Recent content by profoak

For anyone following, I apologize for the delay in update. I have been having some trouble with continuing my story and, as a result, am taking a break from writing it. Thanks to those who have read and commented. Below I have posted the last completed work I had done. Hopefully I'll be able...

CHAPTER 6 Medicham. Medicham...I had heard the name before. If I concentrated really hard I might remember when I had actually seen a picture of one. A wave of quick heat and then chills ran down my back as I realized I would be forced to improvise thanks to my ignorance. As I focused on...

Sounds good to me! Thanks for the advice :)

Hello Friends, I recently posted a few chapters of my first fanfiction and received some helpful notes from members of the forum. In light of those notes, I have edited my chapters. I would like to ask what the protocol is for posting revised chapters. Should I put them in the original...

Got a few views since my last post so I am including a new chapter for those following the story. Leave your comments of so inclined! CHAPTER 5 I was not the first one in the gym that night. I was 30 minutes early, as I had been to everything that semester, but I could already see Wanda...

For those who have stuck with my story, thanks for your patience. I was hoping to be able to post an edited version of chapter 5 that includes some changes that were suggested by you all. I'm afraid that I couldn't find the time, but wanted to get something down to keep the thread fresh...

Thanks for the advice, all. I will review my work and take a close look at all of the things you mentioned. I really appreciate the specific criticisms and, of course, the encouraging words! Everyone here has been very welcoming.

CHAPTER 3 I never thought I would feel relief walking into a classroom. As the semester began, I studied my schedule. I mapped my route from class to class, building to building,and went on an ill-planned dry-run of my first day to avoid being late. Coach Gold had put a real fear into me...

Thanks for the advice! I'll definitely make sure to work on my proofreading to avoid embarrassing mistakes like that. I am especially happy with the comments on my battle narratives--that's exactly what I was going for! I was always frustrated with how things worked outside of the games.

I'm very happy to read your responses! It means a lot to me that you are looking to help me improve my story :) Below, I have posted my third chapter. I made some of the formatting suggestions you provided, but will continue to dig deeper to improve the plot and characters. EDIT: Made some...

Hello Friends, I have frequented Bulbapedia for many years, but this is the first time I am posting a fanfic. I am encouraged by seeing the positive and constructive comments the community provides here and I thank you for taking some time to read my story. I have posted the first two...

Do you have any interest in the Regis? I believe I have two of them in my Heart Gold version. I think I may also have a Groudon.

Hello Friends, I am looking for a Gen IV Skorupi for breeding purposes. Since it is to be bred, I don't need anything specific. I have a lot of pokes in gen V, so if you need some dex filler I can probably help out. Gold FC: 2967 1757 5865 Black FC: 3739 9537 4708 Thanks!

Thanks for the offer, but I've already moved my kyogre to gen V. Good luck!

There's more than one? If so, I'll take one! My gold FC is 2967 1757 5865