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COMPLETE: Violence (R)

Blackjack Gabbiani

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(Yes, the fic is called "Violence", since it's for that prompt at 30_Kisses. I'm so original. Anyway, it's pretty sadistic, so be warned. Although it's got Steelshipping and supporting Rockets, so those're always good.)




"He's got to be around here somewhere," Buson reasoned as they maneuvered around the rocks leading up the mountain trail. "He couldn't have gone far, not if what they said is true."

"We'll find him." Bashou was resolute.

The report had come to them about twenty minutes prior--the Iron Mask Marauder had turned traitor. He had amassed a fair number of followers, as was discovered when a meeting of his cadre was invaded by the Team. In the ensuing battle, he had been injured, but managed to escape by jet pack. And, as the report concluded, he had run out of fuel on Mount Silver and had to land. And that was where they were stationed. Legends of Moltres on the mountain were set aside to hunt down a traitor.

After another half hour of searching, they discovered a loose pokéball that had rolled against a rock left a trail in the gravel, leading up to a flat outcropping and the smell of fuel. The discarded jet pack was off to the side, covered in dust. And slumped against a rock, seemingly in great pain, was the Marauder. His left leg was splayed out to the side, the angle suggesting that it was badly broken.

Both agents sucked in a breath at the sight, although the traitor didn't seem to notice them at first, affording them the chance to approach. Bashou knelt to pick up a handgun that had dropped in the crash--the Marauder usually prefered to fight hand-to-hand, he must have known that he would be pursued--and the movement alerted the man to their presence.

"...so you're who they sent," he managed, the corners of his mouth tightening in a wince as he shifted himself to face them.

"He's not making a move to attack," Buson muttered to his partner. "All his pokémon are too far for him to reach."

Bashou nodded, taking a step towards the injured man and pointing the gun at him. "Surrender and come with us or I'll be forced to kill you."

The Marauder smiled weakly, seeming to relax somewhat. "Is that so? I know for a fact that neither of you can kill me."

The agent looked down for a second, away from Buson. His grip on the gun tightened.

Buson started to approach him. "Bashou, we--"

And then Bashou fired, not at the traitor, but at his partner, striking him in the chest. "I'm sorry Buson," he said grimly, "but he's right. I can't turn against my leader."

"...what the hell did you just do?" the Marauder asked, far quieter than he tried for, as Buson fell to the ground, eyes wide.

"Ba...Bashou...?" the fallen agent choked.

Bashou knelt down to him, laying the gun to the side. "I'm sorry," he repeated blankly, "but I can't let anyone get in the way. Not even you."

Buson raised a hand to his chest, but there was no need, the blood was everywhere. "You shot me...you..." He had been stunned, his senses dulled momentarily, but the gravity of the situation hit him all at once. "You...killed me..."

"I had to," Bashou muttered, taking his partner's bloody hand. "I--"

The Marauder interjected, forcing his voice to take a normal tone. "I can't believe you fucking did that. You were both under me!"

Bashou whipped his head up. "Sir, WHAT?"

"It's true...aww man, I can't believe you never told each other!"

"Buson, is..." Bashou dropped his gaze back down and rested his other hand on Buson's cheek. "We were really...on the same side?"

Buson pushed a faint smile onto his face. "We...could have ruled the world, you and me...we could have been kings..." His eyes unfixed and his breathing ceased against Bashou's thumb, and it took Bashou a few moments to realize that his partner was dead.

"Bu--no...no!" he stammered. "You can't die, not like this! You...how could you not tell--come on!" He slapped Buson's face, soft at first and then far harder, with a trembling hand. "You CAN'T! NO!" His icy facade was melting, and his eyes welling with tears for the first time since before he had joined the Team years before, and he gripped the soaked uniform fabric, smearing his hands with his partner's blood. "Sir, how could you let this happen?" he sobbed, covering his face with his hands without caring about the mess.

The Marauder sighed deeply. "Yeah, when...when I said I knew you guys couldn't kill me, I thought that's when you'd..." He paused to suck in a breath. "...drop your 'good little Rocket' acts and help me out."

"Help...yes, yes that's right..." Bashou stumbled over the words as he unhooked the pokéballs on Buson's bandolier. "This is his Skarmory," he said, releasing the elegant metal bird. It looked around expecting to be called into battle, but met with the sight of its deceased trainer, lowered its head and let out a cry. It knew better than to question the situation, and trusted Bashou, turning to him for instruction. "You're going to be going with your new master," Bashou told it, and it understood. "It's fast, sir, it can get you out of here."

Slowly, the Marauder rose to his feet, bracing against the rock behind him. Bashou rushed over to assist him across the uneven ground. "You're a good agent," the masked officer managed. "I'm glad to have you on my side. Both of you."

"Thank you," Bashou whispered, and fell silent as he helped his leader onto Skarmory's back. Once he was sure he was secure, he held out the other Buson's other pokéball. "This is his Muk, sir. And..." there was one more ball left "...this is my Steelix. I'm not going with you, sir."

The Marauder nodded. "I figured you weren't."

"Will you be all right, sir?"

After a steadying breath, the Marauder looked off over the forest below. "Yeah. I know of a healing lake that should take care of my leg, and I've got other agents around that I can reach." He flashed a winning smile, something that was once capable of making the lower ranks swoon in admiration. "I'll be fine. You take care of yourself."

"Yes sir. Good luck." Bashou saluted, holding it as the Skarmory took to the skies and spirited its hunted passenger away across the horizon. Once the joined figure was no longer in sight, he shook his head and returned to Buson's empty body. "I'm sorry," he whispered, brushing a kiss across the pale lips. Tears he never would have shed to a living soul drained down his face and he made no move to stop them. In a moment it wouldn't matter any more. "Goodbye, partner," Bashou said as he picked up the discarded gun and pressed the tip to his forehead.
 
That was... shocking, to say the least.

Worst of all was that they were on the same side and didn't even know it.

Buson was just heartbreaking.

Very nicely written~

I've always liked how you write!
 
I do enjoy making characters suffer, don't I?

Oh yes, actually the idea for this came when I was talking to someone about how I couldn't think of any ideas for the 30_kisses prompts except a vague idea of them hunting a traitor for Violence, but at the same time she suggested "unless they're fighting each other", so I combined the two and got this.
 
I have no idea what steel shipping is, but I'm guessing that it's BashouXBuson (eww... gay). Quite a short fic really, and diffferent from your usual lot. Funny in the middle when Basho shot Buson. And a little disturbing

No my favourite of you fic but okay I guess...
 
Yeah, Steelshipping is Bashou/Buson. The rule of the community I did this for says that every fic has to involve a kiss (being 30_kisses and all).

This isn't what I think of as "short" for my fics, but that could be because it took me a month and a half to write (with something like 60% of it being done in the last six hours).

Different? How so? Not that it's good or bad, just curious.
 
Well, usually your fic start in tense situations and all and this just seems... i dunno... lighter?
 
Poke said:
Well, usually your fic start in tense situations and all and this just seems... i dunno... lighter?

Well we can't have angst around the clock, otherwise it wouldn't be special when it happens. Such as halfway through the fic.

Besides, they're still hunting a traitor, so there ought to be tension in the air. Was it not there then?

betagold said:
That was... one hell of an ending.

Haha, thank you, I'm presuming.
 
Hahaha

Well, it *was* the one thing they couldn't trust each other on, and it proved to be their undoing through distrust and paranoia...plus IMM's kinda a dick who'd rather play people than go with a sure thing.
 
I told you what I thought of it on IM earlier this week, but that really is an incredible fic. It's depressing, but in its own way, very touching. You manage to pull off emotion and dialogue in a way I never could.
 
Shedinjask said:
So now that you are done with this I can have Sacredshippy ficlets?

Haha. When I decide to work on them, that is. Maybe you could help me with the one I've got more of. Should I email it to you?

Neku said:
I told you what I thought of it on IM earlier this week, but that really is an incredible fic. It's depressing, but in its own way, very touching. You manage to pull off emotion and dialogue in a way I never could.

Aww shucks.

It's funny, because I have a hard time reading emotions in others (you know why), and yet writing about them comes naturally. I'm not sure why.
 
It's funny, because I have a hard time reading emotions in others (you know why), and yet writing about them comes naturally. I'm not sure why.

I tend to be the same way. I think it's a kind of aspie projection or something. We can't read them, but we feel them, so we write them vividly to feel like we're not TOTALLY insensitive.
 
It's funny because writing a character with the same problems I have in that regard is *very* difficult for me (since you all know I write Jirarudan as autistic). But writing people without those issues (THOSE issues, not no issues at all, because heavens know I do so love piling those issues on) comes easily.
 
Well, I seem to be quite good at writing about guys missing wives they can't see openly for the safety of his own son (every Diamondshipping fic I've written, ever), and I don't think I've ever been in that situation. And yet it's harder for me to write about Nekou, for some reason.
 
No, haven't forgotton about reviewing some of your fics. Haven't had much for anything recently, not even writing... but yeah, now I'm back.

Quite a good read there, I have to admit. Very nice one-shot - the pacing was good, and emotion and tension used made quite a goodatmosphere. And the ending... well, it's very good, in short. Liked it immensely.

No spelling mistakes or the such that I could find. However, a few small things - the beginning threw me a bit into the deep end, as there was little to no description of the characters. Methinks these are canon characters of some sort, but ones which I'm not in the slightest familiar with, TBH. Have little idea on what the characters look like, and did distract for a bit until I got into the story. Basically, maybe some more description to establish the characters more would have helped.

Ealry on as well, in three paragraphs you described the Marauder as a 'traitor' three times - maybe one could be changed, as not to be so repetitive.

"Help...yes, yes that's right..." Bashou stumbled over the words as he unhooked the pokéballs on Buson's bandolier. "This is his Skarmory," he said, releasing the elegant metal bird. It looked around expecting to be called into battle, but met with the sight of its deceased trainer, lowered its head and let out a cry. It knew better than to question the situation, and trusted Bashou, turning to him for instruction. "You're going to be going with your new master," Bashou told it, and it understood. "It's fast, sir, it can get you out of here."
No mistakes here - just thought I'd mention that your choice to refer to Skarmory as 'it' worked quite well, for me, somehow... just something here that made this work quite well IMO.

Nice work there, and again, nice ending - maybe some more description would have had been nice, and some more establishment of characters as I mentioned, but all I can say on the matter. Well done. :)
 
...it seems a lot of people don't know who they are.
Bashou and Buson. And if you think Bashou's hair looks like a Zigzagoon, you're not alone. These are the guys who were shown to have captured Rayquaza in the intro to movie 9 (but you only see them from the back there).
Iron Mask Marauder, with the most epic uniform in the entire Team. And yes, he's canonically a traitor, although only Jesse ever finds out (it can be logically assumed that she tells her partners, but who's going to believe any of them?)

But given all the controversy about Legend of Thunder (both really, why it took so long to dub and why the dub was so crappy when it was finally released), people should at least know who the agents are, given that they were the best part of the special.
 
But given all the controversy about Legend of Thunder (both really, why it took so long to dub and why the dub was so crappy when it was finally released), people should at least know who the agents are, given that they were the best part of the special.

Ah yes, but then, you're assuming that we all follow the anime. Me, I'm mostly familar with the games. :) Leastways I'm now slightly more knowledgable on the topic. Haven't really watched much of the anime though - certainly not much of the 'specials' or movies. :( (Or should that be a happy face? :p ) (But have no idea on the 'controversy', I'm afraid that you mentioned there on that).
 
Haha, all right. Well...basically the problem was (behind a tag because most people are sick of talking about it)
that the special was dubbed really badly. Like REALLY badly. And Bashou got sort of infamous because they gave him a woman's voice (and in Spanish they *called* him a woman. In English it's still debated since the only time his gender is brought up is collective "those men" with his partner).

IMM has no controversy, people just don't like him. I don't know why, I thought the idea of a Rocket officer turning traitor has great potential. Especially since he *does*, as I say in this fic, know the location of a healing spring (basically it's water that can heal injuries).
 
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