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Love peace and Torchic Grease,
Fox
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"Obvious" by Fox
As I sit behind you,
staring at your head,
wondering what's in there,
not hearing what is said.
All I do is day-dream,
about you and me,
thinking about loving you,
and everything in-between.
Isn't it Obvious,
how I feel inside,
I don't think I can keep it in,
I know I cannot hide.
When I walked over,
and told you I liked you,
you didn't speak but then,
you smiled and said "So it's true"
i asked you what that meant,
then you began to speak
"It's always been so obvious",
and laid a kiss upon my cheek.
Love peace and Torchic Grease,
Fox
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"Obvious" by Fox
As I sit behind you,
staring at your head,
wondering what's in there,
not hearing what is said.
All I do is day-dream,
about you and me,
thinking about loving you,
and everything in-between.
Isn't it Obvious,
how I feel inside,
I don't think I can keep it in,
I know I cannot hide.
When I walked over,
and told you I liked you,
you didn't speak but then,
you smiled and said "So it's true"
i asked you what that meant,
then you began to speak
"It's always been so obvious",
and laid a kiss upon my cheek.
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