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TEEN: For Panem || a Hunger games: TBOSAS one shot thing

mastermind lissi

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authors notes:
Hiii so basically I had this idea of the hunger games: the ballad of songbirds and snakes from a side characters pov, which ended up being a self insert of me. This had spoilers for the book and movie so. yea. It happens right after the whole arena bombing.
tw: the customary hunger games death and injury mentions


I walked home from the Academy, thoughts still racing. The arena had been bombed! With us in it!! And I’m still alive!! Somehow. My tribute, Sol, on the other hand, I wasn’t so sure about. The arena roof has collapsed, and I had lost her in the chaos. I know some of the tributes had tried to save their mentors, and some had tried to escape. I’m pretty sure the peacekeepers had killed them before they got away. Us mentors had been taken to the academy hospital, and while everyone had gotten injured in some way, some were worse than others. I just had a bandage on my arm from some chunk of something falling, but five of my classmates had been taken to the hospital further into the city. Coriolanus, Androcles, Gaius, Diana, and Apollo. I hope they’re ok. And Sol. I know she’s district, but she was my tribute. I had gotten to know her. And honestly, it would be hard to watch her potentially die in the games.

I was greeted on the steps of my house by my sister. She was a few years older than me, and had gone to the academy too. “Lissi!” She said, looking worried. “I heard what happened, are you ok?” I nodded, trying to shake her worry.

“I’m fine! Something fell and hit my arm, but I’m fine! I’m pretty sure basically everyone else had it worse…” I said. She hugged me, probably happy I was alive. I sat down as she went into the house to bring out some food. I looked out at the tip of the arena I could see from my house. I wonder how that will change the games? Will there even be a games? Will Sol be alive for them if there will be? Is she ok? Are all the other tributes ok? I heard that they had been taken by a veterinarian. That made me angry, but I don’t know why. Maybe because we got a proper doctor and they didn’t? But…. It’s right. Us Capitolites are far above the district people, they don’t deserve our doctors! But… They do. After knowing Sol, even for a small amount of time, made me start to realize that. We are all humans, after all.

My sister walked back out with a plate of bread. I took a bite of one as she sat down too. I decided I could tell her what I was thinking, she’s older than me. She should understand. “I… don’t get why the district people keep getting treated as less than us. They got taken to a veterinarian rather than a doctor like we did. Just because we’re rich and we were born here doesn’t make us any better!” She looked at me.

“Lissi,” she said. “I know you’re attached to your girl from district five, but these people are district. They’re not like us.” Did she hear a word I said?

“Yeah, but don’t you think it isn’t fair? They’re all separated into their districts and forced to supply to us!” She looked me in the eyes.

“Lissi. I don’t know what this whole mentor thing is doing to you, but you’re becoming a rebel sympathizer. We don’t want another rebellion. You remember the war, right? It’s all for the good of Panem.” She said, and stood up.

“For Panem.” I said to myself grimly.


more authors notes hehe

so yea I think her sister is just so hard wired into the “Capitol is better districts are bad” mindset that she’s not gonna accept what Lissis saying. And Lissis realizing that maybe all of this was wrong and the district people aren’t so bad. I think Lissi starts just generally misled about everything as a Capitol citizen and like. Yea. It’s 12 am and sorry if this doesn’t make sense, I’ll probably edit this later. Also this is the prequel. And yes I know technically Sol is Iphigenia‘s tribute but. She’s not important. Even Coriolanus says she’s forgettable.

so yea I hope you like this
 
Review: For Panem

The Hunger Games were a large part of my social group in college, so it is nice to see a one-shot based on it. I think you construct a very well-thought-out atmosphere. This being the year of the 10th annual Hunger Games, you do capture the level of division, both emotionally and socially, that would be present in what I would call an aftermath era. Some of these characters would have been old enough to remember the district-capital war and very well. They could have also been exposed to the propaganda of the immediate aftermath. I think you capture this best with the interaction with your Self Insert character and their sister, who you do mention is older. Judging by the ages of the characters in the book, I am going to guess your Self Insert character is between 16 and 20, and we know the war between the districts and the Capitol was at least 3 years long. So, how much of the war was your Self Insert character exposed to in comparison to her older sister? Did this shape her feelings toward her former enemies?

Grammatically, the story reads relatively well. The speech tags didn’t always line up however. The general rule I learned was divided into speech tags versus action. Tags are things like: “he said.” or “she said.”, while actions could be anything, “He got up.” Or “She stroked her chin.” Tags tend to end in a comma (or exclamation mark, etc) and continue in lowercase. An action ends in a full stop, etc, and restarts with a new sentence. That was the only thing I could find grammar-wise that didn’t quite sit right with me. The rest was perfectly fine and well-written.

Lastly, and probably my favourite part of young adult fiction, is the ethical debate. I think you handled this very well – and you do this rather subtly, too. You don’t outright tell us that the tributes are treated worse than the Capitol citizens in general. Instead, you show us this through the fact that injured tributes are sent to a veterinarian. This is a very clever way of giving us, the reader, a ton of information about the Capitol’s viewpoint on the districts. You do something similar towards the end during the discussion while using the term “Rebel Sympathizer.” It produces a lot of negative connotations and does raise a lot of questions surrounding what would happen to a Rebel Sympathizer if they were caught by the state at large. We get an idea of what could happen from the source material – and it isn’t good for them.


I enjoyed this one shot, and I am glad you enjoyed the Hunger Games stories.
 
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