Persephone
The Vulture Queen
- Joined
- Apr 12, 2014
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Interesting chapter, with curses and all of that.
I admittedly read the blog first because I don't care much about spoilers and came in expecting that this would take an odd one-episode dive into fantasy. What's impressive about this chapter is that you managed to deal with very fantastic things in the same fairly realistic universe of the rest of TLW.
The Shinto references were also rather interesting and, if nothing else, actually gave me an answer to a question that I had been mulling over for a long time about how to go about an aspect of Vaira dealing with another religion.
I don't have any major critiques for this chapter. Style and grammar were very good as always and plot/character problems tend to be more long-term issues anyway. Keep up the good work!
I admittedly read the blog first because I don't care much about spoilers and came in expecting that this would take an odd one-episode dive into fantasy. What's impressive about this chapter is that you managed to deal with very fantastic things in the same fairly realistic universe of the rest of TLW.
The Shinto references were also rather interesting and, if nothing else, actually gave me an answer to a question that I had been mulling over for a long time about how to go about an aspect of Vaira dealing with another religion.
I don't have any major critiques for this chapter. Style and grammar were very good as always and plot/character problems tend to be more long-term issues anyway. Keep up the good work!