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Re: Darkness before Dawn (2)
Maybe if it was like this:
All he found was a deep dark abyss with water at its base, the sounds of dripping filled the entire shaft with their echoes.
I suggest you get your chapters beta-read before you post them, so you can avoid the simple mistakes like spelling and such.
Ok this sentence was weird and annoying to read.All he found was a deep dark abyss with water at the end of it, it’s dripping filling the entire shaft with its echoes.
Maybe if it was like this:
All he found was a deep dark abyss with water at its base, the sounds of dripping filled the entire shaft with their echoes.
I suggest you get your chapters beta-read before you post them, so you can avoid the simple mistakes like spelling and such.