtle is know level 5. Ken answered.

"Cool" I said "Lisiten, it's getting late. I'm gonna take a shower and go to bed.

"Listen Ryu, im sorry for being a snob to you" Jen said" I guess I was just mad about losing"

"It's ok!. You win some and lose some." I said "But I'm flushed, so I'll see you guys in the morning".

"Night" Ken said

"See Ya around hun" Jen said

As I was in the shower I thought about all the fun Ken and I were gonna have on this adventure, but I also couldn't stop thinking about Jen. She was gorgeous. But shes also tough. I heard the door open but couldn't see anyone because of the steam in the room.

"Who's there?" I asked.

When I got out, I looked and noone was there, I looked by my pajamas and saw my wallet.

"I know for a fact there was 65 dollars in here" I yelled down the hall after getting dressed. There was an envelope in there i opened it and saw 25 dollars and a note.

"Ryu,
Hun you are a worthy opponent. And dont worry I'll be comming with you and Ken. You could call me a "personal cheerleader"
Love,
Jen

I couldn't stop reading that letter all night, i read it when i was in bed all night untill about 11 p.m. when Ken came outta the shower. I slipped it back in my wallet.

"Hey man." Ken whispered. "Thanks for comin' with me on this journey."

"No problem." I whispered "Thats what bros are for. By the way...wheres Jen"

"Shes in the girls resting room" Ken told me

"I think I like her" I said to Ken

"She is pretty and nice" Ken said. "I'm glad to hear you like a good girl. But I'm tired so I'll talk to you tommarow."

"Good Night Ken" I said
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At 11:15 p.m. I went to bed after my first day as a Pokemon Trainer.
 
Chapter 2 : Haze

*a thousand appologies for what you have seen in the first chapter, unfortunatly i forgot to show you how much the items cost. When they were in the Pokèmart. Well there's more to come, so sit back relax and reply!! lol.
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May 3rd, 1996: Haze
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Pidgey....Pidgey...Pidgey

The sound of birds in the backround, the sun gleamed on my face, as I awoke to a glorious morning, hoping it would be filled with adventure and excitment.

"Where's Ken?" I thought as I looked at his empty bed.

I walked down the long hallway and took another refreshing shower, since it was very dry the previous night. I couldn't really think about anything but Jen, her and that note she wrote me.
I was in the shower untill the water ran cold, then I hopped out, got packed and went into the main lobby, where I came upon Ken.

"Hey Ken! How did ya sleep?"

"Oh, allright I guess but all I could think about was catching new Pokèmon."

"Same here" I said not telling him I was only thinking of Jen. Afraid he would think I was obsessed with her.

"Well, we better get going" Ken said

"...Allright." I shrugged. "Where's Jen?"

"Outside waiting for us"

"Let's get going then" I said as I ran out the door
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Here are our status as of know
Ryu Birch
Pokemon:
:004: Level : 6
Attacks : Scratch
Growl


:010: Level: 6
Attacks : Tackle
String Shot

Items
2 Potion
1 Paralyze Heal
1 Antidote
5 Pokèball
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Ken Sugumi
Pokemon:
:007: Level: 5
Attacks: Tackle
Tail Whip


:016: Level: 5
Attacks: Gust
Sand- Attack

Items
2 Potion
1 Paralyze Heal
1 Antidote
5 Pokèball
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Jennica
Pokemon:
:001: Level: 6
Attacks: Tackle
Growl
Leech Seed

:kinococo: Level 3
Attacks: Tackle
Stun Spore

Items
5 Potion
10 Pokèball
2 Antidote
1 Rare Candy

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"Come on Ken we're gonna be late" I said as Jen and I hustled to get to Route 102

"I'm comming, I'm comming"

All of a sudden all you could see was haze. It was such a thick haze it almost made me loose sight of Jen and she was right beside me. It had the worst stench in the world. It made you want to vomit if you would smell it.
A few moments later we saw three shadowy figures.

"Hand over your Pokèmon or its lights out" one of the figures said.

"No way" Jen yelled "If anyone touches my Pokèmon without my permission there is hell to pay!"

"We gotta fiesty one here Sean" the voice said

"Yes we certainly do." another stammered. "Let us introduce ourselfs. Koffing return!" We are Team Rocket, you may have know that we were once working for the eighth gym leader of Kanto Giovanni, but we have gonna as an underground group that steals strong Pokèmon!! So hand over yours or suffer the consequences"

"Lets have a Pokèmon battle and if we lose then we hand over our Pokèmon. if you lose then you get the hell outta here" Ken said

"Fine by us. Koffing, Grimer go!"

"Jen, let me and Ken take this one ok?" I asked.

"O....alright"

"Squirtle, Caterpie go get 'em!"

Caterpie tackled the weak grimer and in a matter of tag teaming it with the fast Pokèmon, with one hit each grimer was down for the count.

"Koffing, haze attack" the male figure said.

And after the haze cleared and grimer was knocked out, Team Rocket got away.

"Shoot, I wanted to beat 'em to" Ken said "Oh well, my Squirtle grew a level, and you got expierence on you Caterpie"

"Yup!!"

"Lets get a move on its almost noon and if someone didn't over sleep we would've been in Petalburg City already!" Jen annoyingly said.

As we were on our way to Petalburg City we were stoped by a young boy. He was kinda small, had wild green hair and was wearing a white dress-up shirt and black pants.

"I don't want to move, I hate moving. I love it here in Petalburg City". said the boy.

"Umm who are you?" I asked

"Oh me, aha, I'm Wally. It's nice to meet you but I really have to go now. I want to talk to Norman the gym leader so he can let me borrow a Pokèmon and I can catch one of my own."

"Thats cool, which one do you want?"

"Oh, I don't know. I heard Ralts are very rare but hard to catch, but i would like anything."

"Take us hun, to Norman please?" Jen asked

"Ummmm..su-u-ure anything for you miss" he answered.

So we followed Wally to the Petalburg Gym.

"Norm, Norm, I gotta go soon, can I please borow a Pokemon so I can catch one?"

"Sure you can Wally. Who are your friends?" he asked

"I'm Ryu"

"I'm Jennica"

"I'm Ken"

"Norman, I would love to battle you for a badge. Can I??!" I asked with all the dignity and respect I had for this man

"Ummm, I-I-I'm sorry, I'm much to strong for you, try going a couple of miles down to Rustboro City and battle Roxanne. You see im the Fifth Gym Leader if your going in Hoenn Order."

"Oh, I see alright. I'll be back!"

"I tell you what, help Wally catch a Pokèmon and I'll give you somthing for your efforts. What do ya say?" he asked

"I'd be glad too!" I told him

"So would we!" Jen and Ken said

"Allright lets get going" Wally exuberantly spoke.
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It was about 2:30 p.m. when Wally saw his first Pokemon, it ran away. But around 3 p.m. 3:30 p.m. he caught a ratatta.

:019: Ratatta - Rat Pokèmon
Ht: 1'00" Wt: 8.0 lb

Bites anything when it attacks. Small and very quick, it is a common sight in many places

"Oh I'm so happy. I got a Pokèmon." Wally said as happy as can-be. "Thanks Ryu, Ken, Jennica, for all your help, time, and patience."

"No problem" I said

"Aheh, It was nothing really." Ken spoke

"No prob hun, aha" Jen said in a chuckling voice
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We all went back to Petalburg City and had a later lunch. Fruit and Water. We all were exhausted. It was about 5 p.m. when we saw the haze through the windows, and heard Wallys voice screaming...

"My Pokèmon, my poor, poor, Ratatti." he cried.

"Thats enough guys give back the Pokèmon NOW!" Ken said in a furious voice.

"Why should we listen to a Hot Head like you? We got what we want a Pokèmon. But just incase you slow us down" Koffing, Zubat go."

"I got this one with Ryu, Ken" Jen yelled

"Shroomish, Squrtle go!" they yelled as they threw thier Pokèballs. "Shroomish stun spore now"

A yellow mist shrouded the area where Zubat and Koffing were. Zubat got away from it. But Koffing got paralyzed.

Zubat, whirlwind blew the spray towards Squirtle and he got paralyzed.

"Squirtle, NOOOOO, return" Ken said depressed his starter was injured. "Pidgey, GO"

As the light shown on the Pokeball, Zubat was told to bite Shroomish. So with one bite Zubat knocked out Shroomish.

"NOOOOOOO, Shroomish" Jen sniveled. "Return. Go Bulbasaur."

You could say Bulbasaur and Pidgey came out at the same time and attacked at the same time, all I know is both Koffing and Zubat fainted at the same time.

"Leech Seed on Zubat, Bulbasaur."

"Gust on Zubat, Pidgey"

In an instance Zubat was knocked out. Next, was Koffing.

"Tackle on Koffing, Bulbasaur."

"Gust on Koffing, Pidgey."

It was so frightning to see Jen and Ken's Pokèmon raised so high even Team Rocket was in awe.

"It doesn't matter, Koffing return, Zubat, come back to me. We still got Ratatta!"

They headed off in a Air Balloon with the logo "R" on the front.

"If there is one thing I know about air balloons is that they pop easily" Ken thought "Pidgey, give it a Quick Attack!"
Pidgey flew to the balloon and poped it and in a few moments Team Rocket went flying and droped the cage in midair to hold on to the blimp so the would'nt fall out.

"Bulbasaur, catch the cage with your vines and don't let go." Jen said

Bulbasaur came down with the cage and gave it to Wally.

"Ratatti, come to me. I'll never let ya go!" he sayed with joy "Thanks for your help Ken and Jen."

"No prob" Ken said

"It was nothing hun" Jen said

"Well that was some of the greatest teamwork I've seen in a while! What level are your Pokèmon?" Norman asked.

"Pidgey is a mature 7!" said Ken.

"Bulbasaur is at 10 now" Jennica said. "I raised it while Ryu was catching Pokèmon with Wally.

"You weren't the only ones guys" I said
"I was raising my Pokèmon also" and I got this from raising.
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:011: Metapod - Cacoon Pokèmon
Ht: 2'4" Wt: 22.0 lb

It is vulnerable to attack beacuse it's shell is soft, exposing it's soft and tender body.
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"Oh, wow that's awesome" Ken said.

"It's cute looking, shouldn't it evolve again??" Jen asked.

"I think it's evolves into Butterfree in a level" I said

"It's already at level 9!!" Norman said. "You are getting stronger, I can't wait untill I face you. Untill then I will train harder."

"Hearing that from a gym leader makes me feel stronger physically and mentally."
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We got to the Pokèmon Center at around 9 p.m. healed our Pokèmon, got washed up and looked at my Pokèdex and looked under Metapod. In one level he will evolve. I looked under my Charmander and in 6 levels it will evolve. I'm so glad my dreams are comming true!!

"Ken..Ken...are you awake?? psst are you awake Ken?" I whispered.

"I guess he ain't up" I thought to myself

I slept easy that night knowing tommarow I would make my way towards Rustboro City to get my first badge.
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I fell asleep at 9:59 p.m.
 
Chapter 2 : Haze

*a thousand appologies for what you have seen in the first chapter, unfortunatly i forgot to show you how much the items cost. When they were in the Pokèmart. Well there's more to come, so sit back relax and reply!! lol.
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May 3rd, 1996: Haze

Pidgey....Pidgey...Pidgey

The sound of birds in the backround, the sun gleamed on my face, as I awoke to a glorious morning, hoping it would be filled with adventure and excitment.

"Where's Ken?" I thought as I looked at his empty bed.

I walked down the long hallway and took another refreshing shower, since it was very dry the previous night. I couldn't really think about anything but Jen, her and that note she wrote me.
I was in the shower untill the water ran cold, then I hopped out, got packed and went into the main lobby, where I came upon Ken.

"Hey Ken! How did ya sleep?"

"Oh, allright I guess but all I could think about was catching new Pokèmon."

"Same here" I said not telling him I was only thinking of Jen. Afraid he would think I was obsessed with her.

"Well, we better get going" Ken said

"...Allright." I shrugged. "Where's Jen?"

"Outside waiting for us"

"Let's get going then" I said as I ran out the door
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Here are our status as of know
Ryu Birch
Pokemon:
:004: Level : 6
Attacks : Scratch
Growl


:010: Level: 6
Attacks : Tackle
String Shot

Items
2 Potion
1 Paralyze Heal
1 Antidote
5 Pokèball
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Ken Sugumi
Pokemon:
:007: Level: 5
Attacks: Tackle
Tail Whip


:016: Level: 5
Attacks: Gust
Sand- Attack

Items
2 Potion
1 Paralyze Heal
1 Antidote
5 Pokèball
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Jennica
Pokemon:
:001: Level: 6
Attacks: Tackle
Growl
Leech Seed

:kinococo: Level 3
Attacks: Tackle
Stun Spore

Items
5 Potion
10 Pokèball
2 Antidote
1 Rare Candy

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"Come on Ken we're gonna be late" I said as Jen and I hustled to get to Route 102

"I'm comming, I'm comming"

All of a sudden all you could see was haze. It was such a thick haze it almost made me loose sight of Jen and she was right beside me. It had the worst stench in the world. It made you want to vomit if you would smell it.
A few moments later we saw three shadowy figures.

"Hand over your Pokèmon or its lights out" one of the figures said.

"No way" Jen yelled "If anyone touches my Pokèmon without my permission there is hell to pay!"

"We gotta fiesty one here Sean" the voice said

"Yes we certainly do." another stammered. "Let us introduce ourselfs. Koffing return!" We are Team Rocket, you may have know that we were once working for the eighth gym leader of Kanto Giovanni, but we have gonna as an underground group that steals strong Pokèmon!! So hand over yours or suffer the consequences"

"Lets have a Pokèmon battle and if we lose then we hand over our Pokèmon. if you lose then you get the hell outta here" Ken said

"Fine by us. Koffing, Grimer go!"

"Jen, let me and Ken take this one ok?" I asked.

"O....alright"

"Squirtle, Caterpie go get 'em!"

Caterpie tackled the weak grimer and in a matter of tag teaming it with the fast Pokèmon, with one hit each grimer was down for the count.

"Koffing, haze attack" the male figure said.

And after the haze cleared and grimer was knocked out, Team Rocket got away.

"Shoot, I wanted to beat 'em to" Ken said "Oh well, my Squirtle grew a level, and you got expierence on you Caterpie"

"Yup!!"

"Lets get a move on its almost noon and if someone didn't over sleep we would've been in Petalburg City already!" Jen annoyingly said.

As we were on our way to Petalburg City we were stoped by a young boy. He was kinda small, had wild green hair and was wearing a white dress-up shirt and black pants.

"I don't want to move, I hate moving. I love it here in Petalburg City". said the boy.

"Umm who are you?" I asked

"Oh me, aha, I'm Wally. It's nice to meet you but I really have to go now. I want to talk to Norman the gym leader so he can let me borrow a Pokèmon and I can catch one of my own."

"Thats cool, which one do you want?"

"Oh, I don't know. I heard Ralts are very rare but hard to catch, but i would like anything."

"Take us hun, to Norman please?" Jen asked

"Ummmm..su-u-ure anything for you miss" he answered.

So we followed Wally to the Petalburg Gym.

"Norm, Norm, I gotta go soon, can I please borow a Pokemon so I can catch one?"

"Sure you can Wally. Who are your friends?" he asked

"I'm Ryu"

"I'm Jennica"

"I'm Ken"

"Norman, I would love to battle you for a badge. Can I??!" I asked with all the dignity and respect I had for this man

"Ummm, I-I-I'm sorry, I'm much to strong for you, try going a couple of miles down to Rustboro City and battle Roxanne. You see im the Fifth Gym Leader if your going in Hoenn Order."

"Oh, I see alright. I'll be back!"

"I tell you what, help Wally catch a Pokèmon and I'll give you somthing for your efforts. What do ya say?" he asked

"I'd be glad too!" I told him

"So would we!" Jen and Ken said

"Allright lets get going" Wally exuberantly spoke.
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It was about 2:30 p.m. when Wally saw his first Pokemon, it ran away. But around 3 p.m. 3:30 p.m. he caught a ratatta.

:019: Ratatta - Rat Pokèmon
Ht: 1'00" Wt: 8.0 lb

Bites anything when it attacks. Small and very quick, it is a common sight in many places

"Oh I'm so happy. I got a Pokèmon." Wally said as happy as can-be. "Thanks Ryu, Ken, Jennica, for all your help, time, and patience."

"No problem" I said

"Aheh, It was nothing really." Ken spoke

"No prob hun, aha" Jen said in a chuckling voice
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We all went back to Petalburg City and had a later lunch. Fruit and Water. We all were exhausted. It was about 5 p.m. when we saw the haze through the windows, and heard Wallys voice screaming...

"My Pokèmon, my poor, poor, Ratatti." he cried.

"Thats enough guys give back the Pokèmon NOW!" Ken said in a furious voice.

"Why should we listen to a Hot Head like you? We got what we want a Pokèmon. But just incase you slow us down" Koffing, Zubat go."

"I got this one with Ryu, Ken" Jen yelled

"Shroomish, Squrtle go!" they yelled as they threw thier Pokèballs. "Shroomish stun spore now"

A yellow mist shrouded the area where Zubat and Koffing were. Zubat got away from it. But Koffing got paralyzed.

Zubat, whirlwind blew the spray towards Squirtle and he got paralyzed.

"Squirtle, NOOOOO, return" Ken said depressed his starter was injured. "Pidgey, GO"

As the light shown on the Pokeball, Zubat was told to bite Shroomish. So with one bite Zubat knocked out Shroomish.

"NOOOOOOO, Shroomish" Jen sniveled. "Return. Go Bulbasaur."

You could say Bulbasaur and Pidgey came out at the same time and attacked at the same time, all I know is both Koffing and Zubat fainted at the same time.

"Leech Seed on Zubat, Bulbasaur."

"Gust on Zubat, Pidgey"

In an instance Zubat was knocked out. Next, was Koffing.

"Tackle on Koffing, Bulbasaur."

"Gust on Koffing, Pidgey."

It was so frightning to see Jen and Ken's Pokèmon raised so high even Team Rocket was in awe.

"It doesn't matter, Koffing return, Zubat, come back to me. We still got Ratatta!"

They headed off in a Air Balloon with the logo "R" on the front.

"If there is one thing I know about air balloons is that they pop easily" Ken thought "Pidgey, give it a Quick Attack!"
Pidgey flew to the balloon and poped it and in a few moments Team Rocket went flying and droped the cage in midair to hold on to the blimp so the would'nt fall out.

"Bulbasaur, catch the cage with your vines and don't let go." Jen said

Bulbasaur came down with the cage and gave it to Wally.

"Ratatti, come to me. I'll never let ya go!" he sayed with joy "Thanks for your help Ken and Jen."

"No prob" Ken said

"It was nothing hun" Jen said

"Well that was some of the greatest teamwork I've seen in a while! What level are your Pokèmon?" Norman asked.

"Pidgey is a mature 7!" said Ken.

"Bulbasaur is at 10 now" Jennica said. "I raised it while Ryu was catching Pokèmon with Wally.

"You weren't the only ones guys" I said
"I was raising my Pokèmon also" and I got this from raising.
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:011: Metapod - Cacoon Pokèmon
Ht: 2'4" Wt: 22.0 lb

It is vulnerable to attack beacuse it's shell is soft, exposing it's soft and tender body.
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"Oh, wow that's awesome" Ken said.

"It's cute looking, shouldn't it evolve again??" Jen asked.

"I think it's evolves into Butterfree in a level" I said

"It's already at level 9!!" Norman said. "You are getting stronger, I can't wait untill I face you. Untill then I will train harder."

"Hearing that from a gym leader makes me feel stronger physically and mentally."
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We got to the Pokèmon Center at around 9 p.m. healed our Pokèmon, got washed up and looked at my Pokèdex and looked under Metapod. In one level he will evolve. I looked under my Charmander and in 6 levels it will evolve. I'm so glad my dreams are comming true!!

"Ken..Ken...are you awake?? psst are you awake Ken?" I whispered.

"I guess he ain't up" I thought to myself

I slept easy that night knowing tommarow I would make my way towards Rustboro City to get my first badge.
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I fell asleep at 9:59 p.m.
 
all right I made a bunch of mistakes first of all i accidentally made two copies of chapter two trying to delete sometime, seconde i messed up the yr on chapter it is to be 1997...from now on no more mistakes! reply n tell me what ya think
 
journey fic *sigh*

Well, there's alot to say about a fic like this. Some good, and some bad. Please don't take this the wrong way, it's just constructive criticism. I know, because I got a lot of it in the past of my fanfics.

First thing I know that should be done is the grammar. It needs to be corrected. Quotation Marks, Periods, spelling. There were quite a few points where it interfered and made the reader "me" lose my trade of thought on the story.

Second off, description. The story to me is being rushed. You should take your time, note the scenery, comment on the pokemon. Instead of just walking, traveling, and battling, Ryu, Ken, and Jen should be doing what normal teenagers do, even in the Pokémon world.

Third would be the characters and format. The characters seem a little bland. I can't really find much that sets Ken apart from Ryu, accept for the vague description at the beginning. And you say Jen is different from every other girl, but there's little justification for it. I mean, HOW is she different exactly. There should be some history to Jen and why Ryu likes her or he'll seem like some shallow guy who likes her only for her looks, which would at least be a reason...

The format is something I find people will have the most trouble with. I personally don't mind journey fics as long as they go somewhere interesting in the plot, and by the title, there may be. But levels are something I think NO STORY should have. And knowing the cash amount of every item and what they have is redundant.

The feel for the story is too gamish, and combine that with a lack of proper spelling, a rushed plot, and bland characters, not many people will feel enthusiastic about reading it.

All in all, the story has promise. Drop the levels and item thing, slow the pace, which can be done by describing the characters better, killing two birds with one stone. And hint plot changes, so people will want to see what happens. Personally, if you really have worked on this for 4 years, then you haven't read enough of the fics around here. Personally, I'd take the time to read some other works on this board. A lot of them I recognize from Pojo's old boards. Good Luck, I will be reading in the future.
 
sorry for incovience

--I AM ENDING THIS STORY ON A COUNT THAT I CAN MAKE IT BETTER AND WHEN I DO NO WORRIES IT WILL BE BETTER--

SORRY FOR THE INCONVIENCE, I AM NOT ONE OF THOSE PEOPLE THAT JUST COME MAKE A STORY DONT FINISH IT AND LEAVE IT BE, ALTHOUGH IM ACTING LIKE THIS I WILL NOT POST THIS STORY UNTILL IT IS FINSHED... ONE THOUSAND APPOLOGIES!
 
There really wasn't a need to make a new thread for this. So I hope you don't mind if I merge this message into the story it concerns.

Also, I don't think there was a need for you to apologize for anything. It's your choice if you want to take some time and edit your fic. It's great that you are able to accept someone's criticism, and you try to better your writing in relation to that. However, next time, try not to type in all caps. It kind of suggests that you might not be handling the criticism all that well, considering all caps = yelling. ^^;;;;

Best of luck on your fic. ^_^
 
thanks for merging it...I accedentally made a new thread..(my mistake) but yah the caps thing was just to annouce that I was stopping the story for now, and I appologized because I was afraid people would think that I was a quiter and im not going to do a big journey fic untill I understand the concepts of fan fics.
 
It's all good, Kiyoshi. We all live and learn, no? I've never finished a fic before. If you do, hats off to you!
 
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Please take the age of this thread into consideration in writing your reply. Depending on what exactly you wanted to say, you may want to consider if it would be better to post a new thread instead.
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