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o hai gaiz. dis r me 3rd fic, as i sem 2 find me oter fic 2 be a beet uberlooked an unintresting.
Okay, enough with the mangled English. I also have something to explain why I made this fic, but it's huge, so I spoilered it.
Whew, that was over. Anyways, if you took the time to read the spoiler, you know what the premise is. Or if you don't want to listen to some unimportant history on how I came with the idea of this fic, skip to the last paragraphs.
And now we begin.
Chapter 1: Arrival
It was a long trip for 10-year old Wally Button, a trainer from Verdanturf Town in the Hoenn region.
As a trainer, he went and challenged every Gym Leader in Hoenn, usually required for joining the yearly Hoenn League championship, a tournament in where the best trainers in Hoenn would compete.
Wally had obtained all of the badges and returned home to Verdanturf Town to pack up, train his Pokemon and prepare for the championship.
One of Wally's Pokemon was a Wailord, a Pokemon he had aquired early on as a Wailmer, its pre-evolution. Wally named him Will, because to him, it sounded like "Wail".
Wally, however, had trouble using Will in battle. Because most fights are on land and Will was a Pokemon that lived in water, Will couldn't move at all, save for rolling. And when one can't moved, one could easily get hit by attacks.
Even if Will had strong attacks, the complete lack of mobility proved to be Will's weakness, and he was unable to dodge very powerful moves, which led to many a defeat. Even if Will tried to roll, he was still easy to hit.
Even if Wally cared for Will, he just decided that it was going to be troublesome for him to use Will in battle, and even then, he didn't want Will to get hurt over being hit by very powerful moves and be in a lot of pain just because he could't move on land.
Wally eventually decided to drop him off in a Daycare Center near his hometown of Verdanturf.
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"So, you're leaving me here, right?" Will said. However, Wally only heard a really loud "Waaaaaaiiilll" sound.
"Listen, Will, I really don't want to leave you, but the Hoenn League championship is nearing and...well, if I joined you, you'd have trouble since you can't really dodge attacks, and it's not like there's a body of water that can fit you, or even a body of water at all." Wally said to Will.
"I understand. It's just...I just really don't want to leave you." Will said. As usual, Wally heard a "Wail" sound.
"Don't worry, Will. When the championship is over, I'll pick you up. Don't worry that you're not back in Verdanturf; they have a lake here that can fit you."
"Really? Sure." Will said. Wally heard "Wail" again.
"Well, I gotta go now. I already need to get to Evergrande City on the other side of the region, and getting there will take some time. See ya!" Wally said.
"See you too." Will said. Wally just heard a really long "Wail". Wally then exited the field that the Daycare Center reserved for the Pokemon, and entered a building that represented as the entrance for the place.
"We'll take care of your Wailord." A voice muttered in the building where most people got to enter the Daycare Center.
"Gonna be missing ya." Will said. Suddenly, someone spoke right beside him.
"Was that your trainer?" Someone asked.
"Yup...wait, who're you?" Will said.
"I'm a Skitty. My trainer calls me Kira. I'm a girl, just in case." The Pokemon replied.
"You have a trainer too?" Will asked.
"What did I just tell you?" Sakura replied.
"Ahh...hehe...sorry." Will replied.
"So, why were you put in here?" Sakura asked.
"My trainer was going to compete in a tournament or something, don't know what the name was, and he didn't add me because the fights are on land and I can't move on land." Will replied.
"Oh? Poor you." Kira replied.
"Don't worry. I don't like having to fight with a few dozen Pokemon and getting hit by powerful attacks without the liberty of dodging them, and especially if the Pokemon is electric. I don't like electricity. A lot."
"I know what you mean. One day, my trainer and I were battling with this Electrike in the rain, and that guy hit me with a electric attack while I was wet. It hurt a lot."
"Heh. So.....erm...what now?"
"Hmm...what's your name?"
"Will."
"So, nice to meet you, Will! You're a guy, right?"
"Duh? Anyways, nice to meet you too, Sakura."
After a while...
"So, um, what now?" Will asked.
"I don't know....wait, follow me." Kira told Will.
"How? I can't move."
"I don't know. Try turning around and rolling in the direction you want to go."
"Hmm, never thought of turning around so that I can roll in the direction I want. I'll try that."
And so, Will, with some trouble, managed to lift his body and turn his body so that it faced to his left.
"And now I roll, right?" Will said.
"Yup!" Kira replied. Will began rolling.
"Hey, it works! Thanks!" Will said.
"You're welcome. Now follow me. I'm gonna introduce you to some of my friends." Kira told Will.
"Sure thing."
After a a minute of walking, or in Will's case, rolling, the two eventually found their way to a small field surrounded by shrubs, trees and grass. There were 3 pokemon inside the field, roaring and growling at something Will coudn't see.
"I'm the loudest!" One of the Pokemon said. It suddenly made a high-pitched screech.
"No, I have!" Another Pokemon said. It then made a very load roar.
"I say I'm the loudest!" The third Pokemon said. It then shouted very loudly.
"Hey, guys, what are you doing?" Kira asked.
"We're just tryin' ta see who has the loudest voice." One of the Pokemon, who had four legs and was covered in steel all over.
"Yup, that's, like, pretty much it, you know." Another Pokemon said, who looked like a very beautiful butterfly with large and colorful wings.
"Ya, dat's pretty much it. 'ell, d'ya wanna join?" The third pokemon, who was colored blue with some green on his body, and had very long arms and a lilypad on its head.
"Nope. But I found this guy who was put here in this place." Kira said, as she pointed out to Will.
Will was still trying to turn around to face Kira and the others and eventually managed to do it.
"Hi. I'm Will." Will said.
"You're like, totally huge! Really really huge!" One of the pokemon said.
"Dat's da bigges' guy I've seen eva since sumbody dropped off a Salamence here!" The third pokemon replied.
"Gnarly, dude!" The second one said.
"Guys, introduce yourself too. Don't just be awed at his size." Kira said.
"Oh. Ok. So, I'm Bea, so, um...I'm a Beautifly, and...erm...nice to meet you!" Bea replied.
"I'm Rei. I'm a Lairon. Pleased ta meet you, dude." Rei said.
"An' I'm Lot. Imma Lombre. Damn mah horrible species name." Lot said.
"Well, again, I'm Will, a Wailord." Will replied.
"That is the most ridiculous species name I have heard in my life." Rei said.
"Hey!" Will said.
"Stop this, guys! I'm sorry, Will, but Rei tends to make fun of everything.
"Aww, now they're talking! What are ya talking 'bout, a date?" Rei said. Bea and Lot laughed at the same time.
"See?" Kira said to Will.
"Hehehe...anyways, Will, how loud can you shout?" Rei asked Will.
"Well, I don't shout much, but..." Will said.
"Just do it!" Rei interrupted.
"Ok then." Will said.
"WWWWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLLLL!!!!!!!" Will screamed in a very low pitched. It was deafening.
"Ack, cova' yer ears!" Lot shouted, as Will's scream was drowning out everything else.
After a while, Will stopped screaming.
"How's that?" Will asked.
"Arrgh, my ears hurt. That was like, totally loud!" Bea commented.
"Radical, man!" Rei said.
"Dat is da loudest thin' I've eva heard since dat thunderstorm a month ago back a' Petalburg Fores'."
"Will, that's really loud." Kira said.
"Hehe...thanks." Will replied.
"Wanna like, come with us?" Bea said to Will.
"Sure!" Will replied.
By now, Will had forgotten about Wally completely. He immediately made friends with other Pokemon just a few minutes after arriving.
This'll be a nice vacation. Will thought.
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Sue me, but I only have a vague planning of this fic. Of course, I'd be spoiling the story, so I'm not gonna tell you what I plan to make of this fic. Hope it's not too bad.
On a side note, if you liked this, please read my other fic, A Girl And Her Journey.
Okay, enough with the mangled English. I also have something to explain why I made this fic, but it's huge, so I spoilered it.
So basically, I find that my other fic is often overlooked because of several reasons:
1. The name is too generic, according to some people
2. It's a journey fic. People tend to prefer something else.
3. Some other fics seem to be more interesting.
and 4. The plot(rewrite of R/B/Y/FR/LG) has been done many times already.
So, even if I still consider my own fic to be good, I just that it doesn't get much attention. I posted my latest chapter a 3 days ago, and I had like 740 views. Now, I have 760 views. I don't consider having 20 people read my fic every 3 days a lot, when others can do better.
When people who did review my fic say it was a bit too generic, I considered trying to make another one with a more interesting plot. First I thought of a journey fic using contests but it's still a journey fic, so I passed(I find it a good idea though). After a while, I just gave up thinking one and continued to write my other fic in the hope that it would gather attention.
Then one day, I was taking a session of TvTropes when I winded up in the Hot Skitty On Wailord Action page. Then it hit me: Why not try a HSOWA fic? At first, I thought of outright love and having kids, but I felt that it would be too ridiculous. And so, I planned that this fic would just have the skitty and the wailord as very close friends.
Now, what is the plot, you ask? It's about the daily life of a Wailord put in a daycare center(in Hoenn, if you want to be specific) and meeting a Skitty who happens to be there too, as the first Pokemon the Wailord meets in the daycare.
1. The name is too generic, according to some people
2. It's a journey fic. People tend to prefer something else.
3. Some other fics seem to be more interesting.
and 4. The plot(rewrite of R/B/Y/FR/LG) has been done many times already.
So, even if I still consider my own fic to be good, I just that it doesn't get much attention. I posted my latest chapter a 3 days ago, and I had like 740 views. Now, I have 760 views. I don't consider having 20 people read my fic every 3 days a lot, when others can do better.
When people who did review my fic say it was a bit too generic, I considered trying to make another one with a more interesting plot. First I thought of a journey fic using contests but it's still a journey fic, so I passed(I find it a good idea though). After a while, I just gave up thinking one and continued to write my other fic in the hope that it would gather attention.
Then one day, I was taking a session of TvTropes when I winded up in the Hot Skitty On Wailord Action page. Then it hit me: Why not try a HSOWA fic? At first, I thought of outright love and having kids, but I felt that it would be too ridiculous. And so, I planned that this fic would just have the skitty and the wailord as very close friends.
Now, what is the plot, you ask? It's about the daily life of a Wailord put in a daycare center(in Hoenn, if you want to be specific) and meeting a Skitty who happens to be there too, as the first Pokemon the Wailord meets in the daycare.
Whew, that was over. Anyways, if you took the time to read the spoiler, you know what the premise is. Or if you don't want to listen to some unimportant history on how I came with the idea of this fic, skip to the last paragraphs.
And now we begin.
Chapter 1: Arrival
It was a long trip for 10-year old Wally Button, a trainer from Verdanturf Town in the Hoenn region.
As a trainer, he went and challenged every Gym Leader in Hoenn, usually required for joining the yearly Hoenn League championship, a tournament in where the best trainers in Hoenn would compete.
Wally had obtained all of the badges and returned home to Verdanturf Town to pack up, train his Pokemon and prepare for the championship.
One of Wally's Pokemon was a Wailord, a Pokemon he had aquired early on as a Wailmer, its pre-evolution. Wally named him Will, because to him, it sounded like "Wail".
Wally, however, had trouble using Will in battle. Because most fights are on land and Will was a Pokemon that lived in water, Will couldn't move at all, save for rolling. And when one can't moved, one could easily get hit by attacks.
Even if Will had strong attacks, the complete lack of mobility proved to be Will's weakness, and he was unable to dodge very powerful moves, which led to many a defeat. Even if Will tried to roll, he was still easy to hit.
Even if Wally cared for Will, he just decided that it was going to be troublesome for him to use Will in battle, and even then, he didn't want Will to get hurt over being hit by very powerful moves and be in a lot of pain just because he could't move on land.
Wally eventually decided to drop him off in a Daycare Center near his hometown of Verdanturf.
------------------
"So, you're leaving me here, right?" Will said. However, Wally only heard a really loud "Waaaaaaiiilll" sound.
"Listen, Will, I really don't want to leave you, but the Hoenn League championship is nearing and...well, if I joined you, you'd have trouble since you can't really dodge attacks, and it's not like there's a body of water that can fit you, or even a body of water at all." Wally said to Will.
"I understand. It's just...I just really don't want to leave you." Will said. As usual, Wally heard a "Wail" sound.
"Don't worry, Will. When the championship is over, I'll pick you up. Don't worry that you're not back in Verdanturf; they have a lake here that can fit you."
"Really? Sure." Will said. Wally heard "Wail" again.
"Well, I gotta go now. I already need to get to Evergrande City on the other side of the region, and getting there will take some time. See ya!" Wally said.
"See you too." Will said. Wally just heard a really long "Wail". Wally then exited the field that the Daycare Center reserved for the Pokemon, and entered a building that represented as the entrance for the place.
"We'll take care of your Wailord." A voice muttered in the building where most people got to enter the Daycare Center.
"Gonna be missing ya." Will said. Suddenly, someone spoke right beside him.
"Was that your trainer?" Someone asked.
"Yup...wait, who're you?" Will said.
"I'm a Skitty. My trainer calls me Kira. I'm a girl, just in case." The Pokemon replied.
"You have a trainer too?" Will asked.
"What did I just tell you?" Sakura replied.
"Ahh...hehe...sorry." Will replied.
"So, why were you put in here?" Sakura asked.
"My trainer was going to compete in a tournament or something, don't know what the name was, and he didn't add me because the fights are on land and I can't move on land." Will replied.
"Oh? Poor you." Kira replied.
"Don't worry. I don't like having to fight with a few dozen Pokemon and getting hit by powerful attacks without the liberty of dodging them, and especially if the Pokemon is electric. I don't like electricity. A lot."
"I know what you mean. One day, my trainer and I were battling with this Electrike in the rain, and that guy hit me with a electric attack while I was wet. It hurt a lot."
"Heh. So.....erm...what now?"
"Hmm...what's your name?"
"Will."
"So, nice to meet you, Will! You're a guy, right?"
"Duh? Anyways, nice to meet you too, Sakura."
After a while...
"So, um, what now?" Will asked.
"I don't know....wait, follow me." Kira told Will.
"How? I can't move."
"I don't know. Try turning around and rolling in the direction you want to go."
"Hmm, never thought of turning around so that I can roll in the direction I want. I'll try that."
And so, Will, with some trouble, managed to lift his body and turn his body so that it faced to his left.
"And now I roll, right?" Will said.
"Yup!" Kira replied. Will began rolling.
"Hey, it works! Thanks!" Will said.
"You're welcome. Now follow me. I'm gonna introduce you to some of my friends." Kira told Will.
"Sure thing."
After a a minute of walking, or in Will's case, rolling, the two eventually found their way to a small field surrounded by shrubs, trees and grass. There were 3 pokemon inside the field, roaring and growling at something Will coudn't see.
"I'm the loudest!" One of the Pokemon said. It suddenly made a high-pitched screech.
"No, I have!" Another Pokemon said. It then made a very load roar.
"I say I'm the loudest!" The third Pokemon said. It then shouted very loudly.
"Hey, guys, what are you doing?" Kira asked.
"We're just tryin' ta see who has the loudest voice." One of the Pokemon, who had four legs and was covered in steel all over.
"Yup, that's, like, pretty much it, you know." Another Pokemon said, who looked like a very beautiful butterfly with large and colorful wings.
"Ya, dat's pretty much it. 'ell, d'ya wanna join?" The third pokemon, who was colored blue with some green on his body, and had very long arms and a lilypad on its head.
"Nope. But I found this guy who was put here in this place." Kira said, as she pointed out to Will.
Will was still trying to turn around to face Kira and the others and eventually managed to do it.
"Hi. I'm Will." Will said.
"You're like, totally huge! Really really huge!" One of the pokemon said.
"Dat's da bigges' guy I've seen eva since sumbody dropped off a Salamence here!" The third pokemon replied.
"Gnarly, dude!" The second one said.
"Guys, introduce yourself too. Don't just be awed at his size." Kira said.
"Oh. Ok. So, I'm Bea, so, um...I'm a Beautifly, and...erm...nice to meet you!" Bea replied.
"I'm Rei. I'm a Lairon. Pleased ta meet you, dude." Rei said.
"An' I'm Lot. Imma Lombre. Damn mah horrible species name." Lot said.
"Well, again, I'm Will, a Wailord." Will replied.
"That is the most ridiculous species name I have heard in my life." Rei said.
"Hey!" Will said.
"Stop this, guys! I'm sorry, Will, but Rei tends to make fun of everything.
"Aww, now they're talking! What are ya talking 'bout, a date?" Rei said. Bea and Lot laughed at the same time.
"See?" Kira said to Will.
"Hehehe...anyways, Will, how loud can you shout?" Rei asked Will.
"Well, I don't shout much, but..." Will said.
"Just do it!" Rei interrupted.
"Ok then." Will said.
"WWWWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIILLLLLLL!!!!!!!" Will screamed in a very low pitched. It was deafening.
"Ack, cova' yer ears!" Lot shouted, as Will's scream was drowning out everything else.
After a while, Will stopped screaming.
"How's that?" Will asked.
"Arrgh, my ears hurt. That was like, totally loud!" Bea commented.
"Radical, man!" Rei said.
"Dat is da loudest thin' I've eva heard since dat thunderstorm a month ago back a' Petalburg Fores'."
"Will, that's really loud." Kira said.
"Hehe...thanks." Will replied.
"Wanna like, come with us?" Bea said to Will.
"Sure!" Will replied.
By now, Will had forgotten about Wally completely. He immediately made friends with other Pokemon just a few minutes after arriving.
This'll be a nice vacation. Will thought.
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Sue me, but I only have a vague planning of this fic. Of course, I'd be spoiling the story, so I'm not gonna tell you what I plan to make of this fic. Hope it's not too bad.
On a side note, if you liked this, please read my other fic, A Girl And Her Journey.
